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  • #62151
    mkell755
    Participant

    Hello all! Here is a recording for any and all feedback. Let me know what you think!

    Forest Stewardship Council
    From musical instruments to furniture to flooring–all around the world–just about anything can be made out of independently certified wood that carries the Forest Stewardship Council label. It’s certified wood: wood as good as the forest it comes from. A forest that has been independently certified to meet the highest standards for environmentally and socially responsible forestry.

    A forest that will be there for our children to use and enjoy.
    To protect our forests for future generations, ask for independently certified wood in your new house. Ask for the FSC label. … Make the Forest Stewardship Council a household name. And do our forests a world of good.

    Mary

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    • #62261
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      Nice read Mary, good pace and tone variance. You are progressing nicely.

    • #62235
      kbridges
      Participant

      Hi Mary! I’ve seen you posting on here often and just want to encourage and affirm your consistency!

      This one does sound like you’re reading a script to me. I wonder if it would help to imagine walking through a forest recording a promotional video for the FSC. Imagine shifting images as you move from what the wood makes, to the “forest” sentences, to the action statement of “to protect”.

      I think your pacing is good on this one! Very clear and your voice fits this piece well.

      • #62240
        mkell755
        Participant

        Thanks for the feedback KBridges! Yes, I’ve been trying to be consistent and the practice is hopefully helping 🙂

        Thanks for the tips, that is a great idea about visualizing walking through the forests to lighten it up a bit, good idea. Thanks!

        Mary

    • #62187
      SuperLuke
      Participant

      As far as recording quality, I heard a high pitched ringing sound in the background. Most likely, you will want to eliminate that in the future.
      As for the performance, from what I hear, it is supposed to be a commercial. Right? I think there’s supposed to be more of a smile in your voice, cheery. It was a good performance overall though.

      • #62239
        mkell755
        Participant

        Thanks for the feedback SuperLuke! Yes, the high pitched ringing you hear will soon be a thing of the past once my new equipment gets here, I promise! It bugs me too and hopefully you and others will notice a difference then. I think this was in the Edge library under commercial, but it feel somewhat like narration too, but yes it could use more smile in the delivery. There were some tongue-twisters which I was probably over-focused on getting right. Thank you!!

        Mary

  • #62143
    katelyndawnvo
    Participant

    I redid this one and am much happier with it now 🙂

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    • #62192
      dkosoy
      Participant

      Hi Katelyn.

      Nice job! Your voice is smooth. It’s not an easy script and you delivered it well. At the pivot mid-script, I really liked hearing your emotion. I think you could bring that emotion into more places. Slowing down a bit might help. Maybe pause between sentences? Finally, I noticed a small pause between “America” and “the beautiful”. I think reading those 3 words all together works better. Great work.

    • #62153
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Katelyn! I listened to both versions and I like the second one better as well. You had a warm and friendly informative tone throughout, and a good smile in your voice with a good pace. I think the second one had more emphasis in certain areas like “that all changed..” which made the read more interesting and also helps the listener get the key points. Very good!

      Mary

  • #62141
    katelyndawnvo
    Participant

    Hi there! I’m submitting this audition very soon so I’m hoping to receive some feedback! 🙂 the directions are limited but they say they are looking for “pleasant narrator style is needed but we are hoping for something a little different. Let us hear what you can do to make our subject matter leap from the page.” thoughts??

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  • #62128
    TimDKietzman
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    I was told by a recording engineer that one of my strike zones is warmth. Does this performance come off as warm and inviting? Also, does my recording setup sound echoey in any way? It hasn’t been that way with my most recent uploads. Thanks for the help.

    Budweiser
    When it comes to really great beer, fresh rules. The clean, crisp taste of brewery fresh Budweiser. Fresh beer tastes better.

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    • #62188
      SuperLuke
      Participant

      I hear the warmth in your voice. As far as recording quality, it sounds like there’s something making the recording at a low volume. But there’s no echo.

    • #62154
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Tim! It does sound warm, and this was nice. Some of the pauses are making it sound a little bit choppy to me vs. describing how smooth and clean the beer tastes by leaning in to the words, I hope that makes sense? Good read!

      Mary

    • #62133
      Pmag
      Participant

      Yeah I mean I definitely think this should be played over a commercial where someone is going fishing or doing something out door like with any sort of camp fire going. The warmth description is very accurate.

  • #62126
    TimDKietzman
    Participant

    Hey everyone. I’m practicing every day, but that’s no good if I’m the only one listening to it. I’d appreciate any feedback you can give me on this latest read. How was the tone of my performance? The word “it’s” is used a lot so did I do well when bring the lists to life? How about my studio setup? Is it still working great? Thanks for the help.

    Not Just a Glove
    It’s not just a glove, it’s the feel in your hand, it’s the unmistakable smell of the leather, it’s the time, work, and love that went into making it yours, making every opportunity count and getting you to the next level. It’s not just a glove, its passion, its history, it’s you.

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    • #62189
      SuperLuke
      Participant

      I really enjoyed this performance. It was energetic, well-paced, and it sounded inviting to the audience. Well done!

    • #62155
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Tim, good read! This sounded authentic and conversational. I liked the pace and the emphasis on the selected words throughout – very nice!

      Mary

  • #62120
    touzet
    Participant

    Tinkering with some documentary reads…

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    • #62156
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Touzet, really nice! It sounds very professionally performed and produced, really good! I can’t think of much to critique here other than kepe it up! I think your voice is really warm and inviting, very good!

      Mary

    • #62131
      TimDKietzman
      Participant

      Tinkering with them? You sir sound like you’ve done them all your life! So serious and all knowing, I am instantly hooked and your performance really helps me to imagine the accompanying video. Only thing is, I think you’re pausing too much. Since this is just the recording part, you ought to keep your pauses to no more than a second.

      You’re on the right path. Thanks for sharing!

      • #62179
        touzet
        Participant

        Good point about the pauses. I was actually doing it in the same vein as the track with the visuals…as if it were stripped off of the video. I suppose if I were really ambitious, I could have added in some voices, feet shuffling, car doors slamming, sirens, jet plane noises to fill some of the space in between. 😉

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  • #62115
    solin232
    Participant

    Hi. I’m just getting back into practicing after a long lay-off and would appreciate any feedback on performance and/or recording quality! Thanks in advance !

    Script: Private Equity Video
    Welcome and thank you for taking the time to learn a little about Private Equity Solutions.
    In this presentation, you’ll learn the basics about Private Equity and the role it can play in your clients’ portfolios, as well as in your practice.
    Your ability to address the needs and goals of clients in these important segments will help you attract new business and build your practice
    Clients have goals related to seven life priorities, with Finance being the connecting point among them all. Understanding these life priorities can help you identify concerns clients may have in the pursuit of their goals.
    For instance, a client in Segments 4 through 9 may want to:
    -Invest according to their values – Save for retirement
    -Enhance returns while lowering risk and Help preserve their original investment.
    For many of these clients, Private Equity can be an important solution to help them pursue their goals.
    Specifically, we’ll discuss how Private Equity Solutions can:
    -Fit into your overall goals-based approach with clients.
    -Help your clients pursue the goals that matter most to them.
    and Help you attract new assets.

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    • #62157
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Solin232, really solid work here! It sounds really well-paced and with great choices on phrases and selected key words to emphasize. Your voice is really nice and very well-suited for this genre. Great job!

      Mary

      • #62206
        solin232
        Participant

        Thanks Mary !
        Steve

  • #62101
    Toque
    Participant

    Hi all! Another practise read below, for a PSA re: Drinking & Driving, from the Edge Library. Comments on any and all aspects are very much appreciated. Toque

    Script:

    As an emergency room surgeon, I’ve seen things most people never will. I have had to harden myself … so I can do my job.
    But when I see another family ripped apart…because of a d***k driver…that really breaks my heart.
    If you could see the damage done on a daily basis, like I do…You’d never drink and drive again.

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    • #62253
      kevinwiland
      Participant

      Toque, really nice job on this recording.
      You have 3 emotions, one for each line of the script.
      My only sugestion is to begin your second emotion with a lead-in, beginning with “harden myself” instead of the start of line 2.
      The third emotion was a homerun. That emotion did have a lead-in beginning with “that really breaks my heart,” and really works.

    • #62158
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Toque, this is great! So believable and sincere. I especially like the emphasis on “see” the damage; it really stops you in your tracks and as the listener we (hopefully) feel instant empathy. This is very well done!

      Mary

    • #62134
      TimDKietzman
      Participant

      Your take is fantastic! You sound like a real authority on the subject and I like the words you hit. Your tone is even and polite which is very fitting for a read like this. However, I think the part “because of a d***k driver” could use more differentiation. You should sound as if you’re breaking off from the original read in order to put emphasis on it.

      Good going. Keep up the good work.

  • #62097
    svenbot5000
    Participant

    Hi everyone! I’m recording my demo later today and I’m super excited and nervous! Here’s a one take warm-up I did, would love any feedback! I’m not in my recording space so please excuse any noise you may hear.

    Peet’s Coffee

    Meet Marie. She’s a character. She does ballet. Professionally. Because character. That’s what we’re about. Alfred Peet. Now, there was a character. He brought us craft roasted. Us, as in America. You. Me. Diane. Diane’s friend. At Peet’s, we source the best beans. We roast them. We brew them. We make great coffee. We’re Peet’s.

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    • #62159
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Svenbot, great read! I like the emphasis on so many words. There are so many periods in this one, and I like your take on the read, very good! I’m sure your demo went great!

      Mary

  • #62085
    mkell755
    Participant

    Hello all! Here is a recording for any and all feedback. Let me know what you think! I used to drive an Xterra and it was such a great vehicle!!! Thank you for listening,

    Mary

    Nissan Xterra
    If necessity is the mother of invention, the Xterra is its dirt-covered poster boy. So in addition to the available 210-hp, SuperCharged V6, you’ll also find lots of heavy-duty stuff at your disposal. After all, you never know when a ladder-box truck frame and maximum 5,000-pound towing capacity will come in handy. The Nissan Xterra: A million uses and counting.

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    • #62135
      TimDKietzman
      Participant

      I really like your pitch and tempo, but the tone sounds decidedly uninterested in the first half. You come off as more of a critic than a salesperson. You need to remember that you’re trying to sell this to someone, act as if you’re talking with someone or a group of someones. Also, in the “lists,” you sounded even-pitched, others one the forum have told me that lists need to have unique inflections for each item or phrase. It’s not just good for the listener, but for the voice actor. It ensures they don’t fall into a habit of giving bland reads. You got a great voice though, keep up the good work.

      • #62150
        mkell755
        Participant

        Thanks for the feedback Tim! I did not mean to sound critical, but more excited about the Xterra, so I will watch my delivery on that. I agree that my lists were not as varied as they could have been, so that’s another area I will work on. Thanks for the tips, that’s helpful.

        Mary

    • #62122
      chas82
      Participant

      Misclick

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    • #62124
      chas82
      Participant

      Hi Mary
      I could hear the connection of you being a former owner who really liked their SUV. Nice pitch, nice tempo. I agree with the other posters and I also suggest a few little tweaks, At the beginning, I hear “IV” ( like in give) instead of “IF”. Also, at the end of the first phrase, I think if the emphasis moved to the second syllable of invention and you lost the uptalk used on the third, it would better set up what this conditional statement is designed to communicate. I believe but am not sure you were starting to run out of breath at very end of the long sentence starting “after all”. The word “handy” sounded a little slurry. Finally, I think a little more energy would be good applied to the final “Nissan Xterra” – “Xterra” sounded a little bit downbeat and after all, it is what this message is about.

      • #62149
        mkell755
        Participant

        Hi Chas, thanks for the feedback! Yes, I will work on my enunciation on “if” so it doesn’t sound so soft, good catch. Also good tip on the “intention” syllable emphasis. I have to watch uptalk, one time I feel like I eliminate it, and then the next time it pops back up. You are right, I was running out of breath on “handy”. More excitement / energy on Xterra would be good as well. Thanks for the specific notes, this is very helpful!

        Mary

    • #62104
      Toque
      Participant

      Hi Mary. I would just echo Svenbot’s comments. I think your reading would benefit from being more conversational, like you were just chatting casually with your best friend and telling them about your X-terra. Hope this helps. Toque

      • #62148
        mkell755
        Participant

        Thanks Toque, I will work on sounding more conversational, appreciate it!

        Mary

    • #62096
      svenbot5000
      Participant

      Hi Mary! Looks like you in the first sentence you forgot to say ‘of’. It sounds like you’re just saying ‘mother invention’. I would also play with tone a little bit throughout the read. My coach tells me to treat these like we’re telling a story with a beginning, middle and end. Since you owned an Xterra, think back to how much you liked yours as you’re reading. Hope that helps!

      • #62147
        mkell755
        Participant

        Hi Svenbot, thanks for the feedback! That is really weird, I did not catch that I totally smushed the first “of” I will watch the tone variation as well. I was focused on not adding unnecessary pauses where there are no commas, which has been hard, but seems like it should simple. I like the idea of telling a story with a beginning, middle and an end, that really makes sense in making it seem believable, I will work on that too. Thanks for the tips!

        Mary

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