[David Goldberg]

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[monibr16]

Hi everyone, I hope your enjoying your holiday! When you have time any and all feedback would be apprecited. Im tweeking my choices for reel. So let me know if they work for my voices, and anyways I can improve my delivery.Scripts below. Thank you!

Gabbys perfect dollhouse
Using your imagination, is the perfect way to create a world of fun with your friends. Gabby’s perfect dollhouse is a proud sponsor of Disney junior.
Additional sets and accessories sold separately. Batteries not included.

Coffee mate
(Yawn) There it is, my best friend in the morning. All I need is the rich and delicious taste of coffee mate to help me be me, every morning. Coffee mate. Coffee’s perfect mate.

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[Earthbul]

What a smooth and lovely sound you have. I really enjoyed the coffee spot. You really captured that early morning first cup sound. Keep em coming.

[monibr16]

What a compliment! Thank you so much for the feeback earthbul!

[monibr16]

Hi everyone,
It’s been a while but im trying to finalize my reel selections. So how dowes this one sound voice wise, energy and all that? just not technically because I don’t have the best equipment.
Thank you, Monique

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[Artist7]

Hi, Monibr16! This is a very good read! Your tone and energy are both appropriate for the read. My only con would be the sibilance after the words “fits,” “cups,” and “straps.” May want to smooth out the hisses on those “s” sounds.

[monibr16]

Thank you so much artist, that helps a lot!

[Earthbul]

Any and all feedback welcomed and appreciated 🙂

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[Brian Evans]

Hi Earthbul! I really like the tone of your voice for this material. There is enough informal speech to convey the message and still plenty of details to make everything clear. Just a couple technical notes: The sound level comes in and out at the very beginning and at the end–“So you want…” sounds like it’s fading in and “…radical thinkers.” sounds like it’s fading out; and the music comes in a bit quiet for my ear and there isn’t a shift in your read (and/or a slight pause) when it starts so I wasn’t sure if it was intentional. But again, you’re voice is spot on for this.

[Artist7]

Hi, everyone-I’d appreciate feedback on these two short commercial reads. Thanks so much!

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[monibr16]

Hey artist7 you had two VERY good takes. Each painting the correct picture with your energy. Crest was upbeat and positive. I could hear the smile in your voice. Where ambien delivered a calm and peacful tone that suited the medical product.

The only not I’d give would be for the crest commercial hit the d in “wider” more. It kind of sounded like you were saying “whiter”. But other thank that they sound great.

[Artist7]

Hi, Monibr16! I appreciate you taking the time to listen and provide great feedback!

[JamesV]

Guys – when applying to join a VO work site, or maybe start a freelancer gig, I find it really difficult to describe my own voice – can you do it for me please? If you could reply with three words I could use as descriptors, I’d be most grateful.

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[Alexander Wright]

Pleasant, engaging, solid.

[Brian Evans]

Hi James. I agree with Andrea and I would add confident and friendly.

[Andrea Williams]

HI, James. I would say deep, warm and engaging.

[Danielle]

Hi Everyone! I’d love any non-technical feedback on these submissions, particularly on my diction, pacing, and, conversational tone. Thanks so much for your time!

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[Andrea Williams]

Hi, Danielle. Your diction, pace, and conversational tone were very good. Both reads sounded and felt very authentic and your voice is very easy to listen to.

[Earthbul]

Very nice read. Conversational and confident.

[Danielle]

Thanks so much for the feedback, Andrea!

[Brian Evans]

Hello Everyone!
Would love your feedback on these practice commercials.
Thanks!

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[Andrea Williams]

Fantastic voice and tone, Brian. I agree with Chris on the pauses. There were fewer in the Invesco read, which sounded more natural.

[Chris Neil]

Hi, I like the tone of your voice and what I was told when I had my evaluation is I was pausing too much, and I think you are also pausing too often. But other than that it sounds great!

[Andrea Williams]

Greetings! Thank you in advance for feedback on these two narration reads. I am working on being conversational so would like feedback on that aspect, as well as pacing and over-emphasis of minor words like “and”.

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[Danielle]

Hi Andrea. I thought both of your submissions were great. Good diction and pace, there was variation in your pitch, and the reads felt very friendly and conversational. I listened for an overemphasis of the word “and” but it didn’t seem to pop out to me. Hope that helps! Good job!

[Jacqueline Figueiredo]

Hello everyone…this is my 1st submission to the forum!

Creative feedback only please! No technical feedback please!

How is my diction? How is my pace? Do my reads sound conversational?

Please let me know…thank you!

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[latyesemca]

I would say to just take your time when reading. It felt rushed for Revlon especially. It seems to me you started to get in the groove when doing the Toyota spot though! I could hear the rise and falls of where you wanted to bring the audiences’ attention.

[Stephen Winburn]

Hi Jacqueline!
I listened to both recordings and i think the Toyota recording is spot on for pace and diction. I’m still learning what it means to sound conversational so no notes from me there!
The Revlon recording i do think the pace is a little hurried though the diction is fine. Listening to the two pieces back to back the Revlon piece just doesn’t carry the same energy as the Toyota one– each line drops at the end, if that makes sense? I’d suggest, as they say, having an opinion about the product and see how that informs your delivery!

[Michele Martin]

Submitting this narration read here for my coach to listen to.

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[Stephen Winburn]

Hi Michele!
I just listened to all 3 recordings and i gotta say to my untrained ear they all hinged on perfection! Very hard to come up with any meaningful notes!
What i will say is,having listened to all 3 back to back, the tone strikes me as the same even though the pieces are for 3 different narration styles. It’s especially noticeable in the Hudson Valley piece where it seems like the text depicts the narrator as a proud New Yorker, the tone that was spot on for 4H– and maybe slighty out of place for Manufacturing if I’m really being nitpicky– feels like it’s at odds with the text for Hudsom Valley.
I hope that’s helpful!

[Michele Martin]

Thank you Stephen! I appreciate you taking the time to provide feedback! My coach had similar comments about my tone needing to change based upon the context – so you have a good ear and instincts :). I’m going to work on that!

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