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August 7, 2020 at 9:27 am #15468
David Goldberg
Edge Studio StaffHi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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April 6, 2021 at 7:34 pm #65896
adrothfield
ParticipantHi there! Looking for feedback on performance. Thanks so much!
Gillette “Shields and Cools as You Shave”
First, there’s shaving: blades, sharp and precise. Then Gillette shielding: comfy lubrication before and after. And also, cooling. Oooh, I got goosebumps. Proshield Chill from Gillette, the best a man can get.Attachments:
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April 9, 2021 at 2:50 pm #66051
jasjol71
ParticipantI also liked the delivery of the goosebumps line, but I thought you could go a little less friendly/pleasant at the end and pivot toward manly man tone. Maybe I’m just used to that with other shaving product commercials 🙂 Both were good reads!
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April 7, 2021 at 11:59 am #65920
Libby Ronon
ParticipantNice job! I think you can make your pauses between “shaving” and “blades” as well as “also” and “cooling” a millisecond shorter while still respecting the punctuation. I loved “Oooh, I got goosebumps.”
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April 6, 2021 at 7:16 pm #65892
DicksonVO
ParticipantHey Feedback Forum…tried to submit before but don’t know if my VO uploaded. Looks like it didn’t because I can’t find anything….so if at first you don’t succeed, upload again. Thanks for the feedback.
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April 7, 2021 at 8:49 am #65912
Shmuel
ParticipantI like the Advil read. Can you get me some Advil? You sound like you really are the expert on it. 😉
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April 6, 2021 at 8:11 pm #65901
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantHey Dickson – lovely performances! Really nice!!
Read 1 – I have nothing to add except for great job, you killed this!
Read 2 – I heard a few glottal stops at “every” in every move. I think you can smooth out the sentence “yet the private side of Amelia would”. The first part of that sentence can be smoothed out and I think you can forgo the comma there – just thinking that it is probably proper writing but in natural speech, we likely wouldn’t pause after saying yet. Try both ways and see what feels natural when you’re not looking at the script.”
Read 3 – Glottal stop at the o of “or longer-lasting”. There is a pause after “count (pause) on Advil”. I think it would sound more natural if you connected those words “count on Advil”. In “In a recent clinical study” you should pronounce the “a” as “ah”. You can also smooth out “no wonder doctors”, you don’t need to pause after “wonder” There were a few glottal stops throughout as well.Honestly, these are nit-picky things but will take your read from 90% to 100%. I think you’re fantastic! When I learned about glottal stops it opened my eyes on how to smooth out my reads. But it’s a HARD habit to break, I still catch myself doing it all the time.
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April 28, 2021 at 11:10 am #67022
DicksonVO
ParticipantI know it’s been a couple of weeks. I’ve been crazy busy but wanted to come back and thank you for your feedback. It’s so appreciated. I’ve been working on those pesky glottal stops. Those seem to get me more than most things and like you said it’s HARD to break. I’m open to any tips. Again, thank you for taking the time to listen and write your feedback.
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April 6, 2021 at 4:03 pm #65884
Tim-A-Doherty-VO
ParticipantHello everyone! This is my first time actually recording anything so bear with me as I learn to use my equipment properly haha. Any and all feedback would be much appreciated!! <3
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Script 1 (Commercial): Peet’s Coffee
Characters like Marie. She’s a character. She does ballet. Professionally. Because character. That’s what we’re about. Alfred Peet. Now, there was a character. He brought us craft roasted. Us, as in America. You. Me. Diane. Diane’s friend. At Peet’s, we source the best beans. We roast them. We brew them. We make great coffee. We’re Peet’s.
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Script 2 (Commercial): Advil
Muscle aches? Nothing is proven more effective or longer lasting than Advil. For long-lasting relief of muscle aches, count on Advil. In a recent clinical study, Advil was found to work better than Tylenol in relieving the pain of sore muscles the day after exercise. No wonder doctors recommend Advil for muscle aches more than any other non-prescription brand. ADVIL — Advanced medicine for pain.
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April 7, 2021 at 12:42 pm #65921
Tim-A-Doherty-VO
ParticipantThank you all very much for the feedback! I feel like I have a solid idea of what I need to change/work on for future reads 🙂
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April 7, 2021 at 8:50 am #65913
Shmuel
ParticipantTry them again with more energy.
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April 6, 2021 at 8:18 pm #65903
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantHey Tim! All good, this is a great place to learn! There are also some really awesome Facebook groups to join to get feedback or advice on audio quality like VOpreneur or something. I think something that is useful is copy and pasting the script with a few mark ups. Hope that’s ok! I’m going to copy and paste the Advil script here with most of the places you paused or micro-paused. When you pause within a sentence you break up the copy in an unnatural way. This makes it sound like you are reading, because we never speak like this in real life. Here is your script with most of the pauses in there:
Muscle aches? Nothing(pause) is proven more effective (pause) or longer lasting than Advil. For long-lasting relief of muscle aches, count on Advil. In a recent clinical study(upspeak), Advil was found to work(micro-pause) better than Tylenol in relieving the pain of sore muscles the day after exercise. No wonder doctors recommend Advil(pause) for muscle aches (pause) more than any other non-prescription brand. ADVIL — Advanced medicine for pain.
Try it again and don’t pause between the sentences. Another idea is for you to literally sing the sentence and note that there are no breaks in what you are saying. Then bring it back to talking again and try to keep it as smooth – never closing the back of your throat. Connecting words and avoiding pauses within sentences will help you to sound more natural. Then you need to think about connecting to the copy emotionally and think about who you are talking to and all that good “acting” stuff 🙂
I hope this is helpful!
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April 6, 2021 at 7:39 pm #65900
adrothfield
ParticipantHi Tim! Nice sound, but I think you’re either too close to the mic or your gain is set too high. You’ve got a nice, relaxing tone, but it’s starting to border on monotone; try spicing it up and varying tempo, volume, or pitch. Find the story within this commercial and really tell it!
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April 6, 2021 at 4:18 pm #65889
IMs
ParticipantI like your recordings: professional-sounding, Tim-A-Doherty-VO…
All the best to you!
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April 6, 2021 at 4:01 pm #65882
IMs
ParticipantA real woman is a man’s best friend.
She will never stand him up and never let him down.
She will reassure him when he feels insecure and comfort him after a bad day.
She will inspire him to do things he never thought he could do; to live without fear and forget regret.
She will enable him to express his deepest emotions and give in to his most intimate desires.
She will make sure he always feels as though he’s the most handsome man in the room and will enable him to be the most confident, s**y, seductive, and invincible. . .No wait… Sorry… I’m thinking of beer.
That’s what beer does…
Never mind!
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April 6, 2021 at 3:18 pm #65880
IMs
ParticipantAdvance Technologies >>> Thanks much!
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Welcome to Advance Technology Incorporated, and to the excitement and challenges of a growing business.
As a new employee, your job is important to us.
Your success is an important factor in the success of this company.
This software is designed to offer you accurate information about company policies and procedures, benefit packages, performance reviews, training and education opportunities.
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April 6, 2021 at 2:50 pm #65876
SuperLuke
ParticipantAs I prepare for my demo, I was told in an earlier comment that they couldn’t hear a few of my demo character samples. Turns out that after an accident, that my microphone was moved the wrong way.
So, I fixed and reset my home studio.
Please feel free to leave feedback on the performance. Also, let me know if I’m more audible than before, and if you can hear and understand what my character is saying.
Thanks
Script:
Congratulations on winning the election, Mr. President. You know, I got you elected so I could get those weapons contracts. I don’t know if it’s slipped your mind, but I’m through being patient with you. I will expose you as the fraud you’ve always been.-
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April 6, 2021 at 2:50 pm #65874
IMs
ParticipantMany thanks for your feedback!
+++++++Carnation Breakfast Essentials
Kids can change minds.
They can even change the world around us.
Packed with protein plus 21 vitamins and minerals, we nourish them with Carnation Breakfast Essentials.
Because today could change everything.
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April 6, 2021 at 2:22 pm #65870
IMs
ParticipantThanks in advance for your feedback…
Cosmos
Welcome to the planet earth.
A place of blue nitrogen skies, oceans of liquid water, cool forests, soft meadows;
A world positively rippling with life.
From the cosmic perspective, it is, for the moment, unique.
The only world on which we know with certainty that the matter of the cosmos has become alive, and aware.
There must be many such worlds scattered through space, but our search for them begins here, with the accumulated wisdom of the men and women of our species, acquired at great cost, over a million years.
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April 6, 2021 at 1:25 pm #65863
mara_sherman
ParticipantHi everyone! This is my first time posting to the feedback forum. Here are some narration scripts from the library I’ve recorded. I’m still getting familiar with Audacity, so if you have any pointers/tips on how I could’ve edited better, I’m all ears! Thanks!
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April 7, 2021 at 11:13 am #65918
Oktober10
ParticipantYou’ve got great tone. I liked your expressive first read and could hear the smile in your voice. Nice job.
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April 6, 2021 at 2:11 pm #65868
SuperLuke
ParticipantIn the first recording it sounded like you were too far away from the microphone, with a minor hum. The 2nd recording was louder. The good news is that I was able to hear you better. The bad news was that I heard a louder hum in the background. I would speak with an engineer about Audacity recordings and work on building your home studio,
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April 6, 2021 at 1:09 pm #65858
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