[David Goldberg]

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[debbyc]

Hi Everyone, I am looking for feedback on two narration scripts. The first is a Real Estate Home Tour. I am attempting to sell a prospective buyer on this wonderful home. How do I sound? Am I convincing? How is my pace? Am I descriptive in my attempt to sell you! The second script is a narration piece about a badger family in Yellowstone Park. My visual is that I am narrating a documentary on Yellowstone Park. How do I sound? I would love some constructive criticism on this one. Thanks in advance.

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[Keith Paul]

Hi, on the home tour narration, sometimes your volume goes down very low that the meaning is lost.
On the Yellow stone narration, the read was really good and inviting.

[debbyc]

Thank you, Keith Paul. I appreciate your feedback!

[Jahna Bobolia]

Hi! I really enjoyed the Yellowstone read. I thought the pacing was good. I found it warm and informational which felt right on point for the piece.

[debbyc]

Jahna Bobolia thank you. I appreciate your feedback.

[Jahna Bobolia]

Hi! I am uploading one track with 2 different takes. My goal is to make both conversational, but with each take my “who” a different person. Questions: How is my pace? Do they both sound conversational? Do the two different tracks sounds as though I am speaking to different people. Thank You!

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[debbyc]

Hi Jahna. I love your voice…very easy to listen to. Your pace is great. My only critique would be that (as a long time Tylenol user) I would like you to really sell me on Advil.

[Jahna Bobolia]

: ) Thank you for the feedback!

[Krista Andersen]

Hi Jahna, love your voice, easy to listen to. Not sure if I’m catching two different “whos” but definitely different pacing – both are nice and sound conversational.

[Jahna Bobolia]

Hi Krista, Thank you for your feedback!

[Keith Paul]

Hi everyone, I’m Keith Paul I have just uploaded a couple of recordings. I would very much appreciate, some feedback on them, thank you all very much.

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[debbyc]

Hey Keith. I really liked both of your reads, very conversational. I felt compelled to go out and purchase each item. I would like to suggest that you work on pronunciation of some of the words (ex: Tennessee was hard to understand) .

[Keith Paul]

Thank you very much for your feedback your points are well taken.

[Krista Andersen]

Hi Keith, I enjoyed your reads! I feel I can see you smiling & enjoying both of these products. Maybe some more varied tones for the list words like “your boss, a friend, or a brother”.

[Keith Paul]

Thank you very much for your feedback, I do understand what you mean by varying my tone. I am going to be working on that.

[Jahna Bobolia]

Hey! I enjoyed listening to your reads! Your pace was good, and the reads sounded conversational, and engaging! Two things I would work on, with the steak sauce copy I would work on the /mmmm tastes good/. My coach always says we want to be able to taste the food so maybe think of a food you love so much that when you take a bite you actually make that sound. For the whiskey copy I would be sure to pronounce the ing at the end of giving.

[Keith Paul]

Thank you very much for your feedback, I will be working on the MMMM tastes good/on the Whiskey copy, you are absolutely right. Thanks again.

[Tracy]

Hello all – I am submitting two short reads for your feedback. Thanks in advance for your comments.

Tracy

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[Keith Paul]

Good morning, I listened to both of your recordings, the words are very clear, the scripts are very understandable. I am assuming the fiduciary script is an explainer, You did a great job on that.

[Tracy]

Thanks so much for your comments and for your time in listening. Much appreciated.

[DillonP]

Sorry that it has been some time since I last posted. Here are two new reads I just did, one commercial and one Narration. Please give me some feedback to help be push forward. I will be submitting more reads to get more feedback to see how I am progressing. Thank you for listening.

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[TalVerd]

Alright, I’ve got 3 performances today that I need feedback on. Specifically, I need performance feedback, not technical feedback. Thanks very much!

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[Jahna Bobolia]

Hi! I would work on slowing down your pace for both the Dominoes and the H&R block scripts. I also might take a second to write out who you are talking to. Where you are talking with this person, and why you are telling them about this. This helps to make the script sound more conversational. : )

[Michelle Stout]

Hello! This is my first attempt to upload here and was looking for some creative feedback. I’m working on my pacing and diction, while trying to sound natural. Any comments appreciated!

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[Eliz_10]

Hi Michelle,
Here are my comments: Nice warm quality to your voice; easy to listen to. There is some sort of noise or pop on the “st” on the word Instagram. I think there is slightly too much time between the end of “help us complete the picture” and the beginning of “direct message us…” The words “direct message us to find out” are smushed together and sound more like “direct message justify”. Can you tamp down or shorten the “f” sound on the word Life at the end of the demo? All in all, good job! Regards, Elizabeth

[Keith Paul]

Hi, the Instagram script, your diction is excellent, the read is very conversational. The timing issues is not so much a problem, as we practice more, it will come into play. Keep up the good work.

[Michelle Stout]

Thank you so much Keith! I appreciate you listening and for the encouragement!

[Michelle Stout]

Thank you for listening! I appreciate the feedback. I can definitely work on the timing issues.

[Eliz_10]

Hi,
I’m submitting a short, playful dialogue between a grandmother and grandchild. My question for those who listen is: are the two voices clearly different and don’t sound like they’re being voiced by the same person? Any other feedback is welcomed.
Regards,
Elizabeth

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[Jahna Bobolia]

Hi! The two voices do sound very different and as though they are being voiced by different people.

[Keith Paul]

Hi, the voices do sound very different, most important to me is that the voices are very engaging. Great Job

[Krista Andersen]

Practicing – looking for feedback. I’ve been trying to work on not having glottal stops and sounding more conversational, less “announcer”. Thanks for any suggestions.

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[Keith Paul]

Hi, the tone you used for this script is right on the money. I think you can speed up the script a lit bit more. but all in all it was a good read. Very conversational and you brought out the meaning of the script.

[Krista Andersen]

Thanks so much for the feedback!

[Jahna Bobolia]

Hello! I am looking for creative feedback for my coaching sessions homework. How is my pacing? Does it sound conversational? Thank you!

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[Keith Paul]

Hi, on the American express, you started of with one pace and then ended much slower. the beginning part had a very good pace.
I thought the pacing on the Club Med was also very slow, I think you could pick up the pace a bit. I’m thinking this is a 30 second spot. Your recording was 39 secs.
The diction is perfect, your read is very engaging.

[Jahna Bobolia]

Hey Everyone! I am giving it another try with the take 1 and take 2. Going for conversational in both however my “who” changes. Do you hear a difference in the takes?

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