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[tmanning.tix]

Greetings fellow voicers. Just looking for feedback on a couple of recordings. Any pointers are welcome.

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[Keith Paul]

Hi, your tone on the commercials is very warm, but the script was not conversational enough, it sounded like you are reading.

[ScottCarr]

Great voice! I believe you have the potential to do very well. The more you practice those scripts, the more natural and conversational you will become. Keep up the good work!

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[Keith Paul]

Hello everyone, I’m back again looking for your feedback. I have uploaded two reads, please be as candid as possible. I really do appreciate your feedback

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[Jahna Bobolia]

Hey Keith, I thought the Campbells copy was right on point. Pacing was good, warm. It sounded lovely. My only suggestion would be to take the pause out after Introducing at the beginning of the piece.

[Keith Paul]

Thank you very much for your feedback, your point is well taken.

[debbyc]

Hi all! I have uploaded a couple of narration reads and would appreciate any feedback that you have. I am hoping to sound conversational and sincere on the Allstate Insurance read. The pre boarding read…any and all feedback is appreaciated. Thanks in advance!

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[Keith Paul]

Hi, the All state read, the volume was low and it made it difficult to understand some of the words, The Boarding pass volume waa better and was able to hear all of the words. The boarding pass matched what is heard when boarding at the airport.

[debbyc]

Thank you Keith Paul. I appreciate your feedback!

[Talia Hankin]

Hi! I would be eager to hear any and all feedback on these two commercial reads. Thank you in advance!

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[debbyc]

Hi Talia, the beginning of the Spotify read was chopped off. Maybe take a beat before starting. I really loved the end…conversational and loved the tone of your voice. The Philips read was really nice!

[Jahna Bobolia]

Hey Talia, These both sound great! Great pace, clear diction, nice and conversational! My only suggestion would be for the Phillips commercial there is a pause at the beginning right after you say At Phillips. Maybe you could play with how the line would sound if you took out the pause. Great work! I have a Tilex commercial on here that I am working on my take 1 and take 2’s. Would love your feedback if you have a chance.

[Artist7]

Hi, everyone! I’d really appreciate some feedback on these two short commercial reads. Thanks in advance!

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[latyesemca]

Both reads were beautifully done! I feel like the Cheerios read had some long pauses but overall it was really nice to hear. I also forgot that there was also a berry cheerios version haha. The American cancer society read was really informative! You’re voice sits at a nice place for all your reads.

[Artist7]

Hi, Thanks for taking the time to listen. I appreciate your feedback!

[Jahna Bobolia]

Hi! Lovely voice! both commercials sounded strong with pacing, diction, delivery. My only suggestion, I would be careful of pauses after periods. I think maybe in the Cheerios commercial your pacing was lovely then a period would hit and a pause would occur.

[Keith Paul]

Hi, nice read, on both. On the American cancer, there were two words that were difficult to pick up “Ask” and the word before “habit” i could not recognize that word at all.

[Bil-Bo]

Coors Beer

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[Keith Paul]

Hi, great read, I love the tone and interpretation of the script. I would have to agree with the “D” at the end of cold, it does need some attention.

[Jahna Bobolia]

Hi! I agree great read! Very conversational and easy going. I also agree with Michelle just gives those /d/s a little attention at the end of cold.

[Michelle Stout]

Love your voice on this read! Very soothing. My only critique is a few times on the word “cold” I couldn’t hear the “d” come through. Nice pacing and overall great job!

[Jahna Bobolia]

Hey Everyone! I am giving it another try with the take 1 and take 2. Going for conversational in both however my “who” changes. Do you hear a difference in the takes?

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[Krista Andersen]

Hi Jahna – definitely hear the difference on these reads! Great job with changing it up!

[Artist7]

Hi, I do hear a difference between the takes, and prefer the second one. It’s a much smoother read and sounds more conversational. Nice job!

[debbyc]

Hi Everyone, I am looking for feedback on two narration scripts. The first is a Real Estate Home Tour. I am attempting to sell a prospective buyer on this wonderful home. How do I sound? Am I convincing? How is my pace? Am I descriptive in my attempt to sell you! The second script is a narration piece about a badger family in Yellowstone Park. My visual is that I am narrating a documentary on Yellowstone Park. How do I sound? I would love some constructive criticism on this one. Thanks in advance.

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[Keith Paul]

Hi, on the home tour narration, sometimes your volume goes down very low that the meaning is lost.
On the Yellow stone narration, the read was really good and inviting.

[debbyc]

Thank you, Keith Paul. I appreciate your feedback!

[Jahna Bobolia]

Hi! I really enjoyed the Yellowstone read. I thought the pacing was good. I found it warm and informational which felt right on point for the piece.

[debbyc]

Jahna Bobolia thank you. I appreciate your feedback.

[Jahna Bobolia]

Hi! I am uploading one track with 2 different takes. My goal is to make both conversational, but with each take my “who” a different person. Questions: How is my pace? Do they both sound conversational? Do the two different tracks sounds as though I am speaking to different people. Thank You!

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[debbyc]

Hi Jahna. I love your voice…very easy to listen to. Your pace is great. My only critique would be that (as a long time Tylenol user) I would like you to really sell me on Advil.

[Jahna Bobolia]

: ) Thank you for the feedback!

[Krista Andersen]

Hi Jahna, love your voice, easy to listen to. Not sure if I’m catching two different “whos” but definitely different pacing – both are nice and sound conversational.

[Jahna Bobolia]

Hi Krista, Thank you for your feedback!

[Keith Paul]

Hi everyone, I’m Keith Paul I have just uploaded a couple of recordings. I would very much appreciate, some feedback on them, thank you all very much.

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[debbyc]

Hey Keith. I really liked both of your reads, very conversational. I felt compelled to go out and purchase each item. I would like to suggest that you work on pronunciation of some of the words (ex: Tennessee was hard to understand) .

[Keith Paul]

Thank you very much for your feedback your points are well taken.

[Krista Andersen]

Hi Keith, I enjoyed your reads! I feel I can see you smiling & enjoying both of these products. Maybe some more varied tones for the list words like “your boss, a friend, or a brother”.

[Keith Paul]

Thank you very much for your feedback, I do understand what you mean by varying my tone. I am going to be working on that.

[Jahna Bobolia]

Hey! I enjoyed listening to your reads! Your pace was good, and the reads sounded conversational, and engaging! Two things I would work on, with the steak sauce copy I would work on the /mmmm tastes good/. My coach always says we want to be able to taste the food so maybe think of a food you love so much that when you take a bite you actually make that sound. For the whiskey copy I would be sure to pronounce the ing at the end of giving.

[Keith Paul]

Thank you very much for your feedback, I will be working on the MMMM tastes good/on the Whiskey copy, you are absolutely right. Thanks again.

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