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  • #15468
    David Goldberg
    Edge Studio Staff

    The Edge Studio Feedback Forum is the best place for you to post a recording and get feedback from the community! Record in your home studio, upload the file, and see what people think. This is a great place to get some advice on your technique, on your home studio, or to ask for people’s opinion on your reads. Remember, that this is a community forum, so please remain positive and encourage your peers in helpful ways. If Edge Studio feels that a user is too negative, or antagonizing other members of the community, they will have their posts deleted, and risk being banned from further communication. 

    Stay positive, listen to each other, and have fun!

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  • #64520
    artyom123
    Participant

    Would love feedback on my emotional connection to this script. Thanks all!

    Script:
    After clicking the button, you will be redirected to a landing page. A pop-up will appear that reads “We are processing your registration and creating your digital experience.”

    A Successful Registration notification will appear. Select Sign In to complete the registration process.

    You will then be directed to the landing page. Select continue.

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    • #64542
      acbattag
      Participant

      Hi Artyom!
      First and I am sure I have said this before, your voice is great. I love the deep resonance that you have. If you were looking for an emotional connection on this- I got bit more of a robotic vibe on the first sentence. I think it is specially when you are saying “page” and reads” that you are really drawing those words out so it feels a bit forced and more robotic. I would recommend trying to smooth that out just a bit. You are extremely clear and appropriately crisp throughout the rest of the read though!

  • #64512
    sarahtranchina
    Participant

    Hey everybody! I’m new here; just started my VO Commercial training and am recording from my home studio. I would love to hear your feedback on the quality of both the read and the audio. Let me know what you think, thanks! (Accidentally uploaded the same audio file twice, sorry!)

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    • #64557
      Shmuel
      Participant

      ohmygawd, gimme some of that almond milk! You can sell snow to an Eskimo!
      I heard the S’s and P’s a bit to much “breathy”.

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      • #64631
        sarahtranchina
        Participant

        Hey Shmuel! Thanks for the feedback! Will definitely pay closer attention to S’s and P’s, I agree with you!

    • #64543
      acbattag
      Participant

      Great work Sarah!

      I agree with Monibr16 that I do hear some echo in the room, but your mic sounds awesome with your voice! I would also recommend slowing down just a bit. It feels as if you were rushing a bit during the last third of the read. Best of luck to you on your journey!

      -Amber

      • #64630
        sarahtranchina
        Participant

        Hey Amber, thanks for the great feedback! I am going to look into the echo, might have to add some more foam. Will also work on slowing down!

    • #64526
      monibr16
      Participant

      Great read! Mic sounds awesome. But I do hear a little echo in some areas. Overall great!

      • #64629
        sarahtranchina
        Participant

        Thanks for the feedback, monibr16. I’ll look into this!

    • #64522
      artyom123
      Participant

      great emotion and smile through the read. I would suggest elongating some main words and taking a few structured pauses. keep up the good work

      • #64626
        sarahtranchina
        Participant

        Thank you, Artyom123! It was my first stab at editing and I agree with you; I took too much space out in post.

  • #64507
    CYeschenko
    Participant

    Working on some more assorted copy! Any comments are appreciated, especially those focused on performance. Thanks!

    Tesla Camera App

    The touchscreen is your control panel for accessing functions, features and apps in your Tesla. The camera allows you to display what the high-definition rear view camera sees at any time when in Reverse. Guidelines appear and move with the steering wheel to show your trajectory. Always be sure to check your surroundings and to use your mirrors. The camera is an aid and should not be relied upon for rear view. If you are in need of additional assistance, you can reach Tesla support at eight-four-four two-four-eight-three-seven-five-two.

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    • #64523
      artyom123
      Participant

      great read and articulation with great mini pauses and pitch variation. I would suggest something that I struggle with right now is more of an emotional connection to the text. Pretending you are very interested in the material and what are the stakes of you delivering this information to someone? WHY do they need to know this? Keep it up!

  • #64487
    artyom123
    Participant

    Would love feedback on my read, my character and connection to script. Thanks all!

    “Let’s face it. Planning for disruption is the new ‘business as usual’.

    And the businesses that will thrive are the ones taking an integrated approach to getting the most value from weather data.

    Leading companies are employing advanced analytics and intelligent workflows to better predict how weather will impact their assets, employees and customers.

    Industries you might not expect are quickly pivoting from “blaming the weather” to harnessing it.”

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    • #64499
      Jim Grant
      Participant

      You’ve got really solid voice work, your annunciation is crisp and you really take care with each word. You provide a good pitch range which gives it variance, but I think its missing an emotional range. I would read that first line a little more conversational, it came off a little robotic for what looks like the read trying to “level with” its audience.

      also upon a second listen, “Workflows” sounded off but otherwise your annunciation is quite good.

  • #64480
    jamcjon
    Participant

    In this training, we’ll explore our Crisis Management program, its structure, and how it works to protect Synopsys by effectively identifying and responding to incidents that pose a threat.Let’s start by taking a closer look at Crisis Management.

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    • #64500
      Jim Grant
      Participant

      great voice, great pause at the end and change of direction into a good call to action. echoing the rushing, use those commas as pauses for mood/tone shifts.

    • #64491
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      That was good but just a little rushed overall.

    • #64484
      tomnunes
      Participant

      What a great voice. It commands your attention. Overall, a very nice read. Clear delivery with a good pace. A couple of items you could work on. The first first word was rushed. Almost sounded “n’THIS training.” Give more emphasis/time to “In”. In “how it works to protect Synopsys”, I would make “protect” the important word. Nice work!

  • #64476
    SacScotty
    Participant

    Hello All:

    Here is a little vignette on Ellis Island. Please provide feedback on all aspects of this attempt. Thanks!!! Scott

    Ellis Island may not appear large on a map, but it is an unparalleled destination in United States history.
    From 1892 to 1954, over twelve million immigrants entered the United States through this portal ; a small island in New York Harbor. Ellis Island is located in the upper bay, just off the New Jersey coast, within the shadow of the Statue of Liberty. Through the years, this gateway to the new world was enlarged from its original 3.3 acres to 27.5 acres by landfill –supposedly obtained from the ballast of ships, excess earth from the construction of the New York City subway system and elsewhere. Ellis Island is now a poetic symbol of the American Dream.

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    • #64502
      aylinsings
      Participant

      Hi –

      I really enjoy the tone of your voice. That being said, I think that it was a nice read, but be careful of those plosives. Especially whenever you make a ‘p’ sound. A pop screen on your mic will do wonders for that! Also, really work on enunciating every word like ‘New Jersey.’ Great work!!

      Aylin

    • #64485
      tomnunes
      Participant

      Hi, Scott. I love the storytelling quality of your voice. A wise, kind, and avuncular sound. Perfect for these kind of narrations. Some comments on the read. I think you can slow down the first line. It felt very rushed. Take your time. You’re introducing us to the story with this interesting contrast. There’s quite a bit of up-speak on “landfill”. Like you were reading live for the first time and you were shocked by the word. I believe the phrasing should be thought of as: “Ellis Island was enlarged by landfill, excess earth from construction of the New York City subway system, and elsewhere.” with “supposedly obtained from the ballast of ships” as an aside. Thanks for sharing

      • #65382
        SacScotty
        Participant

        Hello Tom: Sorry for such a late response. I will not be surprised if you don’t see this. But,I did want to thank you for this feedback. The comments on pace and ‘speak-up’ were insightful and most helpful.

        Kind Regards,
        Scott

  • #64471
    TimDKietzman
    Participant

    I’ve mainly done commercial scripts, but I also want to work on Narration. What do you think? Did I come off as serious and fascinated? Is my recording setup still working well?

    Cosmos
    Welcome to the planet earth. A place of blue nitrogen skies, oceans of liquid water, cool forests, soft meadows; A world positively rippling with life. From the cosmic perspective, it is, for the moment, unique. The only world on which we know with certainty that the matter of the cosmos has become alive, and aware. There must be many such worlds scattered through space, but our search for them begins here, with the accumulated wisdom of the men and women of our species, acquired at great cost, over a million years.

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    • #64505
      CYeschenko
      Participant

      It’s a good start, especially with your choice of emphasized words, but I think you could benefit from two things- having a more conversational tone/pacing to the read and also tapping more into the emotional message of the copy. Even though we are familiar with all of the things in the script, staying true to the awe and reverence that the only planet that supports life inspires will help charge the script and make the entire read stronger as a whole (and keep the audience glued to the documentary they are watching)!

  • #64469
    TimDKietzman
    Participant

    Hey everyone, I recorded another commercial script. How do I sound? Any feedback is appreciated.

    Hurricane Harbor

    Cool off at the # 1 water park in Phoenix
    Wet-N-Wild is now 6 Flags Hurricane Harbor
    Save up to 50% on season passes, but hurry – offer ends June 16th
    Hurricane Harbor. Bigger, Better, wetter than ever!

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    • #64506
      CYeschenko
      Participant

      I agree with the other commenter- you’re so close to nailing it! Dialing in on the excitement and sustaining it through the entire copy will lock it in for you. Nice work!

    • #64503
      aylinsings
      Participant

      Hi Tim-

      Great read through! I think your voice would be great for a commercial like this. My note would be to work on really making the excitement in your voice authentic. You are so close. Just make sure to attach images in your head to the words you’re saying.

      Good Job!

      Aylin

  • #64460
    Tina
    Participant

    Practicing scripts from the script library. Thanks for any feedback!

    Tina

    When you think of Atlanta Bread Company, don’t just think ‘bread’. Think of an entire breakfast menu – fresh-baked pastries, hot breakfast sandwiches and specialty coffees. Think of our Cafe with savory sandwiches, daily soups and crisp salads. And don’t forget…we can cater your next special event or meeting! Atlanta Bread

    Everybody can use a little help when they’re out on the road- and that’s where MailBoxes Etcetera comes in. We get it done, and we get it done right. Mailboxes Etcetera.

    It’s amazing! I never thought one cereal would make my whole family stay for breakfast. HONEY BUNCHES OF OATS. There’s never been a cereal like it. With big corn flakes and crunchy bunches of oats. Finally … a cereal my whole family loves.

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    • #64492
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      Tina, those were really good. Your voice is very easy to listen to. The pace and tone was good a well. 👍

    • #64489
      artyom123
      Participant

      Really great work Tina, I love your voice and enthusiasm. One thing I noticed is that you go down in pitch after most words. Though this is necessary, I would recommend maintaining the same pitch, or even a bit higher at the end of important words or phrases. I don’t mean uptalk that you hear on reality TV, just very slight. Keep at it, cant wait to hear you on air.

    • #64467
      TimDKietzman
      Participant

      Nice to meet you Tina. I think you have a very satisfying voice and your inflections were well placed. However, I think in all three of these scripts you come off as more of an announcer and that is generally not adviseable in voice acting. You need to sound like you’re talking directly to the listener, as if in conversation. Also, I hear a whole lot of breathing. When editing your recording, you should do whatever you can to eliminate superfluous noises so it’s mainly your voice that people are hearing. I hope this helps.

  • #64456
    Robert Broussard
    Participant

    Here’s something a little different than normal for me. Thanks for any feedback. Don’t laugh too hard. lol

    Popeyes fried chicken

    Got a cravin’ for Cajun? Well, cher, I guarantee I know what’ll fix you up, and it’s only at Popeyes. New Orleans style fried chicken, cajun battered fries, and buttermilk biscuits. Love that chicken at Popeye’s.

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