[David Goldberg]

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[Toque]

Hi all. Computer crashed last week, so waiting ’til the new one comes in next week. Meanwhile, am practicing using the AVR app on my iphone, so please focus feedback on style, approach to script, execution, is this type of script good for me, etc. Thank you! T.

SCRIPT – Staples work life:

Is work really good? Because it kind of looks bad. Good 
doesn’t make you check your personality at the door. 
Good wants you to bring it to work. Good is hustling 
hard. Not because you have to, but because you’re 
happy to.
Start living the good work life. Staples.

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[Jbach]

Toque, this is a great spot for you. Love your vocal quality. You might play around with using more of your lower register in places if it feels natural. I heard hints of it and it might add more variety to the story-telling.

[sarahtranchina]

Hey, Toque! First of all you have an awesome vocal quality. I would maybe play around with pacing. I think your introductory pace on the first two lines was great and added to the comedy of it, but maybe pick up your pace as you go through the reasons why good is good. Not a terrible lot, but just ever so slightly so that we have a beginning thought and an arc that takes you to Staples being the good life. Thanks for sharing!

[Mitch_Crawford]

Great read, Toque! Your voice is ideal for this spot. One thing I noticed that perhaps you could work on is the short, quick breaths I can hear between some words, like before the first word of each of the last four sentences (not including “Staples.”). My favorite part is your tone in the first two sentences–got my attention! Good stuff.

[carynbell]

Hi everyone!

Just some coaching homework practice scripts. Apologize for any background noise. New student. Don’t have my home studio stuff yet. Thanks!!!!

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[ritadebur]

Love your voice Caryn – it’s so soothing! The meditation one was a great choice for your voice with good pacing. For the city one, I felt the pace could be a little faster?

[sarahtranchina]

Hey, Caryn! I agree with Toque, but I know you are working on your home studio set up so that’ll change! I think you are spot on with your voice type and the kind of material/spots it would lend itself to. Bravo!

[Toque]

Great reads Caryn! My main note would be that your recording volume feels a tad low, making it a bit difficult to hear. What I could hear sounded pretty great! Toque

[carynbell]

Hi everyone!

Just some coaching homework practice scripts. Apologize for any background noise. New student. Don’t have my home studio stuff yet. Thanks!!!!

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[ritadebur]

Hi everyone – I have attached some recordings that I did for homework this week (all selected from the script library)…. would appreciate any and all feedback please. I realize my acoustics are not great but hopefully that will be resolved soon.
Thank you
Rita

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[ritadebur]

Thank you all so very much for your feedback and encouragement. I do appreciate it. Yes.. those mouth noises….. ugh.. I do need to work on those…
Mitch – yes – you’re right. I totally mispronounced Haydn..

[sarahtranchina]

Hi Rita! Great work! I agree with Caryn, I do hear some mouth sounds throughout… I have heard that having a slice or two of apple before recording helps with this. I would also work on your peripheral eye scanning ahead, especially with long narration copy. For example there were certain spots where I can hear the end of a sentence coming and the trail off that is associated with that when we read to ourselves, so scanning ahead might help your brain to keep the drive going through the end of sentences. Great work I can’t wait to hear more!

[Mitch_Crawford]

Hi Rita! I love the first and the third readings! Pitch and tone are nicely varied in the first script; I agree that the tempo could be slowed just a bit. I think that you’ll like the third script reading even more when your acoustics are resolved! With regard to the first reading, at 0:15, you mention Joseph Haydn. Perhaps it’s a different pronunciation in England, but I typically hear it pronounced “Hi-din”, as opposed to “Hay-din”. Let me know if I’m mistaken!–I’ll gladly retract! 🙂 Love your voice!

[carynbell]

Hi!

You have such a lovely voice! So lovely in fact that I think if you read the first two scripts you posted a little slower it would sound even richer!

Also, I noticed some “mouth sounds” in the last one. I have the same problem! Maybe some water could help?

Again, beautiful work! Good luck!

[acbattag]

4h chance trying to upload!! Potential demo script! Looking forward to your feedback!

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[Toque]

I like it! My only criticism would be that the first “GNC” at the beginning of the read sounded a bit rushed, which can lead to “What did she say?” My coach has been encouraging me (when the company’s name is, or contains, initials) to be a bit more deliberate in articulating each. Toque

[Andrea]

Hi everyone,

This is my first homework assignment. I would love to hear your feedback on the quality of my read and my neutral English. My studio is not fully set up yet, so the acoustics might not be great. Thanks for your help!

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[JAE Factor]

Hello All,

This is my first assignment upload and editing experience in a while. Please, let me know your thoughts. Thank you!

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[Mitch_Crawford]

Joseph! I love the warmth of your voice!! In the first recording, the pace was good for the first half, but after :18 it seemed just the slightest bit choppy at the pauses. If that is smoothed over a bit, this is an ideal reading. The way the word “software” is spoken at :17 is veritably award-winning. In the second reading, the line “It is…for the moment…unique.” sounds a bit robotic (:17). Feel free to let your smooth voice run through that more naturally. Can’t wait to hear more!

[John Trape]

Good morning, Joseph,

I very much enjoyed listening to your two recordings. I found myself relaxing as you spoke and never felt that I was being rushed. Indeed, your pace, diction, and enunciation, backed up by the warmth in your voice, made the recordings sound natural, sincere, and personal.

Thank you for sharing,

John

[RYoung]

This was an audition I had done recently more like a narration or poem. Thanks for any comments.

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[tori811]

I was able to get a sense of feeling from your tone, great job!

[Mitch_Crawford]

Rich, this is amazing! Your warm, deep, rich tones are outstanding. You have a completely unique voice, but, and I hope this isn’t taken wrong, I was reminded of William Shatner for a very brief moment doing his talk-singing…perhaps it was the accompanying music? Anyway, that is meant to be a compliment. But again, I love this reading!

[Bil-Bo]

Hey Rich
Sounds great! Hope you got the gig!
BillH

[CYeschenko]

Further practice! Any comments are appreciated, especially those focused on performance. Thanks!

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[Mitch_Crawford]

C: Another great read–I love your tone changes throughout, and the way you are able to, kind of…stop a word before starting the next one. Tough to describe, but it’s really cool. If I could do a miniscule nit-pick, at :17 the word “in” disappears too much. Super picky, sorry. Great read!!

[Tommy Fahrner]

Hi all,

I am on a Commercial demo track. Here are my first recordings as homework for my coaching sessions. I don’t have the proper acoustics yet, but will likely it set up next time I post. Thanks in advance for you feedback!

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[RYoung]

In listening to your delivery, not the acoustics, there is a natural quality to your delivery however almost to natural? I would try to connect a bit more to the script to give a more realistic deliver and slow down especially in “Spotify” Thanks for sharing that!

[Tommy Fahrner]

Uploaded a second time as MP3s.

Also added Amstel Light ad:
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[JAE Factor]

Tommy, you truly have the voice for commercials. I really enjoyed your Kraft Mac and Cheese segment; it sounded like an ad kids would latch onto.

That said, I felt like your tempo on the Spotify and Kraft deliveries was a bit fast. I think if you slowed down a bit and connected with the script, these would be even more awesome! Great job overall!

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