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  • #15468
    David Goldberg
    Edge Studio Staff

    Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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  • #68569
    RYoung
    Participant

    All comments welcome!

    Coors Banquet Beer
    Hardwork has it’s rewards and since 1873, Coors Banquet has rewarded efforts like yours with a beer made the hard way. Only using rocky mountain water and the best country barley found, the beer is an uncompromising stance that shares several distinctions that hard workers do. So for those like-minded, Coors Banquet beer may be an excellent choice for those that enjoy reaping the rewards of hard work. So roll up your sleeves we’ve got a banquet waiting for you! Coors the Banquet Beer.

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    • #68667
      RYoung
      Participant

      Thanks for your inputs all, much appreciated!

    • #68631
      whataboutsmee
      Participant

      Firstly, your voice is amazing for this type of read. Calm and crystal clear. But I echo the statements of the previous 2 posters that it sounds a LITTLE too read-y and not quite conversational enough. When you say “the hard way”, it sounds like there should be more, but the sentence ends and the next one begins. When you say “the best country barley”, try to actually imagine that you believe its the best country barley you’ve ever experienced and you’re trying to convince someone who’s a little reluctant to believe you of that fact.

      Pacing is great. The recording itself sounds great, too.

    • #68621
      Bev
      Participant

      Hi Tim,
      Your voice is indeed suited for this type of ad, but you do need to make it conversational, maybe think of this, you just met me, I’m scheduling an event, and looking to provide some great beer for my guests, don’t tell to me about your product, talk to me about it, what makes it so great, why would I want to choose Coors banquet Beer. Your pacing was great.
      Good luck!

    • #68576
      TimDKietzman
      Participant

      Your voice is very fitting for this type of script and I think you pulled off a fitting tempo and hit the right words. Your read doesn’t sound too natural though. To pull off a conversational read, you need to speak each sentence like a statement whenever it doesn’t have a question mark or an exclaimation. Your read doesn’t match the words either, made the strangeness all the more obvious. I hope this helps.

  • #68564
    nettipo1
    Participant

    Hi VO Community, I am practicing various energy levels, volume…and well, just about everything! I am open to any feedback you can provide. Thank you!

    Allstate Insurance – Agent
    Go ahead… Make a wish… Now call your Allstate agent. Because today, planning makes wishes come true. And your Allstate agent can help make sure that “family security”, “college funding”, and even a “healthy retirement” are in the stars for you. Your Allstate agent wants to be your agent for life. You’re in good hands with Allstate Life Insurance.

    Sesame Place
    Sesame Place is the theme park where Sesame Street comes to life! New in 2018 is our biggest, most exciting roller coaster ever – Oscar’s Wacky Taxi™! Bring the entire family to whirl on rides, splash down slides and hug everyone’s favorite furry friends. So before little kids become big kids, bring them to meet their Sesame Street friends at Sesame Place® theme park!

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    • #68575
      TimDKietzman
      Participant

      WOW! You’ve nailed the tone, tempo, and pitch from beginning to end. Your reads both sound super conversational and your voice is a perfect fit for Sesame Place. You don’t go over-the-top and you have a fantastic recording setup. Only thing I have to point out is you paused in between some sentences. It may have been for barely more than half a second, but I noticed. Pauses should always be left for periods, commas and other full stops. All in all, I think your reads are fantastic.

      • #68605
        nettipo1
        Participant

        Thank you so much! And yes, I hear the pauses in the middle of my sentences now, so I will try to tighten them up!

  • #68558
    Chad4674
    Participant

    Hello Everyone! Working on a commercial script. I would love to hear feedback on delivery. I will also attach the script for your convenience:

    Introducing SRX, Cadillac’s all-new performance utility that raises the bar inside and out. Inside: SRX offers seating for seven and the UltraView roof, which gives first- and second-row passengers an unprecedented open-air riding experience. Outside: SRX has available Magnetic Ride Control, the world’s fastest-reacting suspension system. The result is maximized road contact that allows the driver to feel every S-curve and the thrill of every straightaway. The praise is high. So is the bar.

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    • #68574
      TimDKietzman
      Participant

      Well, I think you have a great voice and your enunciation of words was well placed. I don’t think you sound conversational though, that’s because you’re stopping abruptly and at one point in the middle of a sentence. To sound conversational, you have to say it like a statement. Also, the tone doesn’t sound much like a car commercial. Most every car commercial is the same so try listening to some for inspiration.

    • #68571
      RYoung
      Participant

      Hi, I would move toward a more connected delivery, it seemed a little disconnected? Your voice is very smooth though, you may want to change inflections,(up and down), a bit to sound more conversational, good job on this, keep it up!

  • #68550
    suecat
    Participant

    Hey! This is 4/H take-2! Thank you Nettipo1! I think this is a little better. I’ve added the script!

    It began with the seed of an idea. In 1902, the heartland needed folks to embrace new advances in agriculture. But leaders with open minds, strong hearts and willing hands weren’t in abundance. Luckily, kids were. By empowering the next generation to lead, 4/H took root. And grew. Grew kids who are confident and strong. Who are curious enough to question. And capable enough to find the answer. True leaders aren’t born. They’re grown. 4/H GROWS HERE

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    • #68609
      nettipo1
      Participant

      Hi suecat, this is a great take 2! I definitely noticed more emotion behind your words. I would try delivering the last three sentences in a different emotion…right now it sounds almost sassy, and perhaps it should be more resolute (I don’t know if this is the right word). I agree with TimDKietzman that your tempo was a bit faster than needed. Keeping in mind that your voice is supporting the visuals on screen might help you slow down. Good job, though! Keep working on your craft!

    • #68573
      TimDKietzman
      Participant

      To be honest, the recording quality makes it a little hard to listen to. However, I do think you sound very natural in your performance. You are speaking as if telling someone in person and the words you hit were very fitting and not overdone. Aside from the recording quality, I think the only thing you need to work on is your tempo. This is a narration script and you shouldn’t speak too fast. The point of narration is to explain, not sell, so make sure the words are spoken at a reasonable pace.

  • #68544
    greta_j
    Participant

    Hey fellow VO-ers! Would love some feedback on these commercial scripts. Recorded on my phone, so not looking for sound quality, just feedback on the reads! Thanks a million!

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    • #68577
      TimDKietzman
      Participant

      Congratulations, both reads could work for this script. You’ve got great talent if you can pull off more than one type of tone. However, I would say that your reads sound more like narration scripts. I am not getting the impression that you are selling something to me. It sounds more like you’re trying to explain something to your employees… Either way, well done.

    • #68562
      Chad4674
      Participant

      I like both reads. different perspective on each. As Sue mentioned the first one sounded light with personality. The Second read sounded like a defensive personality like “I’m preparing for battle!” LOL! both were really good! Keep it up!

      • #68600
        greta_j
        Participant

        Thanks for the feedback Chad!

    • #68553
      suecat
      Participant

      Hey GretaJ! I liked both reads, the first was light and friendly. In the second read, it felt a little more aggressive. Great voice!

  • #68536
    suecat
    Participant

    Hey,
    I need your feedback help, please!
    Thank you!

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    • #68597
      Don Sack
      Participant

      Hey Cat!
      Sure, you will mess with your audio software and equipment set up and improve the audio, takes time and Edge courses can help. Unless the script was written as we hear it, my suggestion would be to enunciate, be clear with words especially the ending of words; slow down and relax.
      Rock On!

    • #68552
      Zhenee
      Participant

      Hi Suecat, I agree with nettipo1 about the audio quality. A piece of advice that my coach gave me is that when you’re recording you want to keep your voice between -12 and -6 decibels. If you’re using a software like audacity then you can visually see the volume you’re speaking at and try to maintain that throughout your read. I hope that helps, it definitely helped me.

      • #68554
        suecat
        Participant

        Thank you so much! I will keep that in mind and watch a little more closely!

    • #68542
      nettipo1
      Participant

      Hi suecat, the audio quality needs to be better (volume, clarity), because it made it difficult to hear your voice clearly. I think you have a smooth and even delivery, which is good. You might want to strengthen the emotions you are choosing to use in this read–and I say emotions because the story has a turning point in it, where there is a problem (a whole list of things that weren’t in abundance) to a solution (luckily, kids were), so there could be two emotions on either side of that turning point. So perhaps focus on bringing out the emotions behind the words more. Would love to hear you to do this one again and see what you can do with it.

      • #68555
        suecat
        Participant

        Thank you! I will do another read of this and hopefully it’ll be a little better!

  • #68529
    Zhenee
    Participant

    Hello All,
    I’m a new student here at Edge Studio and my homework was to toy around with audacity and submit a recording of the Hemingway script from the Edge Studio script library. I would appreciate any and all feedback on both my read and my use of audacity.

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    • #68578
      TimDKietzman
      Participant

      Your read is well done overall, good tempo, well placed inflections, and you sounded quite conversational. Only problem I can find is that you don’t sound particularly interested in what your reading. If you want people to enjoy what your explaining in your narration script, you need to convince them that you find it interesting too. Also, your inflections at the end of the sentences aren’t natural, try speaking them like statements, that’ll help.

    • #68541
      nettipo1
      Participant

      This is very good -hard to believe you are a new student! I agree with suecat that you have a soothing voice, and I don’t notice any unnecessary pauses, so it flows into the listener’s ear very smoothly. I noticed that you sort of end with the same inflection point or same level at the end of a sentence or at comma, which might make it more monotone than you’d want, so you might want to break from that pattern a bit. Perhaps see how the phrases are more like thoughts, and combine those thoughts as one scene. Or perhaps visualize that you are saying these words to someone beside you. Overall though, this is a great first posting, so keep posting more!

    • #68532
      suecat
      Participant

      Hey!
      I liked the inflections in your voice, kept the read interesting. The tempo seemed to have increased in the middle of the read, as it was hard to understand your words. But you have a very soothing voice! Looking forward to hearing more!

  • #68524
    danieltims
    Participant

    Hey all – finally getting back on track for my Commercial demo reel after a long hiatus. Any feedback on these practice reads greatly appreciated!

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    • #68579
      TimDKietzman
      Participant

      You have a great voice for commercials, I’d say you’re on the right track as far as tone, tempo, and pitch. You could speak a little louder and I felt that each recording sounded similar. If you want to keep clients listening, it’d really help to ensure that the reads are unique to each other. Hope this helps.

    • #68534
      suecat
      Participant

      You have a great voice! On the Nutra System and Invisaline tempo could have been a little slower. Remembering what my Coach said, that the product/company name needs to be heard because they write the check. The Animal read started nice and methodical, then it picked up a bit. Still enjoyable reads.

  • #68519
    Mdmcghee34
    Participant

    Hello, working on narration scripts for my coaching session. Any feedback would be great!

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    • #68580
      TimDKietzman
      Participant

      I have… nothing to say. Your voice is spot-on for narration and the performance was delightfully soothing. Anyone listening would feel very comfortable with you leading them. Keep going and you will go far.

    • #68535
      suecat
      Participant

      Hey!
      The first read was so soothing, I was glad to be an employee! The second read was also soothing, but with a little more energy, I would have been ready to invest! Fabulous voice!

      • #68572
        Mdmcghee34
        Participant

        Thanks suecat for the feedback!

  • #68507
    nettipo1
    Participant

    Hello! Thank you in advance for your feedback!

    Life’s full of compromises. You give up high performance for high capacity. You pass on your favorite foods to fit into your favorite jeans. And with credit cards, find one with a low interest rate and you could give up important services. But now there’s a credit card with no compromises. The low rate OPTIMA card from American Express. Call now. 1-800-4-OPTIMA. Get the savings and the service with no compromises. And no annual fee.

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    • #68581
      TimDKietzman
      Participant

      You read great! I think each sentence had enough variation and the words you hit were well-picked. Only problem I can see is the end of the sentences. The words with one syllable didn’t roll off like the multiples. (eg: services, compromises) A roll off at the end is key to making the read sound conversational. Avoid hitting the end of a sentence unless it’s a question or an exclaimation. I hope this helps, you are doing well.

    • #68522
      Mdmcghee34
      Participant

      Yes I agree with Erik B. This is a great read. Keep up the great work.

    • #68518
      Erik B
      Participant

      Hi Nettipo. This read is fantastic. The tone, tempo, pitch, and volume are all on point. The recording quality is great. Sounds very professional. Great job.

      • #68540
        nettipo1
        Participant

        Thank you so much to both of you! I appreciate it.

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