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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hey all, this is a video I narrated for a company’s YouTube channel. I know the subject matter probably isn’t for everyone, but I’d appreciate any and all feedback you may have! Whenever I do narrations for them, I sort of talk like I’m announcing so I’m not sure if I’d say it’s my “true” voice, but they seem to like it so I haven’t changed much haha.. Personally, I feel like I sometimes beat people over the head with the emphasizing, but I also feel it’s important to point out the important terms in guide-styled videos like these. What do you think? https://youtu.be/NTdA4mBVBlY
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Pretty good. Perfect casting by the way. Audio is spot on. A couple of truly minor quibbles: I might consider varying the energy a bit here and there. It’s high throughout the whole vid. OK, it’s for gamers, and that’s the way they are, but after a couple of minutes I found myself kind of zoning out, and you don’t want that. Dunno, maybe it’s me (I’m not a gamer). Another thing, but this regards the directing: telling about an example of edge play, then pulling back and showing how it’s done *with your voice silent*. Your voice is there all the time, so if it goes silent for a few moments, I think it would actually draw attention. But this is all subjective, don’t forget. Again, great job in general.
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Hi all,
Just starting on my narration coaching and would love any and all feedback on my first practice recording.
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Hi gabe. I’ve not had any narration training yet, just commercials, so take my feedback for what its worth. I think there are so many aspects that are great (volume recording levels, enunciation, etc.) One thing that did stand out for me was that, rather than the authoritative, “G*d’s stenographer”-type read I often hear, it felt like the read had a more “I’ve got a secret to tell you” kind of vibe. Not sure if that’s what you were going for? Also, the recording sounded a tad hollow/echo-y. Perhaps some more absorption treatment is required in your booth? Toque
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Hi everyone! Here are some practice commercial scripts I recorded for homework. Thank you in advance for your feedback!
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Good voice, and the audio was perfect, didn’t hear any noise or background. At one point, on first listen, I though the first read was about a daughter whose elderly parent is in the hospital and is now incontinent. But after listening again, it sounds like an every day mother who just had a little girl. I think I thought it was about an elderly parent because when you started you were a bit “down”. And having an elderly parent in that situation is certainly a downer. So, I would consider ” upping” it a bit, remembering that having a baby is a very positive and happy event, even though it can be nerve-wracking for a first-time mother. And discovering that her skin is so delicate is a real discovery, like “”hey did you realize that a baby’s skin is REALLLLY delicate? Wow. And the solution that solves all our problems is – Pampers. Of course, it’s obvious, why didn’t I think of that. ” Something like that. It would give the read more kick, I think. Keep at it, you sound great !
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Hello,
Any feedback is appreciated.
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Just as Einstein changed the way we understand time and space, and Freud changed the way we understand the workings of the human psyche, Charles Darwin changed forever the way we look at natural forms. The shapes of bodies, of finches’ beaks and fishes’ fins, were not fixed at some moment of creation; rather, forms evolved and were altered by circumstance. “Life On Earth” is a great collection of individual stories, natural histories that, while sounding Kiplingesque–how the snail got its shell, how the bacterium got its DNA–give us a deeper appreciation of the world and our place in it. This episode of Natural History shows how scientists continue to interpret the narratives embodied in natural forms.-
Sound is great, no background noise or distortion. Your voice is good, too. Diction good, enunciation good. This read needs a bit of a kick. Be excited by watching this show, it’s really cool, even if you don’t think it’s cool. I want to find out the narrative in why that praying mantis on the window sill appears the way he appears.
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Hello All. I’m re-submitting an Edge script for feedback. (I’ve now resolved the file naming issue on my computer.) Your comments are welcome. Thank you!
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Here are 3 practice commercial scripts I recorded as homework for my coach. I’d appreciate any feedback/tips. Thanks!
AMERICAN TIRE SUPPLY
Free. Now when’s the last time ya’ heard that? A while…right? Well at American Tire Supply, when you buy one all-weather radial tire, you get another one free! Plus, get a free alignment! Hey, with a deal like this, how can you NOT afford to visit. So hurry on down to your local American Tire Supply, where you can still hear the word free. Subject to dealer participation.MOVIE GALLERY
Have you ever noticed what happens when you put in a movie?
It’s amazing.
You just stick it in,
Sit back,
Hit play, and…
P**f.
The rest of the world just disappears.
Gone.
Suddenly, it’s just you and your family.
You remember them. Your family. Some of them look like you.
At Movie Gallery, we have thousands of great movies. Including your favorite holiday movies plus the latest releases. And every one of them is guaranteed to have the same magical powers.Movie Gallery.
Play on.A 1 STEAK SAUCE
With steak, you want to make every bite count. That’s why we use A-1 Steak Sauce. A-1 brings out every single bite of steak, or even hamburger. Mmmmm, delicious. For me, there’s only one steak sauce, A-1. Because A-1 has all the taste that makes every bite count-
Hiya JB, Sound great, no noise or distortion. Voice good as well. Listened to the first one only. Recommendations: The theme here is Free. Free here is a special word. Treat it with the respect and reverence it deserves. There is also a hint to “Land of the Free and Home of the Brave”. After all, Free is also an American slogan. Be more excited.
Also, I would ask your coach what to do about the last sentence, “”subject to dealer participation”. It seems to me that you should read that quickly with a different tone. It’s less important than the other stuff, but needs to be said. It would be interesting to hear what your coach says about that, maybe I’m way off on this. Wish you success! -
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This is a unique script from the library, a while back. It was written by Richurd. Thanks for listening any comments most welcome!
Where is the home of your heart?
The machinations of man covets
and squanders our time as though it
were of some significant value.
Our hearts become preoccupied
with issues and perplexities
that never seem to go away.
So debilitating are it’s affects we
long for solace.
The heart longs for a place of respite.
Invariably we are drawn back to the land.
The earths constancy and tranquil
endurance washes over us, cleansing us.
A vast array of landscapes
that all have the same effect.
They take back the space that is stolen by man
and fills your heart with a calm and pleasant reward.
You can travel the world of man with your heart
but it is the land that you will come home to.
This grand earth in all it’s splendor,
is the place we call home.
Our fondest memories are
bound up in the land on which we stand.
Memories of times that are now lost to
the machinations of man.
A new generation can never know
nor recover all that has been lost
and that is now preserved only in our memory.
A day will come that is not so far away
when even that treasure trove will fade and disappear.
Yet from this land we can draw strength that all will not be lost.
For within it’s soil are the seeds of renewal.
Therein lies the hope that mellows our souls,
the hope that all that man has wrought
the earth will erase.
The earth will once again be a place
we can call home.Written and contributed by Richurd
Music Bed : Susan Boyle – Mull of Kintyre – Windsor 2012 -
Hi all! Looking for feedback on performance as well as overall sound quality (my first attempt at using my DAW to make a better recording). Thanks!
Fitbit Sense “Transform Your Health”
Smart tech is everywhere: smart fridge, smart car, smart doorbell. But FitBit makes you smart about your health. It’s more than a smartwatch; it’s a smarter way to transform your health.-
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I think the use of the interrogative inflection on “smart doorbell” is a good touch. I wonder if you’re attempting to talk a little lower than your natural voice range once or twice (e.g., the word “everywhere” near the beginning). In “it’s a smarter way to transform your health,” I hear you emphasizing both “smarter” and “transform.” I wonder how it would sound if you only emphasized one of those two words. Good read overall, I think.
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Bermuda
RELAX, RECHARGE, UNWIND…You might be thinking to yourself, “What is there to do in a 21-square mile paradise? Well, you’re in for a surprise. And a pleasant one at that. Whether you seek adventure by land or by sea, you’ll find it in Bermuda. If you dream it, you can do it in Bermuda.-
I think you have a great voice and the right idea with this script, it just needs a little finesse. You start off nice and slow and relaxing, and then kind of speed up and take us out of the relaxation. Try keeping it at the same chill pace throughout and use pitch modification to highlight what’s relaxing about Bermuda. Look up some pictures of Bermuda beaches to get you in that mindset and try reading it at a moderately slow pace throughout and I think it will naturally come out really nicely from your voice and natural inflection.
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Hi Wes, great voice, sound is perfect. Agree with Adroth here that you need to map out what you are saying. Usually the third item should be a bit more special, not just a list. Like say “UNWIND” with more of a stress. You need to act it out. What is there to do in a 21 sq mile paradise Should sound like a slightly frustrated person asking a question. And the surprise should sound fun. Make sure Bermuda is stressed somehow. Bermuda is the star here. Wish you success !
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Pioneer Speakers
There is more out there. More to see. More to hear. More to feel. There is more beauty, excitement, wonder and adrenaline. Where everything you watch, everything you listen to, everything you experience, you experience as though for the very first time. Pioneer– seeing and hearing like never before.-
Sound great, no noise or distortion. Voice sounds good. My $0.02 : Vary the emotion and the level. Contrast ” feel ” vs seeing and hearing. Same with ” adrenaline “. Ditto with ” the first time”. Remember, the first time you see or hear or do something, it’s special. Let’s hear that special in your voice.
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Good voice! You’re articulating very well, but I think sometimes the articulation comes at the cost of a natural flow. “More to see, more to hear, more to feel,” for instance, ends up sounding a bit detached. Can those words flow together a little more, as though you were simply talking to another person? “Where everything you watch, everything you listen to, everything you experience” is the best part of the read. Good variation in that three-item list, and decent flow. After that, I feel like your energy drops a little, and your pauses cause a bit of a “choppy” sound. Maybe try reading it with absolutely no punctuation, just letting everything flow together, and then start putting the punctuation back in, making the pauses fewer and shorter. I think this could be a really excellent read with just a little tinkering.
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Hi Greg,
You made some nice choices with inflection and you have a clear, resonant voice. At times it sounds as if you’re reading. I suggest a more conversational tone. This has more of a radio announcer feel.
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