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Hello gang, three more homework pieces for your listening pleasure (?). I’m open to, and appreciate, any and all feedback. Thanks! Chris.
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American Tire Supply (casual, conversational, let go of your diction a little, animated, BE YOURSELF)
Free. Now when’s the last time ya’ heard that? A while…right? Well at American Tire Supply, when you buy one all-weather radial tire, you get another one free! Plus, get a free alignment! Hey, with a deal like this, how can you NOT afford to visit.?
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Tesla Camera App
The touchscreen is your control panel for accessing functions, features and apps in your Tesla. The camera allows you to display what the high-definition rear view camera sees at any time when in Reverse. Guidelines appear and move with the steering wheel to show your trajectory. Always be sure to check your surroundings and to use your mirrors. The camera is an aid and should not be relied upon for rear view. If you are in need of additional assistance, you can reach Tesla support at eight-four-four two-four-eight-three-seven-five-two.
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Phytophotodermatitis (Medical Narration)
Phytophotodermatitis is a nonimmunologic phototoxic cutaneous eruption resulting from contact with photosensitizing substances found in plants; furocoumarins (present in limes and other plants) are typically implicated and get activated following exposure to sunlight, especially 320-400 nanometer UVA rays.
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Hi Chris,
These sound incredible. I would agree that you should hit Free, especially when you say “you get another one free!”.
I definitely enjoyed the Tesla narration. The voice was warm and clear. There were moments in it that felt slightly robotic and I think a shift in inflection could bring it back to the warmth that your voice is giving.
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Hey Chris!
I think these are very good! Hmmm.. “FREE”? Emphasize free; not overboard but emphasize the tire is…..FREE, the alignment is….FREE.
I thought you “instructional” voice was excellent; watch the popping sounds but that comes as you get your studio squared away: Pop Filter, mic distance.
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Hi all! I’m looking for feedback to this narration script for my upcoming narration demo. Let me know what you think, thank you!
Mary
Born in 1847, at the very end of the industrial revolution, Thomas Edison was part of a new wave of scientists and inventors that lit the way into the modern era. His famed research lab in Menlo Park, New Jersey hosted the development of innovations that still undergird much of our industrial and consumer infrastructure, including the phonograph (which recorded and played sound), motion pictures and the light bulb. His work there was so important that the town in which Menlo Park was located now bears his name.
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Sounds great! Everything was pronounced clearly, and you had a good amount of variation in your emphasis and a nice volume (not too quiet, and not too loud). The tempo does seem a little slow sometimes, so you might want to speak just that little more quickly (unless your monologue goes with images and video, possibly) Good work!
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Hi gang, another round of narration homework. Would love to hear your feedback. Thanks in advance!
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Company Website Greeting
Meet Bob. Like 95% of car shoppers, he uses his computer, smartphone and tablet to shop for his next car.A few years ago, you could have reached Bob through traditional means such as Direct mail, TV or radio, and newspaper ads.Today, that simply isn’t enough.
According to Google – consumers visit 18 websites on average – before stepping into a dealership.-
Amelia Earhart
Amelia Earhart dared to go where no one had gone before. The public adored the pioneering pilot. And news reels of the day captured her every move. Yet the private side of Amelia would always remain an enigma.
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Documentary on Jazz
It is America’s music. It is an improvised Art, making itself up as it goes along. It rewards individual expression. But demands selfless collaboration. It is forever changing. But nearly always rooted in the blues. It has a rich tradition and its own rules. But it is brand new every night.
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Hi Christophe! Your voice reminds me of that classic radio timbre. These were great 🙂
For Amelia Earhart this is great overall! A nice added touch could be a shift in the tone/feel a the last sentence to match the idea that there was more to Amelia than meets the eye.
Jazz: I like the great variation in pitch that you use! Adding a bit of change in volume could add a bit more variety in how you emphasize the different aspects of music. For example, maybe softer for “selfless” or with less vocal fry for “rich”.
Company website: I really enjoyed this one and felt a bit like I know Bob. And that led to me trusting your quick shift into the hard facts. Great work!
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Hi Christophe, good job!
Company website: Sounded nice and clear, very good pacing and very genre-appropriate for your voice. This was my favorite for you of the 3, fell the most authentic.
Jazz: I liked the variation in tone throughout the script, but the pace felt a little bit rushed to me. It seems like this script has several periods throughout to make the performer slow down and savor the sentences for the listener. If music was playing behind it, just think of all the different jazz riffs that would be playing; I think it could use a little more deliberate pace.
Amelia: Very nice tone, pace and clarity. I wanted to hear more about her story. Overall very good!Mary
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I just had my first Private Coaching Demo last week, and I’ve recorded myself reading some scripts. I’d appreciate if you all would take a listen. Thanks!
Comlongon Castle Script
Steeped in Scottish Border history, Comlongon Castle
is more than just a Scottish Wedding Castle venue — it
has fantastic displays of Armor, weapons and banners,
while the opulent bedrooms boast 4-poster beds and jacuzzis,
providing a stunning blend of Medieval and modern luxury.Roll20 Mobile App Script
We want you to be able to keep your characters, in your pocket.
And that all starts here. Roll20 is excited to announce the invite beta
for our new mobile app! You’ve been asking, and now we’re reaching out
to our awesome community to help us build the best mobile VTT experience!Ripple Foods Script
This is Ripple! It’s Dairy Free done right.
It’s plant-based for the great taste! 8 times more protein
than almond milk, and 15 percent more calcium than dairy milk!
When you want more in every pour, all you need is Ripple!
It’s Dairy-Free done right!-
Hey Logan!
Congratulations on taking the plunge into VO!
The Comlongon spot, a couple of thoughts; check up on the accepted pronunciation of that name? It sounds a bit like you “ate” the word. Perhaps slow down a bit and be smoother, make the script flow more? Reading lists of things, differentiate each item via inflection, consider what words to emphasize; watch the popping of p’s and b’s and such. I thought the Ripple spot was good and you ended it well!
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Hi Logan, nice work! I like your deep, clear and articulate voice.
Comlongon: Interesting emphasis on several words throughout. It seemed a little choppy throughout, you might try smoothing it out a bit with not as many pauses. For a completely different take, it sounds like you might be able to push a Scottish or character voice accent to see how it sounds.
Roll20: Good pacing on this one. “…new mobile app!” sounded more like “…new mobile app.”, with a downward tone at the end instead of a more excited exclamation. You are excited about the new mobile app, but it does not come across that way.
Ripple: The variation in tone is good, but it sounds a little robotic for the script. The exclamation points in this script also end with a downward tone, you might try a more upbeat ending for those, which will translate to projecting more energy and positivity about the product. Hopefully that helps! Keep it up.Mary
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Hey All! This is my first submission, part of my assignment for the 1st private coaching session I had last year. I’ve been busy with other things but finally rolling back in! Anyway, any feedback is much appreciated.
Thanks! Please Find Scripts Below
AMEX:
Do you know me? Probably not. In my business, recognition is always important, but when I’m buying goods online I prefer a little privacy. With Private Payments from American Express, I get the security of a unique number created for each business transaction I make. Because my private information is my business, and American Express keeps it that way.JACK DANIELS:
In Lynchburg, Tennessee, you can park in the middle of the road to talk with a neighbor about taxes or the weather. You can pick enough wild blackberries to fill a tin bucket. And you can see a distillery where Jack Daniel made whiskey way back in 1866. We still make it in a slow, deliberate fashion, much as he did. One sip, and you’ll be glad to know we don’t ever plan to stop. Jack Daniel’s … smooth sippin’ Tennessee whiskey.SESAME PLACE:
Sesame Place is the theme park where Sesame Street comes to life! New in 2018 is our biggest, most exciting roller coaster ever – Oscar’s Wacky Taxi™! Bring the entire family to whirl on rides, splash down slides and hug everyone’s favorite furry friends. So before little kids become big kids, bring them to meet their Sesame Street friends at Sesame Place® theme park!
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Hi Shaun Cruz, great ability to alter and vary you voice pitch! The second and third reads seemed well in tempo and smoothness, though I felt that in the first read for Amex it was a little rushed especially about two thirds of the way though it. Overall wonderful work especially considering this is your first submission!
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Hi Shaun, good work! I like the variation in tone, pace and delivery between the 3 scripts, way to vary it up. I’m only hearing sound in my left ear for all three, could be my setup but usually I hear equally in both ears through my earphones, might be something to check (although I don’t know how one would fix this).
Amex: Pace and tone were good.
Jack: Nice accent, slower pace and chill vibe, this was my favorite for you! “taxes” sounded like “Texas” to me, but I think you did a good job of getting into the accent, and it could be argued that your pronunciation kept in character.
Sesame: Good energy and enthusiasm for this one. You might try some variation in tone for the list of 3 things that starts with “…whirl on rides,”. Also, I know this is just for practice, but the word “biggest was missed in this script, just something to watch for that every word is said. Overall very good!Mary
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Hi Mary! Thanks so much for the feedback, I got the whole one-sided recording thing fixed, I will be uploading more samples soon! Thanks again!
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Overall, these are pretty good! I liked the Jack Daniels one the best, but the Sesame Place one was great too! You did a good job pulling off both a deep, country voice, and a higher, child-friendly tone. Something you might want to think about is adding a little more variation in pitch and emphasis, and when deciding when to vary the pitch and emphasis, go with your gut, listen to the recording, and make any necessary changes to your delivery until you think it sounds natural and conversational (as if you could see yourself saying it in a conversation). Keep up the good work!
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Hey guys!
Got a couple new homework assignment scripts, and some retakes as part of the same assignment!
Rip into them, Im really trying to go h*****n improving!
Thanks!AARP
It’s right in your own backyard.
While it may be hard to believe, roughly five million Americans don’t even know where their next meal will come from.
In communities just like yours, there are many who need help.
Join people across the country who are coming together with AARP Create the Good, to end hunger.
Start today. It can be as easy as giving food or money to your local area food bank, or getting tips to start your own food drive.
Whatever level of involvement is right for you, we’ve made it simple to find and help people in your area.
So get involved. Go to http://www.createthegood.org/hunger.Red Cross Blanket
You don’t think much about it
You never dwell on how it was made
It’s just a blanket after all
But when everything else has been lost
The comfort it provides.. is immeasurable
The American Red Cross brings hope and help to people in need
Every eight minutes every day
So this season, give something that means something
Support us at redcross.org.Cleaner Elections
Smear campaigns…mud slinging…twisting the truth.
Why do politicians resort to such underhanded tactics?
Do they think it really helps their campaign?
It’s u**y, uncalled for, and deceitful.
So why do we allow them to continue?
It’s time to level the playing field.
You want our vote? Then focus on the issues that affect all of us.
This election season, advocate for a clean election process.
Paid for by the committee for cleaner elections.History Channel
If you lived before our time, who would you be?
Would you fight your brother for the rights of another? Who would you be?
Would you find new dreams or create wonders?
What if you could choose from a 1,000 yesterdays; a 1,000 lives, when the past was today and the new took your breath away.
Who would you be? What would you feel? How would you live? Who would you love?
Remembering every generation before us;
Remembering for generations to come.
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Hi everyone,
I am attaching three narration recordings, supported by the scripts below, and would very much welcome any and all feedback.
Kind regards,
John
1. Beethoven
Of all the hundreds of symphonies that have been composed, none can rival in popularity or emotional interest the nine great symphonic works that Beethoven wrote. Beethoven took music off the pedestal of formal beauty, where Haydn and Mozart had left it, and immersed it in the whirlpool of life. He roughened it up until it began to do what he expected it to do … to express problems, evoke emotions, move and struggle exuberantly. More people can respond at once to a Beethoven symphony than to any other. Many have written fine symphonies, but Beethoven’s remain in a class by themselves, as invaluable a part of our heritage as are Shakespeare’s plays.2. 2012 Extinction
The Maya, an ancient South American culture, predicted that time would end
in a violent apocalypse on December 21, 2012. They created an elaborate
astronomical calendar called “The Long Count,” which stops abruptly in
2012. This date, which is also the winter equinox, coincides with an
incredibly rare galactic alignment that happens once every 26,000 years.
What did the Mayans think would happen when their calendar ended? And,
were they joined by other cultures–from different parts of the world and in
different centuries–all pointing to 2012 as a calamitous end time? The Hopi
Indians and Eastern Hindu share similar calendars, which are remarkably
synchronous. One counter-culture mystic even uses an Ancient Chinese
philosophy to unlock the key to a 2012 prophecy. Nostradamus himself
suggests the world is headed toward a coming cataclysm. What can we do to
heed the warning of the Mayan apocalypse?3. This….is my voice.
There is no music, and there are no sound effects…only the pure, clear sound, recorded for your ears.
I am a voice over artist, a voice actor, a voice talent, and I can convey my message in many ways, in many tones and with many emotions.
I can speak in a very light whisper, to share an intimate message with you. Or my voice can boom deeply, demanding respect from those who are listening. My voice can express sympathy to someone who has just experienced a great loss, or it can reflect the happiness one feels after having accomplished something great!
I sit (or stand) before this tube constructed of metals, of plastics, of wire and of silicon, which listens patiently to me, as if it were alive like a mistress, hour after hour, day after day and night after night. It never judges me, however it is a reflection of me….one which is neither vengeful, nor forgiving.
I am a voice actor…..and this is my voice.-
Hi John, these are all GREAT! Really good pacing, flow and enunciation for all of them. Your voice is really nice, clear and deep and is very pleasant to hear. My favorite of these three was Beethoven – you really took your time to tell the story and I wanted to hear more! The only comment I would have on the Mayan script is the pronunciation of “2012”. I wonder if it should be said “twenty-twelve” or “two-thousand and twelve” as you did. You stayed consistent throughout, so it’s just more of a question on my end in general. I have very little criticism for you, only that this is really good stuff and I want to hear an audiobook soon!!! I’ve been listening to you these last few months and you really sound polished. Very good!
Mary
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Hello,
I have recently recorded my first character demos (gaming & animation).
They were to recorded in my home studio while being live directed by a pro in London, who then mixed, mastered & sent them back.
I would love to know the feelings of the international community here.
Please also, feel free to check out my website which I managed to build solo, with negative web design skills!
http://www.lexherbervoiceover.comThank you 🙏
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Hi everyone,
I have some scripts that I’m working on for a narration demo; please take a listen when you get a chance. Any and all feedback welcome!
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