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Hi Everyone, I’ve uploaded three scripts to get feedback for a homework assignment. This is my first time on the forum and I would appreciate brutal assessments…I figure it’s the best way to improve my reads and learn how a casting agent might hear my voice. Don’t worry, I’ve got a thick skin! ;). Thanks in advance!!
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I also agree with Touzet. He has some good technical help there. Your modulations were well done. I found the reads engaging and the pacing appropriate. The last read showed the promise that corporate training videos could be interesting to listen to. Agree with the comment about smoothing things out.
keep up the good work!
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Very nice voice. At around :19 secs in the first track, you hit “Business” pretty hard.
In track 3, around :11 “…need to know….to produce a…” The gap between “know” and “to” stuck out a little for me. (An easy edit fix).
There are some minor plosive issues…I mean minor but I think could still be mitigated some.
In track 1 “….Buying goods on line…” That B in buying. Sounds like it may be high-passed a bit which saves it some but I’m thinking more could be done with pop screens or mic position. Might be better to have more low end in your track and physically avoid the plosives.
I am also hearing some sibilance issues throughout. Again, back to the first time “Business” is read in track 1. Both S’s in that word.
A de-esser may help with that and possibly some EQ adjustments.
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Wow, touzet, thank you so much for the detailed feedback…editing is not my strong point (obviously!). I didn’t do any editing other than deleting breaths, so I have to get up to speed on making EQ adjustments. Also, I’m going to have to play with mic position, because I did use a pop screen and wasn’t talking directly into the mic. I’ve gotten some really important things to work on through this forum so far! Thanks everyone!
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Hi S3! First of all, welcome!
Good job on these 3 scripts. Your voice is nice and friendly and your tone feels approachable. I liked the third script the best for you, seemed like the best fit of the 3 for your voice. Good pacing and variation in tone for all of them – good job on these!
Mary
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Thank you Mary and Barb for your feedback!! I really appreciate you both listening to all three scripts and it’s really beneficial to me to hear that you both chose the third one as the best fit for my voice!! And I’ll definitely try Barb’s idea for smoothing out my reads. I’ve learned so much already with just my first post. Now, to continue with my homework, I’m to provide feedback to help train my ear (which I obviously need!). 🙂
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Hi all! Here are some practice scripts for any and all feedback. How do they sound? Which one do you like best for my voice? Is the tone right? Trying also to work on getting the correct recording levels. Thank you for listening and commenting!!!
Mary
Liberty Mutual Insurance
Research shows people remember commercials with nostalgia. So to help you remember that Liberty Mutual customizes your home insurance, here’s one that will really take you back…Ancient Mysteries
Be it endless fascination with the Bible, or chilling tales of Gothic horror, man has been compelled by the wonders of the unknown since the beginning of time. From the possible existence of Big Foot to the grips of a mummy’s curse. Uncover the truth behind “Ancient Mysteries” tonight on Channel 4…NBC.Mailboxes Etcetera
Everybody can use a little help when they’re out on the road- and that’s where MailBoxes Etcetera comes in. We get it done, and we get it done right. Mailboxes Etcetera.-
Hi Mary. Great work. I liked the third read best out of all three. As a fellow southerner, I can hear a bit of an accent on certain words. For example, “right” and “back” in the script are drawn out. I tend to do this as well at the end of a sentence. Otherwise, you were convincing and friendly at the same time. Very authentic. I hope this feedback helps. Best, Kristen
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Hi Mary, I liked your reads on 1 and 3 for your voice, too. Your voice has a warm, friendly quality-easy to listen to! As I’ve proven, I’m not much of a tech person, but I had sound that low a couple of times when I forgot to switch from my laptop speakers/mic to my interface speakers/mic.
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There seems to be some punching of words and/or syllables that are puzzling. Track 1 line 1: REsearch shows people reMEMber… Also, “So to help YOU remember…” seemed a bit overdone. For me, it needs to flow more with less punching ..or at least more nuanced punching or inflection. Track 2 seems to be an NBC show promo which I believe should be pretty fast and high energy.
Audacity has a decent compressor (I believe the default settings will work ok). After compressing, you can use the normalization tool to set the highest peak to whatever you want. I believe -3 was suggested. The compressor will help even out high and low volume sections of your track.
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Thanks for the feedback Touzet! I will watch my emphasis on certain syllables, did not know it was coming across in a weird way. In the past I have not hit things enough, so maybe I’m getting tot he point where I can work on making it more natural. Thanks for the tip on normalization. I took Art’s class on Audacity recently but am really just learning the software – thanks!
Mary
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Hi Mary, I’m not a big Tech Guy but I wanted to comment on increasing the volume of your recordings If you’re using Audacity you can “normalize” it to -3.0 db before exporting it. While in Audacity “Highlight your recording – click on Effect, look for Normalize and click on … in the pop up window make sure the number in the db box is -3.0 if it is Not, change it then click OK — this will increase the volume of your recordings to the accepted industry standard. Hope this helps !
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Thanks for the feedback Solin! I will try normalizing the recording, thanks for the tip! I have been racking my brain for how to adjust to a -3 db level either during or after the recording, this is very helpful, thanks!
Mary
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I had to agree with Darlene. 1 and 3 are better reads that go with you voice. Good job varying your tones. It seems like your voice volume is lower than it should be. Hope that helps. -
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Hi Mary! I really liked the commercial reads for Liberty Mutual and Mailbox Etcetera. Very good use of tone and inflection on those. Also, not sure if this helps in regards to you trying to find the right volume levels for your recordings, but I had to turn my computer volume up fairly high to hear. Again, not sure if that’s helpful but figured I’d add in case it is.
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Continuing to focus on my homework for a Commercial demo and appreciate all feedback.
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Chas, really nice work! I agree with the positive comments from Mary and Darlene. I just think that you overemphasized words throughout the read which would cause balancing problems in the engineering room. In particular in the beginning: It’s a part of my life. So I. Go easier on those words. Otherwise, great job!
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Hi folks. Another practice script. Would appreciate feedback on any and all aspects. Thanks! Toque
Intact Insurance script:
Business owners know that success requires commitment and passion.
Unfortunately, passion and commitment can’t prevent accidents. A single liability
claim could put you out of business. Protect your business against costly
lawsuits with Liability Insurance from Intact.-
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“Unfortunately” came off a little energetic and perky whereas I think it should be a little slower and more serious.
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Hi Toque, nice read! I liked the directness of the read and how you emphasized “you” and “Protect”, Very good!
Mary
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Based one some earlier feedback I rewrote and re-recorded my audio in -3db. These are 2 different scripts for a custom corporate narration audition script. Director notes are “compelling an uplifting”. Thank you in advanced for the feedback. – Vincent
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Nice, very nice. In the second read at about 9 seconds it seemed like it sped up “benefits are not a one size fits all”. Hard to make or talk about COVID-19 in an “uplifting” way. The tone sounded decent. I would have a hard time not reading this with anger and tears right now…. Ok, thats just me, or is it?
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Hi Vincent, good reads! I like the tone of your voice and the pacing for both scripts, but I would not describe them as “compelling and uplifting”; you might try to vary up the tone throughout, and emphasize parts of it even more. This seems like a script in which you are trying to convey empathy towards your listeners, and you want them to know that you really understand how they feel in the world that is changing. Good work!
Mary
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Hi Vincent. I would say your audio quality and volume sound good to my ear. They’re good reads. The only aspect I might suggest tweaking is the “tone”, which felt a bit flat. What emotion are you thinking and trying to convey? This is where the direction of “compelling and uplifting” come in. Hope this helps. Toque
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When I first listened I didn’t hear anything odd about “found”, second time, after reading the reviews I thought I did. Then the third listen I didn’t. My ears were playing games with me. But, Wow, Awesome. Ever think of doing voiceovers for a living Touzet? I’m packing my bags (in my mind) right now and heading to Fla. I wish. It’s -2 here, up from -17 last night.
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Love this!!! I especially like your enphasis on CONserve.
A nit-pick … At 0:16 there is something strange about your pronunciation of the word “found”. It might sound like you said, “frowned it.”
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Thanks for giving this a listen. Since the word prior to CONserve was PREserve, I felt like a little emphasis was due there on CON…trying to be careful not to overdo it. I listened to the “found” at 0:16 a few times… I’m not hearing an issue there but might be able to make the diction a little crisper. Without getting totally slosh-mouthed (<-technical term) , seems like you have to loosen the diction a little on a very laid back spot. Thanks again for taking the time to listen and comment.
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Says the network is connected to the button on your mouse,
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That’s repeatedly rejected by the printer down the hall,
And your screen is all distorted by the side effects of gauss,
So your icons in the window are as wavy as a s***e,
Then you may as well reboot and go out with a bang,
‘Cause as sure as I’m a poet, the sucker’s gonna hang!
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And the microcode instructions cause unnecessary risk,
Then you have to flash your memory and you’ll want to ram your rom.
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Ready to off-road…right from the factory.
Chevy….find new roads…-
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Tongue twister to truck commercial now that’s a good range Nice work Bill! Hey have you tried Ray the Firefly sounds like it might be up your alley I recorded it sometime back but not sure if I want to post it.
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Hello All! I’m looking for feedback on my recorded audio. Sound Quality and Performance mainly but anything helps=) thank you in advance!
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This is day two of my self prescribed exercise – read the same script imagining talking to three distinctly different people. Recorded on my phone, so apologies for the less than ideal quality. I’m really trying to just focus on this one aspect for a few rounds to try to understand it better and perform it better.
Thanks for any insight!
“If you‘re in the dark about where to ski, let us shed some light on the subject. High in Virginia‘
s Blue Ridge Mountains, discover what‘s been called the Mid-Atlantic‘s finest overall
ski experience. Wintergreen offers 10 slopes, five lifts, and an extensive snow-making
system. Not to mention luxurious accommodations, an indoor spa, and a nationally recognized
children‘s program. For more information, call 1-800-ski-green. That‘s 1-800-skigreen.
Wintergreen and Virginia … the perfect combination!”-
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Nice Job! #2 is your most engaging read. I don’t know who you were picturing, but it worked!
If you wanted to further work on the piece I’d dissect it a bit looking for the transition points in the script.
The first line stands alone. Nicely done.
Then, beginning at the second, you get into the big enticing reason to go there, so I’d milk it a bit. It *is* the finest!
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Hi,
Interesting practice exercise. I tried listening to just the first line in each recording to see if I could guess the imagined listener and here’s what I came up with: 1) romantic partner 2) casual friend or young person 3) older adult. So, not sure it matters that I guessed right but good that I hear clear differences. I really enjoyed moments from each take and think that smile in your voice is especially engaging. Thanks for sharing. Bill A.
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Hi everyone! I’m also warming up for the demo, and greatly appreciate the feedback on these short commercial scripts. Thank you!
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Hi Tori
I like your voice and I suggest that a little more energy throughout, choosing some key words for a little more emphasis and sharpening some selected pronunciations would help both scripts. I’ll limit this just to Aruba.Aruba – the first two words sounded a little slurred. I didn’t hear the “t” in “It” and the second syllable in “tropical” was almost inaudible. The list in 0:06 – 0.12 contain a few words that would paint a more attractive picture if they were emphasized, e.g., everything, romantic, exciting adventures, whole family. I also think “you have found it“ needs to stand out more because I think this is the heart of the message and the answer to the big question “If you are looking for ……”. Lastly, at the end, I heard “you will love whaa Aruba offers”; the hard consonant “t” went missing.
Just some minor, easy to fix tweaks. Keep up the good work.
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