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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hi Everyone! I’d love any non-technical feedback on these submissions, particularly on my diction, pacing, and, conversational tone. Thanks so much for your time!
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Hi, Danielle. Your diction, pace, and conversational tone were very good. Both reads sounded and felt very authentic and your voice is very easy to listen to.
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Greetings! Thank you in advance for feedback on these two narration reads. I am working on being conversational so would like feedback on that aspect, as well as pacing and over-emphasis of minor words like “and”.
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Hello everyone…this is my 1st submission to the forum!
Creative feedback only please! No technical feedback please!
How is my diction? How is my pace? Do my reads sound conversational?
Please let me know…thank you!
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Hi Jacqueline!
I listened to both recordings and i think the Toyota recording is spot on for pace and diction. I’m still learning what it means to sound conversational so no notes from me there!
The Revlon recording i do think the pace is a little hurried though the diction is fine. Listening to the two pieces back to back the Revlon piece just doesn’t carry the same energy as the Toyota one– each line drops at the end, if that makes sense? I’d suggest, as they say, having an opinion about the product and see how that informs your delivery!
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Hi Michele!
I just listened to all 3 recordings and i gotta say to my untrained ear they all hinged on perfection! Very hard to come up with any meaningful notes!
What i will say is,having listened to all 3 back to back, the tone strikes me as the same even though the pieces are for 3 different narration styles. It’s especially noticeable in the Hudson Valley piece where it seems like the text depicts the narrator as a proud New Yorker, the tone that was spot on for 4H– and maybe slighty out of place for Manufacturing if I’m really being nitpicky– feels like it’s at odds with the text for Hudsom Valley.
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Hi everyone,
Submitting a narration read for feedback. I think I am guilty of using uptalk in the middle section talking about “kids who are curious enough to question”. I’m not fixing it because I want to confirm that it is indeed uptalk. Trying to learn to “hear” it when I do it.
Thank you 🙂
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Hi All!
Here is my first narration read; Trying to get the hang of it after working on commercial scripts in the past. I’m appreciative of any feedback.(I know I need to better articulate the “P” at the end of “looking up” in the first sentence ;).
Thank you,
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Hi Michele. I love the quality of your voice throughout this read, I find it very exciting, engaging and enticing. I thought your diction and pace were good. One pattern I did notice throughout the read was regarding your phrasing: specifically, your pitch tends to go up at the beginning of your sentences and then down at the end of each sentence in a similar manner, so maybe some variation there would be something to think about. Good job!
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Hi everyone! This is my first submission and I’d some feedback about my pace, as I tend to read a little fast, and if the tone is anywhere in the ballpark! The first one is a biography narration and the second is a commercial. Thank you!
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For the Gertude Bell read, it felt a little too monotoned for me? Intriguing nonetheless! Maybe changing the tone on a few words to bring some spark to it? Especially if it’s about the adventure of someone’s life. The clarity though was fantastic! I hope Steve makes a lot of money on Chownow because I was pretty invested!
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Hi Jenn!
I think your pacing and tone for Chow Now work great for that piece, well done!
As for the Gertrude Bell piece, i think the pacing for its current tone works well, but I think the tone might be more somber than the reading calls for. The text talks about Gertrude’s “passion” and “defiant independence”, and says her life was ultimately a great adventure! I think the tone should reflect more of that vitality that Gertrude’s autobiography is supposed to inspire in its potential readers. -
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Hello everyone, Please listen to a recent audition I did, any feedback would be appreciated, Thanks.
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Hi Chris!
I thought this was a great read and that the tone and pace were great and it sounded conversational! There was just a wee diction issue on “opportunity” where the last few syllables got jumbled.
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Hi there; posting these for feedback before my next class in Narration, from the Edge Narration scripts “Walgreens – New Team Members Voice Over Script” and “Sharks Voice Over Script”.
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Hi Matt!
I think your reads are spot on for pacing and diction, very well done!
With the tiger shark, something about the read made the tone of the piece unclear? I can’t put my finger on it, but listening to it i wasn’t sure how serious the danger was, if that makes any sense.
And the Walgreens piece, tone was perfect! I would say that– if I’m understanding conversationality correctly, that this sounded a bit announcer-y. Like this was a group onboarding rather than a one-on-one conversation.
I hope that’s helpful to you!
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