[David Goldberg]

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[eglover177]

Hello all just recorded a cold read any criticism is appreciated

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[Evalena Taylor]

What a rich, personable sound you have! I thought you started strong with that nice, relatable inflection. The slightly more dramatic changes in pitch after about 0:06 secs makes it feel a little less like a “real” conversation. You could try some visual exercises to really get into where you are, exactly who you’re talking to, and what kind of response you’re trying to get from them. That helps me a LOT. You have a great sound and I hope we continue to hear more from you!

[danielh04]

Hello again!
Here are some reads I’ve done for practice, let me know your feedback, it’s greatly appreciated.

Spotify
Sometimes you don’t quite know what you want. Hip hop or K-pop? Modern country or classic R&B? EDM or Emo? Sometimes you just gotta skip through until you find just what you’re looking for. Right now you’re limited to 6 skips an hour. But with premium you can have as many skips as you want. Want to try it out free for 30 days? Tap the banner to learn more.

Toyota
Rise up and flee your cubicle. Matrix. It was sent here to free you. Adrenaline-charged performance and up to 53 cubic feet for cargo. The freedom to leave it all behind. The freedom to bring it all with. Toyota…Moving forward.

Purina One
Purina One Special Formula For Cats is made with real chicken. Good news for your cat. Great news for your canary. For a complete adult diet for your cat and the real chicken he wants, give him Purina One Special Formula. Your canary will thank you for it. Purina One. Second to none.

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[sarahtranchina]

Hey Daniel! Nice work throughout! I think your voice is so well suited for the Spotify ad! The only thing I would say to play with is to give the listener a different quality when you get to “right now you’re limited to 6 skips an hour” (ie: lame, right?) so that you can then let them know you’ve got the solution with Premium. With Toyota, I would say maybe watch out for annunciation throughout and pacing. It seemed just a tad rushed (might have been in editing, I’ve done that myself plenty of times.) Purina One also great, I would again focus on annunciation and also the pronunciation of canary. Awesome stuff!

[BONKmk]

Hey all, first time uploading here after a session for homework. Any critiques for any of these three narrations would be super appreciated!

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[eglover177]

Great read however, I think you can add some emotion

[BONKmk]

Here they are as MP3s.

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[sarahtranchina]

Hey there! I think these are great, the three scripts you picked have a nice range. You have great tone and quality to your voice. I agree with RYoung, especially in the first clip there’s a bit of a staccato with your phrases. The instructional video is a great fit for you! In the second clip there were some sibilant s’ in the second half of your script… I’m not sure what you had the gain set as, but it might also be mic placement. The third clip was super fun! I’d say you can have even more fun/energy with your delivery on it because of the subject matter. Great work!

[RYoung]

Technically reads are very well done. They are however slightly staccato. I would try to smooth them out slightly to connect the thoughts better, hope that helps and great work on this!

[RYoung]

This is an example of a PSA with some emotion and caring attitude. Any thought are welcome, thanks.

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[Mitch_Crawford]

R: I really like this read. You have great, deep, rich tones in your voice. You also have an accent I can’t place, which is a positive–it’s a universal voice, so an international PSA works well. I love how you say “violence and oppression…their past defined by terror…” Great read. Sorry, can’t find a critique.

[RYoung]

Thanks for listening Mitch.

[mkell755]

Hi everyone! It’s been a bit since I’ve posted. Currently working to get my recording levels right so I can record my first demo. Any and all feedback is welcome. This is one script read 4 ways. Which one do you like or not like? Thank you!!

Mary

International Coffees
As soon as Colette threw the cup she realized her mistake. She could live without Jean Pierre, but that was her last cup of French Vanilla Café. International Coffees

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[sarahtranchina]

Hey Mary! I liked the first read as well. I agree with Robert on the volume level. I would keep the normalization at -3db, but keep playing with the gain mic volume. One other note (probably because the volume was up) but I did also hear some mouth sounds… probably won’t hear it once your levels are set though! Nice job!

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback Sarah! My gain was turned up higher than typical on for these, and in combination with normalization at -3db didn’t quite get it right. Yes I heard the mouth noises too; will work on that as I have not really heard them before the mic was turned up. Thanks for the tips!

Mary

[Andrea]

Hi Mary,

I liked the first read. Maybe you could give equal weight to “last” and “cup” like you did in the other reads.
It didn’t sound too loud to me. On the contrary, I had the impression that the first sentence in #2 and #3 was more silent than the rest.
Nice work!

Andrea

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback Andrea! Good idea about emphasizing last and cup – it’s a short script and that does seem to be one of the main focal points. I do have some work to do on the sounds levels for sure. Thanks again!

Mary

[Robert Broussard]

Mary, That was good, but maybe a little too loud. Are you compressing your voice some?

[mkell755]

Thanks for listening Robert! I am trying to get my levels up to record for the demo without the need to use the Normalization effect, but then I normalized this file after increasing gain and mic volume, up to -3db, so I will try again without Normalizing and see if that makes a difference. I have not used any compression that I am aware of? Thank you!

Mary

[artyom123]

Please comment on my emotional connection to the text.. an area i’m struggling in and would appreciate any advice. Thanks so much community!

Script:
At Company Name, we define our legacy through the impact we make on people’s lives.

We’ve challenged the status quo…
focusing on helping people achieve financial well-being.

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[sarahtranchina]

Hey there! I think you had a lovely emotional connection; you treated it with care and you can hear that. Very trustworthy! Awesome job!

[danielh04]

I agree with RYoung, after the “status quo…” I felt like there was little to no pause when you continued, however you do have a nice calm voice that fits the script to show reliability to the listener.

[RYoung]

I think you were doing well, but the script was short. Try a longer read and improvise to get a realistic style maybe? Another thing is enunciation and listening as you record with headphones, if you are using them try to record without them it helps more with delivery for me. Hope that helps!

[mkell755]

Hi Artyom123, good read! I think it sounded like you were concerned and connected tp the script. I heard “We’re” instead of “We’ve”. Keep up the good work!

Mary

[Andrea]

Hi everyone,

Here’s my post again, with the right file type this time. This is my first homework assignment. I would love to hear your feedback on the quality of my read and my neutral English. My studio is not fully set up yet, so the acoustics might not be great. Thanks for your help!

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[sarahtranchina]

Hey Andrea! I could feel your smile through the read, really lovely! I think you had a nice handle on the language as well, and you made it super exciting to listen to and gave it life! Great job!

[mkell755]

Hi Andrea, very nice! It sounds nice and with good energy and inflection on words throughout, and would be a good read for kids. Good job!

Mary

[Jbach]

Hi. I’d welcome any and all feedback on these two reads please. Thanks!

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[danielh04]

Both good reads, very nice quality, however I didn’t quite hear “experience” as enunciated as it should be. Though I’m aware that there’s quite a long list in the script, you handled it pretty well.

[mkell755]

Hi Jbach, really nice! I really like the warmth and deep tone of your voice. It is very smooth and comforting. Really good clarity and pacing for both scripts, and good emphasis on words throughout both. Very good!

Mary

[sarahtranchina]

Hey everyone! I’d love your feedback on the following take. I had gotten feedback on echo in the last recording I’d posted, still trying to figure out the fix for that. I would also love some tips on p’s and s’s because I can hear that I’m having a plosive issue. Thanks!

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[Mitch_Crawford]

Hi Sarah! Thank you for your great feedback on my recent scripts. I’m still working on ‘talking to a friend’ (as I describe commenting on your comment below), and listening to this read by you really helps. You are totally talking to your roommate/bff, who is probably annoying you with her restless sleeping habits. Excellent read! Plosives? I have my good headphones on, and I thought you were minding your P’s and S’s swimmingly.

[mkell755]

Hi Sarah, very nice! I could hear some plosives but not noticeable enough to point out. Really good tone for the script and very natural sounding. Nice!

Mary

[JAE Factor]

Hi Sarah, I could visualize the commercial as you were delivering the spot; it sounded natural. I did hear the echo you mentioned and I would recommend either trimming it or using a tool to reduce that particular sound – depending on the editing software you’re using.

Otherwise, this was a good delivery, I liked it.

[ritadebur]

Hi Sarah – love your voice too! Your read sounds very professional – the only thing is in the first sentence where you say ‘Up at 2am again?’ – it didn’t really sound like a question. But the rest of it had really good tone and the last statement had a good punch to it .’…fall asleep, STAY asleep!’It really sounded convincing – ie this really does work!
I only heard one plosive on the very last word…

[Mitch_Crawford]

Hey there! I’m looking for feedback on my delivery. I’m still not set up properly with regard to acoustics. These two short bits are for my coaching session this week. Thank you so much in advance–you won’t hurt my feelings.
Script 1: Come to D***y Hands Garden Center for all your gardening needs. We carry hundreds of trees, perennials, garden art, accessories, and more! Visit us at Sycamore Square or on the web at dirtyhandsgardencenter.com. And remember: “Compost, because a rind is a terrible thing to waste.”
Script 2: Wondering if you should get tested for colorectal cancer? Of cancers affecting both men and women, it’s the second leading cancer killer in the US. It doesn’t always cause symptoms, especially early on. So, don’t wait. If you’re 50 or older, it’s time. Go to cdc.gov/cancer/colorectal to find out more about colorectal cancer screening.

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[JAE Factor]

Hey Mitch! I definitely enjoyed your delivery for Script 1. From the beginning I saw a salesperson waving me in with a smile on their face, especially with how you said, “Come to D***y Hands Garden Center…” One thing I would recommend is differentiating your list in the beginning to add some color and draw their interest in. Nevertheless, Script 1 was great!

On Script 2, I could hear you aiming for a sincere tone at 0:13 and I like how you carried that through the thought, creating a sense of urgency.

[Mitch_Crawford]

Thanks Joseph! Love the recommendation to differentiate the list!

[RYoung]

Mitch, first off thanks for the critique on my tomorrow read. I think I edited it out too much with without leaving some thoughtful pauses but anyway to your work! If I were you coach I would say I’d like you to connect more to the script as in telling someone about the garden center and then sarcastically mentioning the compost which is a turn in the script and would help finish it. The cancer read you probably just need to get more sympathetic you’re talking about a deadly cancer and begging someone to get screened for it right? Keep it up and thanks for sharing your work!
Oh and by the way I’ll try to put up something to shoot an example of a PSA the cancer read you did.

[Mitch_Crawford]

R: Connecting to the script is def something my coach is helping me work on–good that you pointed that out! Would love to see the example…I’ll look for it!

[ritadebur]

Hi Mitch – great voice! Love the varied pitch throughout script 1 – but I think the pause was a tad too long between ‘garden art’ and ‘accessories’. Agree with Sarah regarding script 2 – your voice is very suited to this genre. It comes across as trust worthy and persuasive 🙂

[Mitch_Crawford]

Thanks Rita! I’ve been working with lists, so that’s a very helpful comment!

[sarahtranchina]

Hey Mitch! Great work on these! You have a nice energy and tone! I would work on finding personalization in Script 1 when you get to the listing of items so that it remains clear and focused and keeps our attention focused. In Script 2 I like your delivery. I can easily hear you in the PSA space. As another option I would try practicing it as if you were letting your best friend know about screening to see how that would add a different nuance. Pleasure to listen!

[Mitch_Crawford]

Thank you Sarah! Good call on talking to a friend…I actually prefaced it with, “Hey Steve,…” then went into the reading. I find it difficult to tell my good friend about the screening in those words–I’d say it totally differently! 🙂 So that’s my challenge; to adapt in that way, talking to a friend or loved one using somebody else’s words. I’ll keep working on it! Thanks for the thoughts on the list, too; I’ll punch those items out differently. Great feedback.

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