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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hi All!
Here is my first narration read; Trying to get the hang of it after working on commercial scripts in the past. I’m appreciative of any feedback.(I know I need to better articulate the “P” at the end of “looking up” in the first sentence ;).
Thank you,
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Hi Michele. I love the quality of your voice throughout this read, I find it very exciting, engaging and enticing. I thought your diction and pace were good. One pattern I did notice throughout the read was regarding your phrasing: specifically, your pitch tends to go up at the beginning of your sentences and then down at the end of each sentence in a similar manner, so maybe some variation there would be something to think about. Good job!
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Hi everyone! This is my first submission and I’d some feedback about my pace, as I tend to read a little fast, and if the tone is anywhere in the ballpark! The first one is a biography narration and the second is a commercial. Thank you!
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For the Gertude Bell read, it felt a little too monotoned for me? Intriguing nonetheless! Maybe changing the tone on a few words to bring some spark to it? Especially if it’s about the adventure of someone’s life. The clarity though was fantastic! I hope Steve makes a lot of money on Chownow because I was pretty invested!
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Hi Jenn!
I think your pacing and tone for Chow Now work great for that piece, well done!
As for the Gertrude Bell piece, i think the pacing for its current tone works well, but I think the tone might be more somber than the reading calls for. The text talks about Gertrude’s “passion” and “defiant independence”, and says her life was ultimately a great adventure! I think the tone should reflect more of that vitality that Gertrude’s autobiography is supposed to inspire in its potential readers. -
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Hello everyone, Please listen to a recent audition I did, any feedback would be appreciated, Thanks.
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Hi Chris!
I thought this was a great read and that the tone and pace were great and it sounded conversational! There was just a wee diction issue on “opportunity” where the last few syllables got jumbled.
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Hi there; posting these for feedback before my next class in Narration, from the Edge Narration scripts “Walgreens – New Team Members Voice Over Script” and “Sharks Voice Over Script”.
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Hi Matt!
I think your reads are spot on for pacing and diction, very well done!
With the tiger shark, something about the read made the tone of the piece unclear? I can’t put my finger on it, but listening to it i wasn’t sure how serious the danger was, if that makes any sense.
And the Walgreens piece, tone was perfect! I would say that– if I’m understanding conversationality correctly, that this sounded a bit announcer-y. Like this was a group onboarding rather than a one-on-one conversation.
I hope that’s helpful to you!
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Hello everyone. This is my first of likely many requests for feedback. I would like to request creative feedback only since I am not currently recording out if a studio. This is an AMC theater intro bumper and a documentary description. My issues are rushing and sometimes not fully pronouncing things like the word “to” and saying “tah”. Thanks in advance!
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Hi! For the AMC intro, I like the confident and informative beginning. It seems like it could pick up the pace and enthusiasm at “Movie fans can’t get enough…”. The new idea might be more enticing with an energy shift at that point. I also feel that the last few thoughts are a bit broken up. Maybe keeping the thoughts moving forward to the next idea would work.
For the Empire of Dreams documentary text, I also felt that you had a good tone of authority on the subject. One pattern that I noticed is the downward inflections at the ends of sentences. I think it works well when you sustain momentum between thoughts, as with “…small group from Cuba” into “then a larger one from Mexico.” Nice work!
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Hello! Thank you to everyone who helped give me advice on my first read! This is my second attempt, so please let me know what I can approve on!
This time I tried doing it in my closet to get rid of some of that echo. On that note, for those of you who do use your closest as your workspace, how do you keep it from getting hot?
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Hi Emily. I really like the positive and enthusiastic read. Your confidence with the material makes me feel like I can learn to read music! I think “accompanying” could be more articulated. Maybe the “R” in “Reading” at the very top is drawn out a bit more than it needs to be?
I used a closet for a bit and moved on to a space with sound panels. That has been more comfortable. But the sound as compared to your last recording is MUCH better. Well done!
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Hello Forum –
I’m hoping to get some additional feedback on some retakes that I have done. Thank you in advance.
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Hi Tracy,
I listenend to your original takes as well as this one and it’s definitely been an improvement! I could really hear the smile in your voice for the in both baking and retail. Personally I thought the pacing and tone for the first retail read was more appropriate, even if it wasn’t considered conversational. -
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I Have just up loaded two new recordings one Commercial and narration. Please give feedback to know if I made any errors or not in diction and annunciation I would really appreciate it.
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Hey there Dillon – I like the ending to the 99ers recording and would suggest the beginning of the reading to be just a bit less charged and more empathetic for the subject (losing unemployment benefits). The second recording I thought it began well but the volume started getting lower towards the end of the recording which I don’t think was intentional. The pacing was also a bit fast and would suggest slowing down a little. I would also suggest that you make your statements more affirmative sounding as some of your statements sound as if you are asking a question because you end them higher in pitch. Eg. “we are all in the same boat”; and because boat is a bit higher it does not sound as convincing as it should.
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Hey guys, I was curious if I could get some feedback on these two, especially regarding diction and pace. Also these being my first commercial and narration recordings, whether or not I’m getting a good grasp of the style and tone. The “A brief history” is the narration and the “Navy-pier” is my commercial. Thanks!
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Hello Rory, in the narration, at the beginning, everything before “daily lives” were difficult to understand. I thought the diction and pace was right on time.
On the commercial with “Navy Pier” it sounded like a narration more than a commercial. Probably some smiling would help change it some. Again the diction was great, i think the pace can be picked up a little for the commercial. -
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