[David Goldberg]

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[Mark Jones]

Here’s a read for Cambria. Each phrase or sentence goes to a scene in the ad, but I ran them together for the ability to post it here.

[aylinsings]

Hello! Back at it with another homework assignment.

I am working on commercials. Please let me know if I am pitching down too much or if my takes sound inauthentic in anyway. Those were my main focuses going into it.
I chose scripts from the library for practice.

Thank you!

Always:
Listen. Your period comes every month. But it changes every day. That’s why ALWAYS designed new MULTIPAX. Three levels of protection in one smart box. So no matter what, you’ve got the right protection. ALWAYS MULTIPAX.

SPOTIFY:
With Spotify, it’s easy to find the right music for every moment – on your phone, your computer, your tablet and more. There are millions of tracks on Spotify. So whether you’re working out, partying or relaxing, the right music is always at your fingertips. Soundtrack your life with Spotify. Subscribe or listen for free.

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[timmurphy306]

These reads were really, really great! You have an enthusiasm that you can hear in both of these commercials. Quality sounded good, and your pacing is what makes the reads really come to life. Keep up the good work!

[JohnFinn]

Great reads! Variation and pitch was spot on with Always and Spotify. The first set of abc’s in Spotify- “-on your phone, your computer…” might need a little lift like the second set. Great work!!

[forceonature]

Hello! This week I’m working on longer commercial scripts as I usually go with the short snippy kind. I loved tackling this challenge! Any feedback would be really appreciated!

Scripts:
Weelearn
Most of us know there are ways we can improve… to be healthier… happier… more effective… but knowing how to improve is a different matter. Without guidance, we often simply stay the same.
Welcome to Weelearn – a platform where well-known experts and authors can help you get stronger in all areas of your life. Using the Weelearn video library, you can protect your body, strengthen your mind and spirit, become a more positive influence in your relationships, pursue success more confidently at work, and so much more.
Our experts are taken from fields of hard science, like psychology, but also areas of broader wisdom, like spirituality. And with videos broken up into digestible parts, and supplemented by exercises and games, the next step to your best self is truly only a few clicks away.
Don’t be stuck in life, love, work – or anything! Try Weelearn for yourself today.
Weelearn – learning through watching.

Spotify:
Our mission is to unlock the potential of human creativity—by giving a million creative artists the opportunity to live off their art and billions of fans the opportunity to enjoy and be inspired by it. Spotify is all the music you’ll ever need. … Millions of songs and podcasts. No credit card needed. Get Unlimited Skips and Ad-Free Music. Only $9.99/Month After. T&Cs Apply. Exclusive Podcasts. Cancel Anytime. Curated Playlists. New Music Discovery.1

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[Robert Broussard]

Nice reads. Good tone and pacing throughout. Good job.

[Eliz_10]

Hi all,
Last week I posted a few character demos using my “normal” senior voice. Today I’m submitting a toddler/school age voice character demo. Any feedback I get from the community will be appreciated.

Elizabeth

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[forceonature]

Hi Elizabeth!

Excellent work! I love the cutesy tone you use in your read. You have a lovely light airy tone at the beginning of your sentences but I hear at the end of certain sentences and words your pitch drops a little bit. Try and focus on keeping that light head voice all the way through. Awesome work!

[Eliz_10]

Thanks for the kind words forceonature. I completely agree with you regarding the pitch drop. It’s a problem I have sometimes even when I’m using my normal, very low-pitched voice.

Elizabeth

[monibr16]

Hello everyone,
Another read for coaching session, all feedback welcome, thank you!
Monique

Mr. Coffee Elite Plus
Now when you stumble out of bed with a million things to do, at least the coffee’s ready. Mr. Coffee Elite Plus coffeemaker starts brewing whenever you say. You decide the night before, push a few buttons and go to bed. You’ll wake up to a fresh, hot p*t of steaming salvation. Now that’s what we call a real eye-opener.

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[forceonature]

Hi Monique!

Excellent read! I love how smooth your tone of voice is. It really works on the last line “steaming salvation” I really liked your “and go to bed” line as well! Your inflection really highlighted how easy it is to get your coffee going! You have a great conversational tone, but on the “Mr Coffee elite plus coffeemaker” line I feel that you lose this a little bit. Long product names are always tough for me, I Try and think of it as if I’m recommending the product to a friend: “Oh my G*D Mr coffee elite plus coffeemaker starts brewing WHENEVER you say :o”.

Hope this helps! You did an excellent job 🙂

[CYeschenko]

Continued practice! All comments are appreciated, especially those focused on performance. Thanks!

Breyer’s Double-Churned Ice Cream

At Breyer’s, we’re churning out an amazing new ice cream- one with double the woah, double the wow. New double churned from Breyer’s, the richest, creamiest tasting Breyer’s ice cream ever. Amazing! New double churned- only from Bryer’s, the new taste of ice cream.

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[aylinsings]

Hi-

I think this was a nice take! My only note would be to have a vision of what that ice cream looks like. Be specific with it and I think that’ll come through in your reading. Great job!

[Rob Morse]

This is a Lender’s Bagel ad for Homework. Please let me know what I can improve.
Thanks, Rob

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[monibr16]

Rob this was right on the money. Accent was great. Pacing and pronunciation was good. I’m not sure if you should say the brand name with the accent, however I would have made the same choice you did. Good read!

[Eliz_10]

Hi Jeff Guerette,
Just listened and enjoyed your Home Depot submission. It was really well paced and delivered with an appropriate amount of “selling” emotion. The only thing I noticed in the first sentence was that the word “replaced” is missing the “d” at the end of the word. Other than that, well done!

Elizabeth

[Jeff Guerrette]

I just Realized I attached the same file twice in my last post. Here is the other for Home Depot.

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[Erik B]

Hi Jeff, wow this read was fantastic. The tone, tempo, pitch, and volume were all on point. The recording quality was very good. The only negative I noticed, as monibr16 pointed out, some of the endings of words were dropped. But overall this was a great read, and sounded very professional. Great job.

[monibr16]

Wow! This was so good! So believable, I feel like you worked there and could completely help me find what I need. You did drop some of the endings of words. But great job overall!

[Jeff Guerrette]

Hello, Hope everyone is having a great day! Looking for some feed back on the attached. Thank you

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