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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hi everyone!
I’m new to this and working on homework for narration. The first one is talking to kids. I’m still working on getting a studio set up, so this is just recorded on my phone for now. Any and all feedback welcome! Thanks for listening 🙂-
Hey, Sherry! First of all I think you have a lovely voice; you sound super cheerful and confident. My one note would be that your phrasing had the tendency to be choppy in the first and third clips. Think of/practice with your copy as if you would tell this to a friend or loved one, and how there would be a more fluid line between the beginning and end of a thought or sentence and see how that feels. The second clip about Emilia Earhart I hear far less than the clip about recycling and about adrenaline. Awesome stuff!
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This is a repeat of a script I uploaded and didn’t receive any comments on, which is feedback in itself.
Please let me know if this is better, and what I could do to improve.
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I’m submitting another holiday “character” demo and asking for comments from the group. This is supposed to be humorous and involves Mrs. Claus talking about Santa and making a request of the children Santa visits. -
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Putting the finishing touches on the new booth I’m building (pictures soon!) and did my first sound test this morning with the first page of the next audiobook I’m contracted to narrate. Aside from the plosives and the sound of my phone vibrating, how’s the sound quality of the booth to your ears? (Pretty much ignore everything performance-related, this was just a quick read.)
Thanks!
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Trying to upload a file so you all can just click on it, just like everyone else. The file format is now MP3, and I added the ul tag:
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This is a Spanish audition. Any feedback is welcome.
“La unidad de carga principal pesa 160 libras. El instalador debe asegurarse de que la pared y los enchufes puedan soportar ese peso antes de la instalación. Si encuentra que no puede soportar ese peso, el cliente debe considerar comprar un pedestal.
Para comenzar el montaje en la pared, taladre y golpee cuatro orificios e inserte el tapón o inserto para la fijación en la pared en las posiciones indicadas.”
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Hi my name is Wes. It’s my second time on the forum. I’m uploading 3 attachments and hoping to have made some progress since last time here. Thanks for any feedback!
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Hey, Wes! Great work! You’re voice does have a lovely, deep and luxurious quality. I agree with Liliana about variety in pitch and you can also use emphasis of important descriptive words to help you with changing levels. Also I didn’t notice in the first two clips as much, but your third clip for Ford I could hear a lot of air and some plosive’s coming over your mic. Might have been that you had adjusted how you were sitting and were a tad closer to the mic than the first two so it was picking up more, or to do with any editing that was done. You’re awesome!
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Hi Wes, Your voice has a lovely deep quality and it is overall pleasant to listen to. In general, I could use a bit more enunciation of the words as well as some variety in pitch within each sentence. Sometimes it feels like it’s all at the same level so by varying the pitch a bit it would make the reads more engaging.
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Hi Danvasq4030,
I have just a few comments on each of your entries. I really like the warm tone of your voice and pacing. I think you could convey more incredulousness in the first half (before the comma) of the first line of Motel 6. There is a small noise just before the word “save” in the second sentence. In the American Cancer Society commercial, could you dampen down the “th” sound at the end of the word “health”? Since adjectives our are friend and add color to a line, you might want to emphasize, a bit more, the word “lethal” in the second sentence. In the Wall Street Journal piece, there is a small noise at the beginning of the second sentence that begins with “To .” The word information in the third sentence that begins “The journal gives me all the business information…..” the word “information” is sort of fuzzy in the middle. Also, that sentence sounds kind of flat. Since the paper is so important to the character speaking, it probably should be given more emphasis. The only other issue is that there seems to be a little too much space between sentences. I really only heard this on the Wall Street Journal demo.
Good job,
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First, very nice, rich tone to your voice.
Performance wise, two things stand out to me:
1) Respect the punctuation. The “albeit misconceived” clause kind of lives right on top and bulldozes over the commas that feel like they should be there, and there’s a few other times where it feels like that happens and the message starts to get muddied for me. Give the script room to breathe and tell a story.
2) It felt like the same emotional note throughout, no real changes in the overall inflection or emotion. Find the beats in the story, and make the changes in tone to reflect that. You have a very rich voice that will match well with a luxury brand, now it’s just about connecting with the material.Who are you coaching with, if I may ask?
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Nice copy, Jbach! I second everything Brian has said here, and I would add that I understand the challenge of typing out copy that you hear directly from a commercial. I’m not sure if that’s how you had gotten this copy, but whenever I find copy this way I notice that I add ellipses and punctuation marks based on what the VO Actor has done and then at risk of it being a direct copy I try and go back and write in as complete a sentence as possible to take their emotional read and their choices back out of it. Again, not sure if this applies to you but if so I hear ya and maybe that will help!
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