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The Edge Studio Feedback Forum is the best place for you to post a recording and get feedback from the community! Record in your home studio, upload the file, and see what people think. This is a great place to get some advice on your technique, on your home studio, or to ask for people’s opinion on your reads. Remember, that this is a community forum, so please remain positive and encourage your peers in helpful ways. If Edge Studio feels that a user is too negative, or antagonizing other members of the community, they will have their posts deleted, and risk being banned from further communication.
Stay positive, listen to each other, and have fun!
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Happy Friday, everyone! Took some welcome advise from Nettipo1 and upped the tempo on my “Disaffected” read. Again, the “Upbeat” and original “Disaffected” reads are posted for comparison. All comments welcome, my thanks for taking the time to listen!
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Rogue1, the upbeat, sounds exciting and playful, like you really enjoy Jimmy Johns. The disaffected, is so perfect! You sound laid back and aloof! Well done!
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You have a really nice, soothing voice. I can definitely hear a huge difference from the original Disaffected reads to the Upbeat one. Not only is the pacing much better, which allows the read to feel more natural. But also, you’re able to sort of switch tonalities much better. It sounds much more conversational and it almost feels like you’re bringing so much more life to the piece.
I could hear a bit more of vocal fry in the original, slower reads. While in the upbeat version, the breathing felt much more, again natural. And it felt more inviting as well. But at the same time, there was still this balanced sense between professionalism and conversational qualities. Great job!-
Thank you, salmaperez001! Appreciate your insightful feedback and am glad you hear the (upbeat) read as more natural/conversation—-certainly something I always strive for! And I agree that the “disaffected” read sounds a bit more labored and less natural/flowing. Again, thank you for taking the time to listen and weigh in with your thoughts!
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Hello everyone,
Homework assignment # 1 for Art Bruder. Please feel free to listen and critique. Thank
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Hello Ksmack, Love the wry quality of your voice, it’s very real and inviting—-and well-suited for this narration. I agree with JustJohn that it seems like you’re speeding through the read. As the subject matter is Seinfeld, there’s a lot of built in asides that might benefit from a little more relaxed timing (for example, the quip about “Massapequa”—-which is unfortunately too garbled to make out by my ear—-seems to beg for a beat before continuing). Slowing down a bit and continuing to build upon the (obvious) enjoyment you’re expressing in the subject matter should add more polish for an even more accomplished read. Keep up the great work!
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Your voice has a good timbre. The whole read, I would say, sounds rushed. Much of it is hard to understand, partly because of the high speed, partly because of insufficiently articulate pronunciation, and partly because your voice frequently drops off to a less audible low range. I would slow the whole thing down, even out the range a little (maybe don’t let your pitch get too low), and put a little more care into pronunciation.
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Hi DLeeVO,
Technical quality sounds good.
Animal planet sounds almost like your are yelling, not just excited. I would tone it down just a little bit, and make the read smoother.
Motivation started to get monotonous pretty quickly, and yes you do sound like another person, but I did not hear the “cold or allergy ” affect that JustJohn said. But hey, a lot of this is subjective. Sounding like another person in this case is very very good in my opinion. It shows you can do different reads. Some of the words were not clear “… again to the top athletes …” is what I heard. Act out some of the words, just a little bit.
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Good energy at the opening of the Animal Planet Welcome read. The read sounds a little halting, and at times, even a bit over-pronounced (“top puppy players from all over the country,” for instance. You don’t need that many P’s or glottal stops). The read isn’t quite at the point of a natural-sounding flow. I would suggest keeping the friendly energy while smoothing out the delivery.
In the motivation meditation read, your voice sounds like that of another person — and it sounds a little like you have a cold, or allergies, or just need a glass of water. (I found myself reflexively clearing my throat while listening.) Again, I’d say the energy for the read is about right. Maybe ease up on the consonants just a little (for example, the “s” at the end of “yes” gets prolonged almost into a hiss).
In both reads, you sound friendly and accessible.
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Hi everyone!
I’ve attached a couple of my narration recordings below. I would really appreciate some feedback. Thank you!
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Hello salmaperez001, There is a very charming, reassuring quality to your voice. Your reads are all very crisp, clear and pleasant to the ear.
“Type to Learn” – Your read seems the perfect tempo and clarity for little listeners to follow along. Again, the inviting quality of your voice seems perfectly suited to a learning tutorial.
“American Express Telephony” – Your instructional read is spot on, but I might suggest you modulate to a more conversational tone when you start up-selling (“Did you know…”). Be both the voice of authority and the trusted friend.
“Hershey Tours” – Here’s where I think you might also experiment a bit as, while your read is crisp and clear and your voice is naturally inviting, the performance sounds a touch too “telephony” when the script seems to suggest a more of “tell a friend” approach. Perhaps try a version where you lean into a more conversational quality as you imagine that you’re telling someone sitting next to you all about the wonders of Hershey, PA. Right now it sounds a bit like you’re reading a script (Which is something I have to work on, myself).
“Pre-Boarding Announcements” – Again, very crisp, clear, and above all, warm and welcoming—exactly what passengers would want to hear during the stressful confines of a crowded air terminal.
Well done! Keep up the great work!
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Hey all – here’s a narration script I would like to get some feedback on if possible. Below is the script. They’re looking for a “bold and deep voice”.
Great flavor starts with a perfectly trim cut of meat.
It’s born from a well-balanced brine – one with real sugar.
It’s nurtured by a slow cook in a small batch. We’re talking very slow. 12 hours slow.
It thrives in smoke – real smoke, from real hardwood chips.
And that smoke better be timed just right.Flavor is an experience that comes from experience,
5 generations worth.
You get it from passionate people who know a lot, and who want to know a lot more.
And when dedicated folks make mouthwateringly great flavored meat, it’s something we just have to share.Flavor for family,
Flavor for friends,
From us.Tastes good, right?
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I think your voice is very good for this type of script and the “bold and deep voice they’re looking for! Your read is clear, too. But I think the energy and the pace need to be brought up more and kept consistent throughout the read. Nice job overall! -
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Hi guys. I would enjoy some feedback on a couple of recordings. I’m trying to become a character voice actor.
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Hello, I enjoyed listening to these! Wonderful how you were able to convey a bitter edge in Memories, and you had me smiling in Handsome-Jack: Jack’s was conversational but had (to my ear) enough “crazy” that I would stay away from the character in real life (!). The Edgar Allen Poe reading was moody and brooded, but a few words were not clear. All three readings were natural and flowed and conveyed a distinct character from the scripts that I could picture.
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I enjoyed all three reads. I think you do show a knack for character voicing. They were all fairly distinctive from one another. I think the Edgar Allen Poe read was the least like a character to me; it seemed like the character was trying to tell the story in a haunting way, so I wasn’t sure if the character himself was a haunting person or ghost. You seem the most natural and most conversational in the Handsome Jack read. Good stuff – keep going!
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Good evening, all! Trying some new things as I close in on my demo record date. My coach suggested a “flat, disaffected” variation for this script, so I gave it a go. Take one is more upbeat, take two is a stab at getting in touch with my inner Millennial. 🙂 All comments are very welcome. Thank you for taking the time to listen!
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Hi rogue1, I think it’s interesting what you did with the two different takes. I think the disaffected version could have been a little bit quicker, as monotone and flat doesn’t need to be slower. It did sound Millennial-esque to me–sounds like people I know, sadly…I think it’s definitely worth adding that type of read into your VO arsenal. In the Upbeat version, I think it’s interesting how you emphasized the key words. You seemed to employ the same kind of “slow and cool” style of emphasis on “freaky-fast” and “freaky-fresh” and then “five minutes” and “no further.” Perhaps you could try emphasizing with a different emotion behind it and see if that helps it from slowing down too much. Good job.
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Hi nettipo1, Thank you for your insightful feedback (self-directing is challenging, so your notes are greatly appreciated!) Excellent point that a monotone/flat read doesn’t necessarily mean a slower pace, I’ll try a version where I ease off the brakes a bit more and see where that gets me. Will also change up the emotional emphases on what words I hit on the more upbeat read as you suggest. Always room for experimentation and improvement. Thanks again for taking the time to listen and comment!
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Hi Everyone,
I appreciate any comments or things you notice, good or bad, in my reads, and any suggestions for improvement.
Thanks!Ziploc
Only Ziploc brand bags have a unique interlocking zipper to lock in freshness in a way no other bag can. When it comes out this fresh, you know it went in a Ziploc bag. Ziploc. We’ve got a lock on freshness.Jaguar
I was born fast. Faster than those who would challenge me. I was born strong. Quiet in confidence. And blessed with might. I was born with instinctive quickness. Quick to recognize. To adapt. To respond. Quick to be quick. I was born to be seen by everything but the wind. I was born at the beginning of the last century, but I am undoubtedly of the next century. I am Jaguar. Born to perform.-
Hi Nettipo1, As always, such polished reads—-always a pleasure to listen to.
“Ziploc” is on point—-a natural, conversational vibe throughout brimming with inviting energy.
“Jaguar” is very unexpected. The brand is traditionally given over to haughty British accents and a rather superior tone, while your read brings an entirely different stance–a refreshing, more youthful (though equally assured) egalitarian quality. Shades of “This is not your pater’s Jaguar”.
Wonderfully done!
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Hi, still working through some narration stuff. Tried to focus on slowing my pace a bit, as I have a bad habit of speeding through reads.
ADVANTAGE TECHNOLOGY
Welcome to Advantage Technology Incorporated and to the excitement and challenges of a growing business. As a new employee, your job is important to us. Your success is an important factor in the success of this company. This software is designed to offer you accurate information about company policies and procedures, benefit packages, performance reviews, training, and education opportunities.BOB ROSS BIO
Bob Ross. Just his name brings a calm. The soft-spoken painter who didn’t make mistakes, only “happy accidents,” painted on PBS stations in the 1980s and 1990s. His untimely death in 1995 at the age of 52 occurred just when he was exploding on the pop culture scene. He even appeared in a hip MTV spot back when MTV was hip. “MTV, the land of happy little trees.” There’s a lot people don’t know about Bob Ross, so get ready for some surprises about the guy with the sweet pipes and sweeter ‘fro.-
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Hi Jay, Beautiful reads—your voice has a very rich, inviting timbre, which serves both scripts well.
You definitely had a perfectly measured pace for the “Advantage Technology” read, though I agree with nettipo1 that you hit the gas pedal a bit when you came to listing the software benefits. Otherwise very crisp and clear.
Your “Bob Ross” read was equally pleasant. If I had any suggestions, it might be to watch the slightly halting navigation of “…so get ready for some surprises…” You also might try an even more relaxed performance. Lines like “…sweet pipes and a sweeter ’fro” seem to beg for a bit more laid-back whimsy.
Keep up the great work!
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Hi Jay,
You did a good job slowing down your pace in both recordings. I noticed a slight increase in pace in Advantage Technology on the last sentence with the list, starting at “company policies”–but other than that, I think the pace was working for me as a listener. You might want to slow it down even more for the Bob Ross bio, to match his calm nature. You convey good personality and have very clear delivery in both recordings.
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