[David Goldberg]

Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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[Angela Doyle]

Hi! I’m new to Edge and to this feedback forum. I just started narration coaching sessions with Edge after completing a round of commercial sessions (and demo reel creation) with the competitor. =)

I’d love to get creative feedback (not technical–still working on improving my home studio) on these 2 reads please. My friends and family think my work is solid, but it’d be great to get input from people who are in the industry. Is it smooth? Does my voice grab you right from the start and keep you interested throughout? How could I improve my reads?

Thanks in advance!

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[Grace Lee]

The American Airlines one could be a little less choppier in the first half and more upbeat to really sound more “happy” to serve the passengers. I like your tone. It’s well suited for this read.

The second Biogenetic one is def better than the first. I have no idea what you were saying but it sounds like you know what you’re talking about. Lol. I like the sound of your voice, pacing and your articulation.

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[James]

The biology track (the second posted, didn’t listen to the first) was Ok! Perhaps bring the pace up some, and engage the listener. I was a good track, but I didn’t get the connection. Otherwise the read was good! The airline track had a very good pace and also well read. I have a feeling you will go far in voice over!

[Angela Doyle]

I can’t seem to delete the Biogenetics Law read and replace it with a better one! Please disregard that one and listen to this one.

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[ierxyzz]

Hi all! Uploading these 2 commercial reads for an upcoming coaching session. This is my first time playing around with EQ to affect the tone of a piece. I emphasized the highs of the Sesame Place read, and the mids/lows of the Toyota read. Thanks in advance for any feedback!

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[Joseph Thompson]

I also liked the Sesame Place theme park read, but it lacked the punch and excitement that a theme park would generate. Candidly, that may be easily fixed by the addition of background music, so, all-in-all I thought it was a nice read. You have a great voice for live announcements!

[James]

The Toyota one is perfect! Good pace and feel. The second was good, but didn’t have the feel. You could try it with just a little less emphasis on some of the parts. It was still a great take!

[ierxyzz]

Thanks! I hear what you’re saying about less emphasis. That’s a good adjustment

[Joseph Thompson]

I really liked your read on the Toyota job. Sounded natural and conversational (my coach tells me that’s the kind of voice that’s booking a lot these days)

[Barndi]

First testing of my recently converted closet 😂 and first forum upload ever! Any and all feedback would be greatly appreciated. Thank you!

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[Angela Doyle]

I agree with James’ suggestion about sounding happier in the Purina spot. A peppier sound would be engaging. Also, the recording sounds a bit echo-y to me, like you’re in a big cave.

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[Barndi]

Thank you thank you for the feedback!!! Really appreciate it. And I’ll try to add some more “cushion” to my closet sound booth to reduce the echo. Thank you again!

[James]

If these were playing on the radio, I would never know you were starting out. Very good delivery and clear sound. Only constructive criticism I can provide? Possibly try the Purina commercial with a happier emotion for a friendlier feel and see what that sounds like. If it helps, Actually laugh before starting to give yourself that cheerful sound and see what that does.
This version is good though!

[Barndi]

Thank you thank you for the feedback! I will definitely try to sound even happier w the Purina one. And will also work on the echo-y sound of my “booth” which is a closet. =)

[James]

I’m operating from the closet as well, it just works. Currently I’m waiting for mic upgrades and a phantom power supply to add to it.

[Brmassey]

Hi all! Looking for some feedback–trying some variance here with a more fun and upbeat read and a more serious and grounded read. Recorded these on my phone so no need to comment on audio quality. 🙂 Thanks a million!

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[Barndi]

In the Aspen recording, the first phrase sounded questioning instead of confident and reassuring to my newbie ears. Really liked the Pilsbury take. It was light, bright and and ending was fun.

[JLivingston]

Uploading a couple of Narration recordings for my upcoming coaching session. Raw audio, converted to Mono and MP3.
Feedback is always appreciated!

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[James]

I have nothing negative to say about these. Very professional sound!

[Angela Doyle]

I totally agree with James. Nicely done.

[JLivingston]

@fridayhouse Thank you!

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[James]

Credit where credit is due!

[James]

I played about with this one. I’m not happy with it personally. Added some music from Looperman (credit to user:Rasputin), and EQ’d my voice to sound like an old movie. I don’t think my voice is a good match for this kind if voice work lol. The script was generated by ChatGPT.

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[Barndi]

I’m new to the VO world so take my response w a grain of salt but I thought it sounded great! Maybe it’s the background music you expertly chose but I can totally picture the battle-weary, cynical detective. =)

[Angela Doyle]

I totally agree!

[James]

Thank you for the kind words! I’m very critical of my work, and I do mean with everything. But your input does mean a lot!

[anpascua]

Hello Everyone! I’m new to voice over and not working from a professional home studio yet. I’m working on narration scripts. I appreciate any feedback on the following:
1. Does my read sound conversational?
2. How is my diction?
3. Working on my pace – how is it?
4. Am I reading my copy with a good flow or do I sound choppy?

Thank you all for your help and time. Have a great day on purpose!

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[Angela Doyle]

There definitely is an echo in both. I’d clean things up a bit and remove the breaths. It might be me, but they’re a bit distracting.

[James]

The delivery is great on both of them! You have a high noise floor and a bit of an echo, a little acoustical padding will cure this. This is really good. With a good warm up before your next practice script, your speech will sound even sharper. It’s an issue I have personally. Over all, great start!

[James]

I have an east Texas accent and I’m working on making it less noticeable. I also have a mumble issue. Where can I improve on this?

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[Brmassey]

Whew! What a tongue twister. Was this for a commercial read or just a way to warm up? I would say if for a commercial or narration, definitely slow down a bit and don’t forget to enunciate–you lost the “t” in hot. I can’t even tell you have a Texas accent. 🙂

[James]

Thank you! Yes it was for a warm up, so I was pushing to read it faster then a normal script simply because it was a tongue twister lol I now hear the missing T.

[DillonP]

It has been quite sometime since I posted anything on here. I was hoping with these new recordings I could get some feedback on how well I am doing and what improvements that I need to have done. They are both commercial and narration recordings that I just had gotten done with and to see how well they are. Thank you.

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[Barndi]

I think the product is pronounced ex-CE-drin, if I’m remembering correctly from old TV commercials. =)

[James]

Those sounded very good to me! I’d say play around with the emotion and see what comes of it. Do some mouth exercises as well, it does help a good deal. Over all, I liked them!

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