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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hello! This week I’m working on longer commercial scripts as I usually go with the short snippy kind. I loved tackling this challenge! Any feedback would be really appreciated!
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Hi all,
Last week I posted a few character demos using my “normal” senior voice. Today I’m submitting a toddler/school age voice character demo. Any feedback I get from the community will be appreciated.Elizabeth
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Hi Elizabeth!
Excellent work! I love the cutesy tone you use in your read. You have a lovely light airy tone at the beginning of your sentences but I hear at the end of certain sentences and words your pitch drops a little bit. Try and focus on keeping that light head voice all the way through. Awesome work!
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Hello everyone,
Another read for coaching session, all feedback welcome, thank you!
MoniqueMr. Coffee Elite Plus
Now when you stumble out of bed with a million things to do, at least the coffee’s ready. Mr. Coffee Elite Plus coffeemaker starts brewing whenever you say. You decide the night before, push a few buttons and go to bed. You’ll wake up to a fresh, hot p*t of steaming salvation. Now that’s what we call a real eye-opener.-
Hi Monique!
Excellent read! I love how smooth your tone of voice is. It really works on the last line “steaming salvation” I really liked your “and go to bed” line as well! Your inflection really highlighted how easy it is to get your coffee going! You have a great conversational tone, but on the “Mr Coffee elite plus coffeemaker” line I feel that you lose this a little bit. Long product names are always tough for me, I Try and think of it as if I’m recommending the product to a friend: “Oh my G*D Mr coffee elite plus coffeemaker starts brewing WHENEVER you say :o”.
Hope this helps! You did an excellent job 🙂
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Continued practice! All comments are appreciated, especially those focused on performance. Thanks!
Breyer’s Double-Churned Ice Cream
At Breyer’s, we’re churning out an amazing new ice cream- one with double the woah, double the wow. New double churned from Breyer’s, the richest, creamiest tasting Breyer’s ice cream ever. Amazing! New double churned- only from Bryer’s, the new taste of ice cream.
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Hi Jeff Guerette,
Just listened and enjoyed your Home Depot submission. It was really well paced and delivered with an appropriate amount of “selling” emotion. The only thing I noticed in the first sentence was that the word “replaced” is missing the “d” at the end of the word. Other than that, well done!Elizabeth
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Hi Jeff, wow this read was fantastic. The tone, tempo, pitch, and volume were all on point. The recording quality was very good. The only negative I noticed, as monibr16 pointed out, some of the endings of words were dropped. But overall this was a great read, and sounded very professional. Great job.
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Geico #02
We’ve noticed that these days, it seems as if every car insurance company needs a symbol. You’ve seen ‘em. Things like a blanket or a hand. Well, if Geico had a symbol, it would surely be the frontal lobe of the cerebral cortex. You see…it’s here, deep within the brain, that nerve impulses figure out, “Hey…it’s smarter to buy car insurance from GEICO.” That’s why over 10,000 drivers switch each week! So call for a free rate quote today. You just might be surprised how much you can save on car insurance. Yep, the brain’s a great symbol. We just can’t imagine the medulla oblongata on our stationary. Call 1-800-4-GEICO. GEICO Direct, the sensible alternative. That’s 1-800-4-GEICO. Not available in New Jersey or Massachusetts.-
Very well done! The humor shone through exactly as intended, and I could most definitely see you voicing this spot. Also props for adding a background track that suited the copy well- it feels like a completed spot ready to air. I will echo the other comment saying you could highlight the surprise of just how much someone could save by switching, but the current version is more than acceptable, so it would come down to what they wanted from you before choosing the final take!
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Hi Bil-Bo,
Love your Geico commercial. You have a big, warm voice and make great use of it in this demo. I want to point out only 1 thing: the end of the word ten thousand sounds like a “t” than a “d”. Something got a little messed up. Listen to it again and you’ll see what I mean. Other than that, really good job.Elizabeth
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(Sorry -I posted this response incorrectly the first time).
This is for Bil-Bo
I love your voice and it sounds so natural for all the commercials you’ve posted. I like the pace and how the humor comes across in this one. The only thing I felt was in your sentence “You just might be surprised….’ I think you could have emphasized a bit more on how surprising it might be…
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