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  • #15468
    David Goldberg
    Edge Studio Staff

    The Edge Studio Feedback Forum is the best place for you to post a recording and get feedback from the community! Record in your home studio, upload the file, and see what people think. This is a great place to get some advice on your technique, on your home studio, or to ask for people’s opinion on your reads. Remember, that this is a community forum, so please remain positive and encourage your peers in helpful ways. If Edge Studio feels that a user is too negative, or antagonizing other members of the community, they will have their posts deleted, and risk being banned from further communication. 

    Stay positive, listen to each other, and have fun!

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  • #67816
    RYoung
    Participant

    Friday night fun!

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    • #67829
      Bil-Bo
      Participant

      Hey Rich
      I like it! GREAT character voice could be used for lots of things. Try some more “Good Ole Boy” spots and include this “guy” in your bag of tricks. Most demos I hear sound like the same guy over and over with his mid-west “neutral” accent. You’ve got chops. Hope you’re ringing the bell with some casting directors. Best luck to you!
      BillH

      • #67832
        RYoung
        Participant

        Thanks Bill appreciate it!

    • #67822
      Amitofu
      Participant

      Uh to be honest, between the music and your ennuciation it was a little hard to make out what you were saying. It certainly wasn’t bad but it was a little bit of a struggle :/

  • #67803
    Bil-Bo
    Participant

    Campbell’s Home Cookin’
    What do Campbell’s kids eat when they’re not kids anymore? Introducing new Chicken and Pasta with Roasted Garlic from Campbell’s. Imagine perfectly diced chicken simmered in rich chicken broth and seasoned with robust notes of roasted garlic ….all brimming with crisp garden celery, fresh carrots, and deliciously plump penne and rotini. Home Cookin’ Soup that’s a lot more seasoned. But then….so are you. Home Cookin’ Campbell’s. Good for the body. Good for the Soul.

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    • #67839
      Official81
      Participant

      Hey Bil-Bo! Standing O is all I am going to say!

    • #67821
      Amitofu
      Participant

      Amazing job! really really outstanding!

      Only two things I noticed for posterity (and this is just me being neurotic and sometimes picking up on non-issues), is:

      The second line “Introducing new Chicken and Pasta with Roasted Garlic from Campbell’s”
      You read ‘Roasted garlic’ with like a slight extra emphasis that changed the dynamic just a pinch. made it sound a little more like a seperate item, rather than a flavor of the chicken & pasta.

      Then later at: “[…] deliciously plump penne and rotini. [X] Home Cookin’ Soup that’s a lot more seasoned”
      At the X, it feels like the sentences were pushed too close together in the editing process.

      Both are complaints subjective and honestly not very noticable overall. I’d absolutely hire you based off of this.

  • #67799
    darleneharris
    Participant

    Hi All! Looking for any feedback on this read for my narration demo. Thanks!

    Music is a language just like you would read aloud from a book. The symbols you will see on pages of sheet music have been used for hundreds of years. They represent the pitch, speed, and rhythm of the song they convey, as well as expression and techniques used by a musician to play the piece. Think of the notes as the letters, the measures as the words, the phrases as the sentences and so forth. In the following video, we will explore the basics of learning to read music, first by going through the staff and the two clefs, and then the notes on the staff.

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    • #67820
      Amitofu
      Participant

      Sounds good! great job – no complaints.

  • #67789
    ElcysVoice
    Participant

    A THIEF ACCUSED

    M-me? steal the gem M’lord? laughable, really! I’ll admit, I’ve done some petty burglary in the past… But! but, I served my time for that! These preposterous accusations… do you really think I’d be capable of such a heist? P-please M’lord you must reconsider, please? You can’t be serious M’lord you must understand! No! Please, have mercy!

    Hi! I’m trying my voice out on a script that is outside of my normal delivery. Please let me know what you think.

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    • #67818
      Amitofu
      Participant

      It was good and importantly clear. For something that’s out of your normal repitoire, I think it’s worth honing and fleshing out. That being said, it sounds a little stilted, like an impression of the accent instead of the casual accent itself, which in your case I think will easily iron out by repeated use. If you want a point of reference, you can find a youtube video of the VA for Hermes from the cartoon Futurama. Phil LaMarr is amazing.

      youtube.com/watch?v=p7pGdlxbooU

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  • #67787
    Wes@1972
    Participant

    Eddie Bauer
    • As the leaves begin to turn, so do our thoughts to brisk fall days, and cool autumn leaves. This fall, we’re all about living in layers; the layers of your clothing, and the layers of your life.

    • At Eddie Bauer, living in layers allows you to be comfortable indoors, outdoors, and in every aspect of your day. It means easier transitions from work to lying low at home, or getting away on weekends.

    • The Eddie Bauer Autumn Collection. When comfort is key.

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    • #67840
      Official81
      Participant

      Your voice sounds great! This read sounded choppy I would try sounding more conversational so that it doesn’t seem like your reading. And the pauses for punctuation sometimes aren’t necessary. If you interpret the script by determining the tone, who is listening, where they are listening, and why they are listening. Also what I’ve just learned to really get the conversational sound, is to identify glottal stops.

    • #67797
      darleneharris
      Participant

      Great work. Very smooth and varied delivery.

    • #67794
      Lilbelle1487
      Participant

      This read is leaps and bounds better than your Cabela’s read I personally think. I really enjoyed listening to it and how smooth it was. I don’t know if you have read anything or had jobs before, but you sound almost identical to https://youtu.be/3PgCiEw9OSQ this Bush’s Baked Beans Gentleman! Way to go!

  • #67781
    ericazetti
    Participant

    Hi everyone! Posting my hw from my previous session. Any and all feedback welcome! Thank you!

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    • #67798
      darleneharris
      Participant

      Great work! Nice energy and tone on both reads, especially the second.

    • #67793
      Lilbelle1487
      Participant

      Great job overall!! You have a really nice energy about your voice. At the start of the Glade though I didn’t hear that until the end. It went from one mood to another. The ending was fantastic. The second read was wonderful!

    • #67786
      Wes@1972
      Participant

      Nice job with the editing! Good differentiation in tone throughout reads.

  • #67772
    Wes@1972
    Participant

    Cabela’s

    • Like you, we can’t get enough of the outdoors. It’s in our blood, our work, and in our nature®.
    • So when you buy branded gear, you’re buying tradition, you’re buying exceptional expertise and a better product. It’s gear that’s built to help you get more outdoors for your money. Gear so well made, it’s backed up with our legendary lifetime guarantee.
    • Look for the green badge. It represents the best value and quality anywhere. Cabela’s – for a lifetime.

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    • #67792
      Lilbelle1487
      Participant

      I really love your voice, but I get lost in the read. It all seems to run together with nothing to keep me interested in the product. And each line seems to be something you could say as a line by itself. If it is supposed to be connected then should hear a flow into each new sentence verse a sound of ending. I hope that makes sense.

  • #67768
    Lilbelle1487
    Participant

    Homework Week 3- Still working to slow down, show some change in tone, answer the when, what, and where’s. Getting close to preparing the demo. I’ve redone the Disney ad and have two more solid ones to work with I feel like. Need to know if I feel connected, that it feels conversational and not a read.

    Disney World –
    Stay in the Magic at a Disney Resort Hotel. So close to the parks you can make all your Disney wishes come true. And Now save up to 30% on rooms at Select Disney Resort hotels. Imagine the magic of staying here.
    Box Lunch –
    Bibbity Bobbity New! Keep up with the cool kids and make BoxLunch your home for all your fun gifts and nerdy clothing. With new Funko Pop! Vinyl Figures, geeky bags and Disney tees, you’ll never miss out again.
    World Vision –
    World Vision’s total operating expenses are used for programs that benefit children, families, and communities in need. Learn more at worldvision.org

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  • #67749
    MarkosKandilis
    Participant

    Howdy! I’m currently developing my commercial chops with the aim of recording my demo in June. Feel free to have a listen to these samples and let me know what you think. Thanks!

    Commercial 1: Ziploc
    Only Ziploc brand bags have a unique interlocking zipper to lock in freshness in a way no
    other bag can. When it comes out this fresh, you know it went in a Ziploc bag. Ziploc. We’ve
    got a lock on freshness.

    Commercial 2: Fidelity
    Powerful sector research. Education and tools. Expert insight, cutting edge ideas, and 30 years of sector fund investing experience. Fidelity Investments. Go to Fidelity Investments.com /sectors.

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    • #67791
      Lilbelle1487
      Participant

      Hey There!

      Ziploc and Fidelity are both great reads. I hear some hesitancy that smooths out in Ziploc read. It could be a bit more up beat as well. Very nicely done overall.

  • #67746
    ElcysVoice
    Participant

    A THIEF ACCUSED

    M-me? steal the gem M’lord? laughable, really! I’ll admit, I’ve done some petty burglary in the past… But! but, I served my time for that! These preposterous accusations… do you really think I’d be capable of such a heist? P-please M’lord you must reconsider, please? You can’t be serious M’lord you must understand! No! Please, have mercy!

    Hi! I’m trying my voice out on a script that is outside of my normal delivery. Please let me know what you think.

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