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Hey Everyone!
I’m preparing for my narration demo and BOY do I need your help! Here are a couple of reads for you to listen to and share your feedback! Thank you for your help!
AEC Foundation narration
Every child deserves to grow up with opportunities to learn and thrive. With his skills, her talents, each is a potential leader, a contributor, a productive citizen. How kids grow up will determine their success as adults. But sadly, more than one in five children in America are growing up in poor families and poor neighborhoods, where the chance to thrive is anything but a given. The Annie E. Casey Foundation is dedicated to changing that.Narration for Marching Band Competitions
1. (Very polite) The authority would like to remind the citizens to only perform music that utilizes major and minor scales, and to avoid dissonance and improvisation of any kind. Thank you.
2. (Mildly frustrated) At this time, the authority would like to remind the citizens to only play music that was written before the year 1900. Thank you.
3. (Quite Agitated) The authority would like to remind the citizens that the use of complex rhythms and contemporary music is strictly prohibited. Those who continue to disobey the authority will be punished accordingly. -
Hi everyone! Here is a onboarding script for your review for my upcoming narration demo. I was going for pleasant (but not irritating) enthusiasm. Let me know what you think!
Mary
Texicon Family
Hey there new employee, or should we say, new family member. As a member of the Texicon family, we want to formally introduce you to your new home, but not too formal because that’s just not our style. Now you’ve already got your new uniforms and met with our incredible CEO, or head of the family as we like to call him. Now it’s time for me to bring you up to speed on what your days are going to be filled in with. Make sure you grab some of the complimentary cake you have in front of you, we love cake here so you’re going to have to get used to that, and see what the rest of your time at the Texicon household has in store for you!-
Hi Mary, this is enjoyable because it sounds interesting, and your intonation is pleasant. I do hear your breaths in-between phrases which are subtly distracting and am not sure how or if that would be altered. But wonderful job on keeping the listener engaged!
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Thanks for the feedback Roxy! Yes, I definitely included breaths, my coach told me to keep those in. I tried some narration scripts without and ended up holding my breath and then it sounded really weird, AND I ran out of breath too! I will work on not breathing too heavy however, do not want it to sound distracting 🙂 Thanks!
Mary
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Hey Mary,
I liked your performance. I thought that tempo was good and you sound relaxed and excited about your new “family member.” I liked your inflections. Great work! -
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Hi Guys. New student to Edge Studios and I’m also a newbie to the industry. I was given some homework to do and I thought I’d submit something early to get some feedback(this is my very first recording with my new studio). I’m hoping you guys can have a listen to my reading of the ‘Cosmos’ script:
“Welcome to the planet earth. A place of blue nitrogen skies, oceans of liquid water, cool forests, soft meadows; A world positively rippling with life. From the cosmic perspective, it is, for the moment, unique. The only world on which we know with certainty that the matter of the cosmos has become alive, and aware. There must be many such worlds scattered through space, but our search for them begins here, with the accumulated wisdom of the men and women of our species, acquired at great cost, over a million years.”
Thanks in advance!
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Hi all! Here is a script for review – the first one is without music, the second is with you guessed it, piano music (same spoken recording for both). Let me know what you think!
Mary
This is a guide for piano beginners. Ten chapters guide you all the way from zero knowledge to the point where you are sitting with your hands at the keyboard with all the understanding and resources you need. This guide cannot replace learning and practicing, but we can show you how to get the most out of your time. So even if you already have some playing experience, you can still find something valuable here.
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Hi everyone! I’m new to the Edge Studio VO demo program and excited to see what yall have to say about these readings 🙂
Starbucks: We’ve been told that perfect mornings exist for the lucky few. That morning people own the waking hours. But the truth is mornings belong to all of us. and while your morning might look like this. Or this. Or even this. Your mornings are what you make them. All it takes is saying Yes. Starbucks. Morning. Yes.
Allstate: Welcome to Allstate. A place where everyone lives life well protected. And even when things go a bit wrong, we got your back. Here things work the way you wish they would and better protection costs a whole lot less. You’re in good hands with Allstate.
Happy weekend,
DevonMisfits Market: Hi. We’re Misfits Market. We rescue organic produce and surplus pantry staples from sustainably minded farmers and food makers and deliver them straight to your door at up to 40% off grocery store prices. Just build your box online, we’ll pack it with the best stuff: quality, affordable groceries ..for everyone! (Just the way it should be.) Get started at misfitsmarket.com.
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Hey Devon,
You have a really nice voice. Your tempo was great, but the reads sounded a bit choppy. Some of your words weren’t clear, example: Misfits ‘at up to 40%’ sounded like ‘add up to 40%.’ Minor stuff. Your volume was a bit low. I think if you find the one person you want to share your information with, and speak directly to them, all of the choppy-ness, if there’s such a word, will vanish! Add that smile in your performances and you’ve got it made. Can’t wait to hear more! -
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Great job! I would work on your pacing a bit more. Really visualize what you are saying and what kind of video it may be paired with. Painting a scene in your head may really help your delivery! It could even be helpful to imagine talking to someone you know about the service to sound genuinely interested about the service/product.
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Hi Devon, good work!
Misfits: There seemed to be a lot of unnecessary pauses in this one in the first sentence, which made it a little choppy sounding and less conversational. The last “misfitsmarket.com” seemed to get low and trailed off, to emphasize the brand in a more positive light, I would bring up the tone more. Also “for everyone!” sounded like “fer”. I do this too and it is a hard habit to break as part of my natural accent. Per my coach, I will write in “4” instead of “for” to tell my brain to not to skip over it with a “fer”.
Allstate: This was nice, but you might try it with more smile in your voice, which will sound warmer and more reassuring to the listener.
Starbucks: Nice smile in your voice. I liked the variation of tone your use in the list “and while your morning might look like this. Or this. Or even this.” I liked this one the best for you. Keep it up!Mary
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Hello Everyone:
Thanks for taking the time to listen to my latest homework assignments. Really appreciate any feedback as I am always looking to improve!
Cosmos
Welcome to the planet earth. A place of blue nitrogen skies, oceans of liquid water, cool forests, soft meadows. A world positively rippling with life.
From the cosmic perspective, it is, for the moment, unique. The only world on which we know with certainty that the matter of the cosmos has become alive, and aware. There must be many such worlds scattered through space, but our search for them begins here, with the accumulated wisdom of the men and women of our species, acquired at great cost, over a million years.AEC Foundation
Every child deserves to grow up with opportunities to learn and thrive. With his skills, her talents, each is a potential leader, a contributor, a productive citizen. How kids grow up will determine their success as adults. But sadly, more than one in five children in America are growing up in poor families and poor neighborhoods, where the chance to thrive is anything but a given. The Annie E. Casey Foundation is dedicated to changing that.
The Time Capsule
A computer, a new wonder drug, your favorite snack or light bulb. What would you put in a time capsule that could be opened in 1000 years?
How will you want to be remembered? Look around-is it your wedding pictures, your favorite book, or those old jeans? Which treasures will tell the story of how we lived, who we loved, what we overcame? A world premiere event “The Times Capsule” Tonight at 9 Eastern 10 Pacific on The History Channel.Once again, thanks very much
Steve
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Hi Steve! Very nice! I like your deep warm and clear voice – it cuts through nicely!
Cosmos: This was my favorite for you, your voice is very well suited for space narration. Great pacing, pauses and emphasized words throughout. After “…rippling with life.” it seems like you could take just a micro-pause longer, like you are setting the stage for the rest of the story. The word “cost” had a slight accent, sounded like “cawst” (Boston area maybe?) that I did not hear for the rest of the script, just an observation from me, a mid-westerner.
AEC: This was clear and had good pacing, but you did not sound as connected / interested in the script.
Time Capsule: I liked this one, but it felt a tiny bit rushed. You could perhaps pause a tiny bit more after some of the questions, which will allow listeners to take a beat and think about the questions, not a big deal. Really nice work!!Mary
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Good afternoon everyone!
Doing some more homework and have a few more scripts! I’d appreciate any feedback everyone has, thanks!
Jimmy
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Good afternoon everyone!
I’m completing my homework for this past session and have attached some scripts.
Thanks for any feedback you can provide!
Sincerely,
Jimmy
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Hi Jimmy good work! Your voice is friendly, approachable and clear, I agree that it sounds trustworthy.
Real Estate: – Good pacing on this one and it got my attention, I liked this one the best for you.
Company website: Very believable and good pacing for this one, like you were talking with a friend.
Social Security: No specific criticisms on this one. Good work!Mary
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Hi Jimmy! You really have a very trustworthy voice 🙂
I enjoyed this one the most. I’d recommend picturing who you’re talking to throughout the reading to really emphasize how you make this feel like a conversation or a narration of the viewer’s own thought. However, casual and conversational really suits you!
The Company Website Greeting sounds a bit like you’re chuckling at Bob at the beginning and I enjoyed that quite a bit. The pace on this one could be sped up a bit but you had me picturing a commercial with this one.
On your reading of the Social Security script – your annunciation is perfect and I really appreciate the time you take to pause. I’d recommend catching the down pitch at the end of some sentences and speeding up the reading a bit.
Hope you find this helpful!
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