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  • #64900
    sarahtranchina
    Participant

    Hey everyone! So I have had one of those days where I’ve tried to get some tracks down and everything is just… meh. You know what I mean? But as an exercise I know there will be days when you have to send in copy when you’re just not going to be clicking in like you normally would. So I’d love your feedback as if you DIDN’T know this disclaimer I’ve given you, and would also love to know if you’ve also had days like mine and if you have any great tips and tricks to “snap out of it!” Thanks so much 🙂

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    • #64910
      Jbach
      Participant

      Great read. Seemed very believable and not overselling it.

    • #64909
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      Sarah, your read was good. The pace and tone was good. The energy at the end could have been a little higher, but all in all a good job.

  • #64893
    Robert Broussard
    Participant

    Any feedback is appreciated. Thanks
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    Two words to other trucks. Nighty, night. For info, visit dodge.com or call 800-4A-DODGE.
    They have starring roles in other trucks’ nightmares. Dodge. Grab life by the horns.

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  • #64871
    Sherry Newell
    Participant

    Hi everyone!
    I’m new to this and working on homework for narration. The first one is talking to kids. I’m still working on getting a studio set up, so this is just recorded on my phone for now. Any and all feedback welcome! Thanks for listening 🙂

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    • #64881
      sarahtranchina
      Participant

      Hey, Sherry! First of all I think you have a lovely voice; you sound super cheerful and confident. My one note would be that your phrasing had the tendency to be choppy in the first and third clips. Think of/practice with your copy as if you would tell this to a friend or loved one, and how there would be a more fluid line between the beginning and end of a thought or sentence and see how that feels. The second clip about Emilia Earhart I hear far less than the clip about recycling and about adrenaline. Awesome stuff!

      • #64905
        Sherry Newell
        Participant

        Thank you so much for listening and giving feedback! I will definitely work on it.

    • #64879
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      Sherry,
      I think you did a good job so far. It sounded good for being on your phone. Keep it up.

  • #64853
    Rob Morse
    Participant

    This is a repeat of a script I uploaded and didn’t receive any comments on, which is feedback in itself.
    Please let me know if this is better, and what I could do to improve.
    Thanks!
    Rob

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    • #64882
      sarahtranchina
      Participant

      Hey, Rob! I thought this was great! Great pacing, tone, and clear to understand. My only note is that you had a down inflection when you mentioned the brand name Waterpick, which didn’t quite give it the oompf that it needed there. Otherwise totally awesome!

    • #64864
      Official81
      Participant

      Very nice! Clean and clear words, your studio sounds really nice and quiet no echos or reverb. And you did a wonderful job sounding conversational. Nice Job!

  • #64850
    Eliz_10
    Participant

    Hi,
    I’m submitting another holiday “character” demo and asking for comments from the group. This is supposed to be humorous and involves Mrs. Claus talking about Santa and making a request of the children Santa visits.

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    • #64895
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      Nice character, Not sure about gluten free cookies or almond milk for me, lol. Over all a good read. The pace and tone may could have varied a little but otherwise good work.

    • #64883
      sarahtranchina
      Participant

      Great character work! Love the music clips used as well… really nicely edited. My only thought is that the pacing could be a tick faster throughout. Awesome!

  • #64841
    BrianWigginsVO
    Participant

    Putting the finishing touches on the new booth I’m building (pictures soon!) and did my first sound test this morning with the first page of the next audiobook I’m contracted to narrate. Aside from the plosives and the sound of my phone vibrating, how’s the sound quality of the booth to your ears? (Pretty much ignore everything performance-related, this was just a quick read.)

    Thanks!

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    • #64897
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      Brian the sound was good, I could not find anything that stood out. The reading was good too!!

    • #64884
      sarahtranchina
      Participant

      Sounds great, Brian! I don’t hear any issues either.

    • #64869
      Jbach
      Participant

      I’m not hearing any issues. Sounds good to me.

    • #64865
      Official81
      Participant

      Congratulations Brian! Your studio sounds great to me! You sound nice and clear, it doesn’t sound like your in an empty room or anything like that! It sounds great!

  • #64835
    Shmuel
    Participant

    Trying to upload a file so you all can just click on it, just like everyone else. The file format is now MP3, and I added the ul tag:

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    • #64886
      sarahtranchina
      Participant

      Shmuel this is awesome. Clear recording, you nailed the copy. Fabulous!

      • #64965
        Shmuel
        Participant

        Thank you, Sarah

    • #64866
      Official81
      Participant

      You have an amazing voice! Blown away!

      • #64966
        Shmuel
        Participant

        Thank you

  • #64833

    This is a Spanish audition. Any feedback is welcome.

    “La unidad de carga principal pesa 160 libras. El instalador debe asegurarse de que la pared y los enchufes puedan soportar ese peso antes de la instalación. Si encuentra que no puede soportar ese peso, el cliente debe considerar comprar un pedestal.

    Para comenzar el montaje en la pared, taladre y golpee cuatro orificios e inserte el tapón o inserto para la fijación en la pared en las posiciones indicadas.”

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    • #64887
      sarahtranchina
      Participant

      I agree with Brian 100%. Fantastic quality recording and though I don’t speak Spanish I followed along with the text you provided and it was perfectly clear with excellent diction and pacing. Well done!

    • #64875
      Jbach
      Participant

      Good tone. It is conversational but also with a touch of authority.

    • #64843
      BrianWigginsVO
      Participant

      I can’t offer any feedback on the delivery in terms of performance (lo siento mucho, no hablo español) but the tone and diction were excellent, and it sounded like it was recorded in a professional space, so for what that’s worth…great job!

  • #64826
    Wes@1972
    Participant

    Hi my name is Wes. It’s my second time on the forum. I’m uploading 3 attachments and hoping to have made some progress since last time here. Thanks for any feedback!

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    • #64908
      RYoung
      Participant

      Hi Wes, sorry but the proximity to the mic is to close like a pa system sitting next to the speakers, ouch! Your voice is resonate and delivery is ok but not much emotion? Hope that helps.

    • #64878
      sarahtranchina
      Participant

      Hey, Wes! Great work! You’re voice does have a lovely, deep and luxurious quality. I agree with Liliana about variety in pitch and you can also use emphasis of important descriptive words to help you with changing levels. Also I didn’t notice in the first two clips as much, but your third clip for Ford I could hear a lot of air and some plosive’s coming over your mic. Might have been that you had adjusted how you were sitting and were a tad closer to the mic than the first two so it was picking up more, or to do with any editing that was done. You’re awesome!

    • #64831

      Hi Wes, Your voice has a lovely deep quality and it is overall pleasant to listen to. In general, I could use a bit more enunciation of the words as well as some variety in pitch within each sentence. Sometimes it feels like it’s all at the same level so by varying the pitch a bit it would make the reads more engaging.

      • #64870
        Wes@1972
        Participant

        Thank you for the feedback Liliana! That is something my coach has said, and I’ll continue to work on it!

  • #64825
    Eliz_10
    Participant

    Hi Danvasq4030,
    I have just a few comments on each of your entries. I really like the warm tone of your voice and pacing. I think you could convey more incredulousness in the first half (before the comma) of the first line of Motel 6. There is a small noise just before the word “save” in the second sentence. In the American Cancer Society commercial, could you dampen down the “th” sound at the end of the word “health”? Since adjectives our are friend and add color to a line, you might want to emphasize, a bit more, the word “lethal” in the second sentence. In the Wall Street Journal piece, there is a small noise at the beginning of the second sentence that begins with “To .” The word information in the third sentence that begins “The journal gives me all the business information…..” the word “information” is sort of fuzzy in the middle. Also, that sentence sounds kind of flat. Since the paper is so important to the character speaking, it probably should be given more emphasis. The only other issue is that there seems to be a little too much space between sentences. I really only heard this on the Wall Street Journal demo.
    Good job,
    Elizabeth

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