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  • #73614
    RBenesVO
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    Evening all, hoping for a little feedback if able.

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  • #73607
    Mike Reddy
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    Hello everyone. Hoping to get some feedback on these homework reads from my second session. Thanks!

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  • #73605
    SteveVO
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    A longer audiobook read. I’m trying to get a feel for what it would be like to do an audiobook, and I’d love to get your thoughts. Thanks,Steve.

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  • #73595
    JAE Factor
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    These are two recordings I did following my last coaching session. I’m particularly proud of my editing on this one (removing gaps and breaths), but there are still plosives. Nevertheless, I’m excited for any feedback the Community has. I appreciate it!

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    • #73602
      Garprocks
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      Hi Joseph. I really like your voice and pace – just a couple of thoughts:

      On Dublin,

      I especially like “ever burgeoning” – not easy to say clearly.

      I would pause after “home to great writers” and before “like”.

      You really emphasize “and” a couple of times, and in my opinion, they should be de-emphasized.

      On Alaska, “this official” runs together a little bit.

      I’m not feeling an excitement to go like I want to feel when listening to your invitation. It might even be enough to really emphasize planning a trip to “ALASKA”; that’s exciting!!!

      You got this!

  • #73591
    Kyle
    Participant

    This is my very first upload. All feedback is appreciated.

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    • #73598
      JAE Factor
      Participant

      The volume levels are low. You may want to check the gain on your equipment and ensure it’s a suitable place for picking up your voice. Nevertheless, the audio is clean, I agree with the previous feedback.

      I loved your first take on that piece and feel that you do have the voice for this style of VO. Another thing element that you’ll get used to as you continue is editing out your breaths at the beginning of a new word, phrase, or sentence (I’m still getting used it myself), but this will come with practice. Great job!

    • #73594
      waninick
      Participant

      Kyle,

      A couple of things: might want to check your levels. It came across really light in volume, but the audio was really clean. Also, feel free to edit out the outtakes.

      As for the read, the last ‘take’ was certainly the best. It starts out with a lot more energy and confidence, but needs to keep that energy up.

      IMHO, your voice is really good for this kind of delivery. There is a bit of an edge, and a resonance, that can make it really smooth. Nice work. Look forward to more….!

      TimG

  • #73586
    Erik B
    Participant

    Hello everybody. I worked on this read, and I was hoping to get some feedback on the performance and recording quality. Thank you.

    Company Website Greeting

    Meet Bob. Like 95% of car shoppers, he uses his computer, smartphone and tablet to shop for his next car. A few years ago, you could have reached Bob through traditional means such as Direct mail, TV or radio, and newspaper ads.Today, that simply isn’t enough.
    According to Google – consumers visit 18 websites on average – before stepping into a dealership.

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    • #73593
      waninick
      Participant

      Erik,

      Awesome job overall. I think it could be a bit smoother. And the hyphen between ‘average’ and ‘before’ probably should be treated like a comma, or a place for a pitch change instead of a break in the flow.

      And your audio is really good…!! Wish I had a space that sounded like that…!!

      TimG

      • #73604
        Erik B
        Participant

        Thanks for your feedback Tim. I appreciate it.

  • #73578
    DillonP
    Participant

    Here are some voice commercials I’ve just uploaded for the week. I welcome any feedback that is given than can help me go foward.

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    • #73585
      Erik B
      Participant

      Hi Dillon, I checked out your reads, and here are my thoughts.

      Marker Crayola – you said Makers instead of markers. Need to diffentiate the adjectives more in the second sentence.

      Cool Jazz – Differentiate b/w smoothest and grooviest. Also you hit Cool, but you should hit the whole name of the radio station, Cool 98.1 FM.

      Overall solid job.

  • #73565
    1stassi
    Participant

    Hi guys
    This is my last coaching session before the demo prep. I was wondering if you guys can focus on critiquing how I do on the clients name and if I get the problem/ solution right. Hope this makes sense.

    Go hard me guys. I’m trying to improve.

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  • #73539
    Logan DFD
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    Hope to get some feedback on my practice I’ve been doing! Thanks!

    HelloFresh

    Choose dinner that comes with less and gives you more.
    Less kitchen chaos and more five star recipes that are easy to make and love.
    Less shopping and more pre-portioned ingredients delivered to your door.
    Less stress, less mess.
    Umm. No promises on the less mess thing, but definitely less what’s for dinner blues.
    And who doesn’t love that?
    So gather round.
    Because this dinner that comes with so much less really gives you so much more.
    Join America’s #1 mealkit at Hellofresh.com.
    Get $80 off plus free shipping with code TV80 during our labor day flash sale.

    Earthbound Farm
    
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    All of our organic salads, fruits and vegetables are grown in harmony with nature.
    And while farming organically may cost more, we think you’ll find Earthbound Farm organic produce is an infinitely better value.
    Because with each crisp, delicious bite, you can take comfort in knowing you’re protecting your family’s health.
    Now and for years to come.
    Earthbound Farm.
    Food to live by.

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    • #73569
      1stassi
      Participant

      Hi Logan
      I loved your Hello Fresh read. Especially the middle line where it felt like we were having a face to face conversation.

      In fact my one suggestion would be to relax a little more and just remember to pretend that your having a conversation with one of your peers.

      Other than that GREAT JOB!

      • #73575
        waninick
        Participant

        Logan,

        Gotta agree with 1stassi, really need to relax a lot more. Let the words kinda flow from one to the next. Some word sequences won’t lend themselves to that, but a lot will. So don’t be afraid to string some of the words together, and really get a smooth feel going.

        Also, a bit more pitch variation might be useful. It’s really easy to think you are varying your pitch a lot when it comes out kinda monotone. I know I do that with enunciation. Just when I think I am being almost clownishly over the top, it actually turns out pretty good. Just try to push it once and if it’s too much, pull it back a bit till it sounds just right.

        And … your studio sounds Great…!!

        TimG

  • #73530
    Courtney Feiman
    Participant

    A little commercial read practice. Thank you for your feedback!

    Disney Princess Pop Up Games:

    New Disney Princess Pop-Up Magic games! Once upon a time…not far away…three games popped up where the Disney Princesses played! With a spin to the castle they came, and won this pop-up magic game! New Disney Princess Pop-Up Magic Castle Games. Cinderella’s Coach and Tangled Tower Games each sold separately. And now… The journey continues at your local Stride Rite store! Purchase a pair of Stride Rite Disney Princess shoes and get a free Cinderella’s Coach game! While supplies last. But don’t wait until the midnight hour! This deal is only from February 21st to the 23rd! Locations may vary.

    McDonalds Salads:

    Me. Myself. My salad. Okay. This is it. This is the salad for me. The Grilled Chicken Caesar at McDonald’s. I am so into all the different kinds of lettuce and the cute little tomatoes. But what really shouts my name is all that warm grilled chicken. I drizzle on the low fat Newman’s Own all natural Balsamic Vinaigrette and I am one happy woman. Want to hear me go on and on about the crispy cobb or bacon ranch salad too? I’m lovin’ it.

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    • #73584
      Erik B
      Participant

      Hi Courtney. I listened to both of your reads, and wanted to share my thoughts.

      Disney – Great tone, great job with the tongue twisting fourth sentence! Also you differentiate nicely between sentences, and the recording quality is very good. Great job.

      McDonald’s – Great differentiation in the first couple of sentences. Also great tone. Hit the key words splendidly. Recording quality is very good. Great job.

      • #73671
        Courtney Feiman
        Participant

        Thank you for the feedback! I appreciate it!

    • #73576
      waninick
      Participant

      Nicely done, Courtney….! Two totally different kinds of reads and I think you really rendered them both well. The almost child-like Disney script and a more smooth, mature McDonalds script. Well played…!!

      TimG

    • #73537

      Hi Courtney,

      Both reads sound really great. I could hear the playfulness and excitement in the Disney read and the warmth and inviting nature of the McDonalds read. One thing I did hear is your pronunciation of Vinaigrette. I think you have an extra vowel. I hear “vinagerette” rather than “vinagrette.” Other than that, great stuff.

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