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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hello Everyone, can I get some real candid critique of my narrations, As many critiques as possible. This will be greatly appreciated.
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Good Afternoon Keith!
I’d just like to start with I love your voice! It is very smooth and pleasant to listen to!
I’d say that it feels like there are some unnecessary pauses, such as “because…it’s not only about studying”. Pauses to me are used to emphasize the information you want the audience to remember, such as slowing down with X*X. However, with the sentence I highlighted, I only remember the “because” more than the slogan because the slow down puts emphasis on that.
Great job overall!
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Hey Keith, love this recording. Very smooth and alluring read. The only thing I would say is that at the ends of phrases some words are held out in a way that make it a little “too” alluring. What I mean by this is that at these moments the quality of your voice is more about how you sound rather than what you’re saying.
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Hi everyone!
I’m looking for some feedback on two recent brief recordings (the one on digital retail is a redo of a previous post). Thanks in advance for your time and your comments.-
Hey Tracy, Love these recordings. I would say the tone is right for the reads but you can lean significantly more into it. For example, in baking let yourself smile or even laugh a little. The script literally says “psychological benefits” so what would those psychological benefits genuinely feel like? Beyond that pace and diction was great and super easy to listen to.
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Hello, I listened to both your reads, the diction is great, but it doesn’t have the conversational tone to it. they both sound as if you are reading.
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Hi Forum! I’m doing some practice copy and I’d be glad for feedback on this commercial read. I don’t have a home setup yet, so I’m looking more for input on the performance than on the technical aspects of the recording. Thanks in advance!
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Hey there –
I am legit going to try to make these pops 🙂 Thanks. I liked your read and would suggest that you slow down just a tad to make it more conversational. I would also look to make more conversational sounding pauses. For example, after the intro question, there is no pause; it sounds like you go straight into the following sentence. There is also an unnatural sounding pause between “recipe” and “made”. And then you go straight from “cookies” into “these” where a pause may be a bit more conversational. I liked your tone and levity and thought the intro and closing were strong. FWIW I’ve been told to pretend that I’m talking to an old friend – and I even start my recordings with, “Well you know (name of person)” before I start to tape and then delete that initial part out of the recording.
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Hello Edge Studio community! I am making a video game demo and would love some feedback on this recording! Thanks in advance!
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Hi Toria, I’m curious what it would do to try really trying to impact / change the person you’re speaking to with your words. Is it possible to do that without losing your high status? Right now I think that this queen doesn’t seem to really care if the person listening heeds her warning, and I think it could help energize the text and raise the stakes if it did matter to her a bit more.
Also, this is a little thing, but I think it might sound higher status to say ‘ON-clave’ rather than ‘EN-clave’.
I hope some of this is useful!
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a couple more practice recordings – working more on the “who” in these since they aren’t quite worded like I’d have a conversation with someone. I know the “p’s” are popping a bit. Will have to come up with a solution for that. Thanks for your feedback!
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Your diction is impeccable and your tone is absolutely lovely. I’ll give the note as it was given to me, find your emotional connection to each bit of text, really visualize who you are talking to about it, and live in it. You find that natural pace at the end of Pilsbury with “let the baking begin!” I would personally love to hear the Aspen piece again. Your sincerity and timbre is suited for it but I want to hear you visualize what you’re selling.
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Taking a stab at something more character focused. Done on voice memo on iphone, so not looking for technical notes at this time. Thank you in advance!
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Hi Shelly, Wow! Very impressed by your readings and voice variety. I found Villain and Fairy believable in your characters. I felt the “realness” in the beginning of Heartache but after the emotional start it felt more “read” the 2nd half. Tollbooth was fun and I like the character voice you chose for the little man and the difference between the two voices. Enjoyed listening!
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You have such a naturally bright and playful tone to your voice. This suits really well for the facetious nature of the Durex ad and and child energy of the sesame street ad. I’d recommend playing with as many extremes as you can to match the stark variety of pieces you’ve chosen. Whatever tone you think appropriate for the text, go to whatever is the highest extreme of that and then dial yourself back bit by bit but you may find your perfect read is in that hyperbolized play. On a more technical note, the energy and enthusiasm you bring to each piece is engaging, so definitely keep that and apply as appropriate, but sometimes can sound choppy and like you are reading. And even more technical, I noticed dropping of some of your t sounds at the end of words (maybe a regionalism, but I noticed it specifically in the “vacation” read with the word “out”)
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Hi all! Looking for some feedback on a few reads. I recorded on my phone so ignore the audio quality. Thanks in advance!
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Hi Looking for some feedback. Recordings were done on my phone at home so I’m more interested in creative vs technical feedback. I did three voices, Science, Meditation and Kids educational. I sincerely appreciate any notes 🙂
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Hi Georgia! These were fun reads and I enjoyed the variety.
Science: Your first word got kinda scrambled so make sure to start strong right off the bat. Be mindful of articulating since the words are so tricky.
Meditation: I liked your tone for this one! However, as I was imagining following along, you seemed to be slightly too fast.
I liked your kids read as well–Your voice was warm and cheery. However, Some parts seemed a bit choppy with unnecessary micropauses.
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