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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Viking River Cruises
Come away with us on a journey to more fascinating destinations than you could ever encounter any other way. Sail the legendary waterways into the heart of the world’s greatest cities with Viking River Cruises. Elegant. Stylish. Exceptionally Comfortable. Spend less time getting there and more time being there.-
I think the best part of your read is “Elegant, stylish, exceptionally comfortable.” It’s the most committed-sounding part of the read. At the very beginning, the “C” on the first word explodes a bit excessively. It’s clear that you’ve chosen words to emphasize. When you’re not emphasizing words, however, I think the tone sometimes falls a little flat. It sounds like you placed a comma between “waterways” and “into,” which makes it sound like you’re emphasizing the word “into.” I wonder what it would sound like if you didn’t have that little pause there. Great voice!
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Hi all, looking for feedback on anything, including the read and recording quality. Thank you!
Script:
What’s that hissing noise? It’s a boa constrictor! These snakes have been known to grow up to 18 feet long. Unlike other snakes they don’t use their poison to catch their prey–instead they squeeze their victims. Oh, now that’s a hug you don’t want to experience. -
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Breyer’s Vienetta
Breyer’s has created a spectacular ice cream dessert called Vienetta. But, despite its delicious premium ice cream, and its irresistible crisp, chocolatey layers — Vienetta will leave you with one small problem … VIENETTA FROM BREYER’S … one slice is never enough.SIMPLY ORANGE “ORANGE JUICE” 30 SEC TV COMMERCIAL
(BIRDS, CRICKETS, OUTDOOR NOISE ETC. SFX)
WELCOME. TO THE SIMPLY ORANGE TOUR.
THIS IS OUR PLANT. (VIDEO ORANGE GROVE)
THESE ARE OUR WORKERS. (VIDEO ORANGES)
AND THIS…IS UPPER MANAGEMENT. (VIDEO LOOKING UP AT BEAMING SUN)
BUT WHAT YOU WON’T FIND AROUND HERE…IS ANY FREEZING…FLAVORING…
OR CONCENTRATING.
WHICH BRINGS US TO OUR END PRODUCT.
SIMPLY ORANGE. (VIDEO PITCHER OF ORANGEJUICE)
HONESTLY SIMPLE.
(HOOT OWL SFX) (VIDEO OWL ON TREE LIMB)
THAT’S JUST THE NIGHT WATCHMAN.ARNOLD BREAD 30 SEC RADIO
THE ARNOLD BREAD MAN. WHEN I WAS JUST A LITTLE KID, HE’D MAKE DELIVERIES TO OUR HOUSE EVERY DAY, JUST LIKE THE MILKMAN AND THE ICEMAN. I REMEMBER TO THIS DAY, THOSE SPECIAL TINY LOAVES HE CARRIED AND THE BIG SMILE ON HIS FACE WHEN HE GAVE ME ONE. I KNOW THE ARNOLD BREAD MAN DOESN’T DELIVER ANYMORE, BUT EVERY DAY I CAN STILL SEE A VARIETY OF ARNOLD’S BREADS ON THE GROCER’S SHELVES — SO I KNOW HE’S STILL AROUND.
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I love your voice! It’s got a beautiful sound to it! I did the Words recording as well but yours sounds so on point and I like how the emotions in your voice change with that read. The pace and your varying pitch is also great – although I felt you dropped off a little at the end of your sentences making it sound a bit like you were reading.
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Hello,
Any feedback is appreciated. Working towards that conversational feel while maintaining a clear voice.
So what is the fate of the universe? how will it all end? Cosmologists have thought about this for a long time. Many have come to the conclusion that the end will come in more of a wimper then a bang. it is known as the heat death. and it begins with a decrease in the rate of star formation. looking up in the southern sky allows us to see a hint of this process.
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Hi Jason – your voice is clear and words are well enunciated. My only comment is that for me, the first two questions don’t sound like questions in your read – they sound more like statements and therefore sounding like you’re reading. It also sounded like you relaxed more as the read went on ending more conversational than you started.
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Chello! I’m Vicky and with any success you’ll find two practice scripts submitted for your feedback as I work toward the development of my commercial demo. These scripts were obviously not recorded in a professional (or even quasi professional)studio, but your constructive critique is welcomed. Thanks for giving me a listen!
~Atlanta Bread Company
When you think of Atlanta Bread Company, don’t just think “bread”. Think of an entire breakfast menu – fresh-baked pastries, hot breakfast sandwiches and specialty coffees. Think of our Café with savory sandwiches, daily soups, and crisp salads. And don’t forget…we can cater your next special event or meeting! Atlanta Bread Company – more than just bread.~Advil
Muscle Aches? Nothing is proven more effective or longer lasting than Advil. For long-lasting relief of muscle aches, count on Advil. In a recent clinical study, Advil was found to work better than Tylenol in relieving the pain of sore muscles the day after exercise. No wonder doctors recommend Advil for muscle aches more than any other non-prescription brand. ADVIL—-Advanced medicine for pain.-
Hey Vicky,
Great voice! I enjoyed both of these reads and think your voice fits them. For the Advil one, I think you could hit Muscle Aches with a little more of an inquisitive tone.
The recording quality on Atlanta Bread Company came through better for sure, not sure what you did differently recording wise, but you should try to replicate that level in your recordings. The background noise sounds like it could be a computer fan? If so, just relocating your microphone might help you.
Good stuff !!
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Great suggestion re: using a more inquisitive tone for that “muscle ache” line, thanks! Yes, you’re absolutely right about the sound quality difference between the reads. I’m pretty sure I recorded them on 2 different devices-smh. I was just happy to finally get something posted. For me it was quite the ordeal! I’ll be working to have future posts with better quality. Thanks again for your feedback!!
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Hello good people! Here is a recording for any and all feedback. Working on sounding conversational, energized and appropriate for the topic of Tae Bo, which I used to do and love! Let me know what you think. Thank you!
Mary
Tae Bo
Energizing, explosive, powerful, uplifting…That’s how superstar athletes, Hollywood celebrities and thousands of people just like you describe TAE BO, “the hottest workout in America”. Personally developed by 7-time World Martial Arts Champion Billy Blanks, TAE BO blends your own hidden strength with the ancient arts of self-defense, dance, and boxing combined with today’s greatest music. TAE BO is unlike any workout program you’ve ever tried before! Order now and you’ll receive 2 videos–an instructional video in which Billy Blanks clearly and simply teaches you the fundamental movements, and a second video in which Billy Blanks leads you through the TAE BO basics.-
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Hi Mary, What a great recording, good match for your voice! I liked your conversational and energetic tone, your pacing and sound was really good too!
And I found your comments on sound equipment, so helpful to know what you’ve been using and will check out Sweetwater too. And I will definitely sign up for the equipment class! Thank you!!! 🙂
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Here’s my homework for your review, comments/suggestions always appreciated! 🙂
NO!-Six Flags
Kids hate the word no. As in no you can’t stay up late, no you can’t have more ice cream and no, you may not paint the cat. No, no, NO! Well isn’t it time for a yes? We think so. Six Flags Great Adventure. Yes!Dove Sensitive Skin Commercial
There are products made for sensitive skin. But there’s nothing quite like sensitive skin dove – It’s the mildest, perfume free sensitive skin bar ever made. No wonder, Doves the one that dermatologists recommend most to keep your skin looking healthy and feeling soft. Dove. For the beauty that’s already there.-
Hi Julie, good recordings! I liked your energy and inflections for both, and the contrast between the two. Good job and they really fit your voice!
Also, I commented on your comment to my comment on sound equipment from about a week ago, just check back about 4 pages and you should be able to find it. Let me know if you have more questions! I’m definitely just learning this myself. Thanks!
Mary
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Hi everyone! Uploading two contrasting ads. I am on a commercial demo track. Thanks in advance for your feedback.
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