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Hi all,
I am on a Commercial demo track. Here are my first recordings as homework for my coaching sessions. I don’t have the proper acoustics yet, but will likely it set up next time I post. Thanks in advance for you feedback!
Spotify
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The Caped Crusader meets the Big Cheese. Evil, cheeseless noodles BEWARE! It’s new DC Super Heroes Macaroni &Cheese in 8 of your favorite Super Hero shapes, smothered in THE CHEESIEST cheesy KRAFT cheese sauce. Wow!Cheers,
Tommy-
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Uploaded a second time as MP3s.
Also added Amstel Light ad:
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Tommy, you truly have the voice for commercials. I really enjoyed your Kraft Mac and Cheese segment; it sounded like an ad kids would latch onto.
That said, I felt like your tempo on the Spotify and Kraft deliveries was a bit fast. I think if you slowed down a bit and connected with the script, these would be even more awesome! Great job overall!
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Hello everyone,
I have these three narration scripts that I have recorded for my forthcoming coaching session and would very much appreciate any and all feedback.
Voice for the City of Toronto
You know that term “We’re all in this together?” Well, it’s true.
While some of us might be working in government and others not, we’re actually all in the same boat. You see, we’re citizens as well.
We all want the same thing. A city that works for everyone. As fast and efficient and as relevant as can be. Thriving, accessible, and inclusive.Recycling
I don’t know about you, but I like our planet a lot! And one of the easiest ways we can help protect the Earth is by recycling. That’s where instead of throwing things like plastic in the trash, you put them in a special bin so they go to a kind of factory to be reused. You’ve probably recycled things like plastic bottles before. There might even be a recycling bin in the room you’re in right now! Recycling is important because it helps keep the Earth clean, especially from trash made of plastic.Official Alaska Vacation Planning Video
This Official Alaska Vacation Planning Video is filled with plenty of breathtaking scenes. But more important, it’s loaded with all the information you need for planning a trip to Alaska. Like when to go, what to wear, and what to see. So if you’ve got Alaska on your mind, you’re going to love this video. Let’s begin with snow sports. This is definitely the place. For cross-country and down-hill skiing. For snowboarding, tobogganing, and even ice fishing.Thank you,
John
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Hi John,
Thanks for uploading these. A few comments, and it’s only my opinion, just a fellow VO student (albeit with acting experience):
Your diction is clear, and I don’t hear any breathing.
No hard P’s or S’s. You know how to record, and you’ve got the right equipment, that can be heard right off the bat. The quality of the recording is top notch.
You have a pleasant, mellifluous voice.In each of the samples, I would give it more energy and more interest. Some strategic pauses might help, but ask your coach. Mine said that a commercial is like a shark – it’s got to keep moving or it will die. But I felt all the pieces were in one continuation, and was lacking some vocal “movement” or something like that.
With Toronto, I missed you feeling like you are encouraging someone to row with you in the boat, or some such. We are a team, we can do it! Something like that.
Recycling: I didn’t quite get that you relate to the planet like it’s a treasured pet, or a best friend. I need to feel that you really like the planet. And heck, so should all of us, right? Consider adding a very slight edge (pardon the pun) to the word “plastic” as if it’s poison. Dont’ go overboard with it, though.
Alaska: I was missing that you are truly awed by these breathtaking scenes. Note that “Alaska on your mind” is a take off on the song “Georgia on My Mind”, it would be nice to hear some sort of vocal hint that it’s similar. I would like to hear the LOVE you have of this really cool video that you are going to show us.
Wishing you success !
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Hello Everyone,
I recorded the Advil script from the Edge Studio Library for practice. Any feedback is welcome! And any tips as well! I admittedly ran out of breath halfway through, but I felt like this was one of my better takes.
Thanks!
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Nice work- there are moments of this that really work, like the way you emphasized “the day after exercise.” For the rest I would keep working to build your breath support and as you continue working on scripts, the flow of your read will get smoother. Something that may help is focusing on a clear image of a person you are relating the info to- that way it will sound more natural/have fewer micropauses and will connect with the audience better as well. Keep it up!
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Would love feedback on my emotional connection to this script. Thanks all!
Script:
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Hi Artyom!
First and I am sure I have said this before, your voice is great. I love the deep resonance that you have. If you were looking for an emotional connection on this- I got bit more of a robotic vibe on the first sentence. I think it is specially when you are saying “page” and reads” that you are really drawing those words out so it feels a bit forced and more robotic. I would recommend trying to smooth that out just a bit. You are extremely clear and appropriately crisp throughout the rest of the read though!
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Hey everybody! I’m new here; just started my VO Commercial training and am recording from my home studio. I would love to hear your feedback on the quality of both the read and the audio. Let me know what you think, thanks! (Accidentally uploaded the same audio file twice, sorry!)
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Great work Sarah!
I agree with Monibr16 that I do hear some echo in the room, but your mic sounds awesome with your voice! I would also recommend slowing down just a bit. It feels as if you were rushing a bit during the last third of the read. Best of luck to you on your journey!
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great emotion and smile through the read. I would suggest elongating some main words and taking a few structured pauses. keep up the good work
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Working on some more assorted copy! Any comments are appreciated, especially those focused on performance. Thanks!
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great read and articulation with great mini pauses and pitch variation. I would suggest something that I struggle with right now is more of an emotional connection to the text. Pretending you are very interested in the material and what are the stakes of you delivering this information to someone? WHY do they need to know this? Keep it up!
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Would love feedback on my read, my character and connection to script. Thanks all!
“Let’s face it. Planning for disruption is the new ‘business as usual’.
And the businesses that will thrive are the ones taking an integrated approach to getting the most value from weather data.
Leading companies are employing advanced analytics and intelligent workflows to better predict how weather will impact their assets, employees and customers.
Industries you might not expect are quickly pivoting from “blaming the weather” to harnessing it.”
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You’ve got really solid voice work, your annunciation is crisp and you really take care with each word. You provide a good pitch range which gives it variance, but I think its missing an emotional range. I would read that first line a little more conversational, it came off a little robotic for what looks like the read trying to “level with” its audience.
also upon a second listen, “Workflows” sounded off but otherwise your annunciation is quite good.
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In this training, we’ll explore our Crisis Management program, its structure, and how it works to protect Synopsys by effectively identifying and responding to incidents that pose a threat.Let’s start by taking a closer look at Crisis Management.
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What a great voice. It commands your attention. Overall, a very nice read. Clear delivery with a good pace. A couple of items you could work on. The first first word was rushed. Almost sounded “n’THIS training.” Give more emphasis/time to “In”. In “how it works to protect Synopsys”, I would make “protect” the important word. Nice work!
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