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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Greetings:
Another script from the library, I chose for practice.
This one is About Horror, in the Documentary category.
Any Feedback is much appreciated!
All the best,
José
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Hi everyone, getting ready for my narration demo prep and have 3 new samples I’ve been working on.
DUBLIN 2
Home over the centuries to great writers like Johnathan Swift, George Bernard Shaw and James Joyce. Dublin has always been a center of the arts. Now, with the still roaring Celtic Tiger economy to support it, Ireland’s Capital City is the bustling home of ever-burgeoning business, important cultural institutions, lively nightlife and a youthful energetic population of both natives and newcomers.TEXICON FAMILY
“Hey there new employee, or should we say, new family member. As a member of the Texicon family, we want to formally introduce you to your new home, but too formal because that’s just not our style. Now you’ve already got your new uniforms and met with our incredible CEO, or head of the family as we like to call him. Now it’s time for me to bring you up to speed on what your days are going to be filled in with. Make sure you grab some of the complimentary cake you have in front of you, we love cake here so you’re going to have to get used to that, and see what the rest of your time at the Texicon household has in store for you!”VOICE FOR THE CITY OF TORONTO
You know that term “We’re all in this together?” Well, it’s true.
While some of us might be working in government and others not, we’re actually all in the same boat. You see, we’re citizens as well.
We all want the same thing. A city that works for everyone. As fast and efficient and as relevant as can be. Thriving, accessible, and inclusive.-
Hey Jay, really nice work on all three of these. Very solid tonal contrast!
Dublin 2
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I’d like to hear a little bit more of the “T” in “writers” come out at the beginning. It sounded slightly too soft and I thought you said “riders” the first time listening. Could’ve just been your mic, but it stuck out to me. Aside from that, I liked this one a lot. Good pivots throughout the sentences, and you listed off the writers and attractions very well too.Texicon Family
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I thought your delivery throughout all of this was totally fine. Very friendly and good-humored which works well for corporate explainer stuff like this.Voice For the City of Toronto
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I think you should refer to “We’re all in this together” as a “phrase” instead of a “term” for starters. I think that’s just the more correct term to use for it. Aside from that I really like this one. You lift up all the relevant words super well and it just flows and makes sense.
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Hey guys! Just dropping off some samples before an upcoming narration demo prep. I’d love to hear any feedback!
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Hey man, I believe the year in the narration about Bill Gates sounds weird… like “niketeen”…
Also, some things to take in count:
– I still feel that you are reading, probably this is the reason Salma felt it a little bit monotone.
– Try to add some more prosody to the reads, every read, speech, narration, promo, etc… requires some of it to make it appealing to the ear (and the brain). Also, the Anaconda narration shouldn’t have the same intentions and prosody as the Bill Gates one or the AT one.
– When narrating a documentary, you must sound sure of what you are saying, we have to feel that you are the owner of the truth about that topic (even if you’re wrong).There’s some others, but this will be a good starting point for you to work with. Keep the good job!
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Hi, great job on these! I could tell that you have really good, solid breath support throughout. And good pronunciation as well as clear, concise reads.
Anaconda – It sounded very professional. However, I’d say that it could perhaps use a bit more of friendliness and like you’re actually talking to a friend, perhaps. If that makes sense. Because it also sounded a bit monotone, I could hear slight changes in intention, but maybe lean a bit more into this being something you’re interested in. (please feel free to take what works, and leave what doesn’t as I’m obviously not a professional.)
Advance Technologies – I really liked this read. I could hear the enthusiasm, and you sounded invested in what you were talking about, which was nice. I could also hear nice, clear tonal changes, while still maintaining that professional, authoritative quality.
Bill Gates – I could hear a good balance between professional and friendly qualities. It was really nice. Your voice is very clear and concise!
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very nice voice for documentaries narration… I would suggest you to start hearing (and paying attention) to the narrations of David Attenborough. Where does he makes emphasis? how does he describes things? which words is he stressing? how does he uses the pauses in his reads? the prosody? etc… It’s not a matter of becoming a double that imitates him, but to learn a little big more from what he does. His documentaries are beautiful, so I would suggest that if you can’t concentrate on the voice, minimize the video and just hear him narrating.
Have a great day.
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Hi everyone! I have attached my narration script recordings below. Your feedback would be greatly appreciated. Thank you!
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Hi Salma,
Thank you for posting so many samples! I listened to the Hershey spot. My overall suggestion is try to be more relaxed when you read – right now it sounds like you are being very careful with reading each sentence. There are quite a lot of pauses throughout, so try to imagine saying the words to one person, and see if that makes it flow more and sound more natural. This ia a good start! Nice job.
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Hi everyone! This is my first upload for my Commercial VO homework. I would appreciate any and all feedback!
There is a little bit of background noise, unfortunately the computer I use at the moment is a PC, not a laptop, so the fans do come through. Working on getting a good VO laptop to work off of. Sorry about that, but thank you for listening!
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