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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hi everyone! I have attached my narration script recordings below. Your feedback would be greatly appreciated. Thank you!
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Hi Salma,
Thank you for posting so many samples! I listened to the Hershey spot. My overall suggestion is try to be more relaxed when you read – right now it sounds like you are being very careful with reading each sentence. There are quite a lot of pauses throughout, so try to imagine saying the words to one person, and see if that makes it flow more and sound more natural. This ia a good start! Nice job.
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Hi everyone! This is my first upload for my Commercial VO homework. I would appreciate any and all feedback!
There is a little bit of background noise, unfortunately the computer I use at the moment is a PC, not a laptop, so the fans do come through. Working on getting a good VO laptop to work off of. Sorry about that, but thank you for listening!
Harvey Home Theatre:
He has a 160 IQ, performs cardiac surgery for a living. And now, he can even operate his home entertainment system. Introducing Harvey Home Theater. It’s so sophisticated, it’s simple. Dimensions of sight and sound unheard of, until now. All at your fingertips. Now, if he could only operate the microwave. Home Theater from Harvey, not your ordinary electronics store. Call for the Harvey near you.Carnation Breakfast Essentials:
Kids can change minds. They can even change the world around us. Packed with protein plus 21 vitamins and minerals, we nourish them with Carnation Breakfast Essentials. Because today could change everything. -
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Hello everybody. Attached are three Narration reads for my latest homework assignment. I would appreciate any feedback in regards to the performances and recording quality. Thank you for taking the time to listen.
Ethan Allen
Fashion you relish. Quality you expect. Service you can depend on. Furnishings you can afford. Choices galore. This is the colorful image of Ethan Allen we want consumers to know. The wide spectrum of our image is expressed in many ways: through our galleries, our advertising, and our team of professionals who represent Ethan Allen. But is our image clearly visible to consumers? How can we ensure that Ethan Allen’s true colors shine through? Building a strong image that withstands the test of time takes imagination, innovation, and participation. Those who have succeeded in maintaining a colorful, appealing image have followed a simple rule.
The Maya
The Maya, an ancient South American culture, predicted that time would end in a violent apocalypse on December 21, 2012. They created an elaborate astronomical calendar called “The Long Count,” which stops abruptly in 2012. This date, which is also the winter equinox, coincides with an incredibly rare galactic alignment that happens once every 26,000 years. What did the Mayans think would happen when their calendar ended? And were they joined by other cultures–from different parts of the world and in different centuries–all pointing to 2012 as a calamitous end time?
Georgia O’Keeffe
Georgia O’Keeffe revolutionized modern art, both in her time and in the present. And if we understand O’Keeffe’s emotional response to nature and her need to create an equivalent in art, we hold the key to her work. In the 1920s she explored this theme in her magnified paintings of flowers, meant to convey that Nature, in all its beauty, was as powerful as the widespread industrialization of the period. After spending her first summer in New Mexico, she began to paint the colorful yet barren landscape, expansive skies and bleached bones that would capture her imagination, and her heart, for the rest of her life.
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Hey Erik!
You have a very soothing, professional sounding tone which is consistent across all three reads. Your articulation is also very nice and each word sounds very clear.
I’ve copied some feedback about each pieces below as it sounded to me, hope this helps!
Jimmy
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Ethan Allen
———–It does sound like you’re reading and I think part of that is every sentence ends on a ‘down’ tone except the question (How can we ensure that Ethan Allen’s true colors shine through?). This makes it seems a little less conversational to me. I might also add a little more space between sentences.
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The Maya
———–Better spacing between sentences, I feel like a little more emphasis on word/phrases like ‘violent apocalypse’ and ‘rare galactic alignment’ might make listeners a little more engaged.
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Georgia O’Keeffe
———–Loved the line ‘in her magnified paintings of flowers, meant to convey that Nature, in all its beauty, was as powerful…’ This was my favorite of your three examples.
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Good Morning Everyone:
Here are three Edge Studio library scripts recorded as part of my Narration homework and I would greatly appreciate any feedback to assist me improving my VO skills… thank you very much for taking the time to listen!Advance Technologies
Welcome to Advance Technology Incorporated and to the excitement and challenges of a growing business. As a new employee, your job is important to us. Your success is an important factor in the success of this company. This software is designed to offer you accurate information about company policies and procedures, benefit packages, performance reviews, training and education opportunitiesEducational Explainer- Real Estate
Would you like to buy a house? Maybe its your first house, or even your 2nd and you just think that MAYBE you didn’t think hard enough about the last one.
Listen I love Real Estate. And in most cases, even a bad deal can work to your advantage in the very long runFinancial Engines
Financial Engines provides investors with honest, personalized advice and portfolio management. Available online, on paper, and by phone, our advice is accessible to all and unique to each investor’s goals and circumstances-
Good afternoon Steve,
Thanks for sharing! I would upload each file separately so it’s easier to listen to specific portions or to repeat a single read and I’ve copied some feedback about each script below as it sounded to me.
Thanks!
Jimmy
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Advance Technologies
Well paced but I feel like you sped up a little in the ‘This software is designed to offer you accurate informaiton about company policies and procedures’ part. I would also try to make the ‘your job is important to us’ especially soothing and reassuring
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Educational Explainer- Real Estate
This was my favorite of the three, I thought this was much more conversational than the first one, and I like the emphasis on MAYBE like is in the script.
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Financial Engines
Maybe a little fast, especially near the end.
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Good afternoon everyone!
I’m starting my training and attached two reads! I’d definitely appreciate any feedback.
Thanks!
Jimmy
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Forgot to attach the scripts!
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When it comes to woodworking for beginners, there are 6 things that are essential to know for how to start creating projects.
Once you’ve got a handle on these lessons, you can start to explore more advanced pieces and techniques.
I’m going to discuss each of these tips, so you can get to the fun part and actually start to work with wood!
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Fantasy Sports is estimated to be a four billion dollar industry that boasts over 30 million participants and leagues for every sport imaginable.But for all this success, the story of the game’s inception is little known (UP). The modern fantasy leagues can be traced back to a group of writers and academics who met at La Rotisserie Francaise in New York City to form a baseball league of their own.
The game quickly grew in popularity, and with the growing use and attractiveness of the Internet, the “founding fathers” never foresaw how their creation would take off and ultimately leave them behind.
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