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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hello Forum! Posting my most recent homework here, focusing on the eLearning genre and emphasizing the right words. Thanks for any feedback you provide.
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This lesson dedicated to snare drum rudiments introduces the Flams: Flam Accent, Flam Paradiddle, Flamacue and Flam Tap.
The Flam, in musical theory and writing, doesn’t have a definite value; it can be described as a double stroke made by a first-hand weak stroke closely followed by an accented, stronger second-hand stroke. It’s a grace note, represented in drum charts by a smaller note with a tie put just before the principal note. For a correct execution of a Flam, the stick that plays the weaker stroke starts from about one inch from the drumhead, and the stick that plays the principal stroke starts from a superior height.In the exercises of the drum sheet you should play regular figures alternating the right and the left hand, and once you have mastered them, try to insert flams in your free improvisations.
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Commonly summarized as “ontogeny recapitulates phylogeny” (on-TA-jeh-nee re-cah-PIT-you-lates fill-AH-jeh-nee), biogenetic law posits that the embryonic stages in the development of an individual (its ontogeny) repeat the evolutionary history of its ancestors (its phylogeny). A corollary of the biogenetic law is the idea that new evolutionary features are typically added at the end of development, with formerly adult, or “terminal” stages gradually being compressed into progressively earlier stages (or sometimes being eliminated outright).-
Thank you for posting! You have a really nice, soothing voice. But, I would say to perhaps allow your reads to either breath a little more or a little less because I could feel you running a bit out of breath, especially in the Flams read, since it was a tongue-twister. But, I really appreciated how you would change your tone for your audience. And you have really good pronunciation! Great work!
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Hello everyone! This is my first time posting here and I would really appreciate some feedback on my narration script recordings. Thank you!
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Welcome to the Forum! Thanks for posting. You have a nice voice. Across the three recordings, I few things I noticed include some breath noises and some unnatural breaks in the sentences. For example, from the Travel-Travelogues recording: “Offering the latest / and greatest…” Not seeing the script, it’s possible the scriptwriter wanted a break there?
You were able to switch your tone for your audience which was really nice.
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Hey Mike,
I think the conversational tone is working for you pretty well, especially the Trendi and Ziploc recordings. I think any critiques I have of those would be nitpick stuff—good job on those! I felt the Atlanta Bread script felt more “read”. There were points in the audio track where it sounded like something was cut out, so I’m thinking you were trying to use lead-ins there? If not, it’s a great tool to use to keep that tone conversational, as if you were standing in front of the Atlanta Bread counter talking to a friend about what’s good there.Keep up the great work!
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Hi – adding more reads for greatly appreciated feedback.
Blue Diamond Almonds
Get Your Good Going. Good is in every Blue Diamond Almond. Good is Contagious. Good adds flavor to our lives. Blue Diamond Almonds.Description of dish
Sesame Salmon with Green Onions and Lemon
Simple yet radically sophisticated, this dish comes together in less than 30 minutes. If you have access to fresh ramps or baby leeks, use them instead of green onions, and sub pea shoots (or your favorite baby lettuce or microgreens) for the arugula. Black sesame seeds lend lovely contrast to the vibrant red-orange fish, but regular will do the job, too.Swanson Flavor Boost
Swanson Flavor Boost concentrated broth. In easy-to-use packets. Add flavor instantly to skillet dishes, stir fries and more. Never make a less-than delicious dish again. Swanson Flavor Boost – Just what your skillet’s been waiting for. The secret is Swanson.-
These sound great! I wouldn’t change a thing on the blue diamond almonds one. One minor comment on the dish description…sounded like an unnecessary pause before “for the arugula”. And no comments on the Swanson flavor boost. Great job!
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I would like feedback on my recording. I joined Edge Studio because I am a voice talent for my job and I would like to improve my skills. I would appreciate it if you would listen to my script and provide feedback.
Thanks so much.
Sharon C.-
FMLA spot was great. At the end of the service now spot, I heard “start” as “stort”, but it was minor, otherwise great job. Toastmasters spot also sounded great. Well done!
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I am a Healthy for Life Facilitator for the American Heart Association and I would like feedback on my recording. I joined Edge Studio because I am a voice talent for my job and I would like to improve my skills. I would appreciate it if you would listen to my script and provide feedback.
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Hello everyone in the Feedback Forum. Now that my first animation demo is completed, I’m working on my narration skills and building muscle memory for being different characters on the spot for audiobooks. Please feel free to have a listen as I narrate the first Jack Reacher novel, ‘Killing Floor” by Lee Child. Comments and critiques are more than welcome.
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Hi everyone! This is my first time posting here, and I’m excited to become a part of the community.
I’ve taken a couple of voiceover classes at my local acting school and am working on becoming more experienced before I have a commercial demo put together. Could I please get some feedback on a few recordings I did as practice? I admittedly still find it a bit difficult to direct myself 🙂 I appreciate you all!
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Hey Community, Please help me out with your feedback. Thank you!
Ziploc 2
Only Ziploc brand bags have a unique interlocking zipper to lock in freshness in a way no other bag can. When it comes out this fresh, you know it went in a Ziploc bag. Ziploc. We’ve got a lock on freshness.Intuition
Now there’s a solution to the soap-opera of shaving. Introducing Intuition. The only all-in-one razor that lathers and shaves in one easy step. You’ll never need shave gel, soap or body wash again, because Intuition’s triple blades are surrounded by a unique Skin Conditioning Solid. With just water, it smooths and soothes to give you soft, smooth, touchable skin with every shave. Shaving’s never been so simple.-
Good recording quality. But while listening to the ziploc commercial, I could hear a lot of pauses. And it felt like it was too slow. You may want to work on pacing yourself a little faster, to sound more dynamic for the commercial performance. Make yourself more desirable to your audience.
hope this critique helps
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