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The Edge Studio Feedback Forum is the best place for you to post a recording and get feedback from the community! Record in your home studio, upload the file, and see what people think. This is a great place to get some advice on your technique, on your home studio, or to ask for people’s opinion on your reads. Remember, that this is a community forum, so please remain positive and encourage your peers in helpful ways. If Edge Studio feels that a user is too negative, or antagonizing other members of the community, they will have their posts deleted, and risk being banned from further communication.
Stay positive, listen to each other, and have fun!
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(SPIRIT ANIMAL)
What if you had a spirit animal–an ally for life who brought you powers;
made you stronger ,faster, and braver.
Then what if a dark force appeared? And took everything away.
A new adventure from the world of Spirit Animals: Fall of the Beasts
Read the Books, Play the Game(DURACELL)
If you thought batteries were overlooked, tell that to the guy
jammed into a box, with the sole job of preventing your house
from burning.
Yep, good old 9 volt, that’s the guy you trust to tell you the
structure you’re standing in, is currently on fire.
Duracell. That’s a power you can trust.(IN THIS HOUSE)
In this house
There is no mess
No gossiping, nothing negative, and definitely no stress
Never mind what happened in the past
Putting focus there only makes it last
In this house we ONLY dream
It’s why we make the perfect team
Only speak of all the good to come
Move to the beat of Our own drums
In this house its just like me
We practice the dreams we desire to be
Now in this house the things you see
Are all the dreams that were in ME.-
Hello L.Renee!
Spirit animal is a great script for your voice and it engages the reader. I would suggest maybe slowing it down just a little. Duracell is a great read also with great tone that matches the message, good interpretation. -
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Exercise in Versatility
Coyote In New York
This is a true story. See, that’s a photograph of me, coyote, in the newspaper, after I had been shot down in Central Park. Hey, don’t worry, I wasn’t dead though. Just in for a long, soft sleep at the Bronx Zoo! Never had I seen so many animals in one place! And just exactly how did I get into this mess? Well . . . I had a dream – to go where no coyote had gone before…New York City!Jack Daniel’s
In Lynchburg, Tennessee, you can park in the middle of the road to talk with a neighbor about taxes or the weather. You can pick enough wild blackberries to fill a tin bucket. And you can see a distillery where Jack Daniel made whiskey way back in 1866. We still make it in a slow, deliberate fashion, much as he did. One sip, and you’ll be glad to know we don’t ever plan to stop. Jack Daniel’s … smooth sippin’ Tennessee whiskey.Coldwell Banker
This is what your house feels like on the new Coldwell Bankers Real Estate website. It attracts a lot of attention, so your home can be seen by thousands of buyers every day until it’s sold. On line. On the phone. Or in person. Coldwell Banker. Making real estate easy.-
Hey Bill, Great work! You sound warm and dynamic. I listened to the Jack Daniels. I would love another pass with all your same choices that is a bit more internal. Really focus on your imaginary world. Maybe also adjust the pitch range so the pitches are a bit closer together. That will give it a current feel.
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Hello fellow VO artists:
I’m just experimenting with audiobook =character voices and still fiddling around with my audio settings. Any feedback is welcome.
Thank you!CORALINE DISCOVERED THE DOOR a little
while after they moved into the house.
It was a very old house—it had an attic under
the roof and a cellar under the ground and an
overgrown garden with huge old trees in it.
Coraline’s family didn’t own all of the house—it
was too big for that. Instead they owned part of it.
There were other people who lived in the old
house.
Miss Spink and Miss Forcible lived in the flat
below Coraline’s, on the ground floor. They were
both old and round, and they lived in their flat with
a number of ageing Highland terriers who had
names like Hamish and Andrew and J**k. Once
upon a time Miss Spink and Miss Forcible had
been actresses, as Miss Spink told Coraline the
first time she met her.
“You see, Caroline,” Miss Spink said, getting
Coraline’s name wrong, “both myself and Miss
Forcible were famous actresses, in our time. We
trod the boards, luvvy. Oh, don’t let Hamish eat
the fruitcake, or he’ll be up all night with his
tummy.”
“It’s Coraline. Not Caroline. Coraline,” said
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Interchange
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THAT’S INTERCHANGE C O dot COM!Rand Paul
As the bluegrass reaches up to the morning sun, our Kentucky values sustain us. As the winds of change blow, we need a strong voice, fighting for OUR way of life. Rand Paul lives our values.-
Interchange – Great tone, clarity and pacing. I think adding more of a smile, specifically when talking about Interchange (GROW YOUR CAREER…WITH INTERCHANGE!) may give it a little more emotion and make it more inviting.
Rand Paul – Great job! Sounds like an authentic political ad. My only suggestion would be to try to emphasize “values” more in the first sentence because it seems to be important since it repeats in the third sentence.
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Hi everyone, coaching for my Narration demo continues and I have three more recordings that I would appreciate feedback on. How was my performance? Did I do well pronouncing words? Was I talking at a good tempo and differentiate lists and sentences well? How about my tone? Was I suitable throughout each script and match the mood of the words/sentences? Lastly, is my recording setup working well? Any feedback is appreciated. Thanks.
Neuroendocrine Tumors
Although pathologic concepts regarding squamous cell carcinoma and adenocarcinoma have remained relatively stable during the past 10 years, those regarding the class of neuroendocrine tumors have continued to undergo revision and refinement. Neuroendocrine tumors are defined as those that produce biogenic amines. Pathologically, this can be demonstrated by a positive argyrophil or argentaffin stain, the presence of neurosecretory granules by electron microscopy.LAB 203 Anniversary Script
There are thousands of personal stories that LapCop has been a part of from DNA testing which helps exonerate the innocent to developing drugs that can turn a disease from fatal to treatable. LapCorp has a continuing dedication to excellence felt from that first day in 1969 and still now 50 years on.Pablo Picasso
A woman is a woman, according to history. But to Pablo Picasso, a woman was something else again. A combination of lines, forms, and colors. Picasso changed the combination to suit his moods, and his result was seldom Eve-like. The woman may have elephant ears, crossed eyes, two noses. In the name of art, Picasso transformed natural appearances for well over half a century. People who don’t like unconventional art say he spoofed the public, and the public itself often scoffed at his works. When his chief masterpiece, Guernica, was first shown, many thought it looked like a jigsaw puzzle. But a multitude of artists now following in his footsteps believe Picasso was liberating art from age-old academic tradition.-
Your diction in all three reads is very clear, and you did a great job pronouncing all of those difficult words in the first read! I felt like the emotion and the tempo of the reads were somewhat similar and perhaps could have used a little more differentiation. I also noticed that in the first sentence of the second recording, the words “There,” “thousands,” “personal,” and “LabCorp” were emphasized. Perhaps see how it might sound by emphasizing only the key words. I did appreciate the clarity and pleasant tone of your voice in all three reads.
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For the recording on tumors, I don’t really have much to say. I can totally imagine that on a recording about that topic. I think the quality of the recording could possibly be improved a little bit; there’s a subtle squeakiness that arises at times. The performance in the second one could be toned down a bit, made a little more conversational. I would say the same thing about the recording on Picasso; I’d tone it down much more in that one, make it sound more natural and conversational. I think the recording has a few minute clips here in there but otherwise sounds very professional.
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Greetings VO friends! Was hoping for some honest feedback on my new commercial demo. All self produced so hoping it’s up to s***f or at least on the right track. Thanks all!
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You sir have a magnificent demo under your sleave. Did you produce this demo yourself? I think any potential client would be very pleased by your authoritative sounding voice. You even made sure the music wasn’t too loud and articulated every word just right. Your strike zone would likely be gentlemanly and wise so you should emphasize that when marketing.
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Hi everyone,
Here are a couple of homework practice scripts. I’m on a narration track and would greatly appreciate your feedback (e.g., tone, pace, connection to script, neutral English).
Thank you!
AMERICAN AIRLINES (in-flight video)
Welcome aboard American Airlines coast-to-coast service. We‘ll be happy to do everything possible to make your flight with us a most pleasurable experience. We‘ll provide you with all the information you need to know about your flight, your destination, and the equipment on which you are currently flying.
THE LAND OF EGYPT (travelogue)
Egypt has always been a land of mystery and magic. A land different from all others, difficult to understand, apart and alien, yet strangely fascinating. It was the most self-contained of all the countries of the ancient world; it lived its own life, practised its own religion, and made up its own government with hardly any outside interference either from or upon other civilizations.
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Good enunciation.The two recordings sound different enough. I got a feeling that you were going for an airplane commercial when I heard it. The second recording sounded more like a discovery channel documentary. You did a good job recording and performing. My only critique is that you sound less enthusiastic in the first recording. In the second I can imagine you were more excited about where you were going/ what you were talking about.
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Wow, I do think you pulled off a satisfying pace, and pitch throughout both scripts. None of the pauses mid-sentence were long enough to sound choppy and you kept a consistant tone throughout. However, I think your overall performance sounds like a machine or as if your reading off of paper, not really interested in the subject you’re explaining. Remember, people may be listening to this so they can learn, but it helps to make your explanation interesting for them too, that’s how students learn to like teaching lectures.
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Hey everyone,
I’d love to get some feedback for my practice commercial scripts. Just starting out so any positive or negative feedback would be huge.
Thanks so much!
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Considering how you perform in the 1st recording: you have good enunciation. But you could probably work on adding more enthusiasm to your voice. Show the listener that you enjoy what you’re advertising.
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Hey Mike, the sound quality is great and the tone works well, especially in the first one. The tone and tempo you used in the second are also excellent, I might tone it down just a little bit, especially at the beginning, and maybe lower the pitch as well, but just a tab. The third one on the other hand I think is perfect, strangely, the only thing I’d nitpick in that one is the quality of the recording, which for some reason seemed better in the previous two.
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Well Mike, I’d say you had a good tone for each of them, each recording sounded very unique though you could sound a little more excited on the first two. Your pitch range was well placed too, I like the words you hit. However, I think your tempo may be too fast and some words like “Hut” get lost in the read. Try to relax a little and remember that this is an art, not a task.
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Hi Mike,
I liked the tone in the first one and the energy in the third one.
In the second one, I think you should avoid the ending inflections on “entree” and “master”, take out the pause after “entree” and sound a bit more excited up to “master”. You could also use a slightly different pitch for each of the two questions.
Keep up the good work!
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