[David Goldberg]

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[tomnunes]

Hello, Edge Community. I am looking for feedback on my read for this script. Feedback on both technique and audio are welcome. Thank you for your time.

Spec: A friendly “handyman” describes how to install the Fenix Easy Open Gate Latch to a DIY consumer. Knowledgeable, trusted, warm, patient, but not folksy. An authoritative step-by-step explanation.

Script: In this video, we’ll show you how to install the Fenix Easy Open Gate Latch. The Fenix Easy Open Gate Latch functions as both a handle and a latch for wood, vinyl or metal gates. After this simple installation, your Fenix Easy Open Gate Latch will provide one-handed operation from either side of your gate with a simple push or pull.
To install your Fenix Easy Open Gate latch, you’ll need a drill with an eighth-inch bit, a screwdriver or power driver, a tape measure, and a pencil. The latch requires a gap of at least 5/8 of an inch between the post and the gate.

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[PrettyLoud]

Everything I’ve heard from your postings from today sounds great. You have a fantastic voice, great pacing, good articulation. You’ve essentially got explainers in the bag–congrats!! Can’t wait to hear you on commercial copy!! Your lead-in for the Hybrid explainer, with all that smile and ease, will be your golden ticket to selling stuff in commercial copy. Looking forward to hearing more of you.

[tomnunes]

Thank you so much for these kind and encouraging words! I’ll definitely post some commercials in the future. Take care!

[Mitch_Crawford]

Great read Tom! I agree with Steve on the 5/8s. What I love the most is how you tackle that list! (:27) Your pauses are perfect, and the subtle shift in tone is outstanding! I really have to work at lists, but you have them spot on. Love this read!

[tomnunes]

Thanks, Mitch. Yeah, lists are tricky. I imagined the video might be showing the item one at a time, so the pauses made sense. Other lists are hard not to make them sound like a Powerpoint slide. :). And good catch on the 5/8’s as well. Thanks, again.

[Elvie]

Nice job Tom! You sure sound friendly, warm and trust worthy handyman. So clear, great recording.

[tomnunes]

Thank you 🙂

[solin232]

Hi tomnunes, You have a very comfortable voice, I thought this read was right on the money! I think you followed all the directions in the specs and everything was nice and clear.
The only thing I myself would change is “5/8 of an inch” to “5/8’s (plural) of an inch”.
I really enjoyed listening !
Steve

[tomnunes]

Great catch on the 5/8’s, Steve. Thanks for the kind words.

[mkell755]

Hi Tom, great work! Very helpful feel to this one. Sounds warm and patient and not folksy or patronizing – well done!

Mary

[SuperLuke]

Fantastic performance for a “how to” recording. Great recording quality

[tomnunes]

Thank you, SuperLuke!

[Azalealearning]

Hello Edge VO Community! I am participating in a Scripts and Cold Reads workshop and my homework is to get feedback on the script below. Your honest opinion, tips, criticisms are welcome. 🙂

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[Elvie]

Hi, The volume on the first one is lower than the second. You sound friendly and your pace is good. I like the second one, maybe because I can hear it better. Great job on both!

[SuperLuke]

Good job slating, and recording quality, thanks for doing your performance twice, couldn’t hear it the first time. Good performance as a cold read.

[mkell755]

Hi Kristen, really good work! You sounded really friendly and approachable. I like the smile and attitude in your voice in the first read – nice! Good pacing and energy for all of them.

I agree, the volume on the first one was low, and the other two had good (higher) volumes. Very nice work, keep it up!

Mary

[Msbvoice]

Nice, very nice. Makes me lean in and want to listen more. Smooth, sweet and smart sound. The volume was low on the first one though. I love how each person I am listening to has such a different and strong voice.

[badams13]

Hello everyone, these are my Submissions for a HW assignment for a Self Direction and Cold Read class. Your input and honest critique is greatly appreciated. These scripts were all gathered from the VO Library.

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[Elvie]

Hello, My favorite was the haunting. You took it way down at slower pace and your read was good. For the Sandals I felt it too rush, maybe work on pacing. The JCPenny script did not seem like regular JCPenny script. Did you write it? the lottery was good, liked your energy. Overall great work!

[Msbvoice]

It does seem like the room sound/noise is an issue. Maybe room echo? I use my clothes closet with sound panels on the bare walls and a cargo blankets on the open areas. There are many different options on studio set ups. Depends on money. Again, I use my clothes closet. It works for me. And I use Audacity with the many plug-ins to clean the recording up. But I have been told that Adobe Audition is better although I have not looked into that yet. Voice is great though and engaging.

[Azalealearning]

Hi! I am in the workshop as well and thought I would provide some feedback. I listened to the JCPenny read. It sounds like you were more casual and comfortable toward the end of the read. Your energy was higher and there was more variation in your voice. Excited even! If you start with that same energy, this would make me want to go to the sale as a listener. Great work!

[badams13]

I need to work more with my home studio as I know there are some abrupt cut off spots

[Msbvoice]

Better late than never. This is for the Self Direction and Cold Read class. Let me know what you think if you can. Thanks, Mark

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[HollyBlythe]

Hi Mark. I’m in this class too. I liked your pacing and timbre in all of these. Don’t rush the company name “Jack in the Box.” Hearing an “um or “mm” just before “Jack.”

“Has Been Toys” is read loudly and clearly!

[SuperLuke]

I really enjoyed all of your performances Mark. The music and sound effects were nice too. You did a great job pacing yourself and being the characters in each recording, staying in the moment.

[Azalealearning]

Hi Mark! Fellow workshop attendee here… I listened to all three of your reads and I must say your voice has great range. I especially thought the third read for the toy was the best. If i were listening on the radio without seeing what you were selling, i would want to look it up when i got home especially if i were a kid. Great work! The only feedback I would give would be on the background music. It’s a nice touch but i had a hard time hearing you over some parts of it. Best, Kristen

[badams13]

All of these are great and I’m loving the music/ sound effects incorporated as well. #1 really made me want to go to Jack N The Box
On the second one, I personally would’ve went more down on my voice in the “I would take them there” Kind of like real evil/ menacing but the way you went was good as well. They all are really good

[Mdmcghee34]

Hello Everyone! Hope you all had a pleasant weekend. I uploaded two narration scripts. I would greatly appreciate any feedback! Have a great day.

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[Mdmcghee34]

Thank you both for your feedback!

[SuperLuke]

Nice voice for the read. However, the volume level is a problem, I could barely hear you in your performance.

[Msbvoice]

Volume was off a bit. But the read sounded nice, especially the second one. Smooth voice,nice.

[nperna451]

My homework for my narration coaching session. Any thoughts or comments?

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[Mdmcghee34]

Flam-Rudiements review:
I learned something new it makes me interested in learning more about drum play. Informative, smooth and good energy. I thought it had good pacing. One thing I noticed is towards the final seconds ‘try…in your free improvisation’ It’s a little choppy. Overall well done.

[nperna451]

thanks so much!

[DAYLIGHTVO]

Hello everyone! I’ve uploaded two spots here, one of which I created the original copy. It was really interesting to begin placing technique and body motion into the read in order to get an authentic recording. Let me know what you think, am I on the right track?

Thank you
-Ndehru

Words. They can do anything.

1 Words. They can do anything. They can call in a dog at night. They
2 can bring comfort to an old friend. They can say happy birthday to a
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5 kidnapped for standing up to Government corruption. Or the
6 journalist sentenced to 10 years in prison for sending an email. Or
7 the thousands of men and women who are arrested and tortured
8 just for demanding fair election. Now we need your words, to
9 demand justice; to take a stand. To offer hope, to people around the
10 world, who are silenced for simply speaking their minds. Write a
11 letter or speak out today. Your words can lead to their freedom.
12 Words. They can do anything.

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[DAYLIGHTVO]

Re-Uploaded these spots here.

[jonathan.anderson]

Hi Ndehru,

Please make sure that you are uploading mp3s. Our website doesn’t like any other file type.

Best,
Jonathan

[Msbvoice]

I’m not seeing the audio anywhere?

[RYoung]

I’m gonna regret this, But here it is Bil-bo!

Disney character intro
Howdy folks, I’m Ray the firefly, how y’all doing. Don’t make me light my b**t now! Now folks, I’d like to introduce you to my beautiful wife, there she is the most beautiful firefly of all, Evangeline. Look how she lights up the sky. Hey there Ray, mind if I but in for a minute to say hi? Don’t see why not, everyone else is going to in a couple of seconds. Hi everyone, hi there poo boy, was going to give my introduction, how are you anyway? I’m good I wish I had some honey, don’t look now but here comes eeore. Hi every body, Eeore, why the long face there buddy? I lost my tail again. I’ll help you find it this time but don’t try to loose it again would ya buddy. Hi everyone, oh look it’s Mickey, how are you Mickey? I’m fine, how are you I’m good, say uhhh where’s Minnie? She is is right here, hi everyone, hiya Minnie great to see ya , oh me too. Looks like this is going to be a luvy dovey fest, so folks let’s get this how on the road.

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[Bil-Bo]

Hey Rich
Ya gotta stretch every once in a while! I liked it. You do a great Mickey & Minnie! That was a lotta different voices under one roof. If I tried it, would probably take me a month to do each voice and another month to put ’em all together. Good work as always!
BillH

[Mdmcghee34]

That was fun! Nice job switching between characters. I could hear the distinctions clearly. script is engaging and interesting to hear what happens next. Pacing is good and giving you time to hear each character introducing themselves.

[Robert Broussard]

I put together a new script as possible on my Demo. Any feedback will be appreciated. Thanks

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[badams13]

This was a great read. Very welcoming and demo worthy

[Robert Broussard]

Thanks, I appreciate the feedback.

[nperna451]

Sounded very friendly and it was very well paced! Good job!

[Msbvoice]

I agree. Would be good for the demo. Nice voice and read.

[S3VO]

Hi Robert, your client would love you because that was a fun, folksy read…and I actually remembered the product you were ‘selling’ because of it!

[Robert Broussard]

I appreciate the feedback. I like Budweiser. I worked my way through college at a Budweiser Distributorship.

[mkell755]

Hi Robert, good read! I think this would be great for your demo – it was very conversational and authentic, and laid back. Good job!

Mary

[Robert Broussard]

Thanks Mary, I should be getting close to do a demo.

[Robert Broussard]

Attached is my first read in a while. I appreciate any feedback or suggestions. Thanks

Franklin Disability
You grow up looking to your parents as your providers and protectors. Then one day, sometimes quite suddenly, the shoe’s on the other foot. As you yourself grow older, how can you be assured that you won’t be forced to depend on your own children for your care and security? It’s simple. We’re the Franklin Disability Insurance Company. We’re continually looking toward the future, so you’ll be prepared when it gets here. For more information, contact your broker. Here’s to a long life.

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[D M Ulmer]

Hi Robert,
very relaxed. Sound as if you could be one of my neighbors inviting us over. Good pacing. And I could tell you the product and company.

Dawn

[Robert Broussard]

Thanks Dawn, appreciate it.

[Msbvoice]

Again, great voice. I agree there are a few spots with pacing like between disability…insurance. And I think it is called “up-speak”. I tend to do this on some reads. Where you say “older, children, care and security” it sounds like it should vary more up and down? But I love the voice, I agree with the Tom Bodett comparison.

[Robert Broussard]

Thanks for the feedback, I appreciate it.

[touzet]

You have like a signature Motel 6 (We’ll leave the light on for you) kind of voice. Very nice tone. For me, there are some flow issues. One at “…own children….for your care..” , also “…Disability….Insurance Company..”, and “…prepared….when it gets here.” IMHO, those lines should flow more straight through. You might want to shoot for making “We’re” sound more like weer instead of were. Nice work.
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[Robert Broussard]

I appreciate your advice, thanks!!

[mkell755]

Hi Robert, really good job on this one! Excellent production too. The tone and pacing were spot on – really good work here, not much that I can think of to critique!

Mary

[Robert Broussard]

Thanks Mary, I have been out of the loop on my day job for a while. Just started up again today. Appreciate it.

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