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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hello! 2 more recording in preparation for my narration Demo. Any feedback appreciated. Thank you!
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Misty Copeland
Misty Copeland was born on September 10, 1982 in Kansas City Missouri and later moved to San Pedro, California with her mother and five siblings. Copeland was first introduced to the world of dance after joining her school’s drill team. Surprised by her talent, the team’s coach suggested that Copeland take classes at the local Boys & Girls Club, where she also captured the attention of the program’s ballet teacher, Cynthia Bradley. Although most ballet dancers begin dancing as early as three or four years old, Copeland’s late start at age 13 did not overshadow her talent and the potential that she possessed.Bella’s Bedtime Blanket
Good evening, in tonight’s sleep story a young girl named Bella is going to discover that her favorite blanket, isn’t—well—just a blanket. She doesn’t know it yet, but she’s about to take an enchanted voyage, to not only a new place, but a new time. Before we begin, get under your covers and get nice and comfortable. Are you relaxed? Good. There you go. Now, take a few, slow breaths. In and out. In…and out. Much better. Now we’re ready to begin our story.-
Lovely read, Nadia! My one comment for the Misty Copeland script is to consider livening the pacing a bit to help the narrative move along. Hope that helps!
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Hey everyone! So this will be my last HW assignment for commercial work before working on my demo! Any and all advice is welcome and I hope the rest of you are working towards being the best!
Here are the scripts to follow along:
Purina One
Purina One Special Formula For Cats is made with real chicken. Good news for your cat. Great news for your canary. For a complete adult diet for your cat and the real chicken he wants, give him Purina One Special Formula. Your canary will thank you for it. Purina One. Second to none.Sesame Place
Sesame Place is the theme park where Sesame Street comes to life! New in 2021 is our biggest, most exciting roller coaster ever – Oscar’s Wacky Taxi™! Bring the entire family to whirl on rides, splash down slides and hug everyone’s favorite furry friends. So before little kids become big kids, bring them to meet their Sesame Street friends at Sesame Place® theme park!Ziploc
Only Ziploc brand bags have a unique interlocking zipper to lock in freshness in a way no other bag can. When it comes out this fresh, you know it went in a Ziploc bag. Ziploc. We’ve got a lock on freshness.-
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Hello! Great job on all three recordings! I enjoyed the energy of all three. One suggestion is to make sure you pronounce the product name correctly, so in the first read, “Purina” is pronounced like “Pure-eena” instead of “Per-eena” (at least I think that’s how it’s supposed to pronounced–feel free to correct me if I am wrong!) Also, try to reduce any extra pauses, such as “We’ve got a lock [pause] on freshness.”
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Hello! Practicing for my narration demo. Any feedback appreciated. I’m especially interested in any tips on how to improve my recording quality. Thanks so much!
Srcript:
Congratulations! If you’re reading this book, you are most likely at the beginning stages of a beautiful journey through pregnancy—or else thinking about embarking on it soon. Pregnancy can be a joyful life event; it is often celebrated with baby showers, pampering and even “babymoons” (when a couple goes on vacation or a weekend getaway before the birth). During and after pregnancy, women experience major physical, social, and psychological transitions, and their roles and responsibilities as individuals change dramatically and forever. -
Hello! This is my first time posting in the feedback forum for constructive criticism. Please be gentle. Here are the scripts I used:
The Annie E. Casey Foundation
Every child deserves to grow up with opportunities to learn and thrive. With his skills, her talents, each is a potential leader, a contributor, a productive citizen. How kids grow up will determine their success as adults. But sadly, more than one in five children in America are growing up in poor families and poor neighborhoods, where the chance to thrive is anything but a given. The Annie E. Casey Foundation is dedicated to changing that.Gordon College
Welcome to Gordon College!This tour begins just outside the tunnel that goes under College Drive near the flagpole.
We will tour East campus first, followed by West Campus, and end the tour back here at the tunnel.Periodically, I will ask you to pause the recording so that you can walk to the next point or take a few minutes to independently tour the area.
I will always use the word “pause” when you need to pause the recording.
And I will always use the word “stop” when you need to stop walking while I continue speaking.This tour is intended to be listened to while walking around campus and does not include tours of any of the buildings. If you are taking this tour on a day when the buildings are open, please feel free to pause the recording and enter the buildings along the way.
As you resume listening to the tour, remember to return to the location where you were last when you pushed pause on the recording.
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Congratulations on posting to the forum for the first time–great job! Your voice is suitable for these two reads, where the audience is young minds, college students, educational… My main suggestion is to be mindful of your pacing, as some phrases like “determine their success” and “is anything but” go really fast and could be clearer. For the Gorden College read, I think your voice has a genuine quality to it, so I would see if you can make it even more conversational. Again, great job and I hope to hear more of your posts!
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All critiques are good critiques! Appreciate your help!Trendi.com
Trendi.com. It’s the #1 shopping site for top name brands at up to 75% off. Great style, great value and everything ships free. Trendi.com. Everything you love, for less.Revlon High Dimension Hair Color
Funny thing being a red head…when I was a kid, I just wanted to be like everybody else, now it’s one of the things that makes me me. Get your best color. Revlon High Dimension Hair Color, so precise it takes only 10 minutes to deliver rich, dimensional color where it’s needed most. Every time. With deep conditioners that gently protect so your hair stays soft and shiny, and beautiful. I like being me.. 10 minutes to beautiful. Revlon. Be unforgettable.-
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Your voice seems to have a naturally effortless, easygoing, almost serene way about it, which are all great qualities – it makes it easy to listen to. But since music might be added to your VO, consider increasing your energy on both reads, and add a hint of punch or excitement behind some of the key words or phrases. For instance, on the Trendi read, I’m wondering if you might sound differently if you read “75% off” and that “everything ships free” as if you just found out about it, or if you were telling your friend about it. For the Revlon read, the energy needs to be brought up to the same vibrancy as the red hair color makes you look and feel. And again, image you are telling a friend about your hair, and even imagine running your hand through that soft hair. I think you’ll have it in you to let the excitement come out! -
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I agree, it is a Nail for me too! I just had a minor observation, that each sentence seemed to end in inflection in the same way, which if the copy was longer, might become a pattern to the listener. But you really have the perky energy that this kid commercial needs, and you hit the right words. Yes, definitely Nailed it!
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Hello All! I have another narration script working on for class. Any feedback will be appreciated. Thanks!
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You have a lovely voice! Very easy to listen to. Good recording quality. I would say to try and vary the delivery of the words a bit to keep the listener engaged, but overall very nice and good pacing. Nice job!
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I really enjoy your pacing and the warm quality of your voice — brings together the idea of the script you’re narrating!
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I think your voice is great! Definitely caught my attention. I think it would be good to slow your pacing down a bit and focus a little more on enunciation (for example hierarchy — which also might have had to do with the speed).
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Hi everyone,
My coach assigned me to upload an audition-style track with a slate at the beginning, followed by the same script performed in two different styles. Let me know what you think! -
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You have such a soothing voice. Great audio quality too! I guess if I had to nitpick I’d say to draw out the word “lows” a little less so that the thought becomes more cohesive.
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