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August 7, 2020 at 9:27 am #15468
David Goldberg
Edge Studio StaffHi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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November 11, 2021 at 7:09 pm #72030
Logan DFD
ParticipantHi! I’m working on sounding natural in my delivery. Hope you all can help me out!
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Because A-1 has all the taste that makes every bite count.Attachments:
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November 15, 2021 at 11:17 pm #72140
Shaun Cruz
ParticipantHi Logan!
I like your tone, I’d love to hear you doing some narration/explainer type stuff. I think you’d do really well at that. Keep up the good work!
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November 13, 2021 at 11:48 am #72051
Swkeys
ParticipantHi Logan,
Thanks for the uploads. These were very good and you have a very stately/ professorial tone to your voice and your annunciation is great. For the sake of sounding natural I would suggest acting out (while recording) like you are talking to some friends. Which would help reduce some of the “formalness” that I suspect your voice naturally gives.
Overall, I think these were pretty good and look forward to hearing more.
SWK
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November 11, 2021 at 2:47 am #72016
superfixappliances
ParticipantHi Everyone!
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November 11, 2021 at 12:59 am #72011
Shaun Cruz
ParticipantHello Friends!
Just uploading a couple more commercial reads… I appreciate all the feedback.
Thanks!
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November 13, 2021 at 10:09 pm #72055
bevy
ParticipantHi Shaun,
I really enjoyed the Amstel Light read, you presented as a light-hearted and neighborly which fits well with the tone of the script.
I also enjoyed the Freshii read but agree that slowing down just a little bit, specifically when listing ingredients would make it better. Overall great recordings!
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November 15, 2021 at 11:11 pm #72139
Shaun Cruz
ParticipantHello Bevy,
Thanks for the feedback, I really appreciate it. definitely will be slowing down. Thank you for listening!
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November 11, 2021 at 7:31 pm #72034
Logan DFD
ParticipantSounds good! You have a good calming, relaxing voice.
On the Freshii reading, you might want to slow down a bit and pronounce each word clearly, ESPECIALLY the word Freshii (the money word). Also, be sure to have good variation in your pitch in the middle of sentences. And when you pause, let your words naturally end, but don’t cut them off too soon. Do that, and your reading will be just that much better! Good work!
Your Amstel Light reading was really good! Sounds like it came from an official commercial. Creative variation in pitch, great accent, not too fast, but not slow either. Great job! Keep it up!
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November 15, 2021 at 11:10 pm #72138
Shaun Cruz
ParticipantHey Logan,
Thank you for the great feedback! I really appreciate it.
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November 11, 2021 at 6:50 am #72020
kicking
ParticipantI really like your voice – friendly, trustworthy, cool.
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November 11, 2021 at 11:12 am #72027
Shaun Cruz
ParticipantI Will Keep the P notes in mind, I’ll try that exercise lol. Thanks so much for the feedback, I appreciate it!
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November 10, 2021 at 10:16 pm #72006
TimberTykes
ParticipantGood Evening!
I have a couple of recordings here for homework- two commercial readings.
My main focus was making sure the reading was akin to a short story- I have to make sure my readings had a beginning, middle, and end. Any feedback is much appreciated, and thank you for your time!
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November 14, 2021 at 12:04 pm #72077
jwreickel
ParticipantGood morning Timber Tykes,
I tried to provide some feedback for you below on each of your reads, well done!
Sincerely,
Jimmy
Saying No – lots of personality and definitely sounds like a conversation! I like the chuckle and do feel like this has a distinct beginning/middle/end. really nice!
Get More – this definitely sounds like a real commercial so that’s great! There is a good amount of tonal shift throughout, especially at the end, but in the beginning/middle sections you may want to change one of the exclamatory sentences to not end on a high inflection (e.g. depending on how much smartphone data YOU USE! and get a new phone ON US!)
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November 10, 2021 at 2:45 pm #72000
salmaperez001
ParticipantHello everyone! I would greatly appreciate any feedback on any of my narration recordings below as I have tried to apply the feedback I received in my last post. Thank you so much in advance!
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November 14, 2021 at 11:53 am #72073
jwreickel
ParticipantGood morning salmaperez!
I’ve copied some feedback below for each of your scripts, hope this helps!
Jimmy
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Aetna/US Healthcare – Based on a quick Google search I think this may be pronounced as ‘et – na’ vs. ‘a – et – na’ but I could be wrong about that. I think your pace and annunciation are very consistent and convey a warm feeling but it does come off as if you’re reading a script. You may want to change your tone/inflection a few places to try and make it sound more like a conversation
Relaxation – I think your voiceprint fits really well with this one! Good pacing, good pauses, I thought this was very good.
Apollo 16 – To me this one definitely sounds like it’s got more of your personality but I would suggest even more. To try and relay your point of view (amazement, awe, etc.) about this incredible event in history I think would be helpful to grabbing listener attention
Hershey Tour – I think this also offers more of your personality but similar to the healthcare one seems to have very consistent tone that makes it sound like you’re reading a script. For example your first three sentences all end with an ‘up’ inflection (welcome to Hershey! the great american Chocolate Town! where american families come together for the Sweet Life!)
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November 10, 2021 at 8:14 am #71991
Sheila Harris
ParticipantHi all! See below for recent script submission…
GORDON COLLEGE:
Welcome to Gordon College! This tour begins just outside the tunnel that goes under College Drive near the flagpole. We will tour East campus first, followed by West Campus, and end the tour back here at the tunnel. Periodically, I will ask you to pause the recording so that you can walk to the next point or take a few minutes to independently tour the area. I will always use the word “pause” when you need to pause the recording. And I will always use the word “stop” when you need to stop walking while I continue speaking. This tour is intended to be listened to while walking around campus and does not include tours of any of the buildings. If you are taking this tour on a day when the buildings are open, please feel free to pause the recording and enter the buildings along the way. As you resume listening to the tour, remember to return to the location where you were last when you pushed pause on the recording.
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November 9, 2021 at 11:11 pm #71983
mkell755
ParticipantHi everyone! Here is a script for feedback. I’m working towards recording my narration demo. Let me know what you think. Thanks!
Mary
Mini Supermarket
This may look like the front of a vending machine. In fact, to make a purchase, all you do is dial a code and a robot sales clerk does the rest.
Instead of just sodas or crackers, this machine offers more than five hundred items – like p***y hose, shampoos, lotions, pacifiers, tooth paste, batteries – even dog food.Attachments:
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November 9, 2021 at 6:28 pm #71975
1stassi
ParticipantHi everyone.
This is my first homework assignment to record a commercial and upload it on the forum. I would love to get some feedback from some of my fellow actors/ actresses. Thanks in advance.Attachments:
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November 9, 2021 at 11:23 pm #71986
mkell755
ParticipantHi 1stassi! First of all, welcome! I liked your energy for this one. It sounded upbeat and appropriate for the script. I did hear some echoing in the background, but my guess is if it’s your first time you may not be fully set up yet for soundproofing. Keep it up!
Mary
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November 9, 2021 at 12:34 pm #71959
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November 9, 2021 at 7:01 am #71949
Bil-Bo
ParticipantWoodies
I hate Woodies! I’m the only dog on the block who doesn’t get any love, and I tell ya, I’m fed up! It’s just Woodies, Woodies, Woodies … every doggone day. She never has time for me anymore. When I want to romp in the park — “Sorry, darling. Mummy has to go to Woodies to buy a new dress.” When I want to play fetch the stick — “Not now, Canine Cutey, WOODIES is having a sale on shoes.” I thought it was supposed to be a dog’s world out there. If only I were a cat! (Meow SFX)Attachments:
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