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    Edge Studio
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    The Edge Studio Feedback Forum is the best place for you to post a recording and get feedback from the community! Record in your home studio, upload the file, and see what people think. This is a great place to get some advice on your technique, on your home studio, or to ask for people’s opinion on your reads. Remember, that this is a community forum, so please remain positive and encourage your peers in helpful ways. If Edge Studio feels that a user is too negative, or antagonizing other members of the community, they will have their posts deleted, and risk being banned from further communication. 

    Stay positive, listen to each other, and have fun!

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  • #59503
    TimDKietzman
    Participant

    My friend said I might not be cut out to handle scripts that have a “hey BRO” tone just yet. I wanted to try it though, so how’s my performance? Any thoughts on the pauses and tempo? Do you think I’m echoing at all?

    Church’s Chicken

    Here’s the deal. At this time of year, you’re probably craving seafood. And if you are, you’re probably not thinking about Church’s Chicken, right?
    Well, think again, because Church’s has it covered. Try our Butterfly Shrimp Platter. That’s Eight tender butterfly prawns, fried until golden, your choice of ANY TWO sides – YEAH, that’s right – TWO sides, and a honey butter cookie for only 5 dollars.
    Think twice when you think seafood, better yet, think Church’s.
    The Butterfly Shrimp Platter, 5 dollars for a limited time.
    Here’s the deal. Only at Church’s Chicken.

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    • #59562
      RYoung
      Participant

      Tim, great enthusiasm on this, I would just be careful of announced words for highlighting instead of changing your pitch which sounds more real. The line “Yea that’s right…. is perfect!
      (,5 dollars for a limited time. Here’s the deal. Only at Church’s Chicken). In this part which is the ending “limited” sounds announced or shouted, and starting with Here’s the deal probably could use more enthusiasm, overall minor. I like your promotional voice, good luck!

    • #59548
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Tim! I think this was good for you. It flowed well, good tempo, was conversational and appropriately upbeat with good enthusiasm for the product. Good job!

      Mary

    • #59525
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Hi Tim,

      Nice enthusiasm here. Your read was clear, with good enunciation, and varied inflections in tone throughout.

      Minor feedback: The first “seafood” seemed a tad dragged out. The second time was better.

      Hope this helps!

      Kathy

  • #59500
    TimDKietzman
    Participant

    Hey everyone, I recently recorded my demo and I want to follow a friend’s advice by concentrating on my strike zone. Do you think this read comes off as warm and inviting? Maybe warm and playful? Is my recording setup still working well? Any advice is appreciated.

    Freshii

    At Freshii you can customize your entree and be your own culinary master. So what’s in your custom bowl? Tex Mex with black beans and a little salsa fresca? Teriyaki twist with a pop of pineapple? Whatever your fresh idea, get any 2 bowls for just $12.99! Freshii – Eat. Energize!

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    • #59549
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Tim! I liked this read, I think you do sound warm and inviting. My only critique is that the last “Freshii” seems too quiet; it’s the last time you mention the product name and I think it should be emphasized more to make it stand out. Good job on this one!

      Mary

    • #59523
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Hi Tim!

      I didn’t hear anything off audio wise, so still working well there.

      I think your tone here is warm and playful.

      Looking at the script, I am not sure if this is the kind of tone (warm) a client would go for. With the copy ending with the word “Energize” (with an exclamation mark!), I would say it would be more of an upbeat and energetic read, and not end on a “quiet” note. Does this make sense?

      Just my thoughts. Otherwise, it is still a good read!

      Kathy

    • #59522
      SFish
      Participant

      I think this is a really nice read with a lot of enthusiasm. You have a nice pace and feel for the copy. To add to the “warm and inviting” feel, I’d think about 2 things: picking 1-2 operative words in each sentence to emphasize (when you have more, it sounds more sales-pitchy) and breath support when you’re at the high and low ends of your register so you can vocalize without strain. I heard the smile in your voice at the end, and I liked it.

      • #59901
        TimDKietzman
        Participant

        Thanks, I will definitely take your advice to heart.

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  • #59488
    Robert Broussard
    Participant

    RE-doing these from last night. Hope the voice level is not so muttled. Thanks for your feedback.

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    • #59550
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Robert, these sounds really good! Your voice is perfect for this genre, it sounds very authentic. I think the voice level is better than last night too. Very good!

      Mary

    • #59521
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Hi Robert!

      Volume, check! Yay! Again, your voice suits these scripts well, and you do a great job emphasizing important words!

      I understand the kind of delivery you are going for. Keep it up! Good read!

      Kathy

    • #59506
      TimDKietzman
      Participant

      I think you brought the scripts to life very well. Your voice is a great fit and the words you enunciated were well picked. Only problem is, I think your pauses are too long and the long silence at the end should be omitted. Also, in the first script you paused between “lean beef’s” and “actually lower…” You need to avoid pausing midsentence.

  • #59485
    SFish
    Participant

    A true force of nature is undeniable. Makes waves. Can’t be tamed. Begs to be heard. And inspired a true original. Responsibly sourced. Sustainably made. With natural ingredients. For a moisture that’s relentless. A true force of nature. Just like you. Burt’s Bees.

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    • #59551
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi SFish – good read! Your voice sounds well-suited for Burt’s Bees. Good pauses and emphasis on the appropriate words. Very good!

      Mary

    • #59527
      voiceofkaralewis
      Participant

      SFish I love this read. The script suits your tone, pacing was on point and you sound like a Burt’s Bee user sharing your love for the product with a friend.

    • #59491
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      Sfish, good effort. Your voice is well suited for this. The pace and tone are good too. But your read could sound more natural.

  • #59479
    Bil-Bo
    Participant

    Ford F Series Pickups

    It’s easy to see why Ford has the top sellin’ pickup truck in America. Because, when you look into a Ford, you’ll find innovation, attention to details, and exceptional value – qualities that have made the Ford F Series America’s best sellin’ truck for 43 straight years. With this kind of success, the next thing you’ll see when you look into a Ford pickup might just be yourself. Have you driven a Ford lately?

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    • #59552
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Bill – This is great! Very professional read and production. I agree with others, this sounds like a commercial that’s already out there – I can’t think of anything to critique on this one. It sounds very natural and friendly and makes me want to think about trying a Ford! Great!

      Mary

    • #59528
      voiceofkaralewis
      Participant

      This isn’t really a practice spot?! Sounds like something I’d hear on radio or TV… in other words it’s great!

    • #59517
      kfvoice
      Participant

      For a second I thought I left my radio on… Great read, Bill!

      Kathy

    • #59507
      TimDKietzman
      Participant

      Magnificent read! You’re take on the list is an inspiration for me. I can’t find anything wrong with your performance, except the ending… I think you should include a longer pause between the last and second to last sentence.

    • #59481
      RYoung
      Participant

      Nice work Bill! Good to hear you back again.

  • #59461
    mkell755
    Participant

    Hi all! Here is my daily recording (done on my phone) for your feedback. Thank you!

    Mary

    First State Bank
    In today’s world, everyone needs a bank they can rely on. But, unfortunately, most modern banks are just too big to provide the kind of attention and service you need. First State Bank is the exception. At First State, you’ll discover that banking can be personal and friendly, as well as modern and efficient. FIRST STATE BANK. Today’s bank.

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    • #59508
      TimDKietzman
      Participant

      You’re on the right track. The tempo, pitch and volume you utilized is well performed, though I think you should work on your tone because it makes the script sound more like a narration. Think about who would be listening to this and why, that will help you determine the tone.

      • #59533
        mkell755
        Participant

        Thanks for the feedback Tim! I will work on the tone to avoid a narration-like sound for the read and think about the specific listener. Thanks!

        Mary

    • #59492
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      I like it Mary, just keep working on putting more personality into you reads.

      • #59534
        mkell755
        Participant

        Thanks for the feedback Robert! I will work on injecting more personality, thanks for the tip!

        Mary

    • #59478
      RYoung
      Participant

      Nice job on the intro to this commercial which states the problem with big Banks! The solution which is first state Bank should have a more enthusiastic tone and pace also may be highlight the name a little more if that makes sense?

      • #59537
        mkell755
        Participant

        Thanks for the feedback RYoung! I will work on portraying a more enthusiastic tone towards the bank, that does make sense. Thanks again!

        Mary

    • #59477
      kfvoice
      Participant

      It’s all coming together, Mary!

      I felt like this was the best script you have connected with so far. It flowed well, and you sounded more natural throughout the script.

      One suggestion: Perhaps flip the emphasis from “Today’s bank.” to “FIRST STATE BANK”., since this is the product you are selling.

      Good job! Keep it up!

      Kathy

      • #59542
        mkell755
        Participant

        Hi Kathy, thanks for the feedback! Great, I’m glad you can see some improvement – yeah! You are right about the emphasis on FIRST STATE BANK, especially noting the way it is written in all caps. I will work on that. Thanks again!

        Mary

  • #59448
    Robert Broussard
    Participant

    Two short reads.

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    • #59476
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Great delivery, Robert! Your voice fits these scripts well! Audio feedback: ditto what Mary mentioned!

      Kathy

    • #59457
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Robert! Good reads! It sounded a little quiet / muffled on my end; I have not heard that before on your reads. Both were good and sounded really good for you. Good work!

      Mary

  • #59440
    RYoung
    Participant

    Sorry can’t provide script for script library. This audition I did recently was two recording, I just combined them together. Thanks for any comments.

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    • #59514
      RYoung
      Participant

      Thanks all appreciate all the comments!

    • #59510
      TimDKietzman
      Participant

      Magnificent read, you’re really pulling off the kind and encouraging tone that Nationwide is known for. Only problem I have is your tempo, I think you may be speaking too fast and it’s causing you to say certain words incorrectly like “to” and “ease.” Unless it says in your audition that the read HAS to be less than 30 seconds, don’t fret about saying everything so quickly.

    • #59475
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Delivery was good, R! Minor comment: I thought “ease” trailed off a bit, but maybe it was me.

      Kathy

    • #59443
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi RYoung! This sounds great! Very good sound and well produced. Good flow and pacing, very professional.

      Mary

      • #59483
        Robert Broussard
        Participant

        Thanks for point that out. I am going to redo and re-submit.

  • #59429
    katelyndawnvo
    Participant

    Hi guys. So i’m working really hard practicing different types of narration to find out where I fit naturally with my voice. This is an explainer piece (took me a while to figure out what an “Explainer” even is…) Anyways. I loved this copy and really connected with it – being a songwriter, arts and craft person and what not. I hope this works with my voice. Thanks in advance! (I’m leaving my breaths in on purpose)

    “Creativity is not the same as hard work or effort, it requires genuine inspiration. It’s the product of a mind thoroughly intrigued by a question, a situation or a possibility, therefore creativity does not come in exchange for money or rewards, but when we focus our attention on something because we want to.”

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    • #59498
      katelyndawnvo
      Participant

      So helpful thank you for all the positive encouragement. I think eLearning and Explainer could be a good route but I will keep practicing with many different things 🙂

    • #59474
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Hi Katelyn! Really good! I think your voice suits Explainer narration very well. I could tell that you connected to this copy as a creative person!

      Kathy

    • #59444
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Katelyn! This sounds really good, very friendly and well done. I think this is a good fit for you! Good job!

      Mary

    • #59436
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      That was really good. Your voice is easy to listen to, as well as, your tone and pace.

    • #59435
      Beckolin
      Participant

      Your voice is really delightful with this! You sound very friendly, approachable…relatable. I haven’t heard anything else of yours, but if you can find a way to channel this genuine connection into everything you read, your voice will work well in lots of places!

  • #59422
    Beckolin
    Participant

    Hello Edge Forum!
    This is my first submission…I’m quite new to Voice Over, very new to editing with Audacity, and have not yet recorded my Demo. Just looking to get some feedback on this file from the Edge Script library, whether about interpretation, sound quality, etc. I have a lot to learn 😉
    Thanks!

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    • #59473
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Welcome Beckolin!

      You have a warm and welcoming voice for voiceover! Your pacing, pitch, clarity, and tone were all very good for this read.

      I did not have an issue listening to your file, and I did not notice anything distracting in regards to your audio quality.

      I am still learning Audacity myself, and use it mainly for minor edits, but you will gradually get the hang of it.

      Very nice first entry!

      Kathy

    • #59452
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      Beckolin, very good read. Good pace, tone, etc. Good piece of voice acting too, believable!

    • #59445
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Beckolin! First of all, welcome! I really liked this – nice pace and flow of the script. You have a nice warm voice. Good job!

      Mary

    • #59433

      Hi Beckolin, I liked your pace and tone of your voice!

    • #59424
      Beckolin
      Participant

      By the way…I chose to upload a WAV file, but if a different format is preferable on this forum, please let me know and I’ll use it in the future.

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