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Hey all – here’s a narration script I would like to get some feedback on if possible. Below is the script. They’re looking for a “bold and deep voice”.
Great flavor starts with a perfectly trim cut of meat.
It’s born from a well-balanced brine – one with real sugar.
It’s nurtured by a slow cook in a small batch. We’re talking very slow. 12 hours slow.
It thrives in smoke – real smoke, from real hardwood chips.
And that smoke better be timed just right.Flavor is an experience that comes from experience,
5 generations worth.
You get it from passionate people who know a lot, and who want to know a lot more.
And when dedicated folks make mouthwateringly great flavored meat, it’s something we just have to share.Flavor for family,
Flavor for friends,
From us.Tastes good, right?
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I think your voice is very good for this type of script and the “bold and deep voice they’re looking for! Your read is clear, too. But I think the energy and the pace need to be brought up more and kept consistent throughout the read. Nice job overall! -
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Hi guys. I would enjoy some feedback on a couple of recordings. I’m trying to become a character voice actor.
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Hello, I enjoyed listening to these! Wonderful how you were able to convey a bitter edge in Memories, and you had me smiling in Handsome-Jack: Jack’s was conversational but had (to my ear) enough “crazy” that I would stay away from the character in real life (!). The Edgar Allen Poe reading was moody and brooded, but a few words were not clear. All three readings were natural and flowed and conveyed a distinct character from the scripts that I could picture.
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I enjoyed all three reads. I think you do show a knack for character voicing. They were all fairly distinctive from one another. I think the Edgar Allen Poe read was the least like a character to me; it seemed like the character was trying to tell the story in a haunting way, so I wasn’t sure if the character himself was a haunting person or ghost. You seem the most natural and most conversational in the Handsome Jack read. Good stuff – keep going!
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Good evening, all! Trying some new things as I close in on my demo record date. My coach suggested a “flat, disaffected” variation for this script, so I gave it a go. Take one is more upbeat, take two is a stab at getting in touch with my inner Millennial. 🙂 All comments are very welcome. Thank you for taking the time to listen!
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Hi rogue1, I think it’s interesting what you did with the two different takes. I think the disaffected version could have been a little bit quicker, as monotone and flat doesn’t need to be slower. It did sound Millennial-esque to me–sounds like people I know, sadly…I think it’s definitely worth adding that type of read into your VO arsenal. In the Upbeat version, I think it’s interesting how you emphasized the key words. You seemed to employ the same kind of “slow and cool” style of emphasis on “freaky-fast” and “freaky-fresh” and then “five minutes” and “no further.” Perhaps you could try emphasizing with a different emotion behind it and see if that helps it from slowing down too much. Good job.
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Hi nettipo1, Thank you for your insightful feedback (self-directing is challenging, so your notes are greatly appreciated!) Excellent point that a monotone/flat read doesn’t necessarily mean a slower pace, I’ll try a version where I ease off the brakes a bit more and see where that gets me. Will also change up the emotional emphases on what words I hit on the more upbeat read as you suggest. Always room for experimentation and improvement. Thanks again for taking the time to listen and comment!
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Hi Everyone,
I appreciate any comments or things you notice, good or bad, in my reads, and any suggestions for improvement.
Thanks!Ziploc
Only Ziploc brand bags have a unique interlocking zipper to lock in freshness in a way no other bag can. When it comes out this fresh, you know it went in a Ziploc bag. Ziploc. We’ve got a lock on freshness.Jaguar
I was born fast. Faster than those who would challenge me. I was born strong. Quiet in confidence. And blessed with might. I was born with instinctive quickness. Quick to recognize. To adapt. To respond. Quick to be quick. I was born to be seen by everything but the wind. I was born at the beginning of the last century, but I am undoubtedly of the next century. I am Jaguar. Born to perform.-
Hi Nettipo1, As always, such polished reads—-always a pleasure to listen to.
“Ziploc” is on point—-a natural, conversational vibe throughout brimming with inviting energy.
“Jaguar” is very unexpected. The brand is traditionally given over to haughty British accents and a rather superior tone, while your read brings an entirely different stance–a refreshing, more youthful (though equally assured) egalitarian quality. Shades of “This is not your pater’s Jaguar”.
Wonderfully done!
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Hi, still working through some narration stuff. Tried to focus on slowing my pace a bit, as I have a bad habit of speeding through reads.
ADVANTAGE TECHNOLOGY
Welcome to Advantage Technology Incorporated and to the excitement and challenges of a growing business. As a new employee, your job is important to us. Your success is an important factor in the success of this company. This software is designed to offer you accurate information about company policies and procedures, benefit packages, performance reviews, training, and education opportunities.BOB ROSS BIO
Bob Ross. Just his name brings a calm. The soft-spoken painter who didn’t make mistakes, only “happy accidents,” painted on PBS stations in the 1980s and 1990s. His untimely death in 1995 at the age of 52 occurred just when he was exploding on the pop culture scene. He even appeared in a hip MTV spot back when MTV was hip. “MTV, the land of happy little trees.” There’s a lot people don’t know about Bob Ross, so get ready for some surprises about the guy with the sweet pipes and sweeter ‘fro.-
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Hi Jay, Beautiful reads—your voice has a very rich, inviting timbre, which serves both scripts well.
You definitely had a perfectly measured pace for the “Advantage Technology” read, though I agree with nettipo1 that you hit the gas pedal a bit when you came to listing the software benefits. Otherwise very crisp and clear.
Your “Bob Ross” read was equally pleasant. If I had any suggestions, it might be to watch the slightly halting navigation of “…so get ready for some surprises…” You also might try an even more relaxed performance. Lines like “…sweet pipes and a sweeter ’fro” seem to beg for a bit more laid-back whimsy.
Keep up the great work!
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Hi Jay,
You did a good job slowing down your pace in both recordings. I noticed a slight increase in pace in Advantage Technology on the last sentence with the list, starting at “company policies”–but other than that, I think the pace was working for me as a listener. You might want to slow it down even more for the Bob Ross bio, to match his calm nature. You convey good personality and have very clear delivery in both recordings.
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Hi all! Got a couple of scripts here for narration. For these two, I tried to focus on pacing myself and script- giving the listener time to keep up with what’s being said, while not making the recording sound choppy or unnatural (but I’m a naturally fast talker, so it’s hard, haha). The other things I want to be aware of is if it’s sounds like the script is being read, rather than said aloud naturally. I also played around with lead-ins to kick the readings off. Any feedback would be much appreciated, thanks!!
Mic Environment Walkthrough
Positioning of your microphone depends on the type of microphone you’re using and your environment. Recording should always be done in the quietest possible space, preferably far away from noisy computers and other electrical equipment. You will be surprised how much microphones can pick up. In an ideal world, this room should also be fairly spacious and filled with soft furnishings, which absorb reflected sound. This isn’t always realistic. Not everybody has a specially treated sound booth in their house!Timeskip Trope Talk
There are basically no stories that show the audience a completely unbroken stretch of time. Characters go to sleep and wake up several hours later, travel time is handled with a montage instead of a fourteen-hour play-by-play of the entire trip, and the number one unspoken rule of story pacing is no one ever poops. The official term for these time jumps is an “ellipsis,” and they technically break continuity, but they make up for it by improving pacing.-
Hi Troy,
I think the pacing is nice but could be slowed down even more. I also noticed that you’re emphasizing more than just the key words, and you place really strong emphasis on them. For instance, in the last sentence of the Mic Environment script, you’re emphasizing “has” and “sound” – you might want to consider if other words in that sentence are more important and should be emphasized instead. Maybe try lengthening words as an alternative to emphasizing them, which might then have the added benefit of slowing down the pace. I do like your energy and liveliness of your voice in both.
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Hi, adding another sample read – please provide feedback.
AAA
With AAA, your teen is never alone. When you add your teen driver to your AAA membership, they’ll never be alone on the road. We’ll be there for them to get them on the go with the same road service benefits that you enjoy. And because AAA benefits travel with the member and not the vehicle, your teen is covered – day or night – whether they’re driving their car or riding in a friend’s.
Flat tire change, Free fuel delivery, Lock-out service, Batter boost. Free AAA membership for your teen with a learner’s permit.-
Hi Evette,
You have a wonderful, trustworthy voice! You effortlessly exude the neighbor next door whose advice you always rely on. I would suggest building on that natural asset by leaning into the conversational quality of your delivery. You sound a bit like you’re reading a script (something I struggle with myself) rather than just having a good gab over the backyard fence.
Really well done! Keep up the great work!
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Hi Evette, you have a sweet and comforting voice, so you come across as a friendly, down-to-earth AAA representative! You need to bring up the volume of your audio recording. You might want to pronounce the “a” in front of “a friend’s” and “a learner’s permit” as not a hard “a” but more like an “ah”–sorry, I don’t know the correct terminology to describe this, but I hope you understand what I’m getting at. You might want to vary how you emphasize the words to make it sound more conversational. Good job, and I look forward to hearing more!
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Hi Everyone – I appreciate any feedback you can provide. Thank You.
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