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August 7, 2020 at 9:27 am #15468
David Goldberg
Edge Studio StaffHi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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June 2, 2021 at 12:38 am #68175
nettipo1
ParticipantI can already tell that my voice in this recording is higher because I’m nervous. I am open to any other feedback or suggestions you can provide. Thank you!
Butterball
Butterball brings you the joys of turkey day. Friends and family drop in to bask in the warmth of the season. Celebrate this summer with Butterball turkey on the grill. Tender, juicy, surprisingly simple. HAPPY THANKSGRILLING from Butterball.Attachments:
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June 2, 2021 at 2:36 pm #68196
MarkosKandilis
ParticipantI love the quality of your voice, it brings such light to your read! One thing I’d recommend is to consider helping the copy along with a little faster pacing. Aim for the excitement before a Thanksgiving meal rather than the sedation after it. Great job!
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June 1, 2021 at 10:28 pm #68171
AyalC93
ParticipantHi all! Uploading the last of my Narration Homework before I start working towards my next run of classes. Thanks!
Texicon Family
“Hey there new employee, or should we say, new family member. As a member of the Texicon family, we want to formally introduce you to your new home, but too formal because that’s just not our style. Now you’ve already got your new uniforms and met with our incredible CEO, or head of the family as we like to call him. Now it’s time for me to bring you up to speed on what your days are going to be filled in with. Make sure you grab some of the complimentary cake you have in front of you, we love cake here so you’re going to have to get used to that, and see what the rest of your time at the Texicon household has in store for you!”The Unveiling of the Ferrari F-12 Berlinetta
It is the fruit of a huge amount of work and passion
and incorporates our most innovative technologies
working with the best technological partners in the world.This is an extraordinarily high performance car.
It’s 740 horsepower, in fact
make it the most powerful road car Ferrari has ever built.Aside from performance, our other focus was weight reduction.
Using aluminum to produce a car
that’s not only more rigid and therefore safer
but also more compact and very, very light.Efficiency was another area in which we concentrated
And the result is a car that has made huge strides
in terms of fuel consumption and emissions.Kids Activity TV
Every day is an adventure with Activity TV. It’s the place to be for hundreds of Awesome activities in dozens of categories! Cartooning to magic to cooking and more – ready for you day or night. This month learn some gross out magic. Watch closely as Ryan teaches you to perform the severed finger trick!Attachments:
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June 4, 2021 at 10:21 am #68253
nettipo1
ParticipantHello!
Your voice sounds nice and clear in all three reads, with a nice and pleasant tone. Of the three reads, the first sounded the most conversational. I think the third read could have been more conversational, and if the audience for the third read is kids, then perhaps that should influence your read even more, with more excitement behind “Awesome,” “gross out magic” and “severed finger trick.” On the second read, try visualizing with each line what the visuals will be, and see if that affects the pacing or spacing of your sentences as the visuals are shown with it. Great job on all three. I like the clarity of your voice.
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June 1, 2021 at 7:03 pm #68168
rmel2233
ParticipantHi Artists! Please provide feedback on my first uploads to the site. Thank you and I appreciate your honesty in advance……… I think! 🙂
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June 2, 2021 at 12:52 am #68177
nettipo1
ParticipantYou voice is so nice and calming, and has such gravitas at the same time! The recording quality seems perfectly clear to me. I can’t think of anything to suggest except maybe experiment with phrasing and pacing so that when you deliver the second and third sentences, they connect to or support the main thought of the first sentence (in the case of the Egypt read). I think your voice will pair really well with the images of a documentary.
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June 1, 2021 at 6:48 pm #68167
rmel2233
ParticipantHi Artists! Please provide feedback on my first uploads to the site. Thank you and I appreciate your honesty in advance……… I think! 🙂
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June 1, 2021 at 4:14 pm #68164
Don Sack
ParticipantGreetings!
Maui Jim script, part of tonight’s homework!Attachments:
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June 2, 2021 at 2:38 pm #68197
MarkosKandilis
ParticipantGreat tone, Don! One thing I’d consider is to bring more specificity to your read. Who are you speaking to and why are you telling them this? A quick lead-in at the start is a great trick I personally turn to to help get me into the scene as well. Keep up the good work!
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June 1, 2021 at 3:21 pm #68156
L.Renee
Participant(SPIRIT ANIMAL)
What if you had a spirit animal–an ally for life who brought you powers;
made you stronger ,faster, and braver.
Then what if a dark force appeared? And took everything away.
A new adventure from the world of Spirit Animals: Fall of the Beasts
Read the Books, Play the Game(DURACELL)
If you thought batteries were overlooked, tell that to the guy
jammed into a box, with the sole job of preventing your house
from burning.
Yep, good old 9 volt, that’s the guy you trust to tell you the
structure you’re standing in, is currently on fire.
Duracell. That’s a power you can trust.(IN THIS HOUSE)
In this house
There is no mess
No gossiping, nothing negative, and definitely no stress
Never mind what happened in the past
Putting focus there only makes it last
In this house we ONLY dream
It’s why we make the perfect team
Only speak of all the good to come
Move to the beat of Our own drums
In this house its just like me
We practice the dreams we desire to be
Now in this house the things you see
Are all the dreams that were in ME.Attachments:
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June 2, 2021 at 9:28 pm #68214
Mdmcghee34
ParticipantHello L.Renee!
Spirit animal is a great script for your voice and it engages the reader. I would suggest maybe slowing it down just a little. Duracell is a great read also with great tone that matches the message, good interpretation.
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June 1, 2021 at 7:11 am #68141
Bil-Bo
ParticipantExercise in Versatility
Coyote In New York
This is a true story. See, that’s a photograph of me, coyote, in the newspaper, after I had been shot down in Central Park. Hey, don’t worry, I wasn’t dead though. Just in for a long, soft sleep at the Bronx Zoo! Never had I seen so many animals in one place! And just exactly how did I get into this mess? Well . . . I had a dream – to go where no coyote had gone before…New York City!Jack Daniel’s
In Lynchburg, Tennessee, you can park in the middle of the road to talk with a neighbor about taxes or the weather. You can pick enough wild blackberries to fill a tin bucket. And you can see a distillery where Jack Daniel made whiskey way back in 1866. We still make it in a slow, deliberate fashion, much as he did. One sip, and you’ll be glad to know we don’t ever plan to stop. Jack Daniel’s … smooth sippin’ Tennessee whiskey.Coldwell Banker
This is what your house feels like on the new Coldwell Bankers Real Estate website. It attracts a lot of attention, so your home can be seen by thousands of buyers every day until it’s sold. On line. On the phone. Or in person. Coldwell Banker. Making real estate easy.Attachments:
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June 1, 2021 at 3:11 pm #68155
DaniQ
ParticipantHey Bill, Great work! You sound warm and dynamic. I listened to the Jack Daniels. I would love another pass with all your same choices that is a bit more internal. Really focus on your imaginary world. Maybe also adjust the pitch range so the pitches are a bit closer together. That will give it a current feel.
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May 31, 2021 at 10:25 pm #68127
nettipo1
ParticipantHello fellow VO artists:
I’m just experimenting with audiobook =character voices and still fiddling around with my audio settings. Any feedback is welcome.
Thank you!CORALINE DISCOVERED THE DOOR a little
while after they moved into the house.
It was a very old house—it had an attic under
the roof and a cellar under the ground and an
overgrown garden with huge old trees in it.
Coraline’s family didn’t own all of the house—it
was too big for that. Instead they owned part of it.
There were other people who lived in the old
house.
Miss Spink and Miss Forcible lived in the flat
below Coraline’s, on the ground floor. They were
both old and round, and they lived in their flat with
a number of ageing Highland terriers who had
names like Hamish and Andrew and J**k. Once
upon a time Miss Spink and Miss Forcible had
been actresses, as Miss Spink told Coraline the
first time she met her.
“You see, Caroline,” Miss Spink said, getting
Coraline’s name wrong, “both myself and Miss
Forcible were famous actresses, in our time. We
trod the boards, luvvy. Oh, don’t let Hamish eat
the fruitcake, or he’ll be up all night with his
tummy.”
“It’s Coraline. Not Caroline. Coraline,” said
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May 31, 2021 at 7:26 pm #68117
Wes@1972
ParticipantInterchange
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AND WE HAVE IMMEDIATE OPENINGS FOR ENTRY LEVEL FORK LIFT DRIVERS.
YOU’LL OPERATE STATE OF THE ART EQUIPMENT WITH ALL TRAINING PROVIDED AND NO EXPERIENCE NECESSARY.
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EXPAND YOUR KNOWLEDGE…ADVANCE YOUR OPPORTUNITIES…GROW YOUR CAREER…WITH INTERCHANGE!
SCAN THE QR CODE NOW OR LOG ON TO INTERCHANGE C O dot COM.
THAT’S INTERCHANGE C O dot COM!Rand Paul
As the bluegrass reaches up to the morning sun, our Kentucky values sustain us. As the winds of change blow, we need a strong voice, fighting for OUR way of life. Rand Paul lives our values.Attachments:
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June 8, 2021 at 1:20 am #68338
mvacc
ParticipantInterchange – Great tone, clarity and pacing. I think adding more of a smile, specifically when talking about Interchange (GROW YOUR CAREER…WITH INTERCHANGE!) may give it a little more emotion and make it more inviting.
Rand Paul – Great job! Sounds like an authentic political ad. My only suggestion would be to try to emphasize “values” more in the first sentence because it seems to be important since it repeats in the third sentence.
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May 31, 2021 at 12:41 pm #68099
TimDKietzman
ParticipantHi everyone, coaching for my Narration demo continues and I have three more recordings that I would appreciate feedback on. How was my performance? Did I do well pronouncing words? Was I talking at a good tempo and differentiate lists and sentences well? How about my tone? Was I suitable throughout each script and match the mood of the words/sentences? Lastly, is my recording setup working well? Any feedback is appreciated. Thanks.
Neuroendocrine Tumors
Although pathologic concepts regarding squamous cell carcinoma and adenocarcinoma have remained relatively stable during the past 10 years, those regarding the class of neuroendocrine tumors have continued to undergo revision and refinement. Neuroendocrine tumors are defined as those that produce biogenic amines. Pathologically, this can be demonstrated by a positive argyrophil or argentaffin stain, the presence of neurosecretory granules by electron microscopy.LAB 203 Anniversary Script
There are thousands of personal stories that LapCop has been a part of from DNA testing which helps exonerate the innocent to developing drugs that can turn a disease from fatal to treatable. LapCorp has a continuing dedication to excellence felt from that first day in 1969 and still now 50 years on.Pablo Picasso
A woman is a woman, according to history. But to Pablo Picasso, a woman was something else again. A combination of lines, forms, and colors. Picasso changed the combination to suit his moods, and his result was seldom Eve-like. The woman may have elephant ears, crossed eyes, two noses. In the name of art, Picasso transformed natural appearances for well over half a century. People who don’t like unconventional art say he spoofed the public, and the public itself often scoffed at his works. When his chief masterpiece, Guernica, was first shown, many thought it looked like a jigsaw puzzle. But a multitude of artists now following in his footsteps believe Picasso was liberating art from age-old academic tradition.-
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May 31, 2021 at 11:16 pm #68138
nettipo1
ParticipantYour diction in all three reads is very clear, and you did a great job pronouncing all of those difficult words in the first read! I felt like the emotion and the tempo of the reads were somewhat similar and perhaps could have used a little more differentiation. I also noticed that in the first sentence of the second recording, the words “There,” “thousands,” “personal,” and “LabCorp” were emphasized. Perhaps see how it might sound by emphasizing only the key words. I did appreciate the clarity and pleasant tone of your voice in all three reads.
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May 31, 2021 at 10:35 pm #68132
Isaac M.
ParticipantFor the recording on tumors, I don’t really have much to say. I can totally imagine that on a recording about that topic. I think the quality of the recording could possibly be improved a little bit; there’s a subtle squeakiness that arises at times. The performance in the second one could be toned down a bit, made a little more conversational. I would say the same thing about the recording on Picasso; I’d tone it down much more in that one, make it sound more natural and conversational. I think the recording has a few minute clips here in there but otherwise sounds very professional.
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