Hello! Practicing for my narration demo. Any feedback appreciated. Thank you!
Kid’s Meditation
It’s bedtime now, time to snuggle into bed and let your eyes softly close. Let’s take a few deep breaths together, ready? In and out…in and out. Notice how warm and safe and comfortable you feel. Keeping your eyes closed, allow your mind to travel. Beneath you, your bed has transformed and you find yourself way up high on a rocky, snow-covered mountain top.
Hey everyone. It’s been awhile since I’ve been on this forum, but I am ready to continue my plan of uploading two recordings as much as I can. I just recorded a new narration audition and a commercial script and I would appreciate any feedback on my performance and the recording setup. Thanks for your advice.
IDI Distributors (Do I sound comfortable, relatable, and friendly, charismatic in any way? That was the tone they were hoping for)
Welcome to IDI Distributors, America’s Insulation Source. Since 1979, we’ve helped thousands of insulation contractors across the country keep their businesses running strong. From insulation materials to accessories, IDI is the one-stop shop for all leading brands.
Wintergreen Resort (My goal for this was to sound Excited, inviting, and confident)
If you‘re in the dark about where to ski, let us shed some light on the subject. High in Virginia‘s Blue Ridge Mountains, discover what‘s been called the Mid-Atlantic‘s finest overall ski experience. Wintergreen offers 10 slopes, five lifts, and an extensive snow-making system. Not to mention luxurious accommodations, an indoor spa, and a nationally recognized children‘s program. For more information, call 1-800-ski-green. That‘s 1-800-skigreen. Wintergreen and Virginia … the perfect combination!
I loved your IDI read. was very clean. There was a word that stuck out to me about 4 seconds in “America’s insulation source” the word source almost sounds like your saying it like soursa with a soft a to finish. Really not big as it could be part natural accent coming out or just me lol. But love the read overall.
Wintergreen: Anther great read. near the end sounds a bit pushed with breath. There is also a lot of information here. Being honest I had to listen 2-3 times just to gather all the information. I would maybe suggest finding the key words in the script and make sure to bring those key words out a little more to help the listener following along. Great work my friend!
(This time using MP3 rather than MP4.) New narrator here, and first time doing test recordings! 🙂 Please let me know what you think, I really appreciate your feedback.
Hi Mel82, I feel when I listen to your narrations they are more audio book style narrations. You may be thinking into the script text a little bit to much. Try pulling back and reading as though your having a conversation. You may find that you don’t punch some words to hard and that it will flow more smooth. Hope this helps. Great first recording! Keep it up!
WITH STEAK, YOU WANT TO MAKE EVERY BITE COUNT. THAT’S WHY
WE USE A-1 STEAK SAUCE. A-1 BRINGS OUT ALL THE DEEP DOWN
JUICY GOODNESS OF EVERY SINGLE BITE OF STEAK…. OR EVEN
HAMBURGER. DELICIOUS! FOR ME, THERE’S ONLY ONE
STEAK SAUCE. A-1. BECAUSE A-1 HAS ALL THE TASTE THAT MAKES
EVERY BITE COUNT.
Grabbed a Script from the library for some practice. This is just a raw file I did no editing to it. Would still love your feedback. Thanks!
Script: American Express
Do you know me? Probably not. In my business, recognition is always important, but when I’m buying goods online I prefer a little privacy. With Private Payments from American Express, I get the security of a unique number created for each business transaction I make. Because my private information is my business, and American Express keeps it that way.
Hi everyone! I’m an Edge student as an aspiring voiceover artist for children’s audiobooks and narration. Here I did a couple of children’s commercials. Please give it a listen and let me know what is good and what needs to be worked on. Just a side note, I’m not using an actual microphone but my own phone, so please excuse for it sounding muffled. Sorry it got posted twice. Thank you!
Disney Princess Pop-Up Games
New Disney Princess Pop-Up Magic games! Once upon a time…not far away…three games popped up where the Disney Princesses played! With a spin to the castle they came, and won this pop-up magic game! New Disney Princess Pop-Up Magic Castle Games. Cinderella’s Coach and Tangled Tower Games each sold separately. And now… The journey continues at your local Stride Rite store! Purchase a pair of Stride Rite Disney Princess shoes and get a free Cinderella’s Coach game! While supplies last. But don’t wait until the midnight hour! This deal is only from February 21st to the 23rd! Locations may vary.
Sesame Place Theme Park
Sesame Place is the theme park where Sesame Street comes to life! New in 2018 is our biggest, most exciting roller coaster ever – Oscar’s Wacky Taxi™! Bring the entire family to whirl on rides, splash down slides and hug everyone’s favorite furry friends. So before little kids become big kids, bring them to meet their Sesame Street friends at Sesame Place® theme park!
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Disney Princess Pop-Up Games: I think you did a pretty good job here! Your voice has a dreamlike, fairytale-narrator quality that definitely matches well with the subject. This could just be me however, but I feel that your pacing is a little slow? On one hand I feel it’s intentional, but on another I do feel that there were times where I thought some lines should definitely pick up a little speed.
Sesame Place Theme Park: A great job here! You’ve got great energy, and I can totally understand the elevations you’ve given to words in your script. Near-impeccable delivery. A minor nitpick, but I think I would’ve said ‘Oscar’s Wacky Taxi(TM)’ a bit differently in an attempt to offset between that and ‘New in 2018… most exciting roller coaster ever,’ or vice versa. But still, great work!
Hi everyone! I’m and Edge student with as aspiring voiceover artist for children’s audiobooks and narration. Here I did a couple of children’s commercials. Please give it a listen and let me know what is good and what needs to be worked on. Just a side note, I’m not using an actual microphone but my own phone, so please excuse for it sounding muffled. Thank you!
Sesame Street Playhouse — Mattel
It’s Sesame Street in the backyard. All the fun and imagination of Sesame Street is here. A playhouse with things to slide on, and wriggle through, and pretend to talk on, and play with. The outdoors is even more fun when Sesame Street is part of it. Now, there’s a lot of SESAME STREET for everyone’s backyard. It’s fun. Each sold separately…from MATTEL.
Disney Princess Pop-Up Games
New Disney Princess Pop-Up Magic games! Once upon a time…not far away…three games popped up where the Disney Princesses played! With a spin to the castle they came, and won this pop-up magic game! New Disney Princess Pop-Up Magic Castle Games. Cinderella’s Coach and Tangled Tower Games each sold separately. And now… The journey continues at your local Stride Rite store! Purchase a pair of Stride Rite Disney Princess shoes and get a free Cinderella’s Coach game! While supplies last. But don’t wait until the midnight hour! This deal is only from February 21st to the 23rd! Locations may vary.
Sesame Place Theme Park
Sesame Place is the theme park where Sesame Street comes to life! New in 2018 is our biggest, most exciting roller coaster ever – Oscar’s Wacky Taxi™! Bring the entire family to whirl on rides, splash down slides and hug everyone’s favorite furry friends. So before little kids become big kids, bring them to meet their Sesame Street friends at Sesame Place® theme park!
Hi RoxyMel,
Your recording was very nice and clear. My only suggestion is to remove or reduce the pauses at the commas, and that way it can keep a good flow and pace. Nice job!