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Here’s another script. This is probably the longest script I’ve done so I had to record paragraph by paragraph. Is my tone consistent throughout? Does my editing still allow the script to flow from beginning to end? How about the recording setup, is it still working well? Any help is appreciated.
Weelearn
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Our experts are taken from fields of hard science, like psychology, but also areas of broader wisdom, like spirituality. And with videos broken up into digestible parts, and supplemented by exercises and games, the next step to your best self is truly only a few clicks away.
Don’t be stuck in life, love, work – or anything! Try Weelearn for yourself today.
Weelearn – learning through watching.-
:Your tone was constant and the same throughout. As for your setup, there’s a humming sound that I’m hearing when you aren’t speaking. Good job, overall. Since this sounds more like a commercial advertisement, you may want to try performing it again with more enthusiasm in your voice: i.e. when you say “Don’t be stuck in life, love, work – or anything! Try Weelearn for yourself today.
Weelearn – learning through watching”, it sounds like whoever wrote the script is happy about what they are advertising.
hope this was helpful
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I did this script some months ago and I wanted to try it again. How was my tone, pitch, tempo and recording setup? Also There are two recordings and I’d appreciate feedback on which sounded better. #1 was constructed of the script’s multiple phrases that I did different takes of, while #2 was one careful take of the whole script in one go. Thanks for the feedback.
JC Penney 6
Your brain has 2 sides. The right side: creative, buys things, has fun. The left side: organized, practical, saves money. Now JC Penney makes both sides happy. It’s the buy more, save more sale. It’s simple, the more you buy, the more you save. 20 to 30%. So use your head. Buy more. Save more. Only at JC Penney. -
Good read, your matches material quite well, diction and clearness is good too. I like the pacing as well. It is somewhat conversational, but stills sounds like your are reading more than just speaking. Overall good work, keep it up! Hope this helps.
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Hey peeps, a few more Edge practice scripts for feedback. Looking for feedback on tone- did it match the genre and what about pace? Thanks!
1. A Brief History of Time- Expanded
2. Anne E Casey Foundation
3. Podium 60-
My comments on each performance are numbered accordingly:
1. You’re on the right track. You’ve got a great voice and your read had fitting pitch and tempo for the script. The serious tone you adopted was good too although it sounds more like you’re reading than speaking. Next time, try to imagine you’re speaking to someone in front of you or maybe beside.
2. You’re pitch and tempo are still good, though I think the pauses were too long. The tone needs work, you don’t sound particularly interested in or even concerned with the Anne E Casey foundation.
3. You still don’t sound too interested, but halfway you seem to pick up the tone well. Your tempo and pitch are still really good, but the list components wound up rather bland. You should work on making each part of the list uniqe in some way so the listeners won’t get bored.I think your tone is spot on for narration, but could suit plenty of commercials too. Just remember to make your reads sound conversational.
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Hey all!
Just an amateur trying to get in some practice and figure out my niches! Feedback is always appreciated! (The file got posted twice by accident).
WORDS. THEY CAN DO ANYTHING.
THEY CAN CALL IN A DOG AT NIGHT.
THEY CAN BRING COMFORT TO AN OLD FRIEND.
THEY CAN SAY HAPPY BIRTHDAY TO A GIRL WHOSE BALLOONS ARE SLOWLY SINKING.BUT SOMETIMES, WORDS CAN GET YOU INTO TROUBLE.
LIKE THE HUMAN RIGHTS ACTIVIST WHO WAS KIDNAPPED FOR STANDING UP TO GOVERNMENT CORRUPTION.
OR THE JOURNALIST SENTENCED TO 10 YEARS IN PRISON FOR SENDING AN EMAIL.
OR THE 1000S OF MEN AND WOMEN WHO ARE ARRESTED AND TORTURED, JUST FOR DEMANDING A FAIR ELECTION.NOW, WE NEED YOUR WORDS,
TO DEMAND JUSTICE, TO TAKE A STAND, AND TO OFFER HOPE TO PEOPLE AROUND THE WORLD, WHO ARE SILENCED FOR SIMPLY SPEAKING THEIR MINDS.WRITE A LETTER OR SPEAK OUT TODAY.
YOUR WORDS CAN LEAD TO THEIR FREEDOM.WORDS. THEY CAN DO ANYTHING.
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WOW this is incredible. I love love love your tone, and can hear in your voice the emotion and passion building with each example. Only suggestion, for the final phrase of “Words, they can do anything”–maybe draw this out, and stress/elongate certain parts to get the final point across. Your voice is awesome! Also an amateur, so I feel ya 🙂
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Hello everybody, below are three Narration reads. Please feel free to provide feedback on performance and recording quality for any or all of the reads. Thank you.
NetJets 24 Hour Worldwide Medical Assistance
At NetJets, our care for our Owners means not only flying them halfway around the world in the safest way possible, but also getting them the help they need should a medical emergency arise far from home. That’s why we collaborated with Mayo clinic to develop Mayo Clinic Executive Travel Response. As an owner, you’ll receive a dedicated phone number to reach Mayo Clinic medical professionals 24 hours a day, for any medical reason. Whether you need critical care in Eastern Europe and don’t know where to turn, or just want medical advice from a trusted source closer to home, someone is always there for you.
Cats
They are hunters, with muscles taut, and eyes fixed on their intended prey. They are gentle, with fluid movement and a sensitive touch. They are regal, with a lineage that goes back to worshiped ancestors during the time of the Pharaohs. They are introspective, aloof, unpredictable, affectionate, comical and mischievous. They are cats.
Bob Ross Biography
Bob Ross. Just his name brings a calm. The soft-spoken painter who didn’t make mistakes, only “happy accidents,” painted on PBS stations in the 1980s and 1990s. His untimely death in 1995 at the age of 52 occurred just when he was exploding on the pop culture scene. He even appeared in a hip MTV spot back when MTV was hip. “MTV, the land of happy little trees.” There’s a lot people don’t know about Bob Ross, so get ready for some surprises about the guy with the sweet pipes and sweeter ‘fro.
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Sound quality is top notch. You need to put a bit more feeling in the reads. For example, with the last sentence in NetJets, you just read about Eastern Europe, but it’s an example of being in hutz-pluz, and you feel out of touch. You need to read it like the listener is on the Moon, or something uber far out like that, and then contrast it with the end of the sentence. Also with Bob Ross, you need to really convey that this guy had a really sweet voice (pipes), and a really cool hair-do. You’ve got to be Bob Ross’ No.1 fan.
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I am 100% an amateur, and I don’t have the proper mic, but have to start somewhere 🙂
Any feedback is great!
Script:
During this breathing meditation, you will focus on your breath. This will calm your mind and relax your body. There is no right or wrong way to meditate. Whatever you experience during this breathing meditation is right for you. Begin by finding a comfortable position, sitting on the floor with your legs crossed is a good position to try. Close your eyes or focus on one spot in the room. Roll your shoulders slowly forward and then slowly back. Lean your head from side to side, lowering your left ear toward your left shoulder, and then your right ear toward your right shoulder. Your body will continue to relax as you meditate. Notice how your breath flows in and out. Make no effort to change your breathing in any way, simply notice how your body breathes. Sit quietly, seeing in your mind’s eye your breath flowing gently in and out of your body.-
You have a fantastic voice for instructional videos and a great sound set up. Your read had a soothing tone that would trust with this type of read and the words you hit were just right. Your tempo however is a little too slow and you made the pauses too long. What’s more, I heard you paused in the middle of sentence 2. Pauses must be left for periods and commas, usually for no more than half a second.
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Hi Adrrianna, I really liked your read. Your tone and pace were great. Also the recording quality sounded solid. The only critique I have is the giggle in the third sentence. The listener might be somebody who is new to meditation, and may be thrown off by a giggle. But overall good job.
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Commercial: I chose this one because the subject matter – insurance – sounds like the definition of boring. So, I took it as a challenge to make it sound good. Here is the text I used:
We’ve all been there
All of a sudden, your “check engine” light comes on
Insurance covers your vehicle from accidents,
But did you know it doesn’t cover expensive breakdowns?
If your manufacturer’s warranty is expired or is about to run out,
You’ll be on the hook for unexpected repairs
Breakdowns used to mean paying thousands out of pocket … until now
No matter how miles your car has, if it’s under 20 years old, Endurance has you covered.
With Endurance’s protection, if you break down, just choose the local repair shop you trust.
Endurance pays them directly. No complicated paperwork, no checks in the mail. Endurance takes care of all of it for you.
Your plan even covers 24/7 roadside assistance: Endurance jumps your battery, tows, delivers gas, changes a flat, unlocks your car, and more!
Endurance is the No.1 trusted expert in vehicle protection
We offer affordable down payments, low monthly plans, flexible terms, and a money-back guarantee
Call now, and we’ll upgrade you to an Endurance Elite Membership free!
Call 800-370-3827 for a free price quote. That’s 800-370-3827-
Hi!
You have a very trustworthy sounding voice, which sounds great for this type of product!! Overall, I think you did a good job, especially
considering that some of these lines are a mouthful. Working on breath control (or trying to complete the longer lines in one breath if possible) may help add some extra smoothness and improve diction at the ends of sentences. Nice work! -
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I am 100% an amateur, and I don’t have the proper mic, but have to start somewhere 🙂
Any feedback is great!
Script:
During this breathing meditation, you will focus on your breath. This will calm your mind and relax your body. There is no right or wrong way to meditate. Whatever you experience during this breathing meditation is right for you. Begin by finding a comfortable position, sitting on the floor with your legs crossed is a good position to try. Close your eyes or focus on one spot in the room. Roll your shoulders slowly forward and then slowly back. Lean your head from side to side, lowering your left ear toward your left shoulder, and then your right ear toward your right shoulder. Your body will continue to relax as you meditate. Notice how your breath flows in and out. Make no effort to change your breathing in any way, simply notice how your body breathes. Sit quietly, seeing in your mind’s eye your breath flowing gently in and out of your body.
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A Haunting Title
In this world, there is real evil.
In the darkest shadows and in the most ordinary places.
These are the true stories of the innocent and the unimaginable.
Between the things we see and the things we fear, there are doors.
When they are opened,
Nightmares become reality.-
Hi IMs,
This sounds like it is for an intro to a haunted house at a theme park, or some such. IMO, you put too much character in it, UNLESS the director specifically wanted that. The audio is also not good, there is too much P and S, and distortion.
I like the fact that you changed the stress when you said “doors”. I would try it again, using that change to show that the doors are the most scary and unpredictable thing here.
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Educational Explainer Video Intro Only – Real Estate
Would you like to buy a house?
Maybe it’s your first house, or even your 2nd and you just think that MAYBE you didn’t think hard enough about the last one.
Listen, I love Real Estate. And in most cases, even a bad deal can work to your advantage in the very long run.
But there are dumb things that people do without realizing it when they buy a house.
Humor me for a short story before we get into the meat of this video.
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