I enjoy hearing your voice in this performance. Good background music, giving the listener a feel for the kind of performance you are trying to go for. It sounds like you were cut off from your script sample at the very end though.
Hi Marco! I really like the mix of personable and authoritative you’ve achieved here. Your tone and delivery are fantastic for the content. There’s a smidge of echo/background noise and it sounds like a couple of words got cut off… perhaps by a click filter? I only ask because I’ve heard similar on tracks using a click filter. For example, “Crest Pro Hel…” I don’t hear the TH. Overall, you have a super strong sound.
Thank you for your comment. Yes there is some reverb and background noise going on. I didn’t record these in my booth. Had a power surge in the house a few days ago and lost some appliances. So I recorded these out in the open so to speak. Figured for practice scripts it was ok. However, as for the ends of words being cut off, perhaps my editing was a little too aggressive trying to compensate for being outside my booth. Thanks again!
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Hi Steve! I really enjoyed your performance, and would encourage you to push the “conversational read” even more. Pick a person you know who would be excited about this and then “have a conversation” about it to him or her.
You may also benefit from either a desser or slightly reduced gain on you mic because the sibilance is pretty live in my ears at least.
Hi Steve. I really like the clarity of your voice. The tone of your read was also very good. I’m finding it difficult to critique, but if I had to mention one thing I’d say the rhythm/pace could be picked up a bit. Again, I liked it very much and could definitely see your voice in this spot. I would just say a little more energy. LITTLE more… lol
Good clarity of voice! For a commercial read, this performance would need to be spoken a little faster. Maybe work on Pace, Speed, Breath Support, and be your natural self, like on overdrive with more energy to the performance?
First off I want to say that I have been a fan of Edge for years! I’m excited to dive in and participate in the forums and hearing from you all. Thank you for your time and effort in listening and helping me out!
I am looking to revamp my commercial demo but would like your input on the types/ styles of commercials that my voice is suited best for. I have attached samples of a couple commercial reads for that purpose. I have also attached my animation/ character demo and would like to hear your impressions and thoughts!
@SteveVO I apologize, I meant this reply to be on my post. I did not mean to attach my work to your post! That being said, I did listen to your audio files and wan impressed with your audio clarity. My one suggestion would be to work on finding the melody in your performances, even with this more “flat” type of read.
Hello gang,
I’ve attached 3 commercial scripts here and welcome all feedback. You guys are definitely helping me get better and I greatly appreciate it!
Thanks,
Chris
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Hi Chris! I enjoyed your performances, and definitely believe you have a great voice and the sky is the limit for you. I believe your Honey Bunches read was your strongest and your weakest was JC Penny. I felt like the JC Penny one was “performed” or “read” and not as natural as your other two. Perhaps because it was a longer read? Own the script and then just let it flow!
Thank you for the feedback. It is greatly appreciated. I’m continuing to work on sounding natural and hope to nail it sometime before I’m pushing up daisies, lol.
Great sounding overall. Looking at Invisalign the first “you” sounds a little like “chew”. Also there is a very apparent breathe at the end 00:26 which could be softened.
Hello Everyone, I would love to get your feedback on my commercial reads below. Let me know your thoughts! Much appreciated as always.
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