[David Goldberg]

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[monibr16]

Hello everyone,
Another read for coaching session, all feedback welcome, thank you!
Monique

Mr. Coffee Elite Plus
Now when you stumble out of bed with a million things to do, at least the coffee’s ready. Mr. Coffee Elite Plus coffeemaker starts brewing whenever you say. You decide the night before, push a few buttons and go to bed. You’ll wake up to a fresh, hot p*t of steaming salvation. Now that’s what we call a real eye-opener.

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[forceonature]

Hi Monique!

Excellent read! I love how smooth your tone of voice is. It really works on the last line “steaming salvation” I really liked your “and go to bed” line as well! Your inflection really highlighted how easy it is to get your coffee going! You have a great conversational tone, but on the “Mr Coffee elite plus coffeemaker” line I feel that you lose this a little bit. Long product names are always tough for me, I Try and think of it as if I’m recommending the product to a friend: “Oh my G*D Mr coffee elite plus coffeemaker starts brewing WHENEVER you say :o”.

Hope this helps! You did an excellent job 🙂

[CYeschenko]

Continued practice! All comments are appreciated, especially those focused on performance. Thanks!

Breyer’s Double-Churned Ice Cream

At Breyer’s, we’re churning out an amazing new ice cream- one with double the woah, double the wow. New double churned from Breyer’s, the richest, creamiest tasting Breyer’s ice cream ever. Amazing! New double churned- only from Bryer’s, the new taste of ice cream.

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[aylinsings]

Hi-

I think this was a nice take! My only note would be to have a vision of what that ice cream looks like. Be specific with it and I think that’ll come through in your reading. Great job!

[Rob Morse]

This is a Lender’s Bagel ad for Homework. Please let me know what I can improve.
Thanks, Rob

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[monibr16]

Rob this was right on the money. Accent was great. Pacing and pronunciation was good. I’m not sure if you should say the brand name with the accent, however I would have made the same choice you did. Good read!

[Eliz_10]

Hi Jeff Guerette,
Just listened and enjoyed your Home Depot submission. It was really well paced and delivered with an appropriate amount of “selling” emotion. The only thing I noticed in the first sentence was that the word “replaced” is missing the “d” at the end of the word. Other than that, well done!

Elizabeth

[Jeff Guerrette]

I just Realized I attached the same file twice in my last post. Here is the other for Home Depot.

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[Erik B]

Hi Jeff, wow this read was fantastic. The tone, tempo, pitch, and volume were all on point. The recording quality was very good. The only negative I noticed, as monibr16 pointed out, some of the endings of words were dropped. But overall this was a great read, and sounded very professional. Great job.

[monibr16]

Wow! This was so good! So believable, I feel like you worked there and could completely help me find what I need. You did drop some of the endings of words. But great job overall!

[Jeff Guerrette]

Hello, Hope everyone is having a great day! Looking for some feed back on the attached. Thank you

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[ritadebur]

I love your voice and it sounds so natural for all the commercials you’ve posted. I like the pace and how the humor comes across in this one. The only thing I felt was in your sentence “You just might be surprised….’ I think you could have emphasized a bit more on how surprising it might be…

[Bil-Bo]

Geico #02
We’ve noticed that these days, it seems as if every car insurance company needs a symbol. You’ve seen ‘em. Things like a blanket or a hand. Well, if Geico had a symbol, it would surely be the frontal lobe of the cerebral cortex. You see…it’s here, deep within the brain, that nerve impulses figure out, “Hey…it’s smarter to buy car insurance from GEICO.” That’s why over 10,000 drivers switch each week! So call for a free rate quote today. You just might be surprised how much you can save on car insurance. Yep, the brain’s a great symbol. We just can’t imagine the medulla oblongata on our stationary. Call 1-800-4-GEICO. GEICO Direct, the sensible alternative. That’s 1-800-4-GEICO. Not available in New Jersey or Massachusetts.

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[CYeschenko]

Very well done! The humor shone through exactly as intended, and I could most definitely see you voicing this spot. Also props for adding a background track that suited the copy well- it feels like a completed spot ready to air. I will echo the other comment saying you could highlight the surprise of just how much someone could save by switching, but the current version is more than acceptable, so it would come down to what they wanted from you before choosing the final take!

[Eliz_10]

Hi Bil-Bo,
Love your Geico commercial. You have a big, warm voice and make great use of it in this demo. I want to point out only 1 thing: the end of the word ten thousand sounds like a “t” than a “d”. Something got a little messed up. Listen to it again and you’ll see what I mean. Other than that, really good job.

Elizabeth

[ritadebur]

(Sorry -I posted this response incorrectly the first time).
This is for Bil-Bo
I love your voice and it sounds so natural for all the commercials you’ve posted. I like the pace and how the humor comes across in this one. The only thing I felt was in your sentence “You just might be surprised….’ I think you could have emphasized a bit more on how surprising it might be…

[adrothfield]

Hi all!

Looking for feedback on performance only. I’m specifically working to make this more conversational and natural. Any and all advice is appreciated! Thanks!

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[Erik B]

Hi, your voice sounds great, and matches well with the copy. You differentiated the words in the series nicely, and the tone of the read was great. My only suggestion would be to maybe slow down the tempo just a little bit. But overall you did a good job.

[ritadebur]

Hi – i love your voice – it sounds natural and was conversational until towards the end (….your next summer getaway) where I felt it sort of dropped off a little bit. Also I felt the ‘m’ at the end of swim was a bit long.

[adrothfield]

Hi all!

Looking for feedback on performance only. I’m specifically working to make this more conversational and natural. Any and all advice is appreciated! Thanks!

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