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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hi everyone, still working on some more narration scripts as I get ready for my demo. Feedback is always appreciated!
TESLA CAMERA APP
The touchscreen is your control panel for accessing functions, features and apps in your Tesla. The camera allows you to display what the high-definition rear view camera sees at any time when in Reverse. Guidelines appear and move with the steering wheel to show your trajectory. Always be sure to check your surroundings and to use your mirrors. The camera is an aid and should not be relied upon for rear view. If you are in need of additional assistance, you can reach Tesla support at eight-four-four two-four-eight-three-seven-five-two.COSMIC NARRATION
This is the story of a small planet in space called Earth.
Today it has mighty oceans; scorched deserts; and frozen wildernesses.
It supports a multitude of diverse creatures, and is home to more than 6 billion people and their technological civilization.But how did all this come about? Where do we come from?
BUD GRANT
After spending four years in the Canadian Football League as a player, Grant went on to start a coaching legacy as just a 29-year-old. He proceeded to lead the Winnipeg Blue Bombers to six Grey Cups over the next 10 years, winning four of them. Ten years later, Grant came home to take over as the head coach of the NFL’s Minnesota Vikings.-
Hi Jay,
I listened to your reads, I’ll share with you my thoughts.
Tesla – great voice, good tempo. I agree with Notetaker, sometimes it sound like you’re reading word for word. Overall good job.
Cosmic Narration – great tempo and great tone. This read is great. Awesome job.
Bud Grant – b/w year and winning the pause seems short. Overall good job.
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I was able to listen to Tesla Camera App: You have a really nice voice for this type of VO work, and you have excellent enunciation. Sometimes it sounds like you’re reading word-to-word, a little choppy, rather than as a smooth thought. Also watch some of the words that you might want to emphasize a smidgen more: Always, additional. The phone number read was perfect. Keep up the great work!
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Hello everyone, this is the first time I have posted any voice over content on this page, and they are both from the script library.
Feel free to leave a commit shows the pros and cons of my samples.
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Hello Everyone, Here are two Scripts from the practice library I recorded for my narration homework. Take a listen and I would love all feedback that will help me to know what I need to work on some more. Thank you so much!
Social Security
Whether you’re young or old, male or female, single or with a family – this video is for and about you. That’s because Social Security has programs that affect everybody. This presentation was prepared by the Social Security Administration and tells you what you need to know about Social Security while still working and what you need to know when it’s your turn to collect benefits. It also provides an overview of Medicare and Supplemental Security Income benefits.
Top Of The Rock Observation Deck
Welcome to Top Of The Rock, the best views of New York City from the newly renovated 3-tiered observation deck at the summit of 30 Rockefeller Plaza. The views from all three levels of the observation deck are breathtaking. With its open-air simplicity, complete 360-degree skyline, and crystal clear panels of glass showcasing the 80-mile view, Top Of The Rock is unmatched by any other vantage point in New York City.
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Hi Sylvanie,
I checked out your reads, and here are my thoughts.
Social Security – good pace to the read. Watch out for the glottal stop b/w Administration and in the third sentence. You hit the key words nicely. You sounded a little tense/rigid in this read. Imagine you are talking to somebody to help the read sound more fluid.
Top of the Rock Observation Deck – good tone, good voice, you hit key words nicely. This read sounds great. Very good job.
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Hi everyone! I appreciate the feedback in my last post! Following that advice, I have attached 2 of my narration recording, with the goal of being able to sound a bit more conversational while still being able to maintain a healthy balance between sounding conversational and professional (authoritative). Feedback would be really appreciated! Thank you!
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Hi All!
I took a break from the VoiceOver world and am now back and hoping to record my demo at the end of the year or early next year. I have attached 3 files and am hoping to get a lot of feedback on what I can improve.
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Sandals – I heard some reverb, you might want to check your space.
The read was at the same emotional level throughout. Vary it. “Somewhere in the Caribbean” should be wondering, and then “5 star luxury resorts” should sound like you are enjoying a wonderful item of food. And then “all included” should be like a mother saying “I’m going to take care of you”.
Wish you success, Ondrea, and welcome back !
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Hi all! I’m back with a couple other narration reads. Trying to pay attention to pacing myself and letting the script breathe, while also trying to sound more conversational, but appropriate to the script. Trying to keep a lot of things in mind, haha.
Edison Documentary
Obsessed with his work and known to be an exacting boss, Edison had an ego as incandescent as his light bulbs, a sense of his own greatness that was undoubtedly justified. He was also incredibly competitive, willing to do whatever was required to ensure that his idea won out.Clovis Bray AI Technobabble
Can we trust an artificial intelligence to make the moral decision? The engineers of Clovis Bray conceived a solution during the development of our Warmind project. By relegating ethical decision-making to a Black Box Morality system, the Warmind instruments its own proprietary virtue quantifiers incomprehensible to even its own creators. The Warmind determines morality on its own terms, and by design we are blind to that process in order to preserve its objectivity -
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The Honey Baked Ham Bees
Bee 1: Hi we’re bees.
Bee 2: And we’re mad!
Bee 1: Here’s the deal. You buy Honey Baked Ham.
Bee 2: You love Honey Baked Ham!
Bee 1: But here’s our beef with this whole Honey Baked Ham thing.
Bee 2: Go ahead, tell ’em!
Bee 1: You talk about the spiral cut
Bee 2: Fine.
Bee 1: You talk about the three generations of traditions.
Bee 2: Also fine.
Bee 1: And you go way nuts over the great honey taste
Bee 2: And that, our human friends, is where the trouble begins.
Bee 1: Yeah, ’cause where did the Honey Baked Ham people get the idea for the great honey taste? HUH?
Bee 2: Yeah, where? FROM BEES! You MORONS!
Bee 1: But have you ever thanked a bee?
Bee 2: Have you ever gone up to a bee and said, “Hey, you bee, thanks for inspiring the great taste of Honey Baked Ham.”
Bee 1: No, you haven’t!
Bee 2: You never thanked us, yet you enjoy Honey Baked Ham on Holidays, at Super Bowl Parties, your kids graduation, birthdays…
Bee 1: Whatever!!! You love it. You enjoy it. But you never thank us.
Bee 2: And YOU wonder why… we STING!
ANNCR: Honey Baked Ham…. The Number One Ham in America!-
As usual, Bil, your reads are a lot of fun.
Wondering how you recorded it – did you do it switching back and forth between characters, or one Bee and then the next, and stitched the two reads together.
Often, your music overwhelms the read, but this time, it was perfect. I heard the music, felt the music, but your reads were dominant. Great.
Bee 2 is mad, but I didn’t quite hear the anger, I would up the anger just a little bit. This is a comedy duo, and you need a straight man and a comedy man, or a light and heavy character. Bee 2 is the heavy. Of course, not too much, as this is a cartoon.
“And that, our human friends, is where the trouble begins” – sorry, but this sounds like an AI read. There were kind of glottal stops between the words, or something. It wasn’t smooth
“No, you haven’t” was an ah-shucks read. I would experiment with doing different versions, like pedandic, laconic, a tad angry (but not like Bee 2), etc.
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