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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hey everybody! I’m new here; just started my VO Commercial training and am recording from my home studio. I would love to hear your feedback on the quality of both the read and the audio. Let me know what you think, thanks! (Accidentally uploaded the same audio file twice, sorry!)
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Great work Sarah!
I agree with Monibr16 that I do hear some echo in the room, but your mic sounds awesome with your voice! I would also recommend slowing down just a bit. It feels as if you were rushing a bit during the last third of the read. Best of luck to you on your journey!
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great emotion and smile through the read. I would suggest elongating some main words and taking a few structured pauses. keep up the good work
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Working on some more assorted copy! Any comments are appreciated, especially those focused on performance. Thanks!
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great read and articulation with great mini pauses and pitch variation. I would suggest something that I struggle with right now is more of an emotional connection to the text. Pretending you are very interested in the material and what are the stakes of you delivering this information to someone? WHY do they need to know this? Keep it up!
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Would love feedback on my read, my character and connection to script. Thanks all!
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You’ve got really solid voice work, your annunciation is crisp and you really take care with each word. You provide a good pitch range which gives it variance, but I think its missing an emotional range. I would read that first line a little more conversational, it came off a little robotic for what looks like the read trying to “level with” its audience.
also upon a second listen, “Workflows” sounded off but otherwise your annunciation is quite good.
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In this training, we’ll explore our Crisis Management program, its structure, and how it works to protect Synopsys by effectively identifying and responding to incidents that pose a threat.Let’s start by taking a closer look at Crisis Management.
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What a great voice. It commands your attention. Overall, a very nice read. Clear delivery with a good pace. A couple of items you could work on. The first first word was rushed. Almost sounded “n’THIS training.” Give more emphasis/time to “In”. In “how it works to protect Synopsys”, I would make “protect” the important word. Nice work!
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Hello All:
Here is a little vignette on Ellis Island. Please provide feedback on all aspects of this attempt. Thanks!!! Scott
Ellis Island may not appear large on a map, but it is an unparalleled destination in United States history.
From 1892 to 1954, over twelve million immigrants entered the United States through this portal ; a small island in New York Harbor. Ellis Island is located in the upper bay, just off the New Jersey coast, within the shadow of the Statue of Liberty. Through the years, this gateway to the new world was enlarged from its original 3.3 acres to 27.5 acres by landfill –supposedly obtained from the ballast of ships, excess earth from the construction of the New York City subway system and elsewhere. Ellis Island is now a poetic symbol of the American Dream.-
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I really enjoy the tone of your voice. That being said, I think that it was a nice read, but be careful of those plosives. Especially whenever you make a ‘p’ sound. A pop screen on your mic will do wonders for that! Also, really work on enunciating every word like ‘New Jersey.’ Great work!!
Aylin
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Hi, Scott. I love the storytelling quality of your voice. A wise, kind, and avuncular sound. Perfect for these kind of narrations. Some comments on the read. I think you can slow down the first line. It felt very rushed. Take your time. You’re introducing us to the story with this interesting contrast. There’s quite a bit of up-speak on “landfill”. Like you were reading live for the first time and you were shocked by the word. I believe the phrasing should be thought of as: “Ellis Island was enlarged by landfill, excess earth from construction of the New York City subway system, and elsewhere.” with “supposedly obtained from the ballast of ships” as an aside. Thanks for sharing
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I’ve mainly done commercial scripts, but I also want to work on Narration. What do you think? Did I come off as serious and fascinated? Is my recording setup still working well?
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Welcome to the planet earth. A place of blue nitrogen skies, oceans of liquid water, cool forests, soft meadows; A world positively rippling with life. From the cosmic perspective, it is, for the moment, unique. The only world on which we know with certainty that the matter of the cosmos has become alive, and aware. There must be many such worlds scattered through space, but our search for them begins here, with the accumulated wisdom of the men and women of our species, acquired at great cost, over a million years.-
It’s a good start, especially with your choice of emphasized words, but I think you could benefit from two things- having a more conversational tone/pacing to the read and also tapping more into the emotional message of the copy. Even though we are familiar with all of the things in the script, staying true to the awe and reverence that the only planet that supports life inspires will help charge the script and make the entire read stronger as a whole (and keep the audience glued to the documentary they are watching)!
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Hey everyone, I recorded another commercial script. How do I sound? Any feedback is appreciated.
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Practicing scripts from the script library. Thanks for any feedback!
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Really great work Tina, I love your voice and enthusiasm. One thing I noticed is that you go down in pitch after most words. Though this is necessary, I would recommend maintaining the same pitch, or even a bit higher at the end of important words or phrases. I don’t mean uptalk that you hear on reality TV, just very slight. Keep at it, cant wait to hear you on air.
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Nice to meet you Tina. I think you have a very satisfying voice and your inflections were well placed. However, I think in all three of these scripts you come off as more of an announcer and that is generally not adviseable in voice acting. You need to sound like you’re talking directly to the listener, as if in conversation. Also, I hear a whole lot of breathing. When editing your recording, you should do whatever you can to eliminate superfluous noises so it’s mainly your voice that people are hearing. I hope this helps.
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Here’s something a little different than normal for me. Thanks for any feedback. Don’t laugh too hard. lol
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Hello, everyone! Hoping to get some feedback on this documentary script read for my narration demo. Thanks!
In 1980, the most violent eruption in North America in nearly a century wiped out virtually all life for 200 square miles. In recent years, scientists have detected ominous signs Mount Saint Helens is awakening. Their quest to understand one of the most complicated volcanoes in the world is revealing new mysteries deep inside the mountain.
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There are a lot of good things in this read. Great voice, great studio sound, your words are clear and the delivery was smooth with no undue pauses (except maybe before “deep inside the mountain”) As for you tone, you certainly sounded interested to me. I think what you need to work toward how to make you choices (word emphasis, etc) sound more organic, natural. It’s at risk of coming across forced and artificial. I’m not an expert in documentary, but I just happened to be listening to a narration by Peter Coyote today. He has a very smooth and even delivery to his narration. It’s a couple of notches above monotone but so engaging and draws you in. I’d checked out some of his narrations. Keep at this until the language and way of speaking feels second nature to you. If you love the genre, I think you can be great at this.
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Nice work, and to your point tom I agree that he could choose which words to emphasize, and which to plow through. keep up the good work!
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Hi Jas: I did not hear what Tim did relative to the tone. I liked the pace and overall delivery. I got your enthusiasm/passion for the topic and you had the right level of sincerity. This would be a good area for you.
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Well, I really like the words you hit and your tempo is very fitting for a narration script. I think your voice would be a good fit for a nature documentary, but I don’t really enjoy the tone you used. You sound kind of sarcastic, condescending, or even uninterested in what your explaining. If you’re not interested in the subject, I’m sure listeners wouldn’t be either. On another note, your recording setup is good and I think you’re on the right track for preparing your demo.
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