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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hello All! Would lover your feedback, especially on tone and pace. I know I have a couple of hard “p” sounds in there so working on that piece. Thanks so much!
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Available at the Home Depot-
Overall, I think this is quite good. I think the pace is fine, and the tone is good. You mentioned having a couple of extra-hard plosives in this read. I hear that, and I wonder if it might partly be the result of over-stressing words that don’t need to be stressed that much. “Power” and “double” sound less like you’re naturally stressing them, and more like you decided to stress them, if that makes any sense. The emphasis in “you could” seems a little bumpy as well. Again, though, there’s a lot of good stuff in this read. I think you have a good sense of the pace, and your tone overall is a natural, “relatable” one. I think you’re generally hitting the pause lengths just fine.
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Hello!
Few more practice reads, any feedback is welcomed!
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It’s date night in America, and roughly 21 million people are going out. That’s great for Dave, because he’s also going for a night out. Only he’s making some extra cash by driving with Uber.-
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Hi Daniel –
For the Pedigree one – I really like how you said “just how dogs like it”. I got the feel that it was actually a dog trying to sell the product to their owner. I wonder if you take that approach to the tone if you’ll be able to gain more energy into the read. The read was very smooth though. I recall some of your earlier posts and can tell that you’ve been working on it. One other element is to work a bit on the diction to bring a little more clarity to your words. I am now doing a vocal warm-up before recording and this has helped me a ton. Here’s a link to what I use if you are interested.https://youtu.be/tW08injjI1MFor the Uber read – I want to be a bit more excited about Dave going out, but I do like the slight change in pitch compared to your first read.
Good luck!
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I love that we have one of the same reads and I’ll be interested in the contrasting feedback we will get!
Read 1: You started out great – I felt like you were pulling me into a full-on story as opposed to a commercial. I felt like you lost that about mid-way through and got a bit into a rhythm in your read. I would recommend changing up the pace a bit so it felt like you were telling a story to your best friend instead of reading a story to an audience. Very clear and easy to listen to though – great voice.
Read 2: Again you started out great! I think you got a bit into the iambic pentameter about halfway through and were a bit too rhythmic even as this was poetry. I really think this could be a great one for you though and would try to focus on maintaining your purpose throughout the read.
Read3: This is our same read! Love how your first part starts off and specifically as you read the wet-dry vac line, through “you could”. I could see your audience and know your purpose. My biggest recommendation is to work on not throwing away the end. Home Depot and Rigid are both your clients here and you’ll want to carry them through to the end of the read. I have this same problem and often have to re-record the last lines a few times until I don’t through them away.Great work! Best of luck!
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Overall, I thought all three reads were great, it was also nice to learn that you can have a different range and tone since it’s noticeable in the second recording. Although, for the third one, it felt like at the end of the read, you dropped the enthusiasm a little bit when mentioning “Available at the Home Depot.” I don’t know if that was intended, but just something I picked up and saw as odd. Your diction and pacing was good, but keep attention on words like restaurant, of course, we don’t want to overly-enunciate, but we also don’t want to leave off some letters.
Hope this helps! Great read.
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After training with my coach, I will be recording my first demo tomorrow morning. Attached are my 8 characters. I would like feedback about my enunciation, my performances, are all my words clear enough, with and without an accent?
Hear from you guys soon and wish me luck-
Love your energy and hope the demo recording goes well! I had some challenges understanding a few things, but wonder if this was just because you were a bit too close to the mic or if your gain was set too high? At the end when you go into the western cowboy accent, I felt like you were straying between a western cowboy and an old gothic character, so would just recommend clarifying a bit. Really enjoy how you play with the variety of pace!
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So, I don’t do character stuff, as such feel free to take what I say with a grain of salt.
I had some trouble understanding some of the accents, such as the first two and the dragon slaying and horse characters. In addition it felt like you lost some of the accents mid way through your performances, but maybe you did that on purpose as to show your range. For Example the “put the gun down and keep playing” guy. It sounded like he had something in his mouth (which was a nice touch) but lost it and got it back. Personally my favorites were the magician and the “weapons contracts” guys. They were clear, easy to understand. I think those two were your best out of the reel. But like I said I don’t do character stuff so take this feedback with a gain of salt.
Good Luck recording your demo! You got this!
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Hi Suecat –
Welcome to the forum! I couldn’t listen to these easily as they were exported in an .m4a vs an .mp3. I’m thinking that’s why you don’t have any feedback.
Kashi Read: Your enunciation and tone of the read are great. When you say “must there be h**l in a heavenly…” line, I think you may want to make sure that you think about the purpose of the line and what you are trying to envoke from the person you are speaking to. Love the ending – great way to keep us interested.
Chewy Read: Make sure to know who you are speaking to. This felt more like you were reading it to me then telling me something about Chewy. I know our coaches tell us all the time, but picture that person you are trying to talk to and let that help inform your pitch and tone.Good luck to you! Looking forward to hearing more!
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Here are two commercial reads. DryFly and Great Courses Plus. Feedback would be appreciated.
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You sounded great for both of the reads, pro voice and sound! I really liked your enthusiasm and inflection for “Great Courses”, for “Dry Fly” maybe adding more energy to some of the key words so that its more clear about the audience its targeting, “fly fisherman”, “blue ribbon trout streams”.
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I was completely hooked on the first commercial, very good diction nonetheless. For the second commercial, I don’t know if the pace was the best, perhaps going fas was something you were achieving? It felt a little bit rushed for me and I was a little bit overwhelmed.
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Hi Shmuel! I enjoyed both commercials. the first commercial I felt like I was on an open field with a lake in front of me. may sound weird but truly liked it. I also liked the second commercial. the second commercial there were some areas I though the words were stressed long (daaaay, Sciencccce) maybe that’s what you were going for so I could be wrong. overall both were great.
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