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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hey all!
Just an amateur trying to get in some practice and figure out my niches! Feedback is always appreciated! (The file got posted twice by accident).
WORDS. THEY CAN DO ANYTHING.
THEY CAN CALL IN A DOG AT NIGHT.
THEY CAN BRING COMFORT TO AN OLD FRIEND.
THEY CAN SAY HAPPY BIRTHDAY TO A GIRL WHOSE BALLOONS ARE SLOWLY SINKING.BUT SOMETIMES, WORDS CAN GET YOU INTO TROUBLE.
LIKE THE HUMAN RIGHTS ACTIVIST WHO WAS KIDNAPPED FOR STANDING UP TO GOVERNMENT CORRUPTION.
OR THE JOURNALIST SENTENCED TO 10 YEARS IN PRISON FOR SENDING AN EMAIL.
OR THE 1000S OF MEN AND WOMEN WHO ARE ARRESTED AND TORTURED, JUST FOR DEMANDING A FAIR ELECTION.NOW, WE NEED YOUR WORDS,
TO DEMAND JUSTICE, TO TAKE A STAND, AND TO OFFER HOPE TO PEOPLE AROUND THE WORLD, WHO ARE SILENCED FOR SIMPLY SPEAKING THEIR MINDS.WRITE A LETTER OR SPEAK OUT TODAY.
YOUR WORDS CAN LEAD TO THEIR FREEDOM.WORDS. THEY CAN DO ANYTHING.
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WOW this is incredible. I love love love your tone, and can hear in your voice the emotion and passion building with each example. Only suggestion, for the final phrase of “Words, they can do anything”–maybe draw this out, and stress/elongate certain parts to get the final point across. Your voice is awesome! Also an amateur, so I feel ya 🙂
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Hello everybody, below are three Narration reads. Please feel free to provide feedback on performance and recording quality for any or all of the reads. Thank you.
NetJets 24 Hour Worldwide Medical Assistance
At NetJets, our care for our Owners means not only flying them halfway around the world in the safest way possible, but also getting them the help they need should a medical emergency arise far from home. That’s why we collaborated with Mayo clinic to develop Mayo Clinic Executive Travel Response. As an owner, you’ll receive a dedicated phone number to reach Mayo Clinic medical professionals 24 hours a day, for any medical reason. Whether you need critical care in Eastern Europe and don’t know where to turn, or just want medical advice from a trusted source closer to home, someone is always there for you.
Cats
They are hunters, with muscles taut, and eyes fixed on their intended prey. They are gentle, with fluid movement and a sensitive touch. They are regal, with a lineage that goes back to worshiped ancestors during the time of the Pharaohs. They are introspective, aloof, unpredictable, affectionate, comical and mischievous. They are cats.
Bob Ross Biography
Bob Ross. Just his name brings a calm. The soft-spoken painter who didn’t make mistakes, only “happy accidents,” painted on PBS stations in the 1980s and 1990s. His untimely death in 1995 at the age of 52 occurred just when he was exploding on the pop culture scene. He even appeared in a hip MTV spot back when MTV was hip. “MTV, the land of happy little trees.” There’s a lot people don’t know about Bob Ross, so get ready for some surprises about the guy with the sweet pipes and sweeter ‘fro.
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Sound quality is top notch. You need to put a bit more feeling in the reads. For example, with the last sentence in NetJets, you just read about Eastern Europe, but it’s an example of being in hutz-pluz, and you feel out of touch. You need to read it like the listener is on the Moon, or something uber far out like that, and then contrast it with the end of the sentence. Also with Bob Ross, you need to really convey that this guy had a really sweet voice (pipes), and a really cool hair-do. You’ve got to be Bob Ross’ No.1 fan.
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I am 100% an amateur, and I don’t have the proper mic, but have to start somewhere 🙂
Any feedback is great!
Script:
During this breathing meditation, you will focus on your breath. This will calm your mind and relax your body. There is no right or wrong way to meditate. Whatever you experience during this breathing meditation is right for you. Begin by finding a comfortable position, sitting on the floor with your legs crossed is a good position to try. Close your eyes or focus on one spot in the room. Roll your shoulders slowly forward and then slowly back. Lean your head from side to side, lowering your left ear toward your left shoulder, and then your right ear toward your right shoulder. Your body will continue to relax as you meditate. Notice how your breath flows in and out. Make no effort to change your breathing in any way, simply notice how your body breathes. Sit quietly, seeing in your mind’s eye your breath flowing gently in and out of your body.-
You have a fantastic voice for instructional videos and a great sound set up. Your read had a soothing tone that would trust with this type of read and the words you hit were just right. Your tempo however is a little too slow and you made the pauses too long. What’s more, I heard you paused in the middle of sentence 2. Pauses must be left for periods and commas, usually for no more than half a second.
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Hi Adrrianna, I really liked your read. Your tone and pace were great. Also the recording quality sounded solid. The only critique I have is the giggle in the third sentence. The listener might be somebody who is new to meditation, and may be thrown off by a giggle. But overall good job.
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Commercial: I chose this one because the subject matter – insurance – sounds like the definition of boring. So, I took it as a challenge to make it sound good. Here is the text I used:
We’ve all been there
All of a sudden, your “check engine” light comes on
Insurance covers your vehicle from accidents,
But did you know it doesn’t cover expensive breakdowns?
If your manufacturer’s warranty is expired or is about to run out,
You’ll be on the hook for unexpected repairs
Breakdowns used to mean paying thousands out of pocket … until now
No matter how miles your car has, if it’s under 20 years old, Endurance has you covered.
With Endurance’s protection, if you break down, just choose the local repair shop you trust.
Endurance pays them directly. No complicated paperwork, no checks in the mail. Endurance takes care of all of it for you.
Your plan even covers 24/7 roadside assistance: Endurance jumps your battery, tows, delivers gas, changes a flat, unlocks your car, and more!
Endurance is the No.1 trusted expert in vehicle protection
We offer affordable down payments, low monthly plans, flexible terms, and a money-back guarantee
Call now, and we’ll upgrade you to an Endurance Elite Membership free!
Call 800-370-3827 for a free price quote. That’s 800-370-3827-
Hi!
You have a very trustworthy sounding voice, which sounds great for this type of product!! Overall, I think you did a good job, especially
considering that some of these lines are a mouthful. Working on breath control (or trying to complete the longer lines in one breath if possible) may help add some extra smoothness and improve diction at the ends of sentences. Nice work! -
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I am 100% an amateur, and I don’t have the proper mic, but have to start somewhere 🙂
Any feedback is great!
Script:
During this breathing meditation, you will focus on your breath. This will calm your mind and relax your body. There is no right or wrong way to meditate. Whatever you experience during this breathing meditation is right for you. Begin by finding a comfortable position, sitting on the floor with your legs crossed is a good position to try. Close your eyes or focus on one spot in the room. Roll your shoulders slowly forward and then slowly back. Lean your head from side to side, lowering your left ear toward your left shoulder, and then your right ear toward your right shoulder. Your body will continue to relax as you meditate. Notice how your breath flows in and out. Make no effort to change your breathing in any way, simply notice how your body breathes. Sit quietly, seeing in your mind’s eye your breath flowing gently in and out of your body.
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A Haunting Title
In this world, there is real evil.
In the darkest shadows and in the most ordinary places.
These are the true stories of the innocent and the unimaginable.
Between the things we see and the things we fear, there are doors.
When they are opened,
Nightmares become reality.-
Hi IMs,
This sounds like it is for an intro to a haunted house at a theme park, or some such. IMO, you put too much character in it, UNLESS the director specifically wanted that. The audio is also not good, there is too much P and S, and distortion.
I like the fact that you changed the stress when you said “doors”. I would try it again, using that change to show that the doors are the most scary and unpredictable thing here.
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Educational Explainer Video Intro Only – Real Estate
Would you like to buy a house?
Maybe it’s your first house, or even your 2nd and you just think that MAYBE you didn’t think hard enough about the last one.
Listen, I love Real Estate. And in most cases, even a bad deal can work to your advantage in the very long run.
But there are dumb things that people do without realizing it when they buy a house.
Humor me for a short story before we get into the meat of this video. -
Motivation Meditation
I know that you’re scared, and it’s a good thing to be scared. Because with that fear, you realise that there is a strange adrenaline rush that takes over you, akin to most of the top athletes and singers right before they play and start their performance. As you feel scared, you can begin to you know…use this emotion for the better. Use the rush, use the adrenaline, use all of this nervous energy. You get scared because your mind pictures things not going in your favour, however the mind is creative. One of the scenarios it can create, can come from the space of courage. It’s all a picture in your head at the end of the day.
So why don’t you take this opportunity to think of the outcome that you want, the one in which you’ll feel happy, satisfied and excited about this journey that you’re about to take. Yes, use all the nervous energy to imagine a level of euphoria unfathomable so far in your life. It’s bright and vivid. You put aside the negative images you were seeing with these new, beautiful and breathtaking ones. Yes, you can……NOW….BEGIN TO BELIEVE IN YOURSELF. (like a hypnotic order) -
HEllo everyone! Narration homework – Could you provide specific feedback on the script below? Does my read sound conversational, does the script match my voice? how is my diction.
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Hi Mdm, I agree with carynbell, you have a pleasant sophisticated voice. Heck, you sound like a princess! Audio quality is very good, a tad too much with the P and S, but I had to really listen to it. Some of the words and speech need some work: “72,000 acres of wooded hills, deep ravines, and appalacian plateau …. ” should be smoother, and more continuous. You took a pause that was not needed. Same with “centuries old”, it felt like “centuries old” was a separate entity when it’s just an adjective for “Oak and Maple forest” . ” …. socially distanced outdoor activities – rapping, rock climbing, hiking …” are you sure it’s rapping and not rappelling? And “pandemic era” should be era, and not ero.
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You have a nice, sophisticated quality to your voice. Consider playing with pitch or intonation shifts when voicing listed items so each item stands out a little from the others. Also, research the pronunciation of “par excellence”. Nice work!
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Hello everyone! I am working on narration script homework. Could you provide specific feedback on the script below? Does my read sound conversational, does the script match my voice? how is my diction. Thank you for your time.
Starlings
It’s a mesmerizing sight: Thousands of birds move in unison through the evening sky, whirling and swooping as if performing a highly synchronized ballet. When they finally descend to their treetop roost, the beating of their iridescent wings creates such a rush of sound that the noise earned the phenomenon its unusual name: a murmuration of starlings. -
Hey all! So here’s my first student recordings done in my first home studio I got last week. Feedback is appreciated. Thanks!
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