[David Goldberg]

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[Bil-Bo]

FAIRY 1: HEY, IT’S US. THE BEN & JERRY’S FREEZER FAIRIES.
THAT’S RIGHT. BEN & JERRY’S FREEZER FAIRIES. SOME PEOPLE
DON’T BELIEVE IN FREEZER FAIRIES. DOESN’T BOTHER US. WE
KNOW WE’RE HERE.
FAIRY 2: HERE’S HOW IT WORKS. DO SOMETHING
GOOD IN THE WORLD AND BANG. WE STICK A PINT
OR TWO OF BEN & JERRY’S IN YOUR FREEZER WHEN NO ONE IS
LOOKING.
FAIRY 1: DO SOMETHING BAD AND BOOM! NO BEN &
JERRY’S. PLUS WE STICK SOMETHING REALLY WEIRD IN YOUR
FREEZER LIKE FROZEN CLAMS.
FAIRY 2: WE AIN’T NO LIGHTWEIGHT FAIRIES THAT TAP
DANCE ON MOONBEAMS AND STUFF!
FAIRY 1: YEAH, WE WORK FOR A LIVING.
FAIRY 2: JUST LIKE YOU GUYS.
FAIRY 1: OKAY, SETTLE DOWN GUYS. US FREEZER FAIRIES
CAN BE SENSITIVE TOO.
FAIRY 2: SO WHERE WERE WE?
FAIRY 1: LET’S REVIEW. DO SOMETHING GOOD….
FAIRY 2: WE SNEAK SOME BEN & JERRY’S INTO YOUR FREEZER.
MAYBE SOME CHERRY GARCIA.
FAIRY 1: OR SOME CHUNKY MONKEY. DO SOMETHING BAD….
FAIRY 2: AND NO BEN & JERRY’S IN YOUR FREEZER!
FAIRY 1: PLUS WE MESS WITH YOUR HEAD A LITTLE BIT.
FAIRY 2: OK, TILL NEXT TIME. WE WISH YOU A FREEZER FULL OF
LOVE AND SURPRISES.
FAIRY 1: BE GOOD OUT THERE.
FAIRY 2: OR ELSE!

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[Elvie]

Hi Bil-Bo, You are so talented. I love your voice. I have heard some of your other recordings and they all sound AMAZING!. The way you transition from characters to commercial such ease.

[Robert Broussard]

Good work, impressive how you can blend the characters together.

[mkell755]

Hi Bil-Bo, really nice! Again, good production with the music. I like the character voices and the lightness of the script, it was really fun to hear. Good job!

Mary

[dkosoy]

Hi Bil-Bo.

Really good! Great work with the music background. Fun script. Like the voice quality a lot. Sometimes it was hard to tell the 2 fairies apart. If you can make the 2 voices a little more distinct from each other that would be an improvement. Nice job!

[SuperLuke]

Good job with this performance, Bil-bo. It was very entertaining for me. I imagined a tv or radio show as I listened to it. Good job incorporating music into your performance too. Did you perform both characters? If so, that was very good. Nice recording quality too.

[Bil-Bo]

Hey SuperLuke
Yep, did’em both. Thanks for listening & commenting.
BillH

[Bil-Bo]

BEN & JERRY’S 2 VOICE RADIO 60 SEC

FAIRY 1: HEY, IT’S US. THE BEN & JERRY’S FREEZER FAIRIES.
THAT’S RIGHT. BEN & JERRY’S FREEZER FAIRIES. SOME PEOPLE
DON’T BELIEVE IN FREEZER FAIRIES. DOESN’T BOTHER US. WE
KNOW WE’RE HERE.
FAIRY 2: HERE’S HOW IT WORKS. DO SOMETHING
GOOD IN THE WORLD AND BANG. WE STICK A PINT
OR TWO OF BEN & JERRY’S IN YOUR FREEZER WHEN NO ONE IS
LOOKING.
FAIRY 1: DO SOMETHING BAD AND BOOM! NO BEN &
JERRY’S. PLUS WE STICK SOMETHING REALLY WEIRD IN YOUR
FREEZER LIKE FROZEN CLAMS.
FAIRY 2: WE AIN’T NO LIGHTWEIGHT FAIRIES THAT TAP
DANCE ON MOONBEAMS AND STUFF!
FAIRY 1: YEAH, WE WORK FOR A LIVING.
FAIRY 2: JUST LIKE YOU GUYS.
FAIRY 1: OKAY, SETTLE DOWN GUYS. US FREEZER FAIRIES
CAN BE SENSITIVE TOO.
FAIRY 2: SO WHERE WERE WE?
FAIRY 1: LET’S REVIEW. DO SOMETHING GOOD….
FAIRY 2: WE SNEAK SOME BEN & JERRY’S INTO YOUR FREEZER.
MAYBE SOME CHERRY GARCIA.
FAIRY 1: OR SOME CHUNKY MONKEY. DO SOMETHING BAD….
FAIRY 2: AND NO BEN & JERRY’S IN YOUR FREEZER!
FAIRY 1: PLUS WE MESS WITH YOUR HEAD A LITTLE BIT.
FAIRY 2: OK, TILL NEXT TIME. WE WISH YOU A FREEZER FULL OF
LOVE AND SURPRISES.
FAIRY 1: BE GOOD OUT THERE.
FAIRY 2: OR ELSE!

Beringer Wine
Some might choose a lecture or a documentary film to tell the story of 125 years of winemaking. We prefer a glass. At Beringer, we are proud to be the only winery ever to win Wine Spectator’s “Number-1 Wine of the Year” for both a cabernet and a chardonnay. But our greatest achievement lies in knowing that everything we’ve learned is yours to enjoy – each time you pour a glass of our wine. Beringer…All we are in every bottle.

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[mkell755]

Hi Bil-Bo, very good! I too like the music behind it, it’s very well-produced. Your voice is so nice and conversational on this, really sounded effortless and great for the script. Very good job!

Mary

[dkosoy]

Hi Bil-Bo.

This is really well done. Your delivery of the script is excellent. Your voice fits the part really well. Again, good job working in the music background, especially the timing with the music concluding right as you conclude. I’d be curious to know how you did that. Did you just time your delivery and then find a track of the same length? Only suggestion might be to lower the level of the music a little relative to the volume of your voice. Excellent! Looking forward to hearing more!

[Bil-Bo]

Hi Daniel
It’s easy to find production music in 30-second and 60-second versions for 30 & 60 second scripts for radio and tv. When recording voice track you know you need to come in a second or two under 30 or 60. Thanks for listening and commenting.
BillH

[SuperLuke]

Very nice commercial performance, good recording quality. I enjoyed the incorporated music and the change in your pitch to fit this performance.

[dkosoy]

Hi! Daniel here. This is my first time posting. Looking for feedback. Thank you.

American Express
Do you know me? Probably not. In my business, recognition is always important, but when I’m buying goods online I prefer a little privacy. With Private Payments from American Express, I get the security of a unique number created for each business transaction I make. Because my private information is my business, and American Express keeps it that way.

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[mkell755]

Hi Daniel, welcome to the forum!

This was great – you have such a super low voice that is very unique! I liked this read, but you might try for a little more variation in tone as you hit certain words and phrases. Your natural tendency is possibly more monotone(?) This is really good, I want to hear more!

Mary

[Bill Anciaux]

Your deep voice and serious tone give this script the gravitas it calls for, but you could be a touch warmer. After all, this character is in a business where recognition is always important. He has to show some people skills while appreciating the security of his personal info. with American Express. You need to be a bit more of a satisfied customer and a bit less the guy in charge of security. Good recording quality. Thanks for sharing. Bill A.

[dkosoy]

Thanks very much for this feedback Bill. I’m going to work on making it warmer. I really appreciate your comments. And my son agrees with you. 🙂

[SuperLuke]

Wow! I really enjoyed the performance. Nice recording quality too. The deep voice really matched the script and added a feel for “the secret agent” type of performance, even though it’s a commercial.

[mkell755]

Hello all! Here is a recording for any and all feedback. Let me know what you think!

Forest Stewardship Council
From musical instruments to furniture to flooring–all around the world–just about anything can be made out of independently certified wood that carries the Forest Stewardship Council label. It’s certified wood: wood as good as the forest it comes from. A forest that has been independently certified to meet the highest standards for environmentally and socially responsible forestry.

A forest that will be there for our children to use and enjoy.
To protect our forests for future generations, ask for independently certified wood in your new house. Ask for the FSC label. … Make the Forest Stewardship Council a household name. And do our forests a world of good.

Mary

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[Robert Broussard]

Nice read Mary, good pace and tone variance. You are progressing nicely.

[kbridges]

Hi Mary! I’ve seen you posting on here often and just want to encourage and affirm your consistency!

This one does sound like you’re reading a script to me. I wonder if it would help to imagine walking through a forest recording a promotional video for the FSC. Imagine shifting images as you move from what the wood makes, to the “forest” sentences, to the action statement of “to protect”.

I think your pacing is good on this one! Very clear and your voice fits this piece well.

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback KBridges! Yes, I’ve been trying to be consistent and the practice is hopefully helping 🙂

Thanks for the tips, that is a great idea about visualizing walking through the forests to lighten it up a bit, good idea. Thanks!

Mary

[SuperLuke]

As far as recording quality, I heard a high pitched ringing sound in the background. Most likely, you will want to eliminate that in the future.
As for the performance, from what I hear, it is supposed to be a commercial. Right? I think there’s supposed to be more of a smile in your voice, cheery. It was a good performance overall though.

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback SuperLuke! Yes, the high pitched ringing you hear will soon be a thing of the past once my new equipment gets here, I promise! It bugs me too and hopefully you and others will notice a difference then. I think this was in the Edge library under commercial, but it feel somewhat like narration too, but yes it could use more smile in the delivery. There were some tongue-twisters which I was probably over-focused on getting right. Thank you!!

Mary

[katelyndawnvo]

I redid this one and am much happier with it now 🙂

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[dkosoy]

Hi Katelyn.

Nice job! Your voice is smooth. It’s not an easy script and you delivered it well. At the pivot mid-script, I really liked hearing your emotion. I think you could bring that emotion into more places. Slowing down a bit might help. Maybe pause between sentences? Finally, I noticed a small pause between “America” and “the beautiful”. I think reading those 3 words all together works better. Great work.

[mkell755]

Hi Katelyn! I listened to both versions and I like the second one better as well. You had a warm and friendly informative tone throughout, and a good smile in your voice with a good pace. I think the second one had more emphasis in certain areas like “that all changed..” which made the read more interesting and also helps the listener get the key points. Very good!

Mary

[katelyndawnvo]

Hi there! I’m submitting this audition very soon so I’m hoping to receive some feedback! 🙂 the directions are limited but they say they are looking for “pleasant narrator style is needed but we are hoping for something a little different. Let us hear what you can do to make our subject matter leap from the page.” thoughts??

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[TimDKietzman]

I was told by a recording engineer that one of my strike zones is warmth. Does this performance come off as warm and inviting? Also, does my recording setup sound echoey in any way? It hasn’t been that way with my most recent uploads. Thanks for the help.

Budweiser
When it comes to really great beer, fresh rules. The clean, crisp taste of brewery fresh Budweiser. Fresh beer tastes better.

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[SuperLuke]

I hear the warmth in your voice. As far as recording quality, it sounds like there’s something making the recording at a low volume. But there’s no echo.

[mkell755]

Hi Tim! It does sound warm, and this was nice. Some of the pauses are making it sound a little bit choppy to me vs. describing how smooth and clean the beer tastes by leaning in to the words, I hope that makes sense? Good read!

Mary

[Pmag]

Yeah I mean I definitely think this should be played over a commercial where someone is going fishing or doing something out door like with any sort of camp fire going. The warmth description is very accurate.

[TimDKietzman]

Hey everyone. I’m practicing every day, but that’s no good if I’m the only one listening to it. I’d appreciate any feedback you can give me on this latest read. How was the tone of my performance? The word “it’s” is used a lot so did I do well when bring the lists to life? How about my studio setup? Is it still working great? Thanks for the help.

Not Just a Glove
It’s not just a glove, it’s the feel in your hand, it’s the unmistakable smell of the leather, it’s the time, work, and love that went into making it yours, making every opportunity count and getting you to the next level. It’s not just a glove, its passion, its history, it’s you.

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[SuperLuke]

I really enjoyed this performance. It was energetic, well-paced, and it sounded inviting to the audience. Well done!

[mkell755]

Hi Tim, good read! This sounded authentic and conversational. I liked the pace and the emphasis on the selected words throughout – very nice!

Mary

[touzet]

Tinkering with some documentary reads…

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[mkell755]

Hi Touzet, really nice! It sounds very professionally performed and produced, really good! I can’t think of much to critique here other than kepe it up! I think your voice is really warm and inviting, very good!

Mary

[TimDKietzman]

Tinkering with them? You sir sound like you’ve done them all your life! So serious and all knowing, I am instantly hooked and your performance really helps me to imagine the accompanying video. Only thing is, I think you’re pausing too much. Since this is just the recording part, you ought to keep your pauses to no more than a second.

You’re on the right path. Thanks for sharing!

[touzet]

Good point about the pauses. I was actually doing it in the same vein as the track with the visuals…as if it were stripped off of the video. I suppose if I were really ambitious, I could have added in some voices, feet shuffling, car doors slamming, sirens, jet plane noises to fill some of the space in between. 😉

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[solin232]

Hi. I’m just getting back into practicing after a long lay-off and would appreciate any feedback on performance and/or recording quality! Thanks in advance !

Script: Private Equity Video
Welcome and thank you for taking the time to learn a little about Private Equity Solutions.
In this presentation, you’ll learn the basics about Private Equity and the role it can play in your clients’ portfolios, as well as in your practice.
Your ability to address the needs and goals of clients in these important segments will help you attract new business and build your practice
Clients have goals related to seven life priorities, with Finance being the connecting point among them all. Understanding these life priorities can help you identify concerns clients may have in the pursuit of their goals.
For instance, a client in Segments 4 through 9 may want to:
-Invest according to their values – Save for retirement
-Enhance returns while lowering risk and Help preserve their original investment.
For many of these clients, Private Equity can be an important solution to help them pursue their goals.
Specifically, we’ll discuss how Private Equity Solutions can:
-Fit into your overall goals-based approach with clients.
-Help your clients pursue the goals that matter most to them.
and Help you attract new assets.

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[mkell755]

Hi Solin232, really solid work here! It sounds really well-paced and with great choices on phrases and selected key words to emphasize. Your voice is really nice and very well-suited for this genre. Great job!

Mary

[solin232]

Thanks Mary !
Steve

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