[David Goldberg]

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[Andres]

Just testing out scripts for my demo, anything and everything you could have to say is very much appreciated!

Welcome to Gordon College! This tour begins just outside the tunnel that goes under College Drive near the flagpole. We will tour East campus first, followed by West Campus, and end the tour back here at the tunnel. Periodically, I will ask you to pause the recording so that you can walk to the next point or take a few minutes to independently tour the area. I will always use the word “pause” when you need to pause the recording. And I will always use the word “stop” when you need to stop walking while I continue speaking. This tour is intended to be listened to while walking around campus and does not include tours of any of the buildings. If you are taking this tour on a day when the buildings are open, please feel free to pause the recording and enter the buildings along the way. As you resume listening to the tour, remember to return to the location where you were last when you pressed pause on the recording.

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[chloeblackstone]

Hi Andres, I think your voice is a great match for this copy! My recommendation is to slow down a bit, in general. I noticed there were a few series of words that sounded mashed together, and some words that “fell off” at the last syllable. For example “and end the tour back here at the tunnel.” Make sure to enunciate “tunnel.” I think if you take your time and make sure not to rush the copy, these are easy fixes. Overall, nice work!

[Erik B]

Hi Andres,

I like your voice, and your tone throughout the read is very good. My only criticisms are the first sentence ends with an exclamation point, and I feel like you can add more energy there. Also I noticed breathes thoughout the read, maybe minimize or mute the breathes. Overall good job.

[Provocaleric]

Dear Andres,
I liked your voice, I felt a good positive, friendly, helpful and clear sound! If I had to make any criticisms it would be to try upward inflecting more on the ends of your sentences to add vocal variety.

[raymazebarnes]

Good evening,

This is my first time posting to the forum. Looking for critiques on my two reads attached for my enunciation and pacing. Thank you in advance.

Raymaze Barnes

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[Jenconnelly20]

You have a beautiful strong and clear voice. I would suggest maybe looking at punctuation and where to take breaths to carry a full sentence and idea (I’m working on this too 🙂 Good work!

[raymazebarnes]

Thank you Jen and yes I will work on the breaths and punctuation

[RBenesVO]

Good Evening,
Any feedback would be appreciated after making a few tweaks.

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[Provocaleric]

You have a clear, young and authoritative sound. I agree with some of the other postings that some of this stuff can seem dry. If I had to criticize anything it would be to give more brightness to your tone and imagine teaching a subject one on one with a student. Otherwise, I liked it!

[RBenesVO]

Thank you very much. I agree on the area needing improvement.

[Andres]

Really good reads! In each of them you have genuinely smooth even pacing. You speak clearly and it’s easy to understand what you’re saying. I would maybe suggest giving a little more energy to keep your audience interested, informational pieces can sometimes come across as a little dry.

[RBenesVO]

Thank you. Adding the energy is something I’m working on. Really appreciate it.

[Kim_Lomax]

Hello all! I am brand new to this forum. I started with Edge webinars this month and just had my first coaching session with James Andrews (great!). I have invested time in crafting my home studio space and welcome any feedback about the recording quality in addition to the read. Thank you for your time and consideration! Here is the copy:

Nature’s Recyclers – Discovery Kids (sourced from the Edge Script library)

Did you know that mold and bacteria and higher level organisms like beetles, centipedes and, of course, earthworms are all busy recyclers? By breaking down organic matter – stuff like dead plants, p**p, and decaying animals – they create valuable nutrients necessary for rich and fertile soil. Take it from me, a worm who know, we are doing you a big favor.

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[Tracy]

This was a fun read. You maintained good energy throughout which is especially important in a children’s reading. On my end the P in p**p came across slightly hard-sounding. There were also some audible breaths at the very beginning and a few times throughout including right before “take it from me.” Could just be an equipment issue but overall a fun listen.

[Erik B]

Hi Kim,

I really liked your read. Your tone and energy are great. The only thing I noticed are, watch out for glottals. I noticed one in the first sentence “bacteria and”, but overall good job.

[Provocaleric]

You have a neat voice for creatures, hehe. Your read was clear, friendly and with a nice bright tone. If I had to make a critical remark, I would say to not over emphasize big favor at the end. Your awesome!

[Andres]

Fantastic job! I could truly hear you smiling through your words. You were clear and easy to understand, from one beginner to another keep up the good work!

[RBenesVO]

Your voice was great for this. Lots of energy, changing in pitch and tone seemed to be in the right spots. I’m listening on my mobile but couldn’t pick up any background noises or over the top breathes.

[bevy]

Good Day,

I would appreciate your feedback on my final narration training assignment. I have been working on eliminating glottal noise. Any other suggestions on improving are also welcome. Thank you!

Scripts:

Relaxation:

To begin, make yourself comfortable, it’s best to lie on your back. Put your arms by your sides not touching your body. Put your feet slightly apart. With each exhalation let all the tension out of your body. Let the tension just dissolve and flow out.

American Airlines:

Welcome aboard American Airlines coast-to-coast service. We’ll be happy to do everything possible to make your flight with us a most pleasurable experience. We’ll provide you with all the information you need to know about your flight, your destination, and the equipment on which you are currently flying. In addition, we are proud to present our American Airlines feature film presentation, for our transcontinental passengers. We’d like you now to remove the plastic insert found directly in front of you in the seat back pocket. Please review the safety information during the flight for your own protection, in the unlikely event of an in-flight emergency.

Real Estate:

Would you like to buy a house?
Maybe it’s your first house, or even your second and you just think that MAYBE you didn’t think hard enough about the last one.
Listen, I love real estate. And in most cases, even a bad deal can work to your advantage in the very long run. But there are dumb things that people do without realizing it when they buy a house.
Humor me for a short story before we get into the meat of this video.

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[Provocaleric]

Bevy,
You have a pleasant, friendly sound! Your recording sounded a bit loud, perhaps the gain or compression was a bit hot, but I especially liked your American Airlines read

[bevy]

Thank you so much for the feedback! I will look into my equipment and adjust the sound.

[Anonymous]

good

[Bil-Bo]

Earthbound Farm

Here at Earthbound Farm, we don’t use any harmful chemical pesticides. All of our organic salads, fruits and vegetables are grown in harmony with nature. And while farming organically may cost more, we think you’ll find Earthbound Farm organic produce is an infinitely better value. Because with each crisp, delicious bite, you can take comfort in knowing you’re protecting your family’s health. Now and for years to come. Earthbound Farm. Food to live by.

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[Provocaleric]

A great natural sounding read! The only thing is the recording sounded a bit loud. Good Job!

[JustJohn]

Sounds like a keeper to me.

[DillonP]

Here is some recordings this week, please give me your thoughts.

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[Provocaleric]

Hey Dillon,
I loved your enthusiasm on the Dominos ad and the political spot, your voice sounds wellsuited for these spots, however I’m hearing too much room reflection and clicks in your mic. Izotopes Voice denoiser is awesome!

[DillonP]

Thanks for the input I’ll make sure to remember that and improve more.

[HillOKeefe]

Hello everyone! I’d much appreciate a critique of this audition for performance and audio quality. No slate was requested and I thought this one take covered everything my gut told me to go with. I haven’t been practicing as much as I should so be honest – it’ll light a fire under my b**t. Thanks!

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[Provocaleric]

You have a nice clear sounding voice. You sound trustworthy and local. The only thing I can think of to critique would be to get even more connected to your copy by giving a adding a little more dynamics with your tone. I love those Wells Fargo ads, so emotional.

[Watson]

Hi, everyone ~

First time poster, but I would love to have some feedback on my two reads below. Thank you in advance. 🙂

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[HillOKeefe]

Hi Watson! I LUV these! Your energy and take on both is spot on for what I imagine is a Gen Z target audience. My only critique is some audible breaths and room noise in the first file. Other than that, you nailed both.

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