[David Goldberg]

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[cbehrens]

These are scripts intended for children audiences. I would appreciate any performance-related feedback! Also, if you have a preference between the two “Lemur” options, let me know. Thanks!

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[suecat]

Hi, I’m new so you know I need you honest feedback! Thanks

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[acbattag]

Hi Suecat –
Welcome to the forum! I couldn’t listen to these easily as they were exported in an .m4a vs an .mp3. I’m thinking that’s why you don’t have any feedback.
Kashi Read: Your enunciation and tone of the read are great. When you say “must there be h**l in a heavenly…” line, I think you may want to make sure that you think about the purpose of the line and what you are trying to envoke from the person you are speaking to. Love the ending – great way to keep us interested.
Chewy Read: Make sure to know who you are speaking to. This felt more like you were reading it to me then telling me something about Chewy. I know our coaches tell us all the time, but picture that person you are trying to talk to and let that help inform your pitch and tone.

Good luck to you! Looking forward to hearing more!
-Amber

[suecat]

Thank you soooo much for your feedback! I’ll be sure to get the correct files out! But I am so glad you could hear them.

[Shmuel]

Here are two commercial reads. DryFly and Great Courses Plus. Feedback would be appreciated.
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From the farm… to the bottle
Handcrafted …. Locally grown
And inspired by fly fishermen
Developed for its distinct tastes
And its earned international acclaim
Made with patience, that’s been honed on America’s blue ribbon trout streams
Hand-crafted in the Pacific Northwest
Reach for the top shelf
Reach ….. for Dry Fly
Available throughout the U.S.
Go to dryflydistilling.com
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Pursue your passion
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(streaming now on Amazon, Apple TV, Chromecast and Roku)

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[juliees206@gmail.com]

You sounded great for both of the reads, pro voice and sound! I really liked your enthusiasm and inflection for “Great Courses”, for “Dry Fly” maybe adding more energy to some of the key words so that its more clear about the audience its targeting, “fly fisherman”, “blue ribbon trout streams”.

[Shmuel]

Thanks much

[danielh04]

I was completely hooked on the first commercial, very good diction nonetheless. For the second commercial, I don’t know if the pace was the best, perhaps going fas was something you were achieving? It felt a little bit rushed for me and I was a little bit overwhelmed.

[Shmuel]

Got it, daniel. thanks

[Chad4674]

Hi Shmuel! I enjoyed both commercials. the first commercial I felt like I was on an open field with a lake in front of me. may sound weird but truly liked it. I also liked the second commercial. the second commercial there were some areas I though the words were stressed long (daaaay, Sciencccce) maybe that’s what you were going for so I could be wrong. overall both were great.

[Shmuel]

Got it, thanks, Chad.

[NoreenQuadir]

Hi – I did some practice commercial samples on my phone and would appreciate your feedback. Thanks!

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[Chad4674]

Hello!

Ok, this is my very first recording and first one added to the forum. Please be provide feedback as can certainly use all the help in the world! 🙂 Thank you to everyone in advance!

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[Chad4674]

Sorry as you have probably guessed I’m new. 🙂 here’s a mp3 version

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[juliees206@gmail.com]

Hi Chad, I still could only hear a small amount of your voice, not sure if its’ my computer or your file. I did like the sound of your voice from what I could manage to hear, sounded like a great fit for that type of commercial. I’ve been recently recording/exporting files on Audacity, you can download it for free 🙂

[juliees206@gmail.com]

Hi Chad, I had trouble with downloading and hearing your recording. Maybe try download it as an MP3 file..Welcome to the forum!

[juliees206@gmail.com]

Hi! Looking forward to your feedback on the following, always grateful for your help! 🙂

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[Shmuel]

I hear an echo in all the reads.
Beer can – vary the energy like you did with Pepsi.
Cadillac – you need a more luxurious and or take-charge read, GET OUT OF THE WAY !!!
Pepsi – ohmygawd you are perfect for this. I would consider embracing the quirky, cutesy type of commercials. Done right, they are a lot of fun, and can get get a lot of attention. It fits your personality.
With you success !

[juliees206@gmail.com]

Thank you so much for your feedback/help, glad you liked the Pepsi recording! I’ve been struggling with the Cadillac recording and will work on a more take charge read…thanks again!

[NoreenQuadir]

I like these! For the second one, I would give more contrast between “others talk about it…” and “we make cards…” just to make it stand out and pop out more.

[juliees206@gmail.com]

Thanks so much! I appreciate your suggestions for the second recording too~

[Chad4674]

I enjoyed hearing each of the scripts. Each of them I enjoyed the energy you brought to the scripts. the last commercial I truly felt and laughed because I think we have all been there. 🙂 great job on each recording.

[Chad4674]

Hello all,
Here is the same script I attached before but in mp3 format. Please give me your honest feedback as I am new and want to become really good at voiceovers. 🙂

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[juliees206@gmail.com]

Thanks so much Chad, really appreciate your comments, its very helpful! The last commercial was my favorite one to practice since its so relatable 🙂

[SteveVO]

First time with medical narration. Would welcome any feedback. Thanks, Steve.

A guidewire is inserted into the femoral artery up through the iliac artery and into the contra-lateral iliac artery. Module one delivery system is inserted through the femoral artery. It slides over the guidewire and is positioned between the two iliac arteries. Using radio pake markers, the delivery system is positioned so that the gateway is facing the aortic trunk during deployment. As the operator retracts the outer sheath, module one begins to deploy. The guidewire is pulled back and then pushed forward through the gateway of module one. Module two slides over the guidewire and is correctly aligned with the gateway. The outer sheath is retracted and module two expands. Module two hourglass waist is now securely coupled inside the gateway of the first module. Module three is inserted and aligned so that the fabric begins just below the lower renal artery. Outward protruding barbs assist in fixing module three in place.

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[Shmuel]

Nailed it. Sound great, enunciation great, pace great. After listening to this, I’m sure I can pass my medical boards thanks to you.

[SteveVO]

Thanks 🙂 I appreciate that.

[SteveVO]

A boy comes running up, and he asks, “What exactly is the ocean? What is the sea?”
You could hit him with a lot of statistics and Latin names, but the answer isn’t something you’ll find in a book. To really know what the ocean is, you have to see it for yourself. And hear it. And taste it. You have to feel its power.

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[juliees206@gmail.com]

I liked the richness/tone of your voice and great emotion in the the ocean recording, it made want to be there too. Perhaps for the medical narration maybe add a little more inflection on key words, also your sound was great for both of the recordings.

[SteveVO]

Thanks a lot. I appreciate that.

[mara_sherman]

Hi everyone! Here are some practice Narrations I did. Thanks so much for your feedback!

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[cbehrens]

I thought all three of your narrations were clear — well done! It sounded as if you might have been expressing a smile along with the “welcome” statement in the final narration, which matched the tone of a welcome message.

[SteveVO]

Mara, you have a very pleasant voice that I can hear doing these sorts of scripts. I think you could speed up the tempo a little on all three scripts without losing the listener. I think, too, if you took the tonality of the third script and applied it to the first two Delta scripts, it would a little more like you’re talking to the listener. Nice work.

[SteveVO]

Thanks for any feedback. Focusing on travel scripts right now.

Welcome to Hershey, the Great American Chocolate Town, where families come together for a taste of the sweet life. Tucked in the rolling hills of Central Pennsylvania, this idyllic escape offers the latest and greatest in entertainment and hospitality, fused with the traditions of one of America’s original success stories.

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[mara_sherman]

Hi Steve! You sound great, very clear and the recording sounded pro. I would just add a bit more chocolatey sweetness to highlight certain parts maybe to add a little more differentiation. Awesome job!

[SteveVO]

Thanks. I appreciate that.

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