[David Goldberg]

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[Sylvanie]

Hello Everyone, I have attached (2) narration homework for your feedback. As always, it is so much appreciated. Thanks again!

Amelia Earhart (Biography)

Amelia Earhart dared to go where no one had gone before. The public adored the pioneering pilot. And news reels of the day captured her every move. Yet the private side of Amelia would always remain an enigma.

Disney’s Oceans Opening (Soft Spoken)

A boy comes running up, and he asks, “What exactly is the ocean? What is the sea?”
You could hit him with a lot of statistics and Latin names, but the answer isn’t something you’ll find in a book. To really know what the ocean is, you have to see it for yourself. And hear it. And taste it. You have to feel its power.

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[Oktober10]

Hi there. I love the expression in your voice! I would say make note of how long your pauses are between sentences. Try maybe to smooth it out a tad? If there’s video which these scripts seem like they may be used for, then it makes sense to pause to time with the visuals.

[Sylvanie]

Thank you for this feedback Oktober10! I will definitely work on the pauses.

[touzet]

The old jack daniels spot…

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[nettipo1]

Hi Touzet,
This was a wonderful read! I don’t have any comments to give you. The music definitely complemented your read. Excellent Job.

[radioguy]

Hi, I’m Gene Manning – new to the forum and happy to hear from you. Thanks for your input.

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[Sylvanie]

Hi Gene, You have a great tone! Your pace just a tad bit fast. Slow down a little, but overall nice job! Good luck with it all.

[radioguy]

I fixed the errant files and append them here. Gene

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[radioguy]

Again.

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[radioguy]

Thanks Sylvanie. The speed is due to many years of live radio announcing.I’m working on it to become a better VO guy.

[maxspitz]

Hey Y’all!

My name is Max, I’m new here to the forum and relatively new to the world of VO. I pulled some copy from the script library and would love and really appreciate some feedback/constructive criticism if anyone has a minute.

Thanks!

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[radioguy]

Your Almond Breeze delivery was much more smooth. Good job. Keep working with your coach for more tips.

[radioguy]

Hi Max. Great voice and decent delivery but you are parsing (pausing where there is no punctuation). Not a terribly bad thing but it interferes with the smooth delivery of the copy. Keep up the good work.

[touzet]

New Lincoln spot.

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[nettipo1]

Hi Touzet,
I liked this spot, although I would have liked to hear it without the music. The music enhanced the humorous announcer tone that I think you’ve chosen to do–which I think is a good choice. I think your technique is spot on. It’s always great to listen to your postings. Great job again!

[sarahlukens1]

Just a newbie working on her voiceover stuff.
any feedback is apprecoated

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[nettipo1]

Hi Sarah, I like the energy of your voice! I think if you eliminate the pauses after “waffles” and “takes” and “home,” it will be smoother. Be mindful of the up inflection on “waffles”, which tends to make it sound more like a question. Nice job.

[mkell755]

Hi all! I’m looking for some feedback for my upcoming narration demo. I was going for a friend teaching a friend knitting vibe here. Let me know what you think. Thanks! Mary

The important thing to remember is that every knitter is different, and what works well for one might not suit another. There are also many styles of knitting, with different ways of holding the needles and working with the yarn to create knitted fabric. We’ll show you the most commonly used methods, but you should do whatever feels most natural for you. Just experiment until you find a comfortable way of performing each technique, and don’t worry if your preferred way is slightly different from ours, as long as the result is the same.

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[JustJohn]

This is very good. I sometimes feel like your careful pronunciation causes the read to feel just a little less natural. The phrase “…with different ways of holding the needles and working with the yarn to create knitted fabric” sounds a little breathless or nervous to me. I wonder if a little more pitch variation and maybe slowing down a little at that point would make it flow a little more freely. Overall, though, it sounds friendly and comfortable.

[radioguy]

Very good overall but I think you could make it more natural sounding and less like a lesson. Keep up the good work.

[mkell755]

Hi John, thanks for the feedback! I will work on keeping the breaths natural sounding and slowing it a little to be more conversational. Thanks for taking the time to listen!

Mary

[LSlagle519]

I wanted to try my voice at a few commercials in the script library: One for Advil and one for Honey Bunches of Oats. I believe I took the right steps to make the reads conversational, but I would be grateful if I could get some feedback. These were the first recorded takes of each copy since I also want to try to worry less about getting the “right take” and more about getting a believable take.

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[mkell755]

Hi LSlagle, good job for both scripts! Of the 2 scripts I felt that Advil was more believable and conversational for you, just seemed to flow better. The cereal ad had good inflection and enthusiasm, and there was a nice difference in tone between the two. Keep it up!

Mary

[Evette75]

Hi Community,
As I try to gauge my direction in the voiceover biz, attempted an audio read… please provide feedback.

Excerpt from To K**l A Mockingbird

Chapter 1, paragraph 1
When he was nearly thirteen, my brother Jem got his arm badly broken at the elbow. When it healed, and Jem’s fears of never being able to play football were assuaged, he was seldom self-conscious about his injury. His left arm was somewhat shorter than his right; when he stood or walked, the back of his hand wsa at right angles to his body, his thumb parallel to his thigh. He couldn’t have cared less, so long as he could pass and punt.

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[mkell755]

Hi Evette, very nice! I like your nice soft tone, it’s very pleasant for an audio book. The pacing was good and I could really visualize the images. The only thing I noticed was that “stood” sounded a little smushed, like “sood” (no ‘t’ sound). but that’s minor and can easily be fixed. Good job!

Mary

[Evette75]

Thanks so much for your feedback, Mary!

[brucem]

Hi,
I attached a demo script reading; any and all feedback welcomed

Bruce

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[Sylvanie]

Hi Bruce, Enjoyable read indeed. Nice deep voice and pace was great. Nice job!

[mkell755]

Hi Bruce, good job! Your voice is well-suited for this genre. You have a nice deep and clear voice that cuts through and works well in a college tour like this where you are trying to get and keep college kids’ attention. Nice work!

Mary

[Evette75]

Hi Steve,
You have a baritone type voice and I enjoyed your read. It was descriptive and to the point. I did detect a little stumble but recovered well. Nice job!

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