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Below are 2 reads for my 1st session HW. Comments and feedback of any kind would be awesome and super appreciated! Would love to hear what you have to say.
Thanks so much for your feedback!! Listening again I definitely hear what both of you are saying about Mr. Coffee needing more smile and warmth. I’ll be sure to work on that!
On Mr. Coffee, I think your timing is great and as Alexandra said, adding a smile is in the right direction. It needs a little warmth. That just-up-in-the-morning-and-here’s-that-beautiful-cup-of-coffee-that-is-going-to-be-your-salvation-for-the-day kind of warmth.
Hi everyone! Below is my second session’s homework. Any and all feedback is greatly appreciated!
American Express:
Do you know me? Probably not. In my business, recognition is always important, but when I’m buying goods online I prefer a little privacy. With Private Payments from American Express, I get the security of a unique number created for each business transaction I make. Because my private information is my business.
Special K: Putting strawberries in cereal wasn’t our idea. Putting them in the box was. With slices of real strawberries and crunchy sweet flakes, looking good never tasted so good. Special K Red Berries.
IPhone 4: It’s the end of the day. And you missed it. Where did those hours go? Get in the driver’s seat and capture your life with the iPhone 4s – the fastest, most powerful smartphone on the market. Voice activation, video, and much more. In stores now.
Hi there! So you have a great voice, with lots of potential. My advice to you, which I got when I first started..is that you really have to feel the script, rather than just read it. It was your idea to put the strawberries in the box.. Be proud of that!! Crunchy flakes…imagine you’re eating them right now and they’re the best thing you’ve ever tasted… Keep going with it! You’ll get there!
Hi there!
What an amazing voice you have!! For the Nike commerical, try slowing it down. Imagine visuals between each thing you say reinforcing your statement..
Another homework set for Mr. Bruder!
Three scripts this time!
BUTTERBALL
Butterball brings you the joys of turkey day. Friends and family drop in to bask in the warmth of the season. Celebrate this summer with Butterball turkey on the grill. Tender, juicy, surprisingly simple. HAPPY THANKSGRILLING from Butterball.
GEICO DIRECT
These days, it seems as if every car insurance company needs a symbol. Things like a blanket or a hand. Well, if Geico had a symbol, it would surely be the frontal lobe of the cerebral cortex. You see…it’s here, deep within the brain, that nerve impulses figure out, “Hey…it’s smarter to buy car insurance from GEICO.” Over 10,000 drivers switch each week! So call for a free rate quote today. Yep, the brain’s a great symbol. We just can’t imagine the medulla oblongata on our stationary. Call 1-800-4-GEICO. GEICO Direct, the sensible alternative. Not available in
New Jersey or Massachusetts.
CARNATION
Kids can change minds. They can even change the world around us. Packed with protein plus 21 vitamins and minerals, we nourish them with Carnation Breakfast Essentials. Because today could change everything.
Hey Colton!
I like these! Other than the oops pronunciations at the end of Geico, I do really like them. At first I thought you could sound a bit more excited but then I thought that this is your style and it works for me!
Rock On!
Oh dang, I knew I had an “oops” at the end of Geico, but I rerecorded the line! I must have clipped the wrong part! Shoot. Well, thank you very much for your feedback!
This is going to be the third time I’m trying to post in this forum. Let’s hope it works out this time.
Hello again everyone. Officially posting my full homework assignment. There’s natural, slight monotony to my voice that I’m trying to train out. Otherwise, I’m looking for any an all feedback.
I did try to post yesterday. Hopefully, this doesn’t become double posted.
I love that each read sounded different – especially between the Cosmos and Financial Engines. Great job, I think you have a very pleasant voice and a nice timbre. One thing I am told frequently and I think I am starting to hear it in others is try with a little more smile and energy – warm it up some. On Planet Earth, perhaps a little faster as well. It feels more relaxing than I would expect.
Hello All! This is my second submission on here, I appreciate all feedback. Thanks!
PLANET EARTH: Welcome to the planet earth. A place of blue nitrogen skies, oceans of liquid water, cool forests, soft meadows; A world positively rippling with life. From the cosmic perspective, it is, for the moment, unique. The only world on which we know with certainty that the matter of the cosmos has become alive, and aware. There must be many such worlds scattered through space, but our search for them begins here, with the accumulated wisdom of the men and women of our species, acquired at great cost, over a million years.
PROSPECTOR: Howdy folks, Clem the old prospector here to tell you how you can strike it rich, and you don’t even need a pick and shovel, all you need is a new Quick Pick from the Nebraska Lottery. With 6 chances to win, odds are you’ll do better than me diggin’ in this old mountain here.
The new Quick Pick, from the Nebraska Lottery.
SOLAR SYSTEM: Today we’re going to explore all of the planets in our solar system and some other places as well. We’ll travel into the future when astronauts live throughout the solar system. On each world we’ll see what the weather is like, what we would wear, and what we would do to have fun! Grab your oxygen, put on your seatbelt, and let’s blast off!
Hey, Loved your rendition of prospector and solar! I was ready to get that quick pick, grab my oxygen, put on my seatbelt and blast off! Yeah! But planet earth, had me scared! If that was the intent, Great Job! Keep it up!
Hi! For the Solar narration…
Try putting emphasis on the word ” explore” instead of “we’re” and “system” in “solar system”. So it’s not SOLAR system but rather “solar SYSTEM”. Sorry, kinda hard to explain through writing. I think you nailed it on the 2nd half of the script. Great job!
Hey, I thought your tone, pitch and volume were spot on — your tempo went just a tad too fast. I didn’t get the feeling that you were speaking directly to one person. As my coach says, find the person, and why you’re giving them the information. Overall, good job!
Hello,
Still looking for feedback on narration reads. Thanks!
J**k the hero Dog
When the littlest dog in the litter
Takes the biggest journey in Africa
He will make new friends
Face new challenges
And find his destiny.
Congaree National Park narration
IT IS A PLACE OF CONSTANT CHANGE. OF WOOD AND WATER, SUNLIGHT AND SHADE. THIS IS CONGAREE NATIONAL PARK.
NOT FAR FROM SOUTH CAROLINA’S STATE CAPITOL, THIS MAJESTIC WILDERNESS OF TOWERING TREES IS A SANCTUARY. FOR WILDLIFE… FOR CHAMPION TREES… FOR VISITORS FROM AROUND THE WORLD.
DAY BY DAY, SEASON BY SEASON, THIS FLOODPLAIN FOREST CHANGES–SHAPED AND RESHAPED BY WATER. A NEW PLACE TO EXPLORE…EACH TIME YOU RETURN..
Hi there!
Great job! Try focusing on different words in your script to get different emphasis. Play around with the script and see how when you accent different words, it sounds completely different. For example, for the hero dog.. Try emphasizing the words littlest, biggest, and new.. So BIGGEST journey, and NEW friends, face NEW challenges etc…… Hope this helps!
Alexandra, thank you so much for listening and giving feedback. Yes! All suggestions are a great help! I will play with emphasizing different words in other reads. Much appreciated.
Hey Sue!
Great pipes! Very Soothing! Thinking…..pop filter? back off the mic? I don’t know, I just here a lot of “mouth noises” if you know what I mean; I have a same issue in that if one slows down a bit the clarity of enunciation is better?
Rock On!
Oh Don!!! Thank you so much! I will certainly back off the mic, because I used the pop filter, so I must have been just too close! I’ll work on slowing it down! I appreciate you listening and giving feedback!
On Hello User I kind of wanted your voice to be a little bit more upbeat but soothing at the same time. Not sure if that makes sense. The recording sounded a little too sleepy but it could’ve just used a little more tune to get me more interested into wanting to reset my password. Hope this makes sense.