[David Goldberg]

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[LFlynt]

Hi everyone!

Would love your feedback on the below reads for me and my Coach to review for homework. Please be brutally honest: we’re working on specific areas for improvement..I won’t mention them here, so as not to bias you, Lol!

Thanks so much for your help!

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[Marco Rigazio]

A beautiful and clear voice! I could certainly see you voicing narrations such as the Niagara Falls recording. There were some plosives in both reads. Not many but a few. I love the ‘smirking’ tone of “See you later alligator” – that came through loud and clear. Great job!

[LFlynt]

thanks so much, Marco – really appreciate the feedback: I’ll be sure to work on those: definitely a development area. 🙂

[Nik]

Hi there…loved the reads – especially the very poetic feel the Niagra Falls one had.
My only comment would be that the Lubriderm one sounded a bit rushed at times.
Also for some reason, the word “rises” in Niagra sounded like “rices.”
Other than that, brilliant work!

[LFlynt]

thanks so much, Nik! and, yes – you picked up on one of the areas, for sure, Lol! I’ll keep working on it. really do appreciate your time in listening 🙂

[TimberTykes]

Good Evening.

I’ve got a couple of readings as homework, per my Instructor.

Feedback would be most appreciated. I’m trying to make sure I’m leaving the impression of talking to someone, and also making sure that my words are being pronounced clearly.

Thank you for your time.

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[Tracy]

Hello – I thought that your reads were conversational and sounded like you were speaking with a friend. I would just note that the recordings were a bit choppy – in between phrases there was no room tone which made the reads sound a bit stilted.

[TimberTykes]

Hey, and thanks for the reply!

Yeah, for some reason, I have a penchant for ‘honoring the script.’ I tend to forget afrer it’s too late, but I definitely won’t forget next time. Thanks again!

[BryanDavidson]

Hi, may I have some feedback on this promo? It’s for tourists visiting china, inviting them to visit China.

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[BryanDavidson]

Hi! May I have your feedback on this voiceover? It’s for a China tourism promo. The voice is supposed to be calm, enticing, and inspiring tourists to visit China.
Feedback appreciated! Thanks.

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[1stassi]

Hi everyone I’m practicing before my demo prep in a week. Please take a listen. Im working on not pitching down and making sure the clients name is visible. Please let me know how I did. Thanks

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[airbear57]

Hi,

I thought the 7-11 script was great! Your timing is always so impeccable! I definitely felt like you pitched up when needed and could clearly hear the client’s name. That being said, when you got to the introducing 7-11 part, it felt like the story started to get lost a bit and it sounded more commercially and less conversational (if that makes sense), but you got that conversational tone right back in the last sentence. So, my one suggestion would be trying to figure out how to make the “sell” part of the script a bit more conversational. Otherwise, great work as always!

Wow! The tonal differences between these 2 scripts were so great and just go to show your range! My two notes for the Carnation script have to do with the line of ‘packed with protein…’: 1) enunciation because it felt like the words started to get a little muddled (specifically the word ‘nourish’) and it took me out of the script for a second and 2) focus on the whole sentence as a whole and the thought it’s trying to get across instead of the individual words themselves. Overall, I thought this was a really fantastic read and again, I could clearly hear the client’s name! Keep up the great work 🙂

[chloeblackstone]

Hi everyone! I’m posting my second sample here as part of my narration coaching. Again, please ignore the bad audio quality. I’d appreciate any feedback! Thanks in advanced for listening.

“Let’s learn about foxes! Foxes are small, furry animals that belong to the same family as dogs, wolves, and jackals. Even thought they look a bit like cats, they are not related to them. Foxes are mammals, which means they are warm blooded, breathe air, feed their babies milk, and are covered in fur. Many foxes are nocturnal, meaning they are most active at night. But some are crepuscular, which means they are most active at dawn and dusk.”

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[1stassi]

I love your voice for narration.
I liked the read as well. The word fox is repeated alot so I would change pitching and tones to make it sound different. So everyone not just one pitch. Hope that makes sense.

[bevy]

Good Afternoon,

Please find my recent reads in preparation for my VO coaching session. Any feedback would be appreciated. Thank you.

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[LFlynt]

Hi Bevy – thanks for sharing this!

I enjoyed both reads and found they both had clarity and excellent pacing. I like that you chose two pieces of copy at opposite ends of the spectrum: one “techy” and one “warmer” and *more personal*. It’s great to show range.

Nicely done!

[Esandyii]

Homework for Bruder 1.31.2022

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[maxspitz]

Hey Ya’ll!

Hope everyone’s having a good Monday so far! I’m uploading a few spots for my narration hw, this week focusing on documentary. Any feedback, comments or notes are greatly appreciated.

Thanks!
Max

Yosemite:
In the northern part of the park, large stretches of grass and sagebrush spread across the mountains and valleys. Similar to the prairies, this habitat provides an excellent home to the badger and her new family. They see light, for perhaps the first time. A strange new world for them. And they stay close to their mother at first. But growing bolder, they begin to explore on their own.

Tales from the Hive:
Bees have been busy for millions of years now, and they’re not about to stop anytime soon. Foragers still return from the fields with nectar, while guard bees still watch and wait. There’s treasure in this beekeeper’s hive, and all are sworn to protect it…with their lives.
Suddenly, an intruder comes flying in: a wasp, hoping to capture a bee and feed it to its hungry grubs. The battle begins in earnest.

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[LFlynt]

Hi Max – thanks for sharing your reads!

There is a wonderful warmth, tonal quality to your voice which lends itself well to the copy you chose. I found that the energy matched the text, for each: “Yosemite” was smooth and easygoing and “Bees” was more kinetic, which fit the “busy-ness” of the story. That’s a great trait.
I did find that “Bees” felt a little rushed – some pauses may have added some suspense to the wasp entering. :-), but I understand if you had to time yourself. That’s my practice area, too.

Really nice job!

[Sylvanie]

Hello Everyone, I would love to get your feedback on my homework practice scripts below. Much appreciated as always!

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