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  • #15468
    David Goldberg
    Edge Studio Staff

    Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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  • #66255
    JasonCawley
    Participant

    Hello!

    Any and all feedback appreciated. Tried to keep this conversational.
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    We are the masters of our planet. And for 200,000 years our intelligence has allowed us to rule unchallenged. But those days are drawing to a close. A new intelligence is rising … Artificial Intelligence. Our greatest scientists are on the verge of creating machines capable of independent thought. With intellects that could one day surpass our own. A singular event that will dramatically change life as we know it. What would a world dominated by super intelligent machines be like for us ? Paradise ? Or a nightmare ! Will it mean immortality … or extinction ? One thing we do know. The process has already begun. The Singularity is near. And there’s no turning back.

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  • #66247
    TimDKietzman
    Participant

    Hey everyone, I’m working on an audition for the contest. What do you think? Did I pull off their request for a classic narrator that is smooth, easy, relaxed? Thanks for your help

    Amelia Earhart
    Amelia Earhart dared to go where no one had gone before. The public adored the pioneering pilot. And news reels of the day captured her every move. Yet the private side of Amelia would always remain an enigma.

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    • #66254
      JasonCawley
      Participant

      Hey Tim,

      This does feel smooth, easy and relaxed. You have a good voice for this type of read. I’m not sure if you’re looking for feedback on the recording quality/editing but it sounds like there’s a cut before the “Yet the private side”. I like to keep a separate track of room noise for this purpose. You can fade out the vocal track right after the word “move” and with the room track running in tandem, it will keep it sounding like one take.

  • #66240
    TimDKietzman
    Participant

    Some people have said that my recent uploads sound like I’m reading and not speaking. In this take, I tried only glancing at the script and speaking to someone imaginary. Do you think I pulled it off? Any other feedback on my tone, tempo and pitch will be appreciated.

    Butterball
    Butterball brings you the joys of turkey day. Friends and family drop in to bask in the warmth of the season. Celebrate this summer with Butterball turkey on the grill. Tender, juicy, surprisingly simple. HAPPY THANKSGRILLING from Butterball.

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  • #66238
    TimDKietzman
    Participant

    Hey everyone, I’ve done some more recording. This was the first script I ever uploaded and I wanted to do it again with my new setup. I appreciate any feedback on my performance, but in particular do you think it sounds consistent from beginning to end? How about my recording setup? Thanks.

    Alamo
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  • #66224
    ryanp.bogie
    Participant

    Hey everyone. Here are some recordings for my homework. Any feedback is appreciated. Thank you!

    Gameboy
    Its not just another mind-numbing family road trip to Grandma’s. It’s a tongue-biting, seat-wetting ride with GAME BOY ADVANCED ! Now with wider screen, enhanced graphics, and multi-player options. Game boy…ride with it.

    Lens Crafters
    Helping people see is our calling. It’s what drives us all at Lens Crafters, the ability we have to give people better vision. We all feel that way. It’s who we really are as people. The smile that I get when people try on their glasses for the first time, that’s what it’s all about. Every hour, every day, we’re helping someone see.

    Wendy’s — Bacon Swiss Burger
    What’s so special about Wendy’s new Bacon Swiss Burger? Bacon. Special Sauce. Swiss cheese. More bacon. All on a toasted kaiser bun. It’s the only bacon swiss burger with three strips of bacon! Mmmm. Doesn’t that sound delicious? WENDY’S NEW BACON SWISS BURGER. Come on in now and grab one while they’re hot!

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    • #66237
      Christy Spadafore
      Participant

      Hi Ryan! I really like the tone and texture of your voice. Of these three readings, Wendy’s was my favorite. I felt like there was more variety, and I could really hear the excitement! I think in the Gameboy script there’s a nice opportunity for some contrast between the first two lines, which could grab the listener’s interest. Nice work!

      • #66242
        TimDKietzman
        Participant

        Well, I have to say Ryan you have a special voice that I’m sure many would love to hear in commercials. You have a clear strike zone with sarcasm, humor, and excitement. The way you enunciated the words in all three scripts was good, however I think your tempo sounded very forced and choppy. This in turn makes the “tone” sound inconsistent throughout. A good read has to sound as if your speaking to someone and trying to woo them. Listeners of this I feel would more likely be eyeing the exit sign… My advice, listen to actual commercials and when reading, pretend your saying the words to someone in person. Hope this helps.

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  • #66216
    danvasq4030
    Participant

    Hey Everyone! Seems like a lot of people are also putting up their VO HW too and Im no exception! Any and all feed back is appreciated!

    Ancient Mysteries
    Be it endless fascination with the Bible, or chilling tales of Gothic horror, man has been compelled by the wonders of the unknown since the beginning of time. From the possible existence of Big Foot to the grips of a mummy’s curse. Uncover the truth behind “Ancient Mysteries” tonight on Channel 4…NBC.Bread
    When you think of Atlanta Bread Company, don’t just think ‘bread’. Think of an entire breakfast menu – fresh-baked pastries, hot breakfast sandwiches and specialty coffees. Think of our Cafe with savory sandwiches, daily soups and crisp salads. And don’t forget…we can cater your next special event or meeting! Atlanta Bread Company – more than just bread.

    Crayola
    Crayola Color Wonder Markers color only on special paper. So your kids can express their creativity more often…in more places…with less mess. Crayola Color Wonder. It starts with Crayola.

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    • #66245
      TimDKietzman
      Participant

      Hey man, I love your voice and I’m do like the tempo and pitch of your performance. The tone you adopted though sounds the same in each script. I think only the first script sounds good with that. Consider your audience and let that determine what type of performance you should adopt. Also, I distinctly heard you pausing midsentence and it sounded like you were struggling to pronounce certain words like “ancient” and “their.” You must leave pausing for periods, commas, question marks etc. I hope this helps.

  • #66212
    aylinsings
    Participant

    Hello-

    My commercial homework for the week. I am working on authenticity and also not going into my vocal fry too much. I look forward to any feedback!
    Thanks!

    Spotify:
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    Sandals:
    Somewhere in the Caribbean, there are 5-star luxury resorts where it’s all-inclusive, all the time.
    Sandals, where love is all you need. Because everything else is included. Call 1-800-SANDALS

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    • #66246
      TimDKietzman
      Participant

      Your performance is magnificent! You adopted a great tone and it was consistent throughout the entirety of each script. The words you hit were spot on and I love the pace of your tempo. Only things I noticed were your pausing in the middle of a sentence. Every coach will tell you to leave pauses for full stops and commas. Also, your recording sounds a little echoey so I would work on modifying your setup. Keep up the good work!

  • #66208
    JasonCawley
    Participant

    Hey, any feedback is appreciated. Thank you

    “We go about our daily lives understanding almost nothing of the world. We give little thought to the machinery that generates the sunlight that makes life possible, to the gravity that glues us to an Earth that would otherwise send us spinning off into space, or to the atoms of which we are made and on whose stability we fundamentally depend. Except for children (who don’t know enough not to ask the important questions), few of us spend much time wondering why nature is the way it is; where the cosmos came from, or whether it is always here; if time will one day flow backward and effects precede causes; or whether there are ultimate limits to what humans can know.”

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    • #66250
      TimDKietzman
      Participant

      You did great Jason! You had a consistent tone, you hit all the right words, and the tempo was fitting. Only thing I would suggest is you sounded like you were trying to finish the script too quickly and it made you say the words wrong. Other than that, well done.

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  • #66189
    mara_sherman
    Participant

    Hello everyone! Here are some Narration recordings I did for homework. Thank you in advance for your feedback!

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    • #66266

      Hi Mara, I really liked the Delta/Tesla recordings as well, both natural and professional! Perhaps the diabetes one could have more inflection to make it more conversational?

    • #66257
      Tommy Fahrner
      Participant

      You have a natural, pleasant and welcoming tone to your voice that cuts through. You are definitely in control of your instrument and “in the pocket” for all 3 clips.

    • #66203
      ritadebur
      Participant

      Hi Mara – Your voice is absolutely suited to the Delta and Tesla recordings – they sounded completely professional – loved them!
      I think the diabetes one was also good but I think it could be more conversational?

  • #66167
    edixon310
    Participant

    Getting back to recording. I would appreciate some feedback.

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    • #66215
      aylinsings
      Participant

      Hello!

      Great job on these!

      With the first one, I enjoyed the pacing. I do think you can go even deeper into the emotion. For example the words “please, please!” I didn’t necessarily believe you were actually begging. But the read is totally in the right direction.

      For the second, I think you can speed up the pacing just slightly. Watch the micro pauses between “dogs” and “would walk themselves” and “algebra” and “would really come in handy.” Aside from that, I think it is a solid read!

      Cheers

      • #66228
        edixon310
        Participant

        That’s very helpful, thank you. I really appreciate it.

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