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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hi Everyone,
I appreciate any comments or things you notice, good or bad, in my reads, and any suggestions for improvement.
Thanks!Ziploc
Only Ziploc brand bags have a unique interlocking zipper to lock in freshness in a way no other bag can. When it comes out this fresh, you know it went in a Ziploc bag. Ziploc. We’ve got a lock on freshness.Jaguar
I was born fast. Faster than those who would challenge me. I was born strong. Quiet in confidence. And blessed with might. I was born with instinctive quickness. Quick to recognize. To adapt. To respond. Quick to be quick. I was born to be seen by everything but the wind. I was born at the beginning of the last century, but I am undoubtedly of the next century. I am Jaguar. Born to perform.-
Hi Nettipo1, As always, such polished reads—-always a pleasure to listen to.
“Ziploc” is on point—-a natural, conversational vibe throughout brimming with inviting energy.
“Jaguar” is very unexpected. The brand is traditionally given over to haughty British accents and a rather superior tone, while your read brings an entirely different stance–a refreshing, more youthful (though equally assured) egalitarian quality. Shades of “This is not your pater’s Jaguar”.
Wonderfully done!
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Hi, still working through some narration stuff. Tried to focus on slowing my pace a bit, as I have a bad habit of speeding through reads.
ADVANTAGE TECHNOLOGY
Welcome to Advantage Technology Incorporated and to the excitement and challenges of a growing business. As a new employee, your job is important to us. Your success is an important factor in the success of this company. This software is designed to offer you accurate information about company policies and procedures, benefit packages, performance reviews, training, and education opportunities.BOB ROSS BIO
Bob Ross. Just his name brings a calm. The soft-spoken painter who didn’t make mistakes, only “happy accidents,” painted on PBS stations in the 1980s and 1990s. His untimely death in 1995 at the age of 52 occurred just when he was exploding on the pop culture scene. He even appeared in a hip MTV spot back when MTV was hip. “MTV, the land of happy little trees.” There’s a lot people don’t know about Bob Ross, so get ready for some surprises about the guy with the sweet pipes and sweeter ‘fro.-
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Hi Jay, Beautiful reads—your voice has a very rich, inviting timbre, which serves both scripts well.
You definitely had a perfectly measured pace for the “Advantage Technology” read, though I agree with nettipo1 that you hit the gas pedal a bit when you came to listing the software benefits. Otherwise very crisp and clear.
Your “Bob Ross” read was equally pleasant. If I had any suggestions, it might be to watch the slightly halting navigation of “…so get ready for some surprises…” You also might try an even more relaxed performance. Lines like “…sweet pipes and a sweeter ’fro” seem to beg for a bit more laid-back whimsy.
Keep up the great work!
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Hi Jay,
You did a good job slowing down your pace in both recordings. I noticed a slight increase in pace in Advantage Technology on the last sentence with the list, starting at “company policies”–but other than that, I think the pace was working for me as a listener. You might want to slow it down even more for the Bob Ross bio, to match his calm nature. You convey good personality and have very clear delivery in both recordings.
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Hi all! Got a couple of scripts here for narration. For these two, I tried to focus on pacing myself and script- giving the listener time to keep up with what’s being said, while not making the recording sound choppy or unnatural (but I’m a naturally fast talker, so it’s hard, haha). The other things I want to be aware of is if it’s sounds like the script is being read, rather than said aloud naturally. I also played around with lead-ins to kick the readings off. Any feedback would be much appreciated, thanks!!
Mic Environment Walkthrough
Positioning of your microphone depends on the type of microphone you’re using and your environment. Recording should always be done in the quietest possible space, preferably far away from noisy computers and other electrical equipment. You will be surprised how much microphones can pick up. In an ideal world, this room should also be fairly spacious and filled with soft furnishings, which absorb reflected sound. This isn’t always realistic. Not everybody has a specially treated sound booth in their house!Timeskip Trope Talk
There are basically no stories that show the audience a completely unbroken stretch of time. Characters go to sleep and wake up several hours later, travel time is handled with a montage instead of a fourteen-hour play-by-play of the entire trip, and the number one unspoken rule of story pacing is no one ever poops. The official term for these time jumps is an “ellipsis,” and they technically break continuity, but they make up for it by improving pacing.-
Hi Troy,
I think the pacing is nice but could be slowed down even more. I also noticed that you’re emphasizing more than just the key words, and you place really strong emphasis on them. For instance, in the last sentence of the Mic Environment script, you’re emphasizing “has” and “sound” – you might want to consider if other words in that sentence are more important and should be emphasized instead. Maybe try lengthening words as an alternative to emphasizing them, which might then have the added benefit of slowing down the pace. I do like your energy and liveliness of your voice in both.
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Hi, adding another sample read – please provide feedback.
AAA
With AAA, your teen is never alone. When you add your teen driver to your AAA membership, they’ll never be alone on the road. We’ll be there for them to get them on the go with the same road service benefits that you enjoy. And because AAA benefits travel with the member and not the vehicle, your teen is covered – day or night – whether they’re driving their car or riding in a friend’s.
Flat tire change, Free fuel delivery, Lock-out service, Batter boost. Free AAA membership for your teen with a learner’s permit.-
Hi Evette,
You have a wonderful, trustworthy voice! You effortlessly exude the neighbor next door whose advice you always rely on. I would suggest building on that natural asset by leaning into the conversational quality of your delivery. You sound a bit like you’re reading a script (something I struggle with myself) rather than just having a good gab over the backyard fence.
Really well done! Keep up the great work!
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Hi Evette, you have a sweet and comforting voice, so you come across as a friendly, down-to-earth AAA representative! You need to bring up the volume of your audio recording. You might want to pronounce the “a” in front of “a friend’s” and “a learner’s permit” as not a hard “a” but more like an “ah”–sorry, I don’t know the correct terminology to describe this, but I hope you understand what I’m getting at. You might want to vary how you emphasize the words to make it sound more conversational. Good job, and I look forward to hearing more!
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Hi Everyone – I appreciate any feedback you can provide. Thank You.
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Hello Everyone, I am submitting two scripts from the library narration for homework practice. I would love your feedback that would help in areas I can improve on. Thanks so much!
Educational Explainer Video Intro Only – Real Estate (E-learning)
Would you like to buy a house?
Maybe it’s your first house, or even your 2nd and you just think that MAYBE you didn’t think hard enough about the last one.
Listen, I love Real Estate. And in most cases, even a bad deal can work to your advantage in the very long run.
But there are dumb things that people do without realizing it when they buy a house.
Humor me for a short story before we get into the meat of this video.Superman Museum (Tour)
Welcome to the Metropolis Superman Museum. Throughout the museum you will find numerous examples of Superman merchandise and memorabilia, illustrating the long and grand history of the world’s most beloved superhero.
To begin your tour, please proceed to the right.
Superman began as a series of daily comic strips created by writer Jerry Siegel and artist Joe Shuster. The first adaptation of the comic was a radio drama starring Bud Collyer as Superman. -
Hello! Practicing for my narration demo. Any feedback appreciated. Thank you!
Kid’s Meditation
It’s bedtime now, time to snuggle into bed and let your eyes softly close. Let’s take a few deep breaths together, ready? In and out…in and out. Notice how warm and safe and comfortable you feel. Keeping your eyes closed, allow your mind to travel. Beneath you, your bed has transformed and you find yourself way up high on a rocky, snow-covered mountain top. -
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Hey everyone. It’s been awhile since I’ve been on this forum, but I am ready to continue my plan of uploading two recordings as much as I can. I just recorded a new narration audition and a commercial script and I would appreciate any feedback on my performance and the recording setup. Thanks for your advice.
IDI Distributors (Do I sound comfortable, relatable, and friendly, charismatic in any way? That was the tone they were hoping for)
Welcome to IDI Distributors, America’s Insulation Source. Since 1979, we’ve helped thousands of insulation contractors across the country keep their businesses running strong. From insulation materials to accessories, IDI is the one-stop shop for all leading brands.Wintergreen Resort (My goal for this was to sound Excited, inviting, and confident)
If you‘re in the dark about where to ski, let us shed some light on the subject. High in Virginia‘s Blue Ridge Mountains, discover what‘s been called the Mid-Atlantic‘s finest overall ski experience. Wintergreen offers 10 slopes, five lifts, and an extensive snow-making system. Not to mention luxurious accommodations, an indoor spa, and a nationally recognized children‘s program. For more information, call 1-800-ski-green. That‘s 1-800-skigreen. Wintergreen and Virginia … the perfect combination!-
Hey Tim! Great seeing you on forums again!
I loved your IDI read. was very clean. There was a word that stuck out to me about 4 seconds in “America’s insulation source” the word source almost sounds like your saying it like soursa with a soft a to finish. Really not big as it could be part natural accent coming out or just me lol. But love the read overall.
Wintergreen: Anther great read. near the end sounds a bit pushed with breath. There is also a lot of information here. Being honest I had to listen 2-3 times just to gather all the information. I would maybe suggest finding the key words in the script and make sure to bring those key words out a little more to help the listener following along. Great work my friend!
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