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David Goldberg
Edge Studio StaffHi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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November 3, 2021 at 2:27 pm #71807
Logan DFD
ParticipantHey everyone! I’m practicing my conversational delivery, and I was wondering if you guys would listen and see what I could improve. Thanks!
Butterball
Butterball brings you the joys of turkey day.
Friends and family drop in to bask in the warmth
of the season. Celebrate this summer with Butterball
turkey on the grill. Tender, juicy, surprisingly simple.
HAPPY THANKSGRILLING from Butterball.Popeye’s
Got a cravin’ for Cajun?
Come along for some New Orleans style fried chicken,
cajun battered fries, and buttermilk biscuits.
Love that chicken at Popeye’s.Attachments:
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November 3, 2021 at 3:26 pm #71817
Alexandra Potocka
ParticipantSo you’re working on sounding conversational?! Ergh.. the hardest part in my opinion! lol. One think I noticed in your reads (which I have issues with too) is ending all your sentences on the same note. Try going up on grill, for example. Also, stretch out “joys of turkey day” or emphasize joys.. The hard part of sounding natural is when they also tell you you have to sound happier at the same time! lol But I do find it helps to actually be smiling when I’m doing some of these scripts.
Pretty much the same comments on the second read. Try to sound a little more excited about what you’re selling!
But you’ve got a good voice so keep at it!
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November 3, 2021 at 1:07 pm #71788
Alexandra Potocka
ParticipantHi everyone! Below I’m attaching 3 scripts for your review and feedback. They’re all for a narration demo. What do you think? Too fast, too slow, emphasis on wrong word? Any feedback will be GREATLY appreciated!!
Cheers,
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November 3, 2021 at 2:34 pm #71810
Logan DFD
ParticipantGreat job! Your narration is really good. Your Met Art Tour reading sounds like it could come from a museum commercial! The Cosmic Kids demo sounded good, I would just say that when you say “Yoga, Stories, and Fun!”, you might want to shorten your pauses between each word. As for the Breast Cancer segment, I’d say to slow down a smidgen when it comes to the long, scientific words, so people are sure to understand what the word is. Overall, great work! Hope this helps!
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November 3, 2021 at 3:17 pm #71815
Alexandra Potocka
ParticipantThanks for the great tips! I’ll definitely try playing around with my kids one more and shortening the pauses as you suggested. Thanks for taking the time to listen and giving me your thoughts!
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November 3, 2021 at 11:51 am #71779
Oktober10
ParticipantHi everyone, here’s my demo! feedback appreciated 😀
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November 3, 2021 at 2:38 pm #71811
Logan DFD
ParticipantWow. You transitioned to each different commercial really smoothly. For a second, I thought they were part of the same commercial! Good job! As for your voice, you did good at transitioning your tone between the different moods of each commercial. That’s valuable. Good work!
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November 3, 2021 at 1:32 pm #71796
Alexandra Potocka
ParticipantHonestly, it sounds great!! Good job and Congrats!
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November 2, 2021 at 8:14 pm #71762
SteveVO
ParticipantWould love some feedback on this commercial read for Honey Bunches of Oats:
It’s amazing! I never thought one cereal would make my whole family stay for breakfast. HONEY BUNCHES OF OATS. There’s never been a cereal like it. With big corn flakes and crunchy bunches of oats. Finally … a cereal my whole family loves.
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November 3, 2021 at 1:12 pm #71792
Alexandra Potocka
ParticipantSounds really great! I think that you could amp up the excitement a little. It seems silly to do but I think that in a real commercial, with music and video, it would sound good. You’re on the right track!
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November 2, 2021 at 3:16 pm #71759
maxspitz
ParticipantHey Y’all!
Below are 2 reads for my 1st session HW. Comments and feedback of any kind would be awesome and super appreciated! Would love to hear what you have to say.
Thank you!
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November 4, 2021 at 3:52 pm #71848
maxspitz
ParticipantThanks so much for your feedback!! Listening again I definitely hear what both of you are saying about Mr. Coffee needing more smile and warmth. I’ll be sure to work on that!
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November 4, 2021 at 7:44 am #71831
Haley Gross de Jimenez
ParticipantHi Max,
On Mr. Coffee, I think your timing is great and as Alexandra said, adding a smile is in the right direction. It needs a little warmth. That just-up-in-the-morning-and-here’s-that-beautiful-cup-of-coffee-that-is-going-to-be-your-salvation-for-the-day kind of warmth.
Staples sounds pretty spot on.
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November 3, 2021 at 1:20 pm #71794
Alexandra Potocka
ParticipantI think you’re on the right track! I personally would add a little “smile” to my reads.
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November 1, 2021 at 10:26 pm #71748
bnielsen15
ParticipantHi everyone! Below is my second session’s homework. Any and all feedback is greatly appreciated!
American Express:
Do you know me? Probably not. In my business, recognition is always important, but when I’m buying goods online I prefer a little privacy. With Private Payments from American Express, I get the security of a unique number created for each business transaction I make. Because my private information is my business.Special K: Putting strawberries in cereal wasn’t our idea. Putting them in the box was. With slices of real strawberries and crunchy sweet flakes, looking good never tasted so good. Special K Red Berries.
IPhone 4: It’s the end of the day. And you missed it. Where did those hours go? Get in the driver’s seat and capture your life with the iPhone 4s – the fastest, most powerful smartphone on the market. Voice activation, video, and much more. In stores now.
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November 3, 2021 at 1:27 pm #71795
Alexandra Potocka
ParticipantHi there! So you have a great voice, with lots of potential. My advice to you, which I got when I first started..is that you really have to feel the script, rather than just read it. It was your idea to put the strawberries in the box.. Be proud of that!! Crunchy flakes…imagine you’re eating them right now and they’re the best thing you’ve ever tasted… Keep going with it! You’ll get there!
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November 1, 2021 at 3:03 pm #71744
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November 1, 2021 at 11:59 am #71733
Don Sack
ParticipantGreetings!
Submitting three scripts for my fifth and last(?) coaching session with Art.Attachments:
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November 3, 2021 at 2:48 pm #71812
Alexandra Potocka
ParticipantHi there!
What an amazing voice you have!! For the Nike commerical, try slowing it down. Imagine visuals between each thing you say reinforcing your statement..
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October 31, 2021 at 11:10 pm #71723
ColtonJLong
ParticipantHowdy everyone!
Another homework set for Mr. Bruder!
Three scripts this time!BUTTERBALL
Butterball brings you the joys of turkey day. Friends and family drop in to bask in the warmth of the season. Celebrate this summer with Butterball turkey on the grill. Tender, juicy, surprisingly simple. HAPPY THANKSGRILLING from Butterball.GEICO DIRECT
These days, it seems as if every car insurance company needs a symbol. Things like a blanket or a hand. Well, if Geico had a symbol, it would surely be the frontal lobe of the cerebral cortex. You see…it’s here, deep within the brain, that nerve impulses figure out, “Hey…it’s smarter to buy car insurance from GEICO.” Over 10,000 drivers switch each week! So call for a free rate quote today. Yep, the brain’s a great symbol. We just can’t imagine the medulla oblongata on our stationary. Call 1-800-4-GEICO. GEICO Direct, the sensible alternative. Not available in
New Jersey or Massachusetts.CARNATION
Kids can change minds. They can even change the world around us. Packed with protein plus 21 vitamins and minerals, we nourish them with Carnation Breakfast Essentials. Because today could change everything.Attachments:
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November 1, 2021 at 12:04 pm #71737
Don Sack
ParticipantHey Colton!
I like these! Other than the oops pronunciations at the end of Geico, I do really like them. At first I thought you could sound a bit more excited but then I thought that this is your style and it works for me!
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November 1, 2021 at 2:50 pm #71743
ColtonJLong
ParticipantOh dang, I knew I had an “oops” at the end of Geico, but I rerecorded the line! I must have clipped the wrong part! Shoot. Well, thank you very much for your feedback!
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October 31, 2021 at 5:34 pm #71717
naderaliamer
ParticipantThis is going to be the third time I’m trying to post in this forum. Let’s hope it works out this time.
Hello again everyone. Officially posting my full homework assignment. There’s natural, slight monotony to my voice that I’m trying to train out. Otherwise, I’m looking for any an all feedback.
I did try to post yesterday. Hopefully, this doesn’t become double posted.
Thanks in advance for helping this newbie out!
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November 4, 2021 at 8:37 am #71832
Haley Gross de Jimenez
ParticipantI love that each read sounded different – especially between the Cosmos and Financial Engines. Great job, I think you have a very pleasant voice and a nice timbre. One thing I am told frequently and I think I am starting to hear it in others is try with a little more smile and energy – warm it up some. On Planet Earth, perhaps a little faster as well. It feels more relaxing than I would expect.
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November 1, 2021 at 12:08 pm #71738
Don Sack
ParticipantHey Nader!
Outstanding! Great voice and great variations in each script! Edit breath sounds?
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November 1, 2021 at 12:51 pm #71742
naderaliamer
ParticipantThanks Don! I’m still new to editing and I’m learning as I go.
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