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  • #15468
    David Goldberg
    Edge Studio Staff

    Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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  • #66164
    Don Sack
    Participant

    Yet one more for “home work”!

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    • #66207
      JasonCawley
      Participant

      Hey Don,

      The pacing is great on this one, your voice is very suited for this type of read. A good resonance to set the tone as warm and welcoming.

      • #66264
        Don Sack
        Participant

        Thanks Jason, so appreciate the feedback. This was my pick of three I did (I title and save everything).
        Don

    • #66181
      John Trape
      Participant

      Hi Don,

      I think all three of your scripts sound so professional. I was concentrating on pitch, pace, and tone and simply have nothing to offer other than praise.

      Regards,

      John

      • #66263
        Don Sack
        Participant

        Thanks so much John! We shall see what Art has to say. LOL, it took a a bunch of takes until I realized I was my own worst critic and to heck with it, just submit the d**n things!
        Don

  • #66161
    Don Sack
    Participant

    Bil-Bo!
    Ha! You’ve got to be a “ringer”! Those two productions were great!!

  • #66159
    nettipo1
    Participant

    Thank you for any feedback you can provide!

    Discoverykids.com
    You know when you take your shoes off and have to scratch your feet? Chances are you have fungus on your feet. While you’re running around all day in your sneakers, your foot becomes warm and sweaty. This is the human environment fungus love the most. Imagine millions of tiny fungi crawling around, feeding off all the slimy stuff in between your toes? That’s right – toe cheese is dinner for fungi. As they bug around eating, they’re also dying, breeding and pooping, which could irritate your skin, making you want to scratch it. Scratching feels good, but washing your feet regularly is better than allowing your foot to be a cafeteria for millions of fungi. To find out more yucky stuff, go to DiscoveryKids.com now.

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    • #66187
      alyssamb
      Participant

      Hello, I really love your voice. I felt captivated by the tone of your voice and the pitch. I have nothing but positive things to say about your VO!

      • #66220
        nettipo1
        Participant

        Thank you so much for your feedback, I appreciate it!

  • #66156
    Don Sack
    Participant

    Hey All!
    Submitting two scripts for your listening pleasure and feedback of course! My homework for Art
    Don Sack @ 2105 Studios

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  • #66152
    Lilbelle1487
    Participant

    Hey Here is another reel for my homework. I’ve updated my sound and mic. Looking for healthy criticism. This is script from an audition I’ve recently done.

    As you learn the world… I’m so proud to call you mine You’re captivated when we read, And your happy belly protects you all day long!
    You’re eager to talk, And excited to walk! That’s why I choose Enspire for you… With nutrients to support your growth, and fuel your big ambitions!”

    I’ve also redone the Johnson’s Baby Shampoo.

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    • #66162
      nettipo1
      Participant

      Hello! The volume level needs to be much higher. I think there might be a blog on the Edge site about what the acceptable range should be for your recordings. I think the main thing to consider focusing on is the conversational aspect about both scripts, and if you can picture who you’re talking to, so in this case your baby, and deliver the lines as if you’re really talking to him, then that might help make it sound more connected. Also consider how you’re feeling in that moment, maybe cherishing the private time you are having with your baby boy, and let that feeling show through in your words. Both scripts have great potential for you, so keep at it!

  • #66148
    JasonCawley
    Participant

    Hello, any feedback is appreciated – Thank you.

    ” Welcome to the planet earth. A place of blue nitrogen skies, oceans of liquid water, cool forests, soft meadows; A world positively rippling with life. From the cosmic perspective, it is, for the moment, unique. The only world on which we know with certainty that the matter of the cosmos has become alive, and aware. There must be many such worlds scattered through space, but our search for them begins here, with the accumulated wisdom of the men and women of our species, acquired at great cost, over a million years. ”

    Also, does anyone have any tips for getting back to their posts asides from clicking through pages and pages of posts looking for theirs? I feel like I miss the old forum style quite a bit.

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    • #66188
      alyssamb
      Participant

      You have a really calming, captivating voice. I think the speed of your voice is also on point.Great job.

  • #66140
    Toque
    Participant

    Hi all. Demo day is later this month. This isn’t one of the scripts I’ll be using, but I’m just trying to put in some general practice. Would appreciate feedback on any/all aspects. Thanks! Toque

    Script:

    Hey…if life were perfect, magazines would never smell like perfume, dogs would walk themselves, and algebra would really come in handy. Well, look on the bright side, at least there’s AMSTEL LIGHT. It has only 95 calories, but you still get real imported taste. You don’t give up a thing. Who says nothing’s perfect?…Amstel light.

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    • #66175
      SuperLuke
      Participant

      Good recording. I liked the way you delivered everything. Although, I think you should make the word “Amstel” stand out, like “Amstel light is…”

  • #66133
    acbattag
    Participant

    Hello!
    Looking for some feedback on both tone and pace for this one specifically! If you hear anything in the background my heat is running and my fingers were too cold to sacrifice it for the recording!

    “Do you know me? Probably not. In my business, recognition is always important, but when I’m buying goods online, I prefer a little privacy. With Private Payments from American Express, I get the security of a unique number created for each business transaction I make. Because my private information is my business, and American Express keeps it that way.”

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    • #66182
      John Trape
      Participant

      Oh yes, that is so polished. As noted by SuperLuke and Nettipo1, the quality of your recording, your friendly tone, and the clear, clear enunciation. Well done!

      Regards,

      John

    • #66163
      nettipo1
      Participant

      Hello! I really like the quality of your recording… I don’t hear any heater running at all! I like the clarity and pacing of your read, and I also like the friendly nature of your voice. The read has a neutral feeling overall, so I would suggest adding more emphasis on the phrases about keeping things private, as those phrases seem to be the important thing that you are relating to with the listener.

      • #66205
        acbattag
        Participant

        Thank you so much! I really appreciate that feedback!

      • #66174
        SuperLuke
        Participant

        That was a great recording and performance. You really nailed it. Great job.

        • #66206
          acbattag
          Participant

          Thank you SuperLuke!

  • #66111
    SuperLuke
    Participant

    As my demo day is approaching, I wanted to practice performing a character from “The Legend of Korra”. Zaheer was my favorite villain in the series and I wanted to see if my studio is in good shape.
    Please leave your feedback on my recording and performance

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    • #66135
      acbattag
      Participant

      Hi SuperLuke!
      First the tone, pace, pitch, etc are all great in this read. If you are looking for quality of recording the room you are in sound nice and silent. However, I had a bit of a hard time hearing you at times, I would check the output of the recording and make sure it’s hitting the correct dB – when I took the Audacity class we were looking for it to hit from -6 to 0. If you are much lower than -12 it’s going to be hard for the person receiving the audio.

      Best of luck to you in your demo recording!
      -Amber

      • #66173
        SuperLuke
        Participant

        Thanks for the advice Amber. Yes, I’m in a quiet enough room. And you’re right about the -12/ -6 db thing too. I was trying not to spike in my recording, and I felt more like I was “reading the script” as opposed to performing the Philosophical antagonist. I’ll try it again later, considering your advice.

        • #66176
          SuperLuke
          Participant

          I raised the Gain a little bit via, the engineers request. And I decided to perform it again, staying in the right dB levels, hopefully you can hear everything I say, within the right range.
          Please give me feedback on the performance and recording.

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  • #66090
    danielh04
    Participant

    Hello everyone, back with some homework, I tried finding scripts that I would most likely be fitting for my voice but regardless, feedback is greatly appreciated!

    1) ACURA RDX
    Great design challenges more than just the eyes. It challenges the future. We designed the RDX to challenge not just the future of SUVs, but also the future of Acura. The future starts now. The future is the Acura RDX.

    Acura. Everything we ever imagined. And then some.

    2) Pizza Hut
    Only Pizza Hut gives you sixteen mozzarella bites on a large pizza!
    See kids? Dreams do come true!
    The ultimate 2 for 1!
    The mozzarella poppers pizza!
    Hurry and try it before it’s gone!
    No one out pizzas the hut.

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    • #66136
      acbattag
      Participant

      Hi Daniel!
      These scripts will be great for you. I agree with Luke – you want to have some variety in your reads. These both came across very similar with inflection, pace and tone. A few more things to consider working on. In your Acura script – you’ll want to watch pronunciation (look up how to pronounce Acura on YouTube). As well, when you say future – it sounds like you are saying feature. So be careful there. I can really tell you are trying to connect the words in each of the sentences, but they are a little to connected and sounds like you aren’t giving yourself enough time to experience the words themselves. Also, a great recommendation from all of my coaches is – who are you speaking to? Think about that for each of the scripts to see if that can help you change them up a bit. Sorry this is a lot! Hope it was helpful!
      -Amber

    • #66121
      SuperLuke
      Participant

      Good job with the performances and the recordings.

      Critique: I would make the 2 commercials sound a little different from each other, it can help you add and explore some of the variety in your voice. Also, maybe add more excitement and enthusiasm in your commercial performance, make the audience want to buy the product, and want to listen to your performance. You sound a little too calm or laid back.

      hope this was a helpful critique

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