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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hey guys! Just dropping off some samples before an upcoming narration demo prep. I’d love to hear any feedback!
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Hey man, I believe the year in the narration about Bill Gates sounds weird… like “niketeen”…
Also, some things to take in count:
– I still feel that you are reading, probably this is the reason Salma felt it a little bit monotone.
– Try to add some more prosody to the reads, every read, speech, narration, promo, etc… requires some of it to make it appealing to the ear (and the brain). Also, the Anaconda narration shouldn’t have the same intentions and prosody as the Bill Gates one or the AT one.
– When narrating a documentary, you must sound sure of what you are saying, we have to feel that you are the owner of the truth about that topic (even if you’re wrong).There’s some others, but this will be a good starting point for you to work with. Keep the good job!
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Hi, great job on these! I could tell that you have really good, solid breath support throughout. And good pronunciation as well as clear, concise reads.
Anaconda – It sounded very professional. However, I’d say that it could perhaps use a bit more of friendliness and like you’re actually talking to a friend, perhaps. If that makes sense. Because it also sounded a bit monotone, I could hear slight changes in intention, but maybe lean a bit more into this being something you’re interested in. (please feel free to take what works, and leave what doesn’t as I’m obviously not a professional.)
Advance Technologies – I really liked this read. I could hear the enthusiasm, and you sounded invested in what you were talking about, which was nice. I could also hear nice, clear tonal changes, while still maintaining that professional, authoritative quality.
Bill Gates – I could hear a good balance between professional and friendly qualities. It was really nice. Your voice is very clear and concise!
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very nice voice for documentaries narration… I would suggest you to start hearing (and paying attention) to the narrations of David Attenborough. Where does he makes emphasis? how does he describes things? which words is he stressing? how does he uses the pauses in his reads? the prosody? etc… It’s not a matter of becoming a double that imitates him, but to learn a little big more from what he does. His documentaries are beautiful, so I would suggest that if you can’t concentrate on the voice, minimize the video and just hear him narrating.
Have a great day.
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Hi everyone! I have attached my narration script recordings below. Your feedback would be greatly appreciated. Thank you!
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Hi Salma,
Thank you for posting so many samples! I listened to the Hershey spot. My overall suggestion is try to be more relaxed when you read – right now it sounds like you are being very careful with reading each sentence. There are quite a lot of pauses throughout, so try to imagine saying the words to one person, and see if that makes it flow more and sound more natural. This ia a good start! Nice job.
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Hi everyone! This is my first upload for my Commercial VO homework. I would appreciate any and all feedback!
There is a little bit of background noise, unfortunately the computer I use at the moment is a PC, not a laptop, so the fans do come through. Working on getting a good VO laptop to work off of. Sorry about that, but thank you for listening!
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Hello everybody. Attached are three Narration reads for my latest homework assignment. I would appreciate any feedback in regards to the performances and recording quality. Thank you for taking the time to listen.
Ethan Allen
Fashion you relish. Quality you expect. Service you can depend on. Furnishings you can afford. Choices galore. This is the colorful image of Ethan Allen we want consumers to know. The wide spectrum of our image is expressed in many ways: through our galleries, our advertising, and our team of professionals who represent Ethan Allen. But is our image clearly visible to consumers? How can we ensure that Ethan Allen’s true colors shine through? Building a strong image that withstands the test of time takes imagination, innovation, and participation. Those who have succeeded in maintaining a colorful, appealing image have followed a simple rule.
The Maya
The Maya, an ancient South American culture, predicted that time would end in a violent apocalypse on December 21, 2012. They created an elaborate astronomical calendar called “The Long Count,” which stops abruptly in 2012. This date, which is also the winter equinox, coincides with an incredibly rare galactic alignment that happens once every 26,000 years. What did the Mayans think would happen when their calendar ended? And were they joined by other cultures–from different parts of the world and in different centuries–all pointing to 2012 as a calamitous end time?
Georgia O’Keeffe
Georgia O’Keeffe revolutionized modern art, both in her time and in the present. And if we understand O’Keeffe’s emotional response to nature and her need to create an equivalent in art, we hold the key to her work. In the 1920s she explored this theme in her magnified paintings of flowers, meant to convey that Nature, in all its beauty, was as powerful as the widespread industrialization of the period. After spending her first summer in New Mexico, she began to paint the colorful yet barren landscape, expansive skies and bleached bones that would capture her imagination, and her heart, for the rest of her life.
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Hey Erik!
You have a very soothing, professional sounding tone which is consistent across all three reads. Your articulation is also very nice and each word sounds very clear.
I’ve copied some feedback about each pieces below as it sounded to me, hope this helps!
Jimmy
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Ethan Allen
———–It does sound like you’re reading and I think part of that is every sentence ends on a ‘down’ tone except the question (How can we ensure that Ethan Allen’s true colors shine through?). This makes it seems a little less conversational to me. I might also add a little more space between sentences.
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The Maya
———–Better spacing between sentences, I feel like a little more emphasis on word/phrases like ‘violent apocalypse’ and ‘rare galactic alignment’ might make listeners a little more engaged.
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Georgia O’Keeffe
———–Loved the line ‘in her magnified paintings of flowers, meant to convey that Nature, in all its beauty, was as powerful…’ This was my favorite of your three examples.
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