[David Goldberg]

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[burdahgirl]

Thanks for any feedback!

Habitat For Humanity
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Every 7 minutes around the world, Habitat for Humanity serves a family in need of decent housing. Affordable housing solutions might differ from place to place, but to the families who dream of them, help build them and eventually inhabit them, they all add up to just one thing. Home.

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[artyom123]

I agree, very clear articulation and pleasant smooth voice. What this could use more of is a deep emotional connection like your empathizing with someone.

[sarahtranchina]

Hey burdahgirl! You have a nice crisp and clear voice. Your mic sounds great as well. I thought this was really lovely, you emphasized important words that kept us following along, and made smart choices. Awesome!

[eglover177]

Burdahgirl I see your takin this very seriously great sound and clarity

[Robert Broussard]

That was really good. Your voice is very easy to listen to. Tone and pacing were very good. I do agree with MDmcghee about the last part but overall very good read!!

[Mdmcghee34]

very warm and inviting; great tone for this script; I would suggest a little more pausing before saying “they all add up to just one thing. Home.”

[Bil-Bo]

Del Monte

My granddad built this farm way back in the late 1800s. He had a policy of producing only the finest quality fruits and vegetables. That’s why people began to know and enjoy the name Del Monte. … Well, today, the farm is mine — and ya’ know, I still carry on the proud tradition of only the finest fruits and vegetables. DEL MONTE — only the finest.

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[Jorjecat09]

Excellent read! Felt easy going with the right amount of energy without over doing it. Your tone of voice feels like a great big comfortable sweater. Fantastic job!

[sarahtranchina]

Hey Bil-Bo. Well this is just excellent from top to bottom. I also hear the static throughout which is the only thing. Remove that and you’re selling a LOT of Del Monte product 🙂

[Dante M.]

Good read with nice pacing, but more importantly, there’s some fizz going on every time you speak and unfortunately it’s relatively noticeable. Hopefully you can fix that.

[Robert Broussard]

Awesome job Bil-Bo!!

[eglover177]

Bill BO WOW THE 1st three words did it for me….You are definitely valuable Great read

[burdahgirl]

Oh man, it’s so good! I now have an understanding of what my coach is always saying about creating connection – you nailed it!

[Mdmcghee34]

what a great read. cool and relaxing and makes me want to eat some fruits and vegetables. Sound caring and proud to own the Del monte farm. great tone for the script.

[Chad4674]

Hi Bil-BO!
Great read! Very relaxed and tone was consistent throughout the read.

[Jbach]

This one is a political spot. Its not my worldview; just challenging myself. Any feedback would be welcome.

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[Mdmcghee34]

Good read. I suggest maybe a little more passion or energy could be heard for the candidate and for the state Kentucky and to really hit those money words: our Kentucky values….strong…fight..Rand Paul..destroy our liberty…spend too much

[burdahgirl]

Hi Jbach! I think it’s a good read, really clear and good pacing. I would suggest playing around with a little more pitch variance in there to keep it from being too stagnant? I hope that’s helpful!

[sarahtranchina]

Hey everyone! So I have had one of those days where I’ve tried to get some tracks down and everything is just… meh. You know what I mean? But as an exercise I know there will be days when you have to send in copy when you’re just not going to be clicking in like you normally would. So I’d love your feedback as if you DIDN’T know this disclaimer I’ve given you, and would also love to know if you’ve also had days like mine and if you have any great tips and tricks to “snap out of it!” Thanks so much 🙂

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[Jbach]

Great read. Seemed very believable and not overselling it.

[Robert Broussard]

Sarah, your read was good. The pace and tone was good. The energy at the end could have been a little higher, but all in all a good job.

[Robert Broussard]

Any feedback is appreciated. Thanks
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They have starring roles in other trucks’ nightmares. Dodge. Grab life by the horns.

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[Sherry Newell]

Hi everyone!
I’m new to this and working on homework for narration. The first one is talking to kids. I’m still working on getting a studio set up, so this is just recorded on my phone for now. Any and all feedback welcome! Thanks for listening 🙂

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[sarahtranchina]

Hey, Sherry! First of all I think you have a lovely voice; you sound super cheerful and confident. My one note would be that your phrasing had the tendency to be choppy in the first and third clips. Think of/practice with your copy as if you would tell this to a friend or loved one, and how there would be a more fluid line between the beginning and end of a thought or sentence and see how that feels. The second clip about Emilia Earhart I hear far less than the clip about recycling and about adrenaline. Awesome stuff!

[Sherry Newell]

Thank you so much for listening and giving feedback! I will definitely work on it.

[Robert Broussard]

Sherry,
I think you did a good job so far. It sounded good for being on your phone. Keep it up.

[Sherry Newell]

Thanks!

[Rob Morse]

This is a repeat of a script I uploaded and didn’t receive any comments on, which is feedback in itself.
Please let me know if this is better, and what I could do to improve.
Thanks!
Rob

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[sarahtranchina]

Hey, Rob! I thought this was great! Great pacing, tone, and clear to understand. My only note is that you had a down inflection when you mentioned the brand name Waterpick, which didn’t quite give it the oompf that it needed there. Otherwise totally awesome!

[Official81]

Very nice! Clean and clear words, your studio sounds really nice and quiet no echos or reverb. And you did a wonderful job sounding conversational. Nice Job!

[Eliz_10]

Hi,
I’m submitting another holiday “character” demo and asking for comments from the group. This is supposed to be humorous and involves Mrs. Claus talking about Santa and making a request of the children Santa visits.

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[Robert Broussard]

Nice character, Not sure about gluten free cookies or almond milk for me, lol. Over all a good read. The pace and tone may could have varied a little but otherwise good work.

[sarahtranchina]

Great character work! Love the music clips used as well… really nicely edited. My only thought is that the pacing could be a tick faster throughout. Awesome!

[BrianWigginsVO]

Putting the finishing touches on the new booth I’m building (pictures soon!) and did my first sound test this morning with the first page of the next audiobook I’m contracted to narrate. Aside from the plosives and the sound of my phone vibrating, how’s the sound quality of the booth to your ears? (Pretty much ignore everything performance-related, this was just a quick read.)

Thanks!

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[Robert Broussard]

Brian the sound was good, I could not find anything that stood out. The reading was good too!!

[sarahtranchina]

Sounds great, Brian! I don’t hear any issues either.

[Jbach]

I’m not hearing any issues. Sounds good to me.

[Official81]

Congratulations Brian! Your studio sounds great to me! You sound nice and clear, it doesn’t sound like your in an empty room or anything like that! It sounds great!

[Shmuel]

Trying to upload a file so you all can just click on it, just like everyone else. The file format is now MP3, and I added the ul tag:

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[sarahtranchina]

Shmuel this is awesome. Clear recording, you nailed the copy. Fabulous!

[Shmuel]

Thank you, Sarah

[Official81]

You have an amazing voice! Blown away!

[Shmuel]

Thank you

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