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Hello Everyone, I would love to get your feedback on my commercial reads below. Let me know your thoughts! Much appreciated as always.
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These are two recordings I did following my last coaching session. I’m particularly proud of my editing on this one (removing gaps and breaths), but there are still plosives. Nevertheless, I’m excited for any feedback the Community has. I appreciate it!
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Hi Joseph. I really like your voice and pace – just a couple of thoughts:
On Dublin,
I especially like “ever burgeoning” – not easy to say clearly.
I would pause after “home to great writers” and before “like”.
You really emphasize “and” a couple of times, and in my opinion, they should be de-emphasized.
On Alaska, “this official” runs together a little bit.
I’m not feeling an excitement to go like I want to feel when listening to your invitation. It might even be enough to really emphasize planning a trip to “ALASKA”; that’s exciting!!!
You got this!
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The volume levels are low. You may want to check the gain on your equipment and ensure it’s a suitable place for picking up your voice. Nevertheless, the audio is clean, I agree with the previous feedback.
I loved your first take on that piece and feel that you do have the voice for this style of VO. Another thing element that you’ll get used to as you continue is editing out your breaths at the beginning of a new word, phrase, or sentence (I’m still getting used it myself), but this will come with practice. Great job!
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Kyle,
A couple of things: might want to check your levels. It came across really light in volume, but the audio was really clean. Also, feel free to edit out the outtakes.
As for the read, the last ‘take’ was certainly the best. It starts out with a lot more energy and confidence, but needs to keep that energy up.
IMHO, your voice is really good for this kind of delivery. There is a bit of an edge, and a resonance, that can make it really smooth. Nice work. Look forward to more….!
TimG
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Hello everybody. I worked on this read, and I was hoping to get some feedback on the performance and recording quality. Thank you.
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Erik,
Awesome job overall. I think it could be a bit smoother. And the hyphen between ‘average’ and ‘before’ probably should be treated like a comma, or a place for a pitch change instead of a break in the flow.
And your audio is really good…!! Wish I had a space that sounded like that…!!
TimG
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Here are some voice commercials I’ve just uploaded for the week. I welcome any feedback that is given than can help me go foward.
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Hi Dillon, I checked out your reads, and here are my thoughts.
Marker Crayola – you said Makers instead of markers. Need to diffentiate the adjectives more in the second sentence.
Cool Jazz – Differentiate b/w smoothest and grooviest. Also you hit Cool, but you should hit the whole name of the radio station, Cool 98.1 FM.
Overall solid job.
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Hope to get some feedback on my practice I’ve been doing! Thanks!
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Hi Logan
I loved your Hello Fresh read. Especially the middle line where it felt like we were having a face to face conversation.In fact my one suggestion would be to relax a little more and just remember to pretend that your having a conversation with one of your peers.
Other than that GREAT JOB!
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Logan,
Gotta agree with 1stassi, really need to relax a lot more. Let the words kinda flow from one to the next. Some word sequences won’t lend themselves to that, but a lot will. So don’t be afraid to string some of the words together, and really get a smooth feel going.
Also, a bit more pitch variation might be useful. It’s really easy to think you are varying your pitch a lot when it comes out kinda monotone. I know I do that with enunciation. Just when I think I am being almost clownishly over the top, it actually turns out pretty good. Just try to push it once and if it’s too much, pull it back a bit till it sounds just right.
And … your studio sounds Great…!!
TimG
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