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Steve. Your read was great for the vibe of this company, which seems like a cool young company. Really nice! You definitely connected with the fun. I agree with the comments on the choppiness. I’m wondering if there is some gating going on with your equipment where perhaps the lower frequencies are being dropped? A couple of interpretation thoughts. Make the distinction clearer that the listener is not an “employee”, they are family. And consider ‘not too formal’ as a qualification of the word “formally” said earlier. So maybe more emphasis on ‘too’. Nice read!
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Steve, this is really awesome. You have a very natural and friendly voice for this genre. I am impressed.
My only feedback is “but not too formal because that’s just not our style” starting at 0:09. It seems choppy with breaks between each word. I think smoothing it out would sound more relaxed and consistent with the rest of your performance. Keep in mind, I am a beginner VO actor, and this is just my impression.
Very nice job!
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I think your read was “not too formal” and quite conversational. You sound relaxed and friendly. Only the “complimentary cake you have in front of you” seemed a bit disconnected. You could try gesturing as you say that line as though you’re pointing out the imaginary cake. Otherwise, good quality sound and a strong performance. Thanks for sharing.
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FAIRY 1: HEY, IT’S US. THE BEN & JERRY’S FREEZER FAIRIES.
THAT’S RIGHT. BEN & JERRY’S FREEZER FAIRIES. SOME PEOPLE
DON’T BELIEVE IN FREEZER FAIRIES. DOESN’T BOTHER US. WE
KNOW WE’RE HERE.
FAIRY 2: HERE’S HOW IT WORKS. DO SOMETHING
GOOD IN THE WORLD AND BANG. WE STICK A PINT
OR TWO OF BEN & JERRY’S IN YOUR FREEZER WHEN NO ONE IS
LOOKING.
FAIRY 1: DO SOMETHING BAD AND BOOM! NO BEN &
JERRY’S. PLUS WE STICK SOMETHING REALLY WEIRD IN YOUR
FREEZER LIKE FROZEN CLAMS.
FAIRY 2: WE AIN’T NO LIGHTWEIGHT FAIRIES THAT TAP
DANCE ON MOONBEAMS AND STUFF!
FAIRY 1: YEAH, WE WORK FOR A LIVING.
FAIRY 2: JUST LIKE YOU GUYS.
FAIRY 1: OKAY, SETTLE DOWN GUYS. US FREEZER FAIRIES
CAN BE SENSITIVE TOO.
FAIRY 2: SO WHERE WERE WE?
FAIRY 1: LET’S REVIEW. DO SOMETHING GOOD….
FAIRY 2: WE SNEAK SOME BEN & JERRY’S INTO YOUR FREEZER.
MAYBE SOME CHERRY GARCIA.
FAIRY 1: OR SOME CHUNKY MONKEY. DO SOMETHING BAD….
FAIRY 2: AND NO BEN & JERRY’S IN YOUR FREEZER!
FAIRY 1: PLUS WE MESS WITH YOUR HEAD A LITTLE BIT.
FAIRY 2: OK, TILL NEXT TIME. WE WISH YOU A FREEZER FULL OF
LOVE AND SURPRISES.
FAIRY 1: BE GOOD OUT THERE.
FAIRY 2: OR ELSE!-
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Good job with this performance, Bil-bo. It was very entertaining for me. I imagined a tv or radio show as I listened to it. Good job incorporating music into your performance too. Did you perform both characters? If so, that was very good. Nice recording quality too.
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BEN & JERRY’S 2 VOICE RADIO 60 SEC
FAIRY 1: HEY, IT’S US. THE BEN & JERRY’S FREEZER FAIRIES.
THAT’S RIGHT. BEN & JERRY’S FREEZER FAIRIES. SOME PEOPLE
DON’T BELIEVE IN FREEZER FAIRIES. DOESN’T BOTHER US. WE
KNOW WE’RE HERE.
FAIRY 2: HERE’S HOW IT WORKS. DO SOMETHING
GOOD IN THE WORLD AND BANG. WE STICK A PINT
OR TWO OF BEN & JERRY’S IN YOUR FREEZER WHEN NO ONE IS
LOOKING.
FAIRY 1: DO SOMETHING BAD AND BOOM! NO BEN &
JERRY’S. PLUS WE STICK SOMETHING REALLY WEIRD IN YOUR
FREEZER LIKE FROZEN CLAMS.
FAIRY 2: WE AIN’T NO LIGHTWEIGHT FAIRIES THAT TAP
DANCE ON MOONBEAMS AND STUFF!
FAIRY 1: YEAH, WE WORK FOR A LIVING.
FAIRY 2: JUST LIKE YOU GUYS.
FAIRY 1: OKAY, SETTLE DOWN GUYS. US FREEZER FAIRIES
CAN BE SENSITIVE TOO.
FAIRY 2: SO WHERE WERE WE?
FAIRY 1: LET’S REVIEW. DO SOMETHING GOOD….
FAIRY 2: WE SNEAK SOME BEN & JERRY’S INTO YOUR FREEZER.
MAYBE SOME CHERRY GARCIA.
FAIRY 1: OR SOME CHUNKY MONKEY. DO SOMETHING BAD….
FAIRY 2: AND NO BEN & JERRY’S IN YOUR FREEZER!
FAIRY 1: PLUS WE MESS WITH YOUR HEAD A LITTLE BIT.
FAIRY 2: OK, TILL NEXT TIME. WE WISH YOU A FREEZER FULL OF
LOVE AND SURPRISES.
FAIRY 1: BE GOOD OUT THERE.
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Hi Bil-Bo.
This is really well done. Your delivery of the script is excellent. Your voice fits the part really well. Again, good job working in the music background, especially the timing with the music concluding right as you conclude. I’d be curious to know how you did that. Did you just time your delivery and then find a track of the same length? Only suggestion might be to lower the level of the music a little relative to the volume of your voice. Excellent! Looking forward to hearing more!
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Hi! Daniel here. This is my first time posting. Looking for feedback. Thank you.
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Hi Daniel, welcome to the forum!
This was great – you have such a super low voice that is very unique! I liked this read, but you might try for a little more variation in tone as you hit certain words and phrases. Your natural tendency is possibly more monotone(?) This is really good, I want to hear more!
Mary
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Your deep voice and serious tone give this script the gravitas it calls for, but you could be a touch warmer. After all, this character is in a business where recognition is always important. He has to show some people skills while appreciating the security of his personal info. with American Express. You need to be a bit more of a satisfied customer and a bit less the guy in charge of security. Good recording quality. Thanks for sharing. Bill A.
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Hello all! Here is a recording for any and all feedback. Let me know what you think!
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Hi Mary! I’ve seen you posting on here often and just want to encourage and affirm your consistency!
This one does sound like you’re reading a script to me. I wonder if it would help to imagine walking through a forest recording a promotional video for the FSC. Imagine shifting images as you move from what the wood makes, to the “forest” sentences, to the action statement of “to protect”.
I think your pacing is good on this one! Very clear and your voice fits this piece well.
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As far as recording quality, I heard a high pitched ringing sound in the background. Most likely, you will want to eliminate that in the future.
As for the performance, from what I hear, it is supposed to be a commercial. Right? I think there’s supposed to be more of a smile in your voice, cheery. It was a good performance overall though.-
Thanks for the feedback SuperLuke! Yes, the high pitched ringing you hear will soon be a thing of the past once my new equipment gets here, I promise! It bugs me too and hopefully you and others will notice a difference then. I think this was in the Edge library under commercial, but it feel somewhat like narration too, but yes it could use more smile in the delivery. There were some tongue-twisters which I was probably over-focused on getting right. Thank you!!
Mary
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Hi Katelyn.
Nice job! Your voice is smooth. It’s not an easy script and you delivered it well. At the pivot mid-script, I really liked hearing your emotion. I think you could bring that emotion into more places. Slowing down a bit might help. Maybe pause between sentences? Finally, I noticed a small pause between “America” and “the beautiful”. I think reading those 3 words all together works better. Great work.
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Hi Katelyn! I listened to both versions and I like the second one better as well. You had a warm and friendly informative tone throughout, and a good smile in your voice with a good pace. I think the second one had more emphasis in certain areas like “that all changed..” which made the read more interesting and also helps the listener get the key points. Very good!
Mary
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Hi there! I’m submitting this audition very soon so I’m hoping to receive some feedback! 🙂 the directions are limited but they say they are looking for “pleasant narrator style is needed but we are hoping for something a little different. Let us hear what you can do to make our subject matter leap from the page.” thoughts??
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I was told by a recording engineer that one of my strike zones is warmth. Does this performance come off as warm and inviting? Also, does my recording setup sound echoey in any way? It hasn’t been that way with my most recent uploads. Thanks for the help.
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Hey everyone. I’m practicing every day, but that’s no good if I’m the only one listening to it. I’d appreciate any feedback you can give me on this latest read. How was the tone of my performance? The word “it’s” is used a lot so did I do well when bring the lists to life? How about my studio setup? Is it still working great? Thanks for the help.
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Tinkering with them? You sir sound like you’ve done them all your life! So serious and all knowing, I am instantly hooked and your performance really helps me to imagine the accompanying video. Only thing is, I think you’re pausing too much. Since this is just the recording part, you ought to keep your pauses to no more than a second.
You’re on the right path. Thanks for sharing!
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Good point about the pauses. I was actually doing it in the same vein as the track with the visuals…as if it were stripped off of the video. I suppose if I were really ambitious, I could have added in some voices, feet shuffling, car doors slamming, sirens, jet plane noises to fill some of the space in between. 😉
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