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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hello everyone – I’ve been with EdgeStudio for a few months now but I’m new to the forums.
I’m working towards a narration demo at this point.
Would be greatly appreciative of any feedback on the files below.Also – what is the etiquette for giving others feedback? Would it be inappropriate for me to give any feedback since I’m so new?
Looking forward to being a part of this community and working with all of you!
Cheers – Jorge
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Hi everyone!
I would love to get some feedback from you all. Below are the scripts I’ve created with files attached. I know there are some technical difficulties this time around, but I would love feedback more focused on the acting and connection with the script. Let me know what you all think. I’d really appreciate it!
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Hi Don,
Your voice is so nice to listen to. It has a warm, slightly gravelly, down-to-earth feel. Just a couple things I noticed:
The “t” and “d” at the end of certain words may not be distinct enough for the listener (such as in “Amstel LighT,” and “functionally you wanT” in the First Bank read).
You may also want to try different ways of saying the beginning and end of the copy to see if it expresses any other emotions. For instance, in the Amstel Light piece, maybe try a gentle and consoling “Heyy..” or a surly, know-it-all roommate “Hey.” I can tell that you have the ability to bring out the comedy and the flavors of the copy with your voice.
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Hi everyone!
I recently finished my second coaching session and would love to get some feedback from you all. Heard this was the best place for that! Below are the scripts I’ve chosen from the library with mp3 files attached. Let me know what you all think. I’d greatly appreciate it! Thank you!
Mercedes – 2014 E Class
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I’m a T-shirt and jeans guy. Never spent a lot on clothes.
So I meet a girl. She doesn’t mind that I’m a T-shirt and jeans guy.
We decide to get married. Now I need a tuxedo. I go big time.
I decide not to rent. I buy. Its worth it. I look great!..Then I get this call. it’s not my best man. Not my mom. Its Citibank. They just wanted to make sure someone else wasn’t using my card. Imagine a T-shirt and jeans guy finding happiness with a girl, a tuxedo and a bank all at the same time. What a year!-
Hi Cbrown865! Nice fresh tone and personality in your reads. I agree, just slow it down and adjust pacing so each phrase and word can be heard in your message. Keep it up!
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Hey Cb!
Slow it down; enunciate (slowing down will help with that?). Acoustics where you record. Rock On!! -
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Hello All, I am beginner and would appreciate all feedback for my narration homework. It will be very much appreciated. Thank you!
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Hi there! I recorded a couple scripts for my narration lessons. Any feedback is much appreciated!
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Born in Serbia, Tesla was a different kind of genius. Whereas Edison was an eternal experimenter and tinkerer, Tesla was a human calculator, and his ability to work out complex math and physics equations in his mind helped him achieve early career success in Europe.”Inside Halo Infinite
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Hi TroyC,
You speak with ease, and your reads have a conversational feel to it. I noticed that you read many of the words differently than what was written, added words that were not there, and said some of the key words incorrectly, all of which can throw off the listener…so please be mindful of those things.
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Still working on my narration. These are 3 scripts that I recorded as homework for my coach.
BEAVERS:
The b****r builds its lodge out of intertangled twigs and sticks; as freezing weather nears, they plaster their lodge with mud, making a concrete layer that no predator can break through. During the early nineteenth century, the b****r pelt was the single most valuable commodity; the pelt being used for robes, coats, clothing trims, and top hats.DATATECH:
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helping our customers improve their use of disparate, complex and ever-changing technologies.In a nutshell, we increase their “tech worth” by evolving,
integrating or expanding their existing systems and by strategically deploying new, state-of-the-art platforms.SUPERMAN MUSEUM:
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Hi Jay,
Your voice is very robust, upbeat, and clear! I did notice a slight difference in tone or emotion that you applied to each read, but I still noticed a hint of announcer or sales quality. For instance, when you read the “robes, coats, clothing trims, and top hats,” it felt like a description of an array of products, and “state of the art platforms” also ended with a similar inflection. I’m not a coach so hopefully I’m not conflicting with what your coach says, but it seems like for narration, it’s important to see which words are important to emphasize, and focus less on making it sound appealing, so perhaps consider slightly decreasing the “oomph” of the read and settle down into a more factual, person-standing-next-to-you read. If you were actually near the actual beavers in the first read, consider what volume you would need to have without disturbing the animals! I enjoyed all three reads overall, though! Thanks for posting. -
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Hello all! Here is a do-over recording for any and all feedback. I was trying to keep it flowing and not to pause unnecessarily. Let me know if you think I succeeded and or you hear other things to work on. Thank you!
Mary
Gertrude Käsebier was an American photographer who was known for her images of motherhood and her portraits of Native Americans; her portraits of the Sioux focused more on the expression and individuality of the person than their costumes and customs. She helped establish the Women’s Professional Photographers Association of America and promoted photography as a career for women.
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Hi Mary! This piece flowed nicely without a lot of those pauses that you’re trying to avoid. The only pause I caught was at the very beginning after “Gertrude Kasebier”. It’s very slight, though, so great job overall.
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Hello Fellow Edgers 🙂
In preparation for my upcoming commercial demo, I need to get in as much practice as possible, with AS MUCH FEEDBACK:-) (See corresponding scripts below)
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So why don’t you take this opportunity to think of the outcome that you want, the one in which you’ll feel happy, satisfied and excited about this journey that you’re about to take.
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I’ve been expecting you. Why? Don’t tell me you don’t recognize me? Oh! You still don’t know who I am. Let me try and help you with that. I am the ill ease that you feel when you walk into a crowded room. You know. The hot and cold flushes that confuse you when you are already confused enough. I am the one that raises the whip to your already raising heart. I am the tightening of your chest. The s*********g worries that feel like they might become an avalanche and they can just bury you in an instant. My friend I am the obsessive and the compulsive. I’m the voice. You know the one. Always questioning, questioning, questioning, everything you do, everything you think. And I am every, single staring eye that watches you. So, now that we have become acquainted, what are you going to do about it?
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Hi L.Renee,
Nice reads overall.
For the Va-va-va-voom read, I think you’ll be able to add more energy to it, and really talk to whoever you chose as the listener (your friend, or your salon client) with a bit more sassiness!
For the meditation read, be mindful of the pausing in the middle of sentences, or pausing too long at commas. Even though it’s supposed to be a calming read, the pausing prevents it from flowing as well as it could.
For the anxiety read, be aware of the glottal stops at the start of the sentences (“Oh” and “I am…” and “EVerything…” and “ALways…” ). The announcer tag at the end was free of glottal stops. You can still have that imposing personality in the first part of the read, but without hitting those vowels too much. -
Hi LRenee, great job! Good variation between the 3 scripts.
Script 1 – I think this script needs a little more variation in pitch, like more over the top and with more enthusiasm and energy. Your voice is deep and serious and sounded a little flat for this one.
Script 2 – Really good work! Your voice sounds very well suited for this genre. Good pacing and emphasis on key words throughout
Script 3 – Also really good! It sounded very authentic and believable. Keep it up!Mary
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