[David Goldberg]

Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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[NoreenQuadir]

I did some practice commercial VO recordings and would appreciate any feedback. Note these were recorded via my phone for practice. Thanks much!

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[JTLeyba]

Great job practicing! Your diction was excellent and I could easily understand every word. My suggestions would be to ad a bit a more pep and excitement to your reading. Pretend like your telling your best friend about the latest new trend or product that you just found and love. Keep up the practice, your doing great!

[taylorn.quinn]

Hi all-long time no see (or shall I say hear haha). I am starting my narration demo process and and wondering what you all think of this. I know its not the best editing wise but I am looking for feedback on how I sound. Thank you so much!

Taylor

Script: Baxter Industries has implemented a series of strategic actions, to reduce costs, improve shareholder value,
and extend its leadership position worldwide.The actions address the dramatic changes underway in the U.S. health-care system,
and accelerate growth of the company’s medical-technology businesses worldwide.
Baxter has reorganized its U.S. sales force into cross-divisional, regional teams.
This customer-driven initiative establishes a sales structure that mirrors the emerging health-care networks,
and a team-selling approach that provides customers with one primary point of contact.

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[JTLeyba]

I like it! Your voice is easy going and pleasant to listen too! Overall your diction and word stress was spot on, the only spots I felt you had trouble on were Customer-Driven (Slurred Driven) and your pleasant tone dropped off at world wide. Other than that good job! Good luck with your demo!

[Jorjecat09]

Hi Everyone – This is my first time posting and actually hearing my recorded voice. Sending this in for homework. Totally looking forward to your honest feedback. The first is Peet’s Coffee, second is History Channel and the third is Honey Bunches of Oats. Thanks!

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[Andrea]

Hi there, you need to upload .mp3 files 🙂
Looking forward to listening to them!

[Jorjecat09]

Oh wow thanks Andrea! I’ll try to figure out how to convert it to an mp3 and then repost. Thanks again

[Andrea]

Hi everyone,

Here’s another homework assignment script. I’m experimenting with different narration scripts to see what works for my voice. I would appreciate any feedback on delivery and connection to the script.

Thank you!

WATERLASE HYDROKINETIC PROCEDURE (tutorial)
Your dentist wants you to watch this video, so that you are completely comfortable with your upcoming Waterlase HydroKinetic procedure. The Waterlase uses technology for a variety of dental procedures, one or more of which you require. We want you to be informed. So in the next 15 minutes, you will learn about the latest care options, and how they will affect you. Using the supplied video glasses, you will ‘virtually’ experience the entire procedure. At anytime, you can pause the presentation and choose an option from the Comfort Care Menu, linked below.

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[Chad4674]

I really like your voice however I hear an echo in the background which made it a little hard to understand. specifically when you said this line I needed to play it over: “The Waterlase uses technology for a variety of dental procedures, one or more of which you require”.

overall pace was good enough from me to follow along. great job.

[Andrea]

Thanks Chad. My studio setup is not great — yet, so maybe that’s why there was an echo.

[DAYLIGHTVO]

Hey everyone! This forum has really been great in developing my skills in VO along with my coaching. I am uploading two new spots and would like to hear what feedback I get before the next session- maybe I could tweak it before. Thanks in advance.
-N.Roberts

[JTLeyba]

Hello! I’m trying to practice my scripts for a new demo reel, any feedback help as I am a complete newbie. Please and thanks!

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[juliees206@gmail.com]

Looking forward to your comments/suggestions, thanks for listening! 🙂

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[Shmuel]

Julie,
Sound good, no echo, no plosives. First read had low volume, then it went up. The volume should be even. And there was a pop at the end when you stopped recording.
First read you nee to tone down the acting just a bit. It sounds too sultry and “I’ve got a secret”-y.
Second read should be more fun. It’s a Zoo. Wild . I might consider doing a fast read with the discount ticket from Kroger. Ask your coach about this, though.
Third read, you gotta be a bit more p****d. This is a Time Share, one of the nation’s biggest and longest lasting rip-offs. build up your anger, and then the coup de grace with the “oh, yeah”
Still a great voice, keep at it.
Wish you success!

[Jorjecat09]

Your tone in the first and third read were a bit monotone. if you can elevate your voice or use a different cadence i think you’d be good to go! My favorite was the 2nd read. it gave a lot more energy and it was inviting

[Chad4674]

Hi Julie,

the last one definitely hit home as I too have bought a timeshare to never use it. 🙂 all sounded good however I hear a “click” at the end. That may be something for editing just to make sure that’s not included in your recording. Overall good work!

[Chad4674]

Hello Everyone,

Please review my recent commercial script for my latest homework assignment. Thank you.

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[ericazetti]

Very natural, warm delivery. Pace was great too!

[Chad4674]

Thanks Erica!

[mara_sherman]

Hi everyone! Here are some Commercial scripts I recorded for homework. Thanks so much for all of your feedback!

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[Christy Spadafore]

Hi Mara, nice job! Overall I think your pacing is very good and I really like your voice. I think a little more variety within the scripts would be good. For example in the first one, maybe set it up as problem and solution. The first line is the problem – ‘Are you tired…” and then the next several lines offer the solution. Very good work, keep it up!

[jmtarleton]

Hello good people! Here are a few more commercial homework files. I very much appreciate comments and feedback you may have.

I will say this space (and neighborhood) are noisy, but I am working on some better treatment for the small room I use.

Many many thanks,

John

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[ericazetti]

Very friendly & natural voice! Great diction and pacing as well!

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