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  • #69629
    Bev
    Participant

    ok

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  • #69627
    Bev
    Participant

    Hello,
    I liked your read, Very clear easy to understand, the critic I would have and it’s probably just me but I would speed it up just a tiny bit.

  • #69622
    Ryanjameskasper
    Participant

    Hello, It’s been about 2 years in the making for me…. I am officially open for business. I built my own vocal recording booth, acquired all the gear and have been tinkering with producing my own stuff to be able to put a demo together. I want to focus on narration and so my first demo is geared towards that. Would love to get some feedback on how it sounds.

    It is entirely self produced, with the exception of one excerpt that I was hired for and i used clips of what they produced in the demo.

    I use a Neumann TLM-103…and some Rode NT1 for microphones. Universal Audio Apollo Twin X interface running an Avalon 737 preamp plugin. Adobe Audition DAW and I post produce/process with the Izotope software suite, (Nectar, Neutron, and Ozone)

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    • #69654
      Don Sack
      Participant

      Ryan!
      Hmmm, not sure if I’m knowledgeable (edge….) enough yet; I was struck by your voice and versatility; the production quality for sure, but, I am wondering if a client would not just be interested in your voice alone? For me the accompanying music was loud, distracting and over topped your voice.
      Rock On!!

      • #69663
        Ryanjameskasper
        Participant

        I appreciate the comments…. I have been focusing a lot of my audio production skills on what is called “unmasking”…… it’s where you make equalization adjustments to your vocal track and your music track to get your voice to “lay in the mix”…… this allows you to still keep a nice loud music track that helps to evoke emotion….but the vocal track is still intelligible through it.

    • #69635
      Official81
      Participant

      So Ryan it was phenomenal ok! Perfect so I just want to say congratulations!!!!!!! I absolutely love your DEMO! And your production skills are superb! Do you do any tutoring or mentoring at all? I’m tryna be friends at this point lol!!!

      • #69644
        Ryanjameskasper
        Participant

        Thank you…. I appreciate it. Honestly I don’t. I got my editing and production skills a long time ago when I worked in radio. Basic editing, multitrackiing, processing. But I watched a lot of YouTube videos to get it up to the next level. The information is out there…. You just have to find it and practice.

  • #69618
    Bev
    Participant

    Hi,
    I loved your read. You told it like it is just kind of matter of fact but not cold, I just thought it was great.

  • #69595
    mkell755
    Participant

    Hi all! I’m practicing for my upcoming narration demo. Let me know what you think. Thank you!

    Mary

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    • #69607
      Mdmcghee34
      Participant

      Hi Mary!
      The reading is smooth and flows well without getting lost in the story. Also good tonal shifts as needed and highlighting keys words in the passage.

      • #69693
        mkell755
        Participant

        Thanks for the feedback Mdmcghee! I appreciate the detail. Thanks! mk

  • #69585
    gathonigachie
    Participant

    Hello to All!

    This is my first script and I will be glad to hear your feedback. Thank you in advance.

    KENYA – A short documentary
    When people think of Africa … they see disease … poverty … crime … violence … I am about to change that perception, and show you a country … where wealth … health … peace … security … is in abundance. Located in the heart of Africa, there is one magical country that has made that difference. Welcome to Kenya, my friends … and enjoy your stay with us.

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    • #69642
      Sylvanie
      Participant

      Hi Gathonigatchie, Well done! I like the accent as well. Only feedback at when it came to the second line your pitch faded a bit.. but all in all great job indeed!

    • #69636
      Official81
      Participant

      Hi Gathonigatchie! Your voice with it’s accent is outstanding, very alluring and convincing. Wonderful job! The only advice that I have is that you use some sound dampening equipment that it doesn’t sound like your in an empty room. But on your first script it was beautiful I love every minute. Was waiting for more.

    • #69615
      kristianwithakay
      Participant

      That was wonderful! I mean I’m no expert; but your voice sounds absolutely lovely for documentaries! I’d 100 percent watch that program you’re sampling!

    • #69597
      mkell755
      Participant

      First of all welcome!

      I loved your take on this script – your voice is very colorful and had great emphasis on selected words throughout. It sounded like “the” was missing/smushed in “Located in the heart of Africa…”; that’s an easy fix. Also I did not hear a slight pause at the end of the sentence “…that has made a difference. Welcome…” and so the two sentences ran together. These small tweaks will make your performance sound a little clearer in my opinion. Good job and I hope that helps!

      Mary

  • #69582
    suecat
    Participant

    Hey Everybody,
    I’m working on my studio, aka, closet, so please let me know how that sounds in addition to your other feedback. Thank you so much for listening and commenting.

    Motel 6 Do-over
    I’ve just been hearing about this trendy new hairstyle called a man bun. I mean what’s next the hee hive? well Motel 6 recently got a new updo of sorts too with renovations nationwide and even with our fresh modern look you’ll still find rooms at the lowest price of any national chain so you can save up enough money to get yourself a haircut or maybe a hat.
    We’ll leave the light on for you, at Motel6.com

    NO!
    Kids hate the word no. As in no you can’t stay up late, no you can’t have more ice cream and no, you may not paint the cat. No, no, NO! Well isn’t it time for a yes? We think so. Six Flags Great Adventure. Yes!

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    • #69598
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Suecat, good job on these! I liked the tone and pace for Motel 6, and the rising tone / your interpretation at “…or maybe a hat.”, which sounded like “…or maybe a hat?” For the second script, I really liked how you built the 3 things that kids hear “no” to as if each one of them was worse than the one before, really made it sound like a convincing story! Keep up the good work!

      Mary

      • #69600
        suecat
        Participant

        Thank you Mary for listening. I truly appreciate your comments.

        • #69601
          mkell755
          Participant

          Sure, you are welcome! 🙂

  • #69573
    taylorn.quinn
    Participant

    Hi All,

    I hope everyone is staying safe!

    I am currently working on my narration demo and working on keeping tone the same, as well as not rushing too much. Any feedback is greatly appreciated.
    Thanks-Taylor

    Script:

    In the spring of 1987, Stevie Nicks checked herself into the Betty Ford clinic to end more than a decade of c*****e abuse. After undergoing a 30-day treatment, she was released. Stevie was determined to stay clean and anxious to continue her demanding career. She immediately went into the studio to record Tango in the Night with Fleetwood Mac. It would be their last album together for more than a decade. (music cue – “Seven Wonders”) By early 1988, Stevie Nicks was running out of steam. She was diagnosed with chronic fatigue syndrome. After four months on the Tango in the Night tour, her final few shows had to be canceled.

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    • #69599
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Taylor! Really good! I like the pacing and clarity of this a lot! I was really listening to hear about Stevie Nicks (who is a favorite of mine!). It was well performed and not rushed and also not too slow. The tone had a consistency to it without being monotone. It felt like you gave the listener time to understand / catch up to what was being communicated – very good!

      Mary

  • #69561
    greta_j
    Participant

    Oops, double post! Hello! Working on some commercial reads, particularly levels, pacing, and “telling the story” – don’t need audio advice as these are recorded on my phone 🙂 Thanks as always for your time! /Greta

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  • #69551
    greta_j
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    Hello! Working on some commercial reads, particularly levels, pacing, and “telling the story” – don’t need audio advice as these are recorded on my phone 🙂 Thanks as always for your time! /Greta

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    • #69616
      kristianwithakay
      Participant

      I agree pampers read b was better! Also, that ben and jerry’s one was fun! I really liked the character you were getting into. It was fun to listen to! ^_^

      • #69662
        greta_j
        Participant

        Hi! Thanks Kristian!

    • #69575
      taylorn.quinn
      Participant

      I like how soothing your voice is. The pampers read B was definitely better. It flowed more, had a better pitch and wasn’t as monotone. Also watch how close you are to your microphone I kept hearing a popping noise. If you don’t have a pop filter it will definitely be worth the investment as I had similar issues when I was starting out as well. Keep up the great work!

      • #69661
        greta_j
        Participant

        Thanks Taylor! These were just iphone reads 😛 My condenser mic has a pop filter, gotta have it! <3 Thanks again!

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