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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Congratulations, both reads could work for this script. You’ve got great talent if you can pull off more than one type of tone. However, I would say that your reads sound more like narration scripts. I am not getting the impression that you are selling something to me. It sounds more like you’re trying to explain something to your employees… Either way, well done.
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I like both reads. different perspective on each. As Sue mentioned the first one sounded light with personality. The Second read sounded like a defensive personality like “I’m preparing for battle!” LOL! both were really good! Keep it up!
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Hey GretaJ! I liked both reads, the first was light and friendly. In the second read, it felt a little more aggressive. Great voice!
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Hi Suecat, I agree with nettipo1 about the audio quality. A piece of advice that my coach gave me is that when you’re recording you want to keep your voice between -12 and -6 decibels. If you’re using a software like audacity then you can visually see the volume you’re speaking at and try to maintain that throughout your read. I hope that helps, it definitely helped me.
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Hi suecat, the audio quality needs to be better (volume, clarity), because it made it difficult to hear your voice clearly. I think you have a smooth and even delivery, which is good. You might want to strengthen the emotions you are choosing to use in this read–and I say emotions because the story has a turning point in it, where there is a problem (a whole list of things that weren’t in abundance) to a solution (luckily, kids were), so there could be two emotions on either side of that turning point. So perhaps focus on bringing out the emotions behind the words more. Would love to hear you to do this one again and see what you can do with it.
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Hello All,
I’m a new student here at Edge Studio and my homework was to toy around with audacity and submit a recording of the Hemingway script from the Edge Studio script library. I would appreciate any and all feedback on both my read and my use of audacity.-
Your read is well done overall, good tempo, well placed inflections, and you sounded quite conversational. Only problem I can find is that you don’t sound particularly interested in what your reading. If you want people to enjoy what your explaining in your narration script, you need to convince them that you find it interesting too. Also, your inflections at the end of the sentences aren’t natural, try speaking them like statements, that’ll help.
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This is very good -hard to believe you are a new student! I agree with suecat that you have a soothing voice, and I don’t notice any unnecessary pauses, so it flows into the listener’s ear very smoothly. I noticed that you sort of end with the same inflection point or same level at the end of a sentence or at comma, which might make it more monotone than you’d want, so you might want to break from that pattern a bit. Perhaps see how the phrases are more like thoughts, and combine those thoughts as one scene. Or perhaps visualize that you are saying these words to someone beside you. Overall though, this is a great first posting, so keep posting more!
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Hey all – finally getting back on track for my Commercial demo reel after a long hiatus. Any feedback on these practice reads greatly appreciated!
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You have a great voice for commercials, I’d say you’re on the right track as far as tone, tempo, and pitch. You could speak a little louder and I felt that each recording sounded similar. If you want to keep clients listening, it’d really help to ensure that the reads are unique to each other. Hope this helps.
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You have a great voice! On the Nutra System and Invisaline tempo could have been a little slower. Remembering what my Coach said, that the product/company name needs to be heard because they write the check. The Animal read started nice and methodical, then it picked up a bit. Still enjoyable reads.
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The first read was so soothing, I was glad to be an employee! The second read was also soothing, but with a little more energy, I would have been ready to invest! Fabulous voice! -
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Hello! Thank you in advance for your feedback!
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You read great! I think each sentence had enough variation and the words you hit were well-picked. Only problem I can see is the end of the sentences. The words with one syllable didn’t roll off like the multiples. (eg: services, compromises) A roll off at the end is key to making the read sound conversational. Avoid hitting the end of a sentence unless it’s a question or an exclaimation. I hope this helps, you are doing well.
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Hi Nettipo. This read is fantastic. The tone, tempo, pitch, and volume are all on point. The recording quality is great. Sounds very professional. Great job.
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Doing my best to sound like a normal person who is happy about Mitchum making a natural deodorant that actually works. How did I do?
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Hi! I like your read…it has a kind of light and thoughtful quality to it, sort of like my conscious is speaking to me. This style of read would work well in a commercial where a person is thinking to herself about the product. It’s a very even tempo, and because of that it may not sound as conversational with another person as it could be, so maybe experiment with that in your next take.
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Hello! Just posting some practice script recordings for homework.
Freshi
At Freshii you can customize your entree and be your own culinary master. So what’s in your custom bowl? Tex Mex with black beans and a little salsa fresca? Teriyaki twist with a pop of pineapple? Whatever your fresh idea, get any 2 bowls for just $12.99! Freshii – Eat. Energize!American Express
Do you know me? Probably not. In my business, recognition is always important, but when I’m buying goods online I prefer a little privacy. With Private Payments from American Express, I get the security of a unique number created for each business transaction I make. Because my private information is my business, and American Express keeps it that way.Ancient Mysteries
Be it endless fascination with the Bible, or chilling tales of Gothic horror, man has been compelled by the wonders of the unknown since the beginning of time. From the possible existence of Big Foot to the grips of a mummy’s curse. Uncover the truth behind “Ancient Mysteries” tonight on Channel 4…NBC.-
Hi Tim. I really liked the Freshi read the most out of the three. I feel like the copy naturally fits your voice and style. The tempo of the Freshi read is great, and you hit the key words nicely, great job. For the American Express read you hit the key words nicely, but I feel like the tone of the read didn’t fit the copy. Lastly the Ancient Mysteries read, I dig it, but I don’t think the tone fits with an NBC promo.
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Hello! Your reads have good energy and sound conversational enough to me. I can tell that you are conveying different emotions with each read. for the American Express, which had a slight sound of superiority or haughtiness, maybe explore a different emotion. Also, in the same read, your emphasis on “my” throughout the script was noticeable…perhaps make that emphasis not so much, or see how it sounds if you emphasize phrases and not just certain words.
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Howdy! I’m currently developing my commercial chops with the aim of recording my demo in June. Feel free to have a listen to these samples and let me know what you think. Thanks!
Commercial 1: Crest
Introducing the Crest Extender. Gentle Extender fibers clean deep between teeth. Now you
can floss daily…extend between. Crest Extender. Fits between to get teeth clean.Commercial 2: Allegra
Seasonal allergies can make you feel miserable. Only once-daily Allegra has fexofenadeen,
for long lasting, non-drowsy allergy relief. So you can feel more like yourself again.
For people 12 and older. Side effects include headache, upper respiratory tract infection and
back pain. Call you doctor now for more information.-
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Hey there! Great job on these two spots. You hit all the right notes and nuances in both recordings. I guess I’d suggest that if, for example, these two spots were next to each other on a demo, see if you can vary the emotion–or bring out the emotion more in each spot–so that they contrast more and to also show more of your acting ability, which I can tell you totally have. Also, be aware of not saying the words as written. You added “the” before teeth in the second sentence of Crest, and you said “once-a-day” rather than “once daily” in the Allegra spot. I think you’re pretty much ready for that upcoming demo recording.
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Hi everyone! Here is my commercial homework before my next session with Art. Any feedback is greatly appreciated. Thank you, and stay safe out there!
Gamestop Trade-In Promo
Beat all your games? Keep it fresh and get up to 40% extra trade credit when you trade toward Dragonball Fighters, Monster Hunter: World or Shadow of the Colossus. Gamestop. Buy. Sell. Trade. Repeat. Rated T through M.I Am Anxiety
I’ve been expecting you. Why? Don’t tell me you don’t recognize me? Oh! You still don’t know who I am. Let me try and help you with that. I am the ill ease that you feel when you walk into a crowded room. You know. The hot and cold flushes that confuse you when you are already confused enough. I am the one that raises the whip to your already raising heart. I am the tightening of your chest. The s*********g worries that feel like they might become an avalanche and they can just bury you in an instant. My friend I am the obsessive and the compulsive. I’m the voice. You know the one. Always questioning, questioning, questioning, everything you do, everything you think. And I am every, single staring eye that watches you. So, now that we have become acquainted, what are you going to do about it?
Tag: 1 in 4 people experience anxiety. And most don’t know about it. You need to know anxiety to be free from it.
Visit beyondblue.org.au or call 1300 22 4636.Woodies
I hate Woodies! I’m the only dog on the block that doesn’t get any love, and I tell you, I’m fed up! It’s just Woodies, Woodies, Woodies … every doggone day. She never has time for me anymore. When I want to romp in the park — “Sorry, darling. Mommy has to go to Woodies to buy a new dress.” When I want to play fetch the stick — “Not now, Canine Cutey, WOODIES is running a sale on shoes.” I thought it was supposed to be a dog’s world out there. If only I were a cat!-
Hey Ryan, great read! For the Gamestop one, I recommend smoothing out the pacing. There are some parts that are delivered fast while some parts drag a bit. Getting the pacing to a more natural and even place will enhance the read immediately. Break a lip!
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Great job!
I agree with Markos about the pacing for Gamestop.
I Am Anxiety – Great change in tone and inflection. I can hear the frustration/anxiety you’re trying to express in the read. Is the title part of the script? It’s a little hard to distinguish it from the rest of the script because the tone is the same.
Woodies – Another great demonstration of frustration, but this time as a dog. I would consider possibly staying in the “Mommy” (mocking) character a little longer in the “Not now, Canine Cutey, WOODIES is running a sale on shoes.”
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