[David Goldberg]

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[IMs]

Motivation Meditation

I know that you’re scared, and it’s a good thing to be scared. Because with that fear, you realise that there is a strange adrenaline rush that takes over you, akin to most of the top athletes and singers right before they play and start their performance. As you feel scared, you can begin to you know…use this emotion for the better. Use the rush, use the adrenaline, use all of this nervous energy. You get scared because your mind pictures things not going in your favour, however the mind is creative. One of the scenarios it can create, can come from the space of courage. It’s all a picture in your head at the end of the day.
So why don’t you take this opportunity to think of the outcome that you want, the one in which you’ll feel happy, satisfied and excited about this journey that you’re about to take. Yes, use all the nervous energy to imagine a level of euphoria unfathomable so far in your life. It’s bright and vivid. You put aside the negative images you were seeing with these new, beautiful and breathtaking ones. Yes, you can……NOW….BEGIN TO BELIEVE IN YOURSELF. (like a hypnotic order)

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[Mdmcghee34]

HEllo everyone! Narration homework – Could you provide specific feedback on the script below? Does my read sound conversational, does the script match my voice? how is my diction.

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[Shmuel]

Hi Mdm, I agree with carynbell, you have a pleasant sophisticated voice. Heck, you sound like a princess! Audio quality is very good, a tad too much with the P and S, but I had to really listen to it. Some of the words and speech need some work: “72,000 acres of wooded hills, deep ravines, and appalacian plateau …. ” should be smoother, and more continuous. You took a pause that was not needed. Same with “centuries old”, it felt like “centuries old” was a separate entity when it’s just an adjective for “Oak and Maple forest” . ” …. socially distanced outdoor activities – rapping, rock climbing, hiking …” are you sure it’s rapping and not rappelling? And “pandemic era” should be era, and not ero.

[Mdmcghee34]

Hi Shmuel, thank you very much for this feedback. I’m taking notes and will make improvements. The activities are rafting not rapping.

[carynbell]

You have a nice, sophisticated quality to your voice. Consider playing with pitch or intonation shifts when voicing listed items so each item stands out a little from the others. Also, research the pronunciation of “par excellence”. Nice work!

[Mdmcghee34]

Thank you for the feedback!

[Mdmcghee34]

Hello everyone! I am working on narration script homework. Could you provide specific feedback on the script below? Does my read sound conversational, does the script match my voice? how is my diction. Thank you for your time.

Starlings
It’s a mesmerizing sight: Thousands of birds move in unison through the evening sky, whirling and swooping as if performing a highly synchronized ballet. When they finally descend to their treetop roost, the beating of their iridescent wings creates such a rush of sound that the noise earned the phenomenon its unusual name: a murmuration of starlings.

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[carynbell]

Hey all! So here’s my first student recordings done in my first home studio I got last week. Feedback is appreciated. Thanks!

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[Mdmcghee34]

Hello! You have a warm calm voice that I enjoyed. the tone was great for all 3. for the first script, the beginning seemed a little choppy and could come together more; the 2nd and 3rd scripts I would slow down the pace just a little and really embrace the copy. I think everything else sound good.

[Robert Broussard]

I ran across this script and thought it may be fun to do.

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[Bil-Bo]

Esurance
If a phone rings at your car insurance company, and no one’s around to hear it… does it make a sound?
Or… if a tree falls on your car, and no one’s around to answer the call, do YOU make a sound?
The answer is probably… yes, and, like a howler monkey.
Unless you’re calling esurance. They have live humans on the line to help you 24/7.
So you might make different sounds, like happy human sounds.
Esurance. Insurance for the modern world.

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[Shmuel]

Nailed it again, Bil-Bo. You kept it moving, impressive, I would have paused too much, me thinks. I’m wondering why you add the music and sound affects here in this forum. It makes it a full professional piece, but is that what we are doing here? I’m not sure.

[Erik B]

Hi Bil-Bo, this read is excellent and sounds professional. The tone, tempo, and recording quality are all top notch. Great job.

[juliees206@gmail.com]

I’ve included 2 scripts for practice and feedback, any feedback is appreciated! 🙂

Sandals-In The Mood
What’s your mood?…13 Luxury Included resorts…4 Exotic Islands…ONE unforgettable experience…Sandals—The Luxury Included vacation…Call 1-800-Sandals or visit Sandals.com

Ziploc
Only Ziploc brand bags have a unique interlocking zipper to lock in freshness in a way no other bag can. When it comes out this fresh, you know it went in a Ziploc bag. Ziploc. We’ve got a lock on freshness.

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[Shmuel]

Agree with Robert, No.2 is way better than No.1, which sounds sultry, to be honest. With No.2 keep it moving a bit more. It’s got some good pop and upbeat feel.

[juliees206@gmail.com]

Thank you so much for your feedback, was trying to have fun with sounding sultry for No. 1 and appreciate your suggestions for No. 2 in which I’ll practice 🙂

[Robert Broussard]

Julie, I liked #2 better it had more engery. #1 could be more upbeat. Hope this helps.

[juliees206@gmail.com]

Thanks Robert, really appreciate your comment on #2 and will work on the energy for #1 too!

[artyom123]

Looking for feedback on this script, it may sound because the read called for a 30 sec slot. looking for emotional connection, story telling.. what I can improve. I made 3 takes, Thank you all..

I heard the call
And I moved with a purpose.
When the objective is in front of me, my path is clear.
And out here, it’s no different. My mission has changed, but my purpose remains.
American Military University was founded by a veteran.
The faculty knows where I’m coming from, and where I want to go.
They made the mission and they’ve got my 6—
From enrollment to beyond graduation.
The classes and degrees are built around outcomes—giving graduates career relevant knowledge and skills.
After service, we start a new mission. With AMU, that mission is clear.
It’s time to start your next mission.

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[juliees206@gmail.com]

I really like the warmth in your voice! For the story telling, perhaps you could try adding more emphasis by hitting different words to capture more of the listener’s attention~

[SuperLuke]

My demo is coming up soon in April and I wanted to rehearse my characters to see if they are in good shape. Please feel free to leave feedback about my performance, the characters, and so on.

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[artyom123]

nice demo and good character selection and leaning into the character. my only advice is that I couldn’t make out some of what the characters were saying. it seems like they are either screaming, or ultra calm. I would take those same characters and see what they sound like in a conversational tone. good luck !

[SuperLuke]

Thank you for the comment and wishing me luck, I’m excited and nervous at the same time. Yeah, some of my characters are loud, calm, maybe yelling. I probably should have slowed down my characters so they were audible too. Also, my microphone was tilted the wrong way and it made my voice not go through properly. I’ll try again, with the adjustment made.
Thanks again

[Andrea]

Hi everyone,

Here’s another homework practice script. I’m on a narration track and would appreciate any feedback on performance (I don’t have all my studio stuff yet).

Thanks for your help!

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[SuperLuke]

Good narration voice for a History channel, or Discovery channel documentary. If that’s what you were going for, great job. I would encourage you to provide a script of what you are narrating, in case your coach or peers want to follow along.
Keep up the good work

[Andrea]

Thanks for the feedback! I’ll remember to provide the script next time.

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