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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hi everyone – I have attached some recordings that I did for homework this week (all selected from the script library)…. would appreciate any and all feedback please. I realize my acoustics are not great but hopefully that will be resolved soon.
Thank you
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Hi Rita! Great work! I agree with Caryn, I do hear some mouth sounds throughout… I have heard that having a slice or two of apple before recording helps with this. I would also work on your peripheral eye scanning ahead, especially with long narration copy. For example there were certain spots where I can hear the end of a sentence coming and the trail off that is associated with that when we read to ourselves, so scanning ahead might help your brain to keep the drive going through the end of sentences. Great work I can’t wait to hear more!
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Hi Rita! I love the first and the third readings! Pitch and tone are nicely varied in the first script; I agree that the tempo could be slowed just a bit. I think that you’ll like the third script reading even more when your acoustics are resolved! With regard to the first reading, at 0:15, you mention Joseph Haydn. Perhaps it’s a different pronunciation in England, but I typically hear it pronounced “Hi-din”, as opposed to “Hay-din”. Let me know if I’m mistaken!–I’ll gladly retract! 🙂 Love your voice!
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Hi everyone,
This is my first homework assignment. I would love to hear your feedback on the quality of my read and my neutral English. My studio is not fully set up yet, so the acoustics might not be great. Thanks for your help!
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Hello All,
This is my first assignment upload and editing experience in a while. Please, let me know your thoughts. Thank you!
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Joseph! I love the warmth of your voice!! In the first recording, the pace was good for the first half, but after :18 it seemed just the slightest bit choppy at the pauses. If that is smoothed over a bit, this is an ideal reading. The way the word “software” is spoken at :17 is veritably award-winning. In the second reading, the line “It is…for the moment…unique.” sounds a bit robotic (:17). Feel free to let your smooth voice run through that more naturally. Can’t wait to hear more!
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Good morning, Joseph,
I very much enjoyed listening to your two recordings. I found myself relaxing as you spoke and never felt that I was being rushed. Indeed, your pace, diction, and enunciation, backed up by the warmth in your voice, made the recordings sound natural, sincere, and personal.
Thank you for sharing,
John
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Rich, this is amazing! Your warm, deep, rich tones are outstanding. You have a completely unique voice, but, and I hope this isn’t taken wrong, I was reminded of William Shatner for a very brief moment doing his talk-singing…perhaps it was the accompanying music? Anyway, that is meant to be a compliment. But again, I love this reading!
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Further practice! Any comments are appreciated, especially those focused on performance. Thanks!
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Hi all,
I am on a Commercial demo track. Here are my first recordings as homework for my coaching sessions. I don’t have the proper acoustics yet, but will likely it set up next time I post. Thanks in advance for you feedback!
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Tommy-
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Uploaded a second time as MP3s.
Also added Amstel Light ad:
Could be the world’s best tasting light beer? Open minds open Amstels. Brewed with all natural ingredients.-
Tommy, you truly have the voice for commercials. I really enjoyed your Kraft Mac and Cheese segment; it sounded like an ad kids would latch onto.
That said, I felt like your tempo on the Spotify and Kraft deliveries was a bit fast. I think if you slowed down a bit and connected with the script, these would be even more awesome! Great job overall!
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Hello everyone,
I have these three narration scripts that I have recorded for my forthcoming coaching session and would very much appreciate any and all feedback.
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We all want the same thing. A city that works for everyone. As fast and efficient and as relevant as can be. Thriving, accessible, and inclusive.Recycling
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John
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Hi John,
Thanks for uploading these. A few comments, and it’s only my opinion, just a fellow VO student (albeit with acting experience):
Your diction is clear, and I don’t hear any breathing.
No hard P’s or S’s. You know how to record, and you’ve got the right equipment, that can be heard right off the bat. The quality of the recording is top notch.
You have a pleasant, mellifluous voice.In each of the samples, I would give it more energy and more interest. Some strategic pauses might help, but ask your coach. Mine said that a commercial is like a shark – it’s got to keep moving or it will die. But I felt all the pieces were in one continuation, and was lacking some vocal “movement” or something like that.
With Toronto, I missed you feeling like you are encouraging someone to row with you in the boat, or some such. We are a team, we can do it! Something like that.
Recycling: I didn’t quite get that you relate to the planet like it’s a treasured pet, or a best friend. I need to feel that you really like the planet. And heck, so should all of us, right? Consider adding a very slight edge (pardon the pun) to the word “plastic” as if it’s poison. Dont’ go overboard with it, though.
Alaska: I was missing that you are truly awed by these breathtaking scenes. Note that “Alaska on your mind” is a take off on the song “Georgia on My Mind”, it would be nice to hear some sort of vocal hint that it’s similar. I would like to hear the LOVE you have of this really cool video that you are going to show us.
Wishing you success !
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Hello Everyone,
I recorded the Advil script from the Edge Studio Library for practice. Any feedback is welcome! And any tips as well! I admittedly ran out of breath halfway through, but I felt like this was one of my better takes.
Thanks!
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Nice work- there are moments of this that really work, like the way you emphasized “the day after exercise.” For the rest I would keep working to build your breath support and as you continue working on scripts, the flow of your read will get smoother. Something that may help is focusing on a clear image of a person you are relating the info to- that way it will sound more natural/have fewer micropauses and will connect with the audience better as well. Keep it up!
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