[David Goldberg]

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[Jeff Guerrette]

Hello, My name is Jeff, I attached a couple of scrips I recorded for homework. Look forward to your feedback.

Thanks.

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[eglover177]

I think you sound great i heard i flaw the way you pronounced Wall it sounded like war

[NoreenQuadir]

These sound great. I would add more energy towards the end especially with the call to action.

[JasonCawley]

Hey looking for some feedback. Thank you guys.

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[ritadebur]

I liked the pace and clarity of the words. Very natural- the only thing I thought was the word ‘however’ was a little rushed without enough of a pause.

[NoreenQuadir]

This is great – clear and easy to follow/understand!

[jay.triggs]

Good Evening everyone, I wanted to get some feedback on a recording I did this week for Narration. Thanks in advance.

Cheers!

As the tide covers the dock with just an inch or two of water these Tiger Sharks are making their move. Nurse sharks can sometimes propel themselves onto docks when going after scraps of fish. It’s a learned behavior, and evidence that sharks may come on land to feed. Is that also what these sharks are attempting to do?

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[JasonCawley]

Hello Jay,

Good stuff, I would just try to get a little more variance in the pitch to keep it engaging throughout.

[ritadebur]

My first recording – thought id try a meditation one… any feedback would be appreciated! Thank you

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[Tina]

That was great! Good job for your first time. You definitely got the relaxing vibe down and your natural delivery has nice pacing to it. The only thing I noticed was the words “you will” in the sentence “during this breathing medication, you will focus on your breath” sound rushed together so I’d just enunciate that clearer.

[underachiever1221@hotmail.com]

Hey Guys!

Here are the 3 scripts i recorded for homework for my coach. im working on my glottals and trying to use more range in my voice. Feedback is welcomed.

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[RYoung]

Excellent natural style delivery, the Ben and Jerry’s one I would just say to go deeper into the character of the fairy? Nice work and keep it up!

[ritadebur]

Total newbie so not sure how much my opinion counts – but i liked your Ben &B Jerry’s one the best – your voice suited the style and I thought it sounded upbeat, convincing and personal.

[mkell755]

Hello all! I’m looking for any and all feedback here – same script read 2 slightly different ways. Which do you like better and why? Thanks!

Mary

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[Robert Broussard]

Good job Mary on both, but I like #2 better.

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback Robert! Appreciate it.

Mary

[irvj]

Both were good reads but I prefer #2 as it sounded a bit more natural and conversational.

[John Trape]

Hi Mary,

I thoroughly enjoyed listening to both readings, but I felt that the second reading was the one that seemed the more natural, the more convincing. It was almost as if you were addressing an audience that you could actually see. Sounds a little bizarre, I am sure, but it seemed that there was more of a connection between you and an audience in your second reading and that that translated into a more natural flow, with emphasis falling where your instincts told you, and suggestion of a script in your hands pushed to one side.

Thank you for sharing.

John

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback John! I tried this one many times before picking the top two. Super short script but so many ways to read it. Trying to find the line of appropriate energy, enthusiasm and naturalness for this type of script without being too over the top. Thanks again!

mary

[Dante M.]

Good evening everyone, I have three more scripts that I’m interested in sharing! As always, I appreciate extreme criticism!

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[Robert Broussard]

Good job Dante, I agree 1 & 3 were more natural. Good voice on all.

[irvj]

1 & 3 you had more fun with whereas 2 was stiff and slightly choppy. It sounded as if you were reading. But you’re on the right track. Keep it up!

[mkell755]

Hi Dante, very nice! I really like your nice deep voice and warm delivery – great clarity and pacing. I like scripts 1 and 3 best for you. The second script felt more like you were reading to me, not sure why that was exactly, maybe just more emphasized enunciation than the other two? The other two sounded more natural and with good inflection levels. Keep up the good work!

Mary

[RYoung]

I believe the volume was loud on my end in listening to your recording. You can always normalize down to correct that unless you were redlining when recording. Otherwise your delivery is great, I would just back off on the mic slightly to avoid too many mouth noises, unless that was the volume issue? Ancient mysteries was a little too stiff, so relax maybe and try a more conversational delivery? Hope that helps and good luck!

[Dante M.]

I’m not sure why I’m unable to edit my post, but I just wanted to say that my audio files were louder, but for some reason they uploaded rather quietly.

[RYoung]

All comments most welcome!
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[Dante M.]

You have a wonderful voice for this type of script. I would just slow it down slightly and obey the ellipses more , as that would further increase the synergy you have with the read. You highlighted the words appropriately.

[Tina]

Great read and nice pacing. The only suggestion I have is going down in pitch on the word factory. Right now it goes up and I think you want it more of a statement.

[Robert Broussard]

Good read, good pacing and tone!

[Tina]

Hey all! Bumping my read from March 8th to see if I can get some critique on it! It’s a little further down the page. Thanks so much! Really enjoy listening to you all.
Tina

[Bil-Bo]

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[irvj]

Good read, great tone and pacing and your voice is just right for this copy. I’m probably just nitpicking here but in your 2nd line, maybe shorten the pauses between, maintained, fixed or replaced, so that it flows a little more smoothly. And maybe add a little more weight to “million” in your fourth line. Nice job!

[Dante M.]

Wonderful voice for the read, nice and tough but highlights the good stuff.

[Tina]

Nice read! I like the added music. If I’m being nitpicky I’d say the second sentence, “fixed or replaced” sounds like an afterthought because it sounds like you are ending the sentence on maintained and not listing 3 things. Otherwise, great read!

[RYoung]

Bill, sounds great with a smooth heartfelt endorsement, I like it!
Rich

[Bil-Bo]

Hey Rich
Thanks for listening & commenting. Your Chevy Silverado Trail Boss sounded good.
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