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  • #15468
    David Goldberg
    Edge Studio Staff

    Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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  • #70689
    smith_voice
    Participant

    Greetings- My most recent homework for Art. Any comments/criticisms are welcome.

    Thanks, Chris

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    • #70720
      Don Sack
      Participant

      Hey Chris!
      Yup, I bet Art is going to emphasize that you slow down. I have that problem as well and one really needs to be mindful of that; for some reason, getting in front of a mike flips on the “faster” switch. Perhaps too, differentiate lists of items? A pop filter may also be a good addition.
      Great voice guy!
      Rock On!

    • #70695
      suecat
      Participant

      Hey Chris,
      I liked your upbeat, trustworthy style. I found it conversational and easy to listen to. Just one small thing, your tempo, just a tad too fast. Maybe because I’m from a small, lazy town, I had trouble keeping up with you — but I could play it back. Overall, fantastic job!

  • #70683
    suecat
    Participant

    Hey Community, I’m here again hoping you’ll be so gracious and kind and critique my readings. I am preparing for my commercial demo and I need all the help I can get. Thank you all for taking time to listen and make comments.

    Aetna/US Healthcare
    No matter where we live–when it comes to something as important as health care–we all want the best. That’s why AETNA and US HEALTHCARE have joined forces to create a partnership that will set a new standard for quality and caring. AETNA and US HEALTHCARE. Raising a standard for your town, for your family, and for you

    Mailboxes Etcetera
    Everybody can use a little help when they’re out on the road- and that’s where MailBoxes Etcetera comes in. We get it done, and we get it done right. Mailboxes Etcetera.

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    • #70935
      Sylvanie
      Participant

      Nice read SueCat. The Mailboxes read, you can slow down just a tad bit..it was almost like a run-on sentence. Overall nice job.

    • #70711
      Evette75
      Participant

      Nice job, SueCat. You have a calming, granny voice ( hope that’s not offensive). Like when you’re sick and grandma is there to make everything all better. I do feel the Aetna read was a little rushed – sounded like every word was running together.

      • #70716
        suecat
        Participant

        Thanks — I like the compliment! It’s true — I rush through for some crazy reason. I’ll work on that! Thank you for listening and sharing feedback!

  • #70673
    TimberTykes
    Participant

    Good Afternoon!

    Uploading a couple more of my recordings in hopes of feedback and critique.

    Thank you for your time! It is much appreciated.

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  • #70662
    rogue1
    Participant

    Happy Friday, everyone! Took some welcome advise from Nettipo1 and upped the tempo on my “Disaffected” read. Again, the “Upbeat” and original “Disaffected” reads are posted for comparison. All comments welcome, my thanks for taking the time to listen!

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    • #70669
      suecat
      Participant

      Rogue1, the upbeat, sounds exciting and playful, like you really enjoy Jimmy Johns. The disaffected, is so perfect! You sound laid back and aloof! Well done!

      • #70769
        rogue1
        Participant

        Hi suecat! Thank you for the positive feedback. Always a pleasure to hear your thoughts and input—-appreciate your taking the time to listen!

    • #70668
      salmaperez001
      Participant

      You have a really nice, soothing voice. I can definitely hear a huge difference from the original Disaffected reads to the Upbeat one. Not only is the pacing much better, which allows the read to feel more natural. But also, you’re able to sort of switch tonalities much better. It sounds much more conversational and it almost feels like you’re bringing so much more life to the piece.
      I could hear a bit more of vocal fry in the original, slower reads. While in the upbeat version, the breathing felt much more, again natural. And it felt more inviting as well. But at the same time, there was still this balanced sense between professionalism and conversational qualities. Great job!

      • #70770
        rogue1
        Participant

        Thank you, salmaperez001! Appreciate your insightful feedback and am glad you hear the (upbeat) read as more natural/conversation—-certainly something I always strive for! And I agree that the “disaffected” read sounds a bit more labored and less natural/flowing. Again, thank you for taking the time to listen and weigh in with your thoughts!

  • #70652
    Ksmack
    Participant

    Hello everyone,

    Homework assignment # 1 for Art Bruder. Please feel free to listen and critique. Thank

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    • #70666
      rogue1
      Participant

      Hello Ksmack, Love the wry quality of your voice, it’s very real and inviting—-and well-suited for this narration. I agree with JustJohn that it seems like you’re speeding through the read. As the subject matter is Seinfeld, there’s a lot of built in asides that might benefit from a little more relaxed timing (for example, the quip about “Massapequa”—-which is unfortunately too garbled to make out by my ear—-seems to beg for a beat before continuing). Slowing down a bit and continuing to build upon the (obvious) enjoyment you’re expressing in the subject matter should add more polish for an even more accomplished read. Keep up the great work!

    • #70655
      JustJohn
      Participant

      Your voice has a good timbre. The whole read, I would say, sounds rushed. Much of it is hard to understand, partly because of the high speed, partly because of insufficiently articulate pronunciation, and partly because your voice frequently drops off to a less audible low range. I would slow the whole thing down, even out the range a little (maybe don’t let your pitch get too low), and put a little more care into pronunciation.

  • #70636
    DLeeVO
    Participant

    Hello All. Posting 2 new narration reads. Looking forward to any and all input, thank you!

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    • #70742
      Shmuel
      Participant

      Hi DLeeVO,
      Technical quality sounds good.
      Animal planet sounds almost like your are yelling, not just excited. I would tone it down just a little bit, and make the read smoother.
      Motivation started to get monotonous pretty quickly, and yes you do sound like another person, but I did not hear the “cold or allergy ” affect that JustJohn said. But hey, a lot of this is subjective. Sounding like another person in this case is very very good in my opinion. It shows you can do different reads. Some of the words were not clear “… again to the top athletes …” is what I heard. Act out some of the words, just a little bit.
      Wish you success.

    • #70654
      JustJohn
      Participant

      Good energy at the opening of the Animal Planet Welcome read. The read sounds a little halting, and at times, even a bit over-pronounced (“top puppy players from all over the country,” for instance. You don’t need that many P’s or glottal stops). The read isn’t quite at the point of a natural-sounding flow. I would suggest keeping the friendly energy while smoothing out the delivery.

      In the motivation meditation read, your voice sounds like that of another person — and it sounds a little like you have a cold, or allergies, or just need a glass of water. (I found myself reflexively clearing my throat while listening.) Again, I’d say the energy for the read is about right. Maybe ease up on the consonants just a little (for example, the “s” at the end of “yes” gets prolonged almost into a hiss).

      In both reads, you sound friendly and accessible.

      • #70679
        DLeeVO
        Participant

        Hi JustJohn. Your input is much appreciated! Yesssss, i will pay attention to s’s, and over pronouncing consonants. And do find “Top Puppy Players” tricky to treat casually. I will keep working on them!

  • #70626
    salmaperez001
    Participant

    Hi everyone!

    I’ve attached a couple of my narration recordings below. I would really appreciate some feedback. Thank you!

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    • #70667
      rogue1
      Participant

      Hello salmaperez001, There is a very charming, reassuring quality to your voice. Your reads are all very crisp, clear and pleasant to the ear.

      “Type to Learn” – Your read seems the perfect tempo and clarity for little listeners to follow along. Again, the inviting quality of your voice seems perfectly suited to a learning tutorial.

      “American Express Telephony” – Your instructional read is spot on, but I might suggest you modulate to a more conversational tone when you start up-selling (“Did you know…”). Be both the voice of authority and the trusted friend.

      “Hershey Tours” – Here’s where I think you might also experiment a bit as, while your read is crisp and clear and your voice is naturally inviting, the performance sounds a touch too “telephony” when the script seems to suggest a more of “tell a friend” approach. Perhaps try a version where you lean into a more conversational quality as you imagine that you’re telling someone sitting next to you all about the wonders of Hershey, PA. Right now it sounds a bit like you’re reading a script (Which is something I have to work on, myself).

      “Pre-Boarding Announcements” – Again, very crisp, clear, and above all, warm and welcoming—exactly what passengers would want to hear during the stressful confines of a crowded air terminal.

      Well done! Keep up the great work!

      • #70884
        salmaperez001
        Participant

        Thank you so much rogue1! I really appreciate you taking the time to listen to my recordings and sharing such insightful, specific feedback!

  • #70619
    whataboutsmee
    Participant

    Hey all – here’s a narration script I would like to get some feedback on if possible. Below is the script. They’re looking for a “bold and deep voice”.

    Great flavor starts with a perfectly trim cut of meat.
    It’s born from a well-balanced brine – one with real sugar.
    It’s nurtured by a slow cook in a small batch. We’re talking very slow. 12 hours slow.
    It thrives in smoke – real smoke, from real hardwood chips.
    And that smoke better be timed just right.

    Flavor is an experience that comes from experience,
    5 generations worth.
    You get it from passionate people who know a lot, and who want to know a lot more.
    And when dedicated folks make mouthwateringly great flavored meat, it’s something we just have to share.

    Flavor for family,
    Flavor for friends,
    From us.

    Tastes good, right?

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    • #70621
      nettipo1
      Participant

      Hello,
      I think your voice is very good for this type of script and the “bold and deep voice they’re looking for! Your read is clear, too. But I think the energy and the pace need to be brought up more and kept consistent throughout the read. Nice job overall!

      • #70633
        SandyBeach
        Participant

        Hello there, Your voice definitely fits the requested description–a nice rich tone–and I like your expression, too, eg for phrases such as “it’s born from …” and “tastes good, right?” The reading sounded thoughtful, and I’m wondering if you’d rather it be more enthusiastic? Very nice job!

  • #70610
    edixon310
    Participant

    Hi guys. I would enjoy some feedback on a couple of recordings. I’m trying to become a character voice actor.

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    • #70634
      SandyBeach
      Participant

      Hello, I enjoyed listening to these! Wonderful how you were able to convey a bitter edge in Memories, and you had me smiling in Handsome-Jack: Jack’s was conversational but had (to my ear) enough “crazy” that I would stay away from the character in real life (!). The Edgar Allen Poe reading was moody and brooded, but a few words were not clear. All three readings were natural and flowed and conveyed a distinct character from the scripts that I could picture.

    • #70622
      nettipo1
      Participant

      Hello!
      I enjoyed all three reads. I think you do show a knack for character voicing. They were all fairly distinctive from one another. I think the Edgar Allen Poe read was the least like a character to me; it seemed like the character was trying to tell the story in a haunting way, so I wasn’t sure if the character himself was a haunting person or ghost. You seem the most natural and most conversational in the Handsome Jack read. Good stuff – keep going!

  • #70603
    rogue1
    Participant

    Good evening, all! Trying some new things as I close in on my demo record date. My coach suggested a “flat, disaffected” variation for this script, so I gave it a go. Take one is more upbeat, take two is a stab at getting in touch with my inner Millennial. 🙂 All comments are very welcome. Thank you for taking the time to listen!

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    • #70623
      nettipo1
      Participant

      Hi rogue1, I think it’s interesting what you did with the two different takes. I think the disaffected version could have been a little bit quicker, as monotone and flat doesn’t need to be slower. It did sound Millennial-esque to me–sounds like people I know, sadly…I think it’s definitely worth adding that type of read into your VO arsenal. In the Upbeat version, I think it’s interesting how you emphasized the key words. You seemed to employ the same kind of “slow and cool” style of emphasis on “freaky-fast” and “freaky-fresh” and then “five minutes” and “no further.” Perhaps you could try emphasizing with a different emotion behind it and see if that helps it from slowing down too much. Good job.

      • #70639
        rogue1
        Participant

        Hi nettipo1, Thank you for your insightful feedback (self-directing is challenging, so your notes are greatly appreciated!) Excellent point that a monotone/flat read doesn’t necessarily mean a slower pace, I’ll try a version where I ease off the brakes a bit more and see where that gets me. Will also change up the emotional emphases on what words I hit on the more upbeat read as you suggest. Always room for experimentation and improvement. Thanks again for taking the time to listen and comment!

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